Guest LHunt Posted February 18, 2023 Report Share Posted February 18, 2023 Hey CrossroadsMk2, Man, you're a fucking story telling genius! I just reread chap 10 again. When Lara discovers that Sarah and Sam know each other- how Lara kind of wonders WTF….and when Sarah leaves, Sarah tells Lara to get Sam to call her when finished, and that Sam has her number. (perhaps Lara didn’t want to complicate her relationship with Sam so, she didn’t ask Sam how they knew each other) All thanks to Sarah's very well put together plan...the Trinity Doctors...big porn stars, the questions, how the doctors describe what her pleasure centers are responding to during the sex. This was all set up all for Sam’s benefit to help convince her Lara is a slut and sex addict. I don’t think Sam needs much more convincing on that issue. She's also totally turned on by Lara’s actions and is already wondering how it'll feel having her fist up her ass. Sam also knows Lara likes it rough and I think in her mind Sam can't wait till she sees an opening to try fisting with Lara - Sam was extremely turned on when she was pounding that glass dildo in Lara's pussy too, after seeing and monitoring the rough sex with the porn stars, Sam knows Lara likes it rough sex... fucking genius! Again, just awesome story! Lead the Way! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted February 18, 2023 Author Report Share Posted February 18, 2023 Hi Extreme, glad you're enjoying the story. It's good to be back. Hi LHunt, you read my intent correctly. Once I decided to include Sam in the story, I needed a realistic way of making Sam join in the fun, despite her loyalty to Lara. I thought the best way was to make Sam believe Lara was willingly consenting to what was happening to her, regardless of what Lara says. The Sex Documentary, later filming Lara getting gangbanged in the African village, and finally using Lara in the sex dungeon (with Lara unaware it's Sam and begging for more), will convince Sam not to hold back and go all in. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 19, 2023 Report Share Posted February 19, 2023 Yes sir!….it started with Lara volunteering to fill in for the documentary – Sam almost couldn’t believe her eyes or ears when she showed up and did that. We know what Sarah told Lara why she needed to do it – even told Lara to tell her whatever she wanted to tell her for her reason – to top it off Sarah even left – Lara had plenty of time to tell Sam the whole story...but didn’t. I think there is little doubt what Sam now thinks….if so, she’ll know for certain when she films Lara at the village, icing on the cake! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 19, 2023 Report Share Posted February 19, 2023 Just finished rereading chap 11 – part 1….and the plot now thickens like a pot of cajun gumbo. Lara feels she is addicted to sex and has mixed feeling towards Sam – I think Lara’s defense of protecting her social status will certainly take it’s biggest hit by the time she arrives at the village...especially when she sees Sam again – after the gulag beatdown, her pride and ego smashed by Mr. K, on orders from Sarah…..she’s gonna need to see good ole Dr. Smith again…. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 19, 2023 Report Share Posted February 19, 2023 14 minutes ago, Guest LHunt said: Just finished rereading chap 11 – part 1….and the plot now thickens like a pot of cajun gumbo. Lara feels she is addicted to sex and has mixed feeling towards Sam – I think Lara’s defense of protecting her social status will certainly take it’s biggest hit by the time she arrives at the village...especially when she sees Sam again – after the gulag beatdown, her pride and ego smashed by Mr. K, on orders from Sarah…..she’s gonna need to see good ole Dr. Smith again…. Also, in my opinion, when Sam gets to using Lara in the dungeon, I’d think a tightly secured blindfold would heighten Lara’s senses more than opaque contacts. Especially her taste and smell - Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted February 19, 2023 Author Report Share Posted February 19, 2023 (edited) Hi LHunt, without giving too much away, Lara will not know that Sam is the one filming her in the African village. I haven't decided whether Sam will wear a disguise (African head mask etc) or film remotely (drones and spy cams etc), but the first Lara will know about Sam's involvement is when she sees herself on the big screen at Croft Manor, when Sam unveils her latest film to the guests. It'll let me explore a lot of competing emotions for Lara - embarassment, shame, betrayal... Edited February 19, 2023 by CrossroadsMk2 Typos Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 19, 2023 Report Share Posted February 19, 2023 OMG…..that is clever – Lara will feel like letting her hair down and get more into it then, if she doesn’t know that fact – she can be as slutty as she desires then...see this is such forward thinking and it’s makes your stories GREAT! Lead the Way! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted February 19, 2023 Author Report Share Posted February 19, 2023 Hi LHunt. Thanks for the vote of confidence. Now I just need to find the time to write it all. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorbidFantasy Posted February 21, 2023 Report Share Posted February 21, 2023 Dug the new chapters. I did hope to see how the rest of the night with Toru Nishimura went, although I get that the sex in that scenario probably would’ve been very obligatory and not novel enough to flesh out. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted February 21, 2023 Author Report Share Posted February 21, 2023 Hi MorbidFantasy, with Nishimura it felt like the sex back at his place would have been a little vanilla compared to the public sex acts on their date. You're right in that it's always a balancing act between fleshing out the details vs becoming repetitive. My other consideration is that this story is being written from Lara's perspective, with the reader only occasionally being shown events and conversations outside her knowledge for context. Coming from that perspective, I'm mostly telling the events that would be memorable to her, as I could see a lot of her day-to-day activities almost blurring into one as they become routine and almost mundane. You'll probably see this in later chapters, when Lara returns to Croft Manor to find the newly renovated sex dungeon that Sarah had built in the basement. As Lara's already had sex with the staff multiple times, it's not really anything new or exciting for her. I'll still mention it and show a sex scene or two over a few pages to show the reader that it's still ongoing. But then the plan will be to focus on Lara's new customers. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted February 22, 2023 Author Report Share Posted February 22, 2023 (edited) Hi everyone, just a quick update. I'm currently writing the prison gangbang scene and was thinking how I could do the African village without it being too repetitive, so I've decided to try something different. Instead of doing the African chapter next, I will mention the events but then wait to describe them in detail until the Charity dinner where Sam airs the footage and Lara's dirty little secret is exposed. I'll be describing the events based on what Lara and the guests see on the big screen and Lara remembering the shameful things she did. This way, I can incorporate her reaction to the Charity guests comments about her performance, laughing at and mocking her etc. It'll let me turn the humiliation factor up to 10. Plus showing Lara's embarassment at Sam's running commentary. A rough storyline is that Sarah arranges for Lara to recover a valuable African artefact with maximum publicity about her discovered a lost Tomb, dodging boobytraps etc (the usual Tomb Raider stuff), and even has her stage some publicity shots in her new Tomb Raider outfit, with brand new tattoos, as a marketing tool for her game. Then at the dinner, Sam will show the guests how Lara really obtained the artefact - she bought it from a local tribe by trading money and her body. I feel this is a great way of tearing down Lara's self image, as it implies that all of her tomb raiding exploits are staged and she's a fraud. It all adds to Sarah deconstructing her personality. Edited February 22, 2023 by CrossroadsMk2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 22, 2023 Report Share Posted February 22, 2023 Hey CrossroadsMk2, I agree with the switch-up and like that it’ll up Lara’s humiliation up to high gear. When things become redundant, it weakens the spice needed to give that kick. Which charity dinner will Sam expose Lara? Also, when she does, will it be for just a few quests or four or five dozen? If I recall, the movie theater sit’s about a dozen, isn’t that large – unless Sarah enlarged that room while they been gone? In my opinion, the more guests that see the footage, the greater she’ll be embarrassed. Lead the Way Sir! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted February 23, 2023 Author Report Share Posted February 23, 2023 Hi LHunt, I'm picturing a large projector screen in the main hall, with all 150 Charity members present. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 23, 2023 Report Share Posted February 23, 2023 You are right saying repetitive, not redundant like I stated – I think a story that’s well written, one that has meanings with a great plot, and adding realistic events...is what makes it a stand out story. Lara getting gangbanged around every corner, sounds good, but then it would seem to me I’m rereading the same paragraph over and over. A good mixture of spice that’s spread out more evenly, not only brings better taste to the steak, it allows that great taste on every bite….it puts a big fucking smile on the face! I think the difference between a good story and a great story is one like this one – so, keep a good mixture of spice that’s spread out evenly, so we can get that same great taste on every bite! Lead the Way Sir! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 24, 2023 Report Share Posted February 24, 2023 Hey CrossroadsMk2, You haven’t mentioned if there will be more paintings of Lara down the road….if I may suggest, a painting of the two porn dudes cocks that took up a lot of room when she was being filmed by the sonic camera and how it was showing their spurts shooting into both her ass and pussy. Those detailed descriptions of the internal sex was next level awesome! Maybe a painting to remind Lara…. Lead the Way Sir! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrossroadsMk2 Posted February 24, 2023 Author Report Share Posted February 24, 2023 There will be more paintings, as well as a water sculpture - a fountain with a naked sculpture of Lara on her knees, face upturned, flanked by two naked men (based on the pornstars). Lara will be holding their penises pointed towards her, and water will fountain onto her face - as if she's receiving a facial. I haven't decided if this should be outside (i.e. a traditional fountain) or inside (maybe even in the dungeon and perhaps spurting Champaign instead of water, as refreshments for her guests). Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 24, 2023 Report Share Posted February 24, 2023 Oh yeah….my vote is inside….check out the link for white liquor! Don’t think it’s for drinking though….maybe milk if you want the quest to drink it - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/White_liquor White liquor is a strongly alkaline solution mainly of sodium hydroxide and sodium sulfide. It is used in the first stage of the Kraft process in which lignin and hemicellulose are separated from cellulose fiber for the production of pulp.[1] The white liquor breaks the bonds between lignin and cellulose. It is called white liquor due to its white opaque colour. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 24, 2023 Report Share Posted February 24, 2023 right in the big hall where the quest can turn around and look at it when seeing the film from Sam! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 24, 2023 Report Share Posted February 24, 2023 I think pina colada is white….it’s usually a woman’s drink too….the women can enjoy getting drinks from that fountain! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wilde_Guess Posted February 25, 2023 Report Share Posted February 25, 2023 Hi, all. 9 hours ago, Guest LHunt said: Oh yeah….my vote is inside….check out the link for white liquor! Don’t think it’s for drinking though….maybe milk if you want the quest to drink it - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/White_liquor White liquor is a strongly alkaline solution mainly of sodium hydroxide and sodium sulfide. It is used in the first stage of the Kraft process in which lignin and hemicellulose are separated from cellulose fiber for the production of pulp.[1] The white liquor breaks the bonds between lignin and cellulose. It is called white liquor due to its white opaque colour. They might be happier with “white dog” than with “white liquor;” although it’s actually clear. [https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bourbon_whiskey#Production_process] White dog is described in the first sentence of paragraph two. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 25, 2023 Report Share Posted February 25, 2023 well….it don’t have to be the perfect color...just remember, the ladies always watch their calorie intake anyway…..lol. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 25, 2023 Report Share Posted February 25, 2023 as for myself, I drink anything that’s wet! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorbidFantasy Posted February 26, 2023 Report Share Posted February 26, 2023 21 hours ago, Guest LHunt said: as for myself, I drink anything that’s wet! That’s what she said… I’ll see myself out. Wilde_Guess 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 26, 2023 Report Share Posted February 26, 2023 Well, I walked into that one – Spoiler Spoiler Just the alcohol, ma’ma…..just the Alcohol! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest LHunt Posted February 27, 2023 Report Share Posted February 27, 2023 Not trying to rush you CrossroadsMk2, The 1st is the first day of Women’s History Month! To all of you, men and women, who continue to deliver to readers these great stories! SALUTE! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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