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  2. Review Replies - AFF Prompt/Ending

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    Fairy Slayer:

    First, don't expect me to remember any of the new names and words by the time you post next week's part. ;)

    That's a sweet bit of exposition about Wraith's old friend, their love, and just enough to explain how Tamlen was lost. Then there's a bit more sharing, more in common between them, and finally the poignant moment when, through Alistair, Wraith found a way to let go of that loss. At least that's how it seems to have happened to me.

    Thank you for reading and reviewing, first of all. I keep dragging you out of your fandoms, but you gamely dive in, and I really appreciate it! :D It's hard squeezing enough into the format to keep it coherent, but hopefully I haven't lost you too badly! :D

  5. Review Replies - AFF Prompt/Ending

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    Apollo:

    Ohh, flashback! I like how you incorporated it in and it was well written with transitions! Often they can be slightly stumbly, but this worked well in moving the story forward and providing us more information about Wraith.

    (*sigh* my re-captcha funnies continue - Childhood matter)

    Oh, those recaptchas! :lol:

    But thank you for reading and reviewing, and I'm glad the flashback worked! I should probably stop teasing so much and move the relationship forward, but it's sort of fun to take my time, and Chantry boys are shy... ;)

  6. Review Replies - AFF Prompt/Ending

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    Techno Ninja:

    Your writing is making me curious about the game. :P Alistair's comment about Wraith's "humanity" made me giggle. :3 I enjoyed this chapter,(?) keep up the good work. : )

    It really is turning into chapters of a story, isn't it? :D But I'm glad you like the banter between Wraith and Alistair, and the game is such good fun that I can't quite feel guilty for getting you curious about it.... such an evil wench I am! :D But thank you for reading and reviewing! :D

    pittwitch:

    Well done once more dear Wench! A very poignant glimpse backward in time to endings from long ago, meaning Wraith and Tamlen. I like the interaction between Alistair and the Wraith. Thanks for sharing, PW.

    Thank you! :D Endings and beginnings... we're always experiencing them... I am very pleased that the banter between the lads works, because I do enjoy writing it! Thanks again! :D

  7. Review Replies - AFF Prompt/Ending

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    Shadowknight:

    Hah, nicely done. You've picked a good idea for the prompt. Indeed, a Dalish Warden's past is one of endings. But then again, if you look at all the Origin stories, they're all signed by terrible losses and irrevocable endings. Very, very good choice.

    I would critique only the lack of... you know, exposition, when it comes to Wraith's feelings for Tamlen. You are extremely good with the little details (their first kiss, the touches, their plans for the future), but the rationale behind their feelings for each other is left rather vague (how did it began? Who made the first move? How did they know their feelings were returned? Or did they just took a chance after a certain period of longing? Or was it perhaps a spur of the moment thing? And also, it's hinted (but not fully stated) that they slept together. Would've been nice to have a few sentences about that. Or about the horrible grief Wraith must have felt. It's explained at the beginning, yes, but you focus more on his outward reactions and not on what he feels.

    Of course, I'm sure you contemplated all of this and were simply constrained by the word limit. It happens all too often, I fear. Other than that, I have to say once again the relationship between Alistair and Wraith is very well portrayed. Can't wait to see what happens in the next prompt!

    The size constraint of the flash fics makes it a little harder to cover enough plot ground and go into greater emotional depth, but more will come as Wraith and Alistair get to know each other better, I promise! I deliberately didn't describe the sex between Tamlen and Wraith, because I'm sort of saving that for the Chantry boy. As to the grief, remember, he and Tamlen both knew this wasn't a forever thing, since they would both be called upon to marry. Wraith is feeling grief because he thinks he's supposed to, but he never formed that "I can't live without you" sort of bond with Tamlen. It's more guilt than grief, but Wraith hasn't figured that out yet...hence the lack of emotional depth to his grief.

    But gods, I :wub: that you read my prompts and think about them so seriously! You are amazingly good for my ego, do you know that? :lol:

  10. Winter bites...

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    Holy cow! How much snow did you end getting?

    They recorded 22.5 inches in the Bronx. With drifts it seems a lot worse, although at least the wind scoured the snow off my car. It's plowed in, but what's not buried in the wall of snow is clean! :lol:

  14. Writing or typing?

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    I started out writing longhand, in a series of notebooks, going through pens at a prodigious rate, and working on my laptop desk or at the pool. Then I would type everything up on the computer, and edit, edit, edit...

    It got colder, and I moved indoors, and eliminated the middle man, so to speak, and now I work on the computer. I still make notes to myself on all sorts of things, including scraps of paper, post-it notes, and my arm.

    Many, many years ago, I had an old Royal typewriter, with the cloth ribbons, and I used to love pounding away on that old thing... :D

  15. Review Replies for AFF Prompt/Gifts

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    wanderingaddict: Thank you! I think this one was probably the most fun to write, and I'm glad you liked it. I do like getting inside my characters' heads, even if it's a little harder to expound on that with the limitations of the prompt. But then again, that may be a good thing... :)

    Virtual Vacation Planning (OOC)

    in 2011 AFF Virtual Vacation

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    Hmm...choices indeed. I think Room 5 might still be free?

    Of course now I have to go think about who to bring along with me. Can I have Solaufein *and* Haer'Dalis, or is that just cheating?

    Both are fine! We approve of having lots of pretties around. Now, do you think they'll look nice in kilts? :D

    It looks like you'll be in room 4, however...

    Virtual Vacation Planning (OOC)

    in 2011 AFF Virtual Vacation

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    Yeah, I still haven't figured why people would leave the bedrooms if they need a vacation that bad. ;) I usually spend the first couple days catching up on sleep for most vacations. I never sleep well just before a trip and/or I've been busy doing prep for trip.

    Oh, I plan on spending a good deal of time in bed myself... and in the hot tub... and the kitchen (gods, those counters...) and anywhere else my elves and I find appealing. A good vacation is one I limp home from... :D

  25. Review Replies for Alchemy

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    ShadowKnight: I really don't know what else to say except thank you, for reading, for reviewing, and most of all for being so incredibly supportive and just helpful as I got my feet wet here! You make me think, you make me laugh, and you make me want to push that little bit harder.

    I'm glad the end worked, and especially the sex! I had way too much fun writing that, mind you, so yay! I'm also glad my twisted take on Gend worked. His backstory has stuck in my head for so long, and I've wanted to incorporate it somehow, somewhere. I'm also glad the bond worked, and yes, Sand is enough of an inner romantic to think that he'd found the one in Vale...

    And thanks again for sticking around for the ride! :D

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