MorbidFantasy

lol I see your point and raise you this question: What did you think of the actual chapter? I stand by what I said before that while I'm phasing Gordo out of most of the sex scenes, I'm not just gonna off him because people want me to off him. I wasn't lying when I said I have the ending of FMC planned out. Haven't 100% figured out everything in between but Gordo still has a small role to play in Lara's eventual victory. Or is it a victory? While I'm fairly set on my planned happy resolution, I do acknowledge that because of my extreme tardiness with updating, I might have to settle for a cliffhanger ending where Lara stares off into the unknown, still a sex slave, and dreams of freedom without actually achieving it. Back to your point though. Isn't it better that I kept your expectations low by mentioning Gordo twice in the opening section, only to go completely sans-fatty? After all, the last chapter from a year ago had plenty of mention of him, so it would be incongruous for Lara to not at least dwell on the possibility that Gordo had made for her a metal chained bikini with nipple and crotch holes cut out and ornamental piercings with 10 gram crystalline flowers through each bud. Like I said before, Gordo=Q-branch for Villains-sex-dungeon Inc. Someone has to do it, and it would be a waste of effort for me to come up with yet another techie character when I already have one on hand for the job. In other news, the 90% forecast for the next chapter is that Lara and Xavier are going to be outside in a public venue. As established in this chapter, it is not going to be a bdsm exhibition. However, eyes will be on Lara, so here are the narrowed down branched scenarios that I have branched out into: 1. A pool party. Pros: partially negates Lara's rule #3. If everyone is wearing swim suits (there will be plenty of other girls present), she will be pressured to wear one as well just to blend in. 2. An upscale dinner party in town. Pros: no one gets to see Lara's bruises/welts (or is that a con). Xavier gets to toe the line with what he can say/insinuate about their relationship. 3. An official expedition out to the excavation. Pros: fast tracks the story. This path doesn't supplant the previous two scenarios, merely changes up the order of things and fast tracks the actually plot. In both cases, there will be other men of power from the local government (people Gordo have bribed or are allied with) and having the famous Lara next to him will be a display of clout. That Lara will behave in a respectable manner towards Xavier might actually show this "clout" more than if he were just raping her in public. I don't know if that logic flies with you guys, but imo Lara's perceived respect and consent is far more impressive than display of a captured and enslaved Lara. This will be the only option if the excavation route is taken, since Lara will have to run into Hanson again. a hypothetical progression would be route 3, then into route 1or2 OR a hybrid of the two (dinner pool party). Hanson might get to attend either of the two and make more sleazy (but unknowingly true) assumptions of Lara's sex life if this is the case. More thoughts on the matter, but I'd rather be writing an actual FMC chapter than be here throwing ideas against the wall. Thoughts are welcome, as usual.

So many broken promises lol. Unfortunately for smut but somewhat fortunately for me personally, it's been a busy year. The sort of year where the end of most days leave me exhausted (but content) and often without even the impetus to jack off (I swear, jacking off used to be the best sleep aide) Well, I finally updated. I hope yall like it. I realized that if I settled for constantly trying to one-up myself with the intensity of rape and torture, I will inevitably hit more walls and run out of actual good ideas. So, this chapter is pretty divergent, but somewhat similar to the one where Lara ends up fucking Vasily in a consensual scene. The finale, if you call it that, started out as pure angry sex, but I settled for a intense bj and joke ending because I wanted to reserve the angry sex scene for the followup, which I AM REALLY WORKING ON I SWEAR I'M TRYING WHY WON'T YOU GUYS LOVE MEEEEEEE OH THE HATE THE HATE...... I digress. Look forward to your comments both positive and negative. Believe if or not, the three or four times I've logged into my morbidfantasy12@gmail.com email (would you believe it's not my professional email?) this past year, the words of "encouragement" (love, hate, mockery, emo-faggotry) all served as motivation for me to get off my ass and do something smutty. I apologize if approximately 50000 of those rape-bondage-fuckery will never see the light of day (most were never saved and are lost to the ethers). I'll try to devote the majority of my sex cravings to FMC for the foreseeable future (that and finding a new lady-friend to make happy-times with, did I mention I've been jerking off?)

There was a different piece on AFF that I read a long time ago that had some kidnapper use his rape/victim's breast milk for cereal. For the most part, Lara's lactation is just played up for humiliation and visceral detail. However I did toy around with some drafts where they were at a formal banquet where the desert was ice cream. Everyone complements its flavor and texture, and only Lara (and her captors) know what the secret ingredient is. That chapter unfortunately doesn't quite fit anywhere currently.

There's a possibility I have to rename FMC to TDC (The Dark Chronicles). I don't think Gordo will just off and die until near the end, but yes, I'm phasing him out of the story, just not completely yet. At this point he basically runs Q branch for Villains-sex-dungeon Inc. I'm just as fatigued with the fat man concept as the rest of you, but that's still a somewhat thin reason (anti-pun?) for hating Gordo as if I wasn't putting him into the sex scenes it'll just be some other guy filling the same role. Besides, there's a pretty good chance some of the fellas I have lined up for Lara are just as obese as Gordo

no one is copying anyone. What is this drama-mongering? If anything, the posting of Bergman reinvigorated my posting of several FMC chapters. Inspiration and plagiarism are very different things. I don't think either of us are lifting ideas or plot points from each other, unless you're call both of us being non-con writers evidence of copying. For instance, a buddy of mine who is a phantom of the opera fanatic recently told me to watch the 2011 anniversary version of the Phantom of the Opera with Sierra Burgess and Ramin Karimloo. If I update FMC within the next week, every one of you who were waiting for me to do so will have Sierra and Ramin to thank, because seriously, watching those two as Christine and The Phantom was pure musical sex. No really, go watch?v=BKsoF8wdEVE and watch?v=h7IZNfGEcFk Listen to the lyrics, and watch the emoting. The eroticism is astounding. in the first one, the phantom is basically hypnotizing Christine so she could have voice sex with him, and in the second one, he literally writes a play (within a play) and make her act in it so he could live out his fantasy of actual carnal sex with her. Watched the whole thing today, and now I've logged into AFF for the first time in months. Time to get crunching on word-sex. Cheerios

I'm not him never was on ff, never will be. What's up with this speculation? I've been busy with work people, but take this posting as a declaration that I'm back on the smut-writing train. Actually, it's not that I haven't been smut writing. I've probably kept steady at 5000-7000 words a week (2-chapters worth). it's just that i've been doing a lot of 1 off pieces that might fit into FMC but really doesn't do anything for the plot. Now I sorta know where I want to take things next, so with any luck I'll be updating soon.

Started a new job a few months back, that's what's been holding me back. Basically everyday I come home and all I want to do is sleep. Seriously though, I'm constantly imagining scenarios for this fic it's just that it's been a while since I've had the stamina to put everything down in words. It'll happen at some point though as soon as I catch a break.

My inner Grammar Nazi died reading this post. P.S I say that with the most lovingly ass-buggeringly way possible .

lol what part of my post had you thinking I wanted to put Gordo in more sex scenes? Whoa, the silliness of your mockery. IT HURTZ True story, I haven't written an explicit sex scene in months with Gordo because like most of you, that simply doesn't turn me on anymore. I'm well aware that I've pretty much exhausted the gross factor of having a fat man fuck Lara (well, mostly, chubbsy will never stop being gross). One of the early feedback for Reality of Lara's Legend was that it was a good thing I kept switching out antagonists (and usually killing them by the end of the chapter). I get the feeling I avoided the problem with the level/chapter setting with that fic that I'm having with Gordo right now. Gordo's role as a sex antagonist in the story is pretty much over, since he has Kitty now. Now he's basically just in a managerial position in charge of designing and building more sick shit for Lara to experience. I might be killing off Vasily the giant Russian too. Not a whole lot going on with him and tbh the sentimental connection with Lara didn't really grow on me past the prison arc. Advice on how to proceed with killing/using Vasily are welcome. I hope you guys understand, that many of your issues with the fic are shared by yours truly. Whether it's reader fatigue regarding Gordo or plot issues like the midnight chapter with Hanson, some scenes simply don't work out the way they're intended. I'm doing my best to take FMC in a fresh direction, but it's possible that I'm getting boxed in by some of my more abused tropes, so that's where I can use the most help, is plot direction (fixed ending notwithstanding) and specific variations on bondage/torture/humiliation/sex that you would like to see. The main point of my previous post is that I'm going to be focusing FMC on more plot driven chapters, and extraneous or supplementary chapters that are somewhat necessary or were written just for the smutt will end up in Contractually Indentured. Will probably post here when I've updated, but of course I'm always open to your criticisms. Contrary to what you guys might think, my ego is not preventing me from seeing things in FMC that aren't working out.

Hi all, No more false promises, no more apologies, just the truth. I often think I’m about ready to post a chapter or lock a narrative in, only to find that the chapter’s ideas no longer interest me, or, somehow does not work with the rest of the piece. When I publish too early without consulting people, I get silly chapters like the Hanson-night-time-prowl escapade. So from now, I’m not going to make promises like “another chapter ready for next week”. Instead, I have a slightly less obtuse plan. I will be posting a separate story in The Tomb Raider section titled “contractually indentured”. Basically, it serves as a repository for chapters that I feel fits into the FMC story universe but doesn’t fit into the main narrative. This would eventually include extra sex scenes that I’ve written that are only referred to in one or two sentences in the main piece. These stories may or may not occur at the same time as the main FMC story, and may even represent things that happen in the future. It’s not that I’m trying to boost hits or anything, but a lot of what happens in “Contractually Indentured” will directly impact or inform what is happening in the main arc. They answer questions such as “what rules in the contract govern Lara’s being gang raped” and “just how much sex and time is Lara required to dedicate to this contract”. I tried to work in a chapter just detailing some of the more plot related texts in the contract and ended up with a narrative that simply didn’t mesh well with the action from FMC. It will be explained in more detail, but basically this is how chapters from “Contractually Indentured” (CI) are going to function: Each chapter from will open with a reference chapter from FMC and vise versa, which in this case CI, Chap1 will reference to FMC 32: Assignment One: Initiations (Xavier) cont. If a CI chapter takes place somewhere in the future of FMC, I will also state so right off the bat, and when the FMC chapter that is related to that CI chapter is posted, I will retroactively insert the interstory reference. What this does is free me up to write scenes that break linearity without having to scrap them simply because they don’t fit in the current FMC plot. It also means that some CI chapters will set in stone the kind of future Lara is going to be facing in the main FMC storyline. What this will not become is a spoiler for the ending. I’ve said many times that I’ve had the ending chapter written, and that still holds true, but at this point it makes no sense to jump there as many of the crucial plot developments have not happened/been written yet. In summary: more hot sex scenes (I hope), more transparency with what I’m doing with the plot, and less tangential chapters with FMC itself. Spoilers for CI Chapter 1: We get a look at three specific specific scenarios in the contract, of which Lara must always be part of. 1. Days working only as a sexual object: How much sex is required, and in what way does the contract's wording affect how Lara conducts her sexual services. 2. Days working as a archaeologist/consultant: How Lara balances sex with real work, when can she work, and how much autonomy does she have regarding choosing work over sex. 3. Days off: When can Lara have a little time to herself and how can she earn these free time. In all three scenarios, the contract has been worded in a way that can be liberally "reinterpreted" by Lara's handlers in order to maximize their use of Lara against her will. It's also geared to give minuscule rewards for Lara's humiliating cooperation while levying heavy penalties for her using the contract's own words to her benefit (eg asking for time off, bargaining for various changes/rights, etc) I won't say when CI: Chapter 1 and FMC:32 are going up, except that I'm working on both of them simultaneously. Once I post CI:1, I would love some feedback and will post specific questions here to that affect. Try to look past the fact that the first chapter will largely be kinky legal text and not too much plot.

Hey Yo! Nice to see you active again Hunter. So when's the next chapter coming out? I know I'm just as guilty of chronic procrastination but seriously, been holding out for a continuation of your fic for a while hehe.

Whoa whoa now, let's not get our panties in a twist. Calling someone a kiss-ass or a sycophant, especially on the internet, seems to be giving them too much credit. By that I mean that because of the anonymity of the internet we're pretty much empowered to say whatever we truly feel without a care for other's feelings. So while it's possible that someone might want to butter my intellectual muffin, it's also possible that they just happen to share similar views and tastes with where I'm taking the story. It's a matter of opinion. The same goes for the strong feelings against the directions I'm taking the fic. Back on topic, I do think that the suggestion to keep Hanson out of the loop is the better choice. This is after playing around with a few free writes and finding it too hard to fit him in.

I'm assuming the same person posted four times in a row... Next time, order your thoughts and get everything across in one post, if you please.

All this debate lol. You guys do realize that in the end, I'm basically writing this piece with my dick doing half of the thinking, right? Yes, plot is important, as is characterization, but since this is AFF, the creativity of the sex is also important, and sometimes I tend to compromise heavily in order to satiate my carnal desires to see Lara do certain things that I'm sure she wouldn't realistically do. Picking on the blackmail plot at this point is basically beating a dead horse. Among the other things you'd find on AFF like animal sex (the excellent "The Wolf's Snare" fic by JustS), you have to allow certain liberties in setup for the sake of entertainment. I'm not against asking questions but there's no need to get an headache over plot elements such as blackmail, rape, bestiality, tentacles, and any number of standard AFF tropes. The bottom line is that without the blackmail, then the majority of this fic would be impossible. Also, the original intent of the first two chapters was a liberal remake of Destiney's fat bastard fic. I do hope that despite the inherent handicap to realism, you critical minded readers still enjoy the fic for what it is, a healthy dose of smutt. Really trying to get the next chapter up by Sunday. At this point I'm primarily caught up with whether to include Hanson, which changes the perspective (if he attends the "party" we'll see a lot of his thoughts and partially see the chapter from his perspective.)

Yeah the repeat was from me constantly moving passages around, sometimes I forget to delete the original. This chapter was Frankensteined together from three different short riffs so I'm just happy it didn't show more scarring. The repeat has been removed. I'm saving a pure Lothorio character for another setting. Xavier on the other hand leans a little more towards the suppressed-brutality end of the spectrum. He also won't be doing any "wooing", as in he wants it to look like Lara's the one coming on to him, and that he's "allowing" her to do so despite all she's done to him. Privately however he's really into physical abuse, stopping short of permanent damage due to having signed into the whole deal with the other bosses. In terms of manipulation of Lara, Xavier is the most short sighted, only wanting her for immediate gratification and personal pride, fairly obvious from his actions in this chapter. Some of the other characters will be more interested in using Lara as a tool or even as a temporary ally. Obviously, even if one of the characters really tries to make nice with Lara and get on her good side, it's hard to imagine a scenario where Lara would let any one of them go. Probably going to go with scenario 2 as recommended. The only remaining variations I'm working on is who's attending the party. The following people are guaranteed to be there: Lara Xavier His men The villagers that witnessed Lara maim Xavier The following people's presence at the party will potentially alter the plot so I'm still mulling it over: Kitty and Gordo: Kitty's presence is mainly in the bedroom, as a dominatrix of sorts, in order to put on a show for Xavier. Gordo would just be a familiar face there to watch and taunt Lara. Hanson: he will see Lara's "seduction" of Xavier, which will make him suspect that she slept her way into archaeological fame through sex) The rest of the villagers (changes the size of the party. A smaller party would be focused on the presentation of Lara and Xavier's faux-relationship, while a larger party goes to demonstrate Xavier's power and influence) I'm also toying with what Lara should wear and how her appearance might interact with the environment, here are a few things I've brainstormed beyond simple party-going outfit: The fabric starts out opaque but turns semi transparent under the right conditions (lighting, moisture, heat) The fabric is transparent but turns opaque with arousal, so Lara needs to constantly be aroused in order not to have herself completely exposed. Black lighting illuminates cum stains on Lara Bright lighting that threatens to shine through Lara's outfit. An ear piece or some other equipment that conveys to her what to do (eg get under the table, mash her breasts into Xavier's face, etc) Long knee length skirt- hides any toys Xavier may wish to attach to Lara. Extra short skirt- visual humiliation+ ez access. Maybe Lara's chair has retractable dildos that no one else can see. Or if she straddles Xavier's lap, there is actual penetration occurring. Stationary- Most of party for Lara is spent sitting or in close proximity with Xavier Moving party- Xavier walks around with Lara in one arm, actively showing her off, versus simply displaying her at his main table. a lot of options, some of which I might end up using in other future chapters, but the idea is to pick a combination that best adheres to what Xavier's character might want.

It's all good, I know those bugs happen. Yeh the premise of Lara's blackmail and continued rape is far fetched, although I did sort of address it with the prison arc in the following ways. 1. Her captors have more than enough clout to simply lock her up, whore her out, or simply make her disappear from the world. 2. They also have enough clout to manufacture a libelous story that Lara is part of a human/drug/blackmarket smuggling ring. The evidence could easily be faked eg altered bank accounts, false confessions, staged police raids. 3. Lara's history of violent encounters might not be entirely known to the public, but is known and judiciously suppressed by her blackmailers. If they reveal this violent aspect of hers they could paint her as mentally deranged and, like #2, change public perception of her. So technically, Lara's blackmail has extended far beyond simply being about recorded sex, but now includes a more comprehensive destruction of her reputation. The prison stint was basically the bosses telling her "not only can we destroy your reputation, but we can make your life a living hell beyond what it already is." For those of you who are stuck on the subject of character consistency, I'd recommend reading this ( http://brendycaldwell.com/2012/06/24/the-real-lara-origin-story/ ), then coming back to FMC with a little more leniency. I may have recommended that link before though, so apologies if I did. The idea is that Lara Croft as a character (pre-reboot) has always stretched the realms of being believable given her body count and in game destructiveness, thus any attempt to rationally humanize her ultimately relies on audience goodwill or willful suspension of disbelief. As for the current arc, I know I said I was updating about a month ago but truth be told I've sense scrapped and rewrote things several times. Although the thought has occurred to me, I won't be deleting the chapter with Hanson's late night voyeurism. While that chapter definitely did not work out the way I wanted it to, I'm planning on working around it. Currently, though the focus is on Xavier Salvatorelli and how he's being portrayed. Here is the gist of the variety of sex scenes I've written for what happens after Xavier's bdsm themed sex scene with Lara. Each is a fully fledged scenario with about 6000-7000 words (two chapters). 1. Xavier parades Lara naked, wearing a bondage yolk (looks like http://freakishdesigns.blogspot.it/2010/07/lockable-wooden-yoke.html ) through the village, showing everyone he's subjugated the one who injured him. This culminates in a public shaming where Lara is bound to a platform (placed in stocks) and displayed to everyone for a whole day. This is scrapped because writing in a village gang rape would be inconsistent with the goals of the prison arc (to create a contrast to Lara's serving a few versus her serving many). Writing a public shaming scene without gang rape also proved to be somewhat boring, since most of it would just be her standing there immobilized. Lara's outfit: Manacles around feet, yoke securing wrists and neck, hanging steel weights from piercings, later replaced with chains literally chaining her to the platform by her nips and clit. 2. Xavier throws a lavish party, and Lara goes as his "date". Those at the party are aware of Lara's prior transgressions against Xavier, so he makes a point of having her pretend to fawn all over him, including a lot of mouth to mouth and the eventual ducking under the table to blow him. This is to show those present that she's submitted to him willingly, rather than him capturing her and forcing her to do anything. Lara's outfit: short form fitting evening tube skirt, with liberally cut cleavage (no nip slips tho). Her hair is done up with an overall out-to-party look. Heavy on the makeup, with some of it smearing when she gets out from under the table with residual cum at the corner of her mouth. Care is taken to cover up any marks left on Lara's body from the whipping and electro prodding. 3. Xavier is still throwing a party, but this time primarily for his village. He brings Lara out only after retelling the story of how she blinded him in one eye and took some of his fingers away. When he does bring her out, it is in bondage. He then frees her and demonstrates that he is willing to let Lara walk out of there unharmed, even providing transportation for her. Lara meanwhile has already been instructed to not except this "gracious offer of extradition" and instead beg Xavier for his forgiveness. When she does, he makes her the guest of honor (seated next to him.) what happens next is a similar scene to #2 with under table blow job and some exhibition. Edit: in this version Lara is made to strip in front of everyone to present the marks on her body, showing that she's already been thoroughly punished for her wrong doings. Xavier then extends a token offer of having Lara pleasure his subordinates or having them rape her, only so they could offer their token refusal as they would rather see Xavier himself show his dominance over her. This would lead to Lara's blowing Xavier as well as other exhibitionist scenes. Lara's outfit: Initially, dressed in her tomb raiding outfit and with her hands cuffed behind her and manacles on her feet. After her "willing surrender", the cuffs and manacles are removed. There are several other scenarios/outfits that I tried for Lara, each about 1000-2000 words, not really worth summarizing since they don't have much besides lots of kinky smut. The two main portrayals of Xavier I'm juggling here are as follows: 1. A pretentious prick who wants to privately humiliate Lara but publicly pretend that he's the forgive and forget type and she's just willingly coming back to apologize to him. He also wants his men to believe that he's something of a chick magnet, that even his one time enemy has fallen for his masculinity and can't resist putting her hands on him. 2. A vengeful and domineering boss who always repays his enemies, who wants his subordinates to know that he conquered and subjugated Lara, and wants to humiliate her in front of his men and the village or whatever he's based in. In this version, Lara is shown off as his conquered sex slave, and would probably be asked to do more demeaning things in public (short of being gang banged like the prison arc) I have some other disorganized thoughts on the matter but will postpone posting them until we get the characterization of Xavier out of the way first.

I always respond to emails and reviews. When I called for self-identification, it is mostly for crediting purposes, and not at all so that you have to show who you are on the public forum. Go ahead and email me questions instead of posting them here if you feel the need to do so. I think you misunderstand me. I have no problem with passionate criticism that pertain specifically to FMC, even if it's a hate filled diatribe against me. It would be conceited of me to have those people banned. The posts that I removed however did not have enough content that helped FMC, but rather focused on insinuating that a fellow writer was somehow plagiarizing my story idea of having a strong female lead subjugated and placed in servile situations. The idea is hardly unique to me, I do not own it, and as some of you have pointed out, my execution of this idea is still far from perfect. The removed posts also insinuated that the writer was some how sucking up to me or polishing my knob, which is equally untrue because as I've explained before, writers share a sense of camaraderie and we will defend each other's works sometimes. So don't stop criticizing, but also keep it civil. IP banning is only reserved for those who do too much bashing of an AFF forum member.

That's both good news and bad news. Good news is he still has works available to read. Bad news that he gave up smut writing over a year ago. In other news, a few of the more spammy/flame-ish posts have been deleted by a moderator at my request. The moderator also gave me the option of requesting IP bans for the guest-owner(s) of a few of the posts. I've decided to not do that, at least for the moment. I feel that it would be hard to be impartial for me to request IP bans for my own thread. That being said, from now on any post that clearly has no relevance to FMC and exist only to flame, troll or spam this thread will be reported and deleted. IP banning is also not off the table if the worst comes to pass. I highly encourage those who want to provide constructive criticism to shed their complete anonymity and register as a user on this site, so I can properly give credit where credit is due. I also tend to take more stock what a legit user has to say, even if it's an angry rant regarding my writing.

This post I feel the need to quote before I reply. One of the reasons for long lapses in updating is intimately related to the situation you've just described here. There's only so many times an author can write the lead-up to sex before writer's fatigue sets in. Only so many times you can describe a woman being bound before you're recycling verbs and adjectives or reusing short descriptions of non-essential narrative. Your concern regarding the repetition of gang bang is precisely why I intend on phasing most of that out of FMC. The prison gang rape arc was more or less me reliving certain mindsets of mine from when I was writing The Reality of Lara's Legend, which basically was a head-count fest to see how many enemies existed in each level of the game to fuck Lara with. 1 on 1 encounters avoids the distraction of the numbers game, and generally is a better vehicle for me to work in intimate details. Because Bitamin717 took his fics off of the site and I neglected to make personal copies of them, I can't say for certain if your statement of his recycling descriptions is accurate. What I can say though is that Bitamin's dialogue scripting was hugely inspiring, and far better than the dialogue that I had been writing up until that point. The one thing I took away from his fics is the utility of dialogue as a character building tool, whereas my earlier writing either had hackneyed/unrealistic dialogue or relied heavily on inner monologue or heavy narrating. On the other hand, I've actually found some new inspiration in reading my oldest work, NFS Enslavement of Mia Townshend. Don't get me wrong, that fic is still quite low in my personal grading scale, but after several years of willfully ignoring its existence, I reread it the other day to rediscover parts of myself (the libido driven mind of a highschooler) that I had long since forgotten. Many of the ideas that went into that short fic (it clocked in at between 12000 and 16000 words iirc) are being reiterated with FMC, except with greater detail and what I'd like to think is improved prose. Ok, done rambling. I'm not promising anything, but right now I have a version of FMC's upcoming chapters that I'm relatively confident in keeping, so look for an update in the next week or two. As an apology for my chronically slow update cycle, I'll try my bestest to make this a double chapter release.

Ok now I'm actually annoyed. First- do not bash the works of other authors in this thread. Feel free to make objective comparisons between their work and mine if you think it's constructive to my development of this fic, Please stay on topic regarding the purpose of this thread, which is for me to take and answer reader feedback. Second-accusations of plagiarism are easy to make as a reader, but are a huge deal to writers who devote their time to put down in words the fruits of their creative mind. For those of you who've never written or published a substantially long work of writing, you might not understand this, but unfounded accusations of plagiarism is tantamount to me taking a shit on your doorstep, ringing the bell, then staying there as you open the door only to take a piss on your leg. I was inspired in my own writings by the works of VGSS, deathstalker, elklodge, and many other writers on this site. at least 70% of the bondage/bdsm situations found in FMC and my other works were directly learned and inspired by other talents on AFF. To accuse an author on AFF of plagiarism simply because he uses similar sexual acts as another author is to accuse all of us of some form of plagiarism. Artistic integrity is found in the prose, the infrastructure, the pacing, and a creativity in execution. Even if Hunter or another author were to write a sex scene with the exact same participants and sex acts as me, I'm certain we would make our own unique choice of wording, dialogue and rhythm. Third- I like to think that I'm brutally honest in assessing my own writing, which is why I will seldom be surprised by any criticism that you guys can throw at me. Chances are I've already thought of those in retrospection. That being said, the behavior of several of the guest posters in this thread do border on being snide and abusive, enough to warrant an accusation of trolling or needless spamming. Just because Hunter calls someone a troll and I did not does not mean either of us is more mature than the other. There is a good chance that if some of the posts in this thread were to make it into the discussion thread for The Bergman Affair I'd be the one telling him to "ignore the trolls". It's part of the camaraderie between authors who understand the amount of work that goes into writing, and is not what some of you are describing as a self-aggrandizing circle-jerk. Lastly- Seriously, this isn't even a topic worth fighting over. The amount of emotion behind some of these posts have me asking myself if I had just committed mass murder or pissed on your preferred political party. The point of AFF is for enjoyment, and I have a feeling some of us need to be reminded of that before we give ourselves needless migraines over my poor decision making regarding plot choices. Cheer up folks, and try to have fun without continuing this pissing contest.

At 26 and with more than half my life spent on the internet, I'm too jaded to be affected by trolls. I'm sure the guest posters mean well, probably just trying to make sure I hadn't disappeared into the void of fanfiction writers who leave without a good-bye note. Thanks for the support though. Always nice to know a fellow writer appreciates my work. Still looking forward to your update to The Bergman Affair. I'll probably be updating with two chapters in a week or so.

Is this directed at me? I'm fine, thanks for asking. A little bit, yes. Since FMC is pretty much just me fantasizing about bondage scenes with Lara it's inevitable that most chapters grossly de-powers her. As I do know how this is supposed to end, I can only say that Lara's not going to stumble into some last minute deus ex machina to fix all her problems. There will be sufficient lead up to her vindication. Where is all this antagonism coming from. You do realize that as much as I enjoy hyping things up, this story, at its core, is pretty much verbal masturbation and thus entirely dispensable to me. It's not like I'm getting paid to post stuff or that you're paying to read what I post. And I have no idea where this "harsh criticism declaws me" assumption is coming from. If you're thinking my absence from this thread is indicative of me being stifled by criticism, I'm afraid the simple truth is I just took a break from fanfiction writing to deal with irl stuff. Ten minutes ago I log in to my mail for the first time in two weeks to see someone has a bone to pick with me. I'd like to think that I'm far from arrogant. At least regarding something as leisurely as fanfiction writing, there is literally no reason for me to invest any of my arrogance into what is clearly a secret hobbie. Now if one were to insult my occupation or my personal appearance, I would be far more inclined to take offense. That being said, I do concede that the latest chapter of FMC did not turn out the way I wanted it to be. I get it if some of my long time readers are turned off. If you really think my writing no longer floats your mojo, that's cool with me. On the other hand, rage-posting to get a rise out of me does not work. It will not result in me tailoring my piece to suit your tastes, nor will it make me post faster. Constructive criticism on the other hand I always welcome. Seriously, take a chill pill. Loves n kisses to all, hmmkay?

Ugh, you're really baiting me into revealing spoilers lol. Let's put it this way. There are ways of removing or altering memories other than death. And I did say that Lara's victory will be absolute, so even if she never finds out about Hanson, his comeuppance will be absolute with or without her knowing about it.

Oooh the true victory thing. I guess you do have a point there, in that anyone who has taken advantage of Lara in FMC must die or pay their penance. While it's probable that once Hanson has run his course of usefulness he'll probably be killed off, there are methods of punishment other than death. One of the things that I do have written is the last chapter. it's 70% set and done, with the last 30% being reserved for wrapping up potentially new ideas and plot threads that happen from here until the end. While I may meander and change my plans for the story as a whole, the ending is pretty non-negotiable. No one that has taken advantage of Lara sexually will be in a position to continue doing so, or be in a position to expose her. Lara will feel satisfied by the fate of every man in the story. While I initially settled for the easy way out at first which was simply killing them all, the ending now has some "survivors", albeit none that, again, could exploit Lara ever again.

Baiting me to do...what? I'm actually confused now. The irony is that authors normally don't disclose their planning phase and or development for the exact reason that we're having this back and forth here: time and planning changes things. Things that had motivated me or spiked my interest half a year ago no longer do, while other ideas pop into my head. In trying to provide a little transparency into why I take so long to update, I inadvertently burdened you with expectations that are in constant danger of obsolescence. In any case, I take your criticism in stride, and now ask you this What specifically, regarding plot progression were you looking forward to, and why do you personally want to see Hanson dead so quickly?