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I think you need more characterization to this MC, because you shouldn’t be struggling like this. However, lets divide & conquer. Suppose HE wakes up first, and “pulls” out/away enough before she wakes so she won’t know it occurred – how does he react? What does he say to her? “Good morning?” and move on? Confess? Switch it, suppose SHE wakes up first, and she could move away fast enough so he wouldn’t know it occurred. How does she react? What does she say to him? “You’re welcome?” or “How dare you?” What I do while shaping a character is I try to list out some personality traits, (hobbies/allergies) and this tends to give me something to start with. You can also do the classic, “lawful/neutral/chaotic” and “good/neutral/evil” way of pinning the character. Also, some history… has this happened before with the MC (& another girl), a spell that he might’ve said while drunk? That’d come out more as… “Not again!” the wizard stammered. Now back to my research on life insurance terms & conditions (needed for my story, turns out suicide’s not always a disqualifier).

TBH, how the characters actually react/respond IS the meat & potatoes of most any story – that’s definitely an exercise best left to the writer. Your first question, when they wake up in the compromising position. If there’s been a mutual pent up secret lust for each other, well, that’ll end fine and dandy. Anything else and you’re talking fireworks, with many twisted outcomes available (more than I can count). For extra flavor, you could have one party *think* its worse than it is/was, leaving the other dumbfounded on the response. Extra spicy is to have a third party setting it up and/or taking advantage of it. Second question… could use a game of truth or dare for the expose, or similar. For twins, mixups are very common, so having the guy profess his love (or similar) to the wrong twin? As to reactions? Depends on the personalities/trusts/fears. Maybe the sisters get along and decide to share him. Maybe it becomes a love triangle, with the other sneaking in to interject herself? Maybe the sisters have a falling out over this and don’t speak for a dozen years until forced to (ie family funeral). The better question is where do you want to take the story?

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Aw, the fun part of writing! Guess this depends on any fears, phobias, they may have. For more fun, don’t actually have him “inside”, but close enough where the assumption is made, especially if there’s any other malicious actors nearby who might’ve staged it (ie, took the opportunity after the two passed out to move him onto her, placed a condom with a dab of mayo in the tip nearby, etc). Is the guy panicked now that he’s possibly a rapist? Is she offended? Or, is the mutual attitude “it’s about time?” (It can be mixed too, one thinks “not a big deal”, while the other is very upset/calling-police?) This is definitely a mixed bag, and gotta know the characters better before a good response can be had IMO.

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