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Some of my favorites: - Within Temptation (metalish) - Epica (Some screaming, but not alot) - Emilie Autumn (interesting lyrics)

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I'm going to apologize in advance, I reread it before I submitted and it's a very concrit review, so please don't take offense! Oh, sorry that I was unclear in the review. In my defense, I was slightly tired at the time. When I said the middle, I was talking more about the area where Gerald entered the barn and that section. I understand what you were going for the eagerness, etc, but as pittwitch mentioned it was slightly corny and I think that is what threw me for a loop. The story set out with a very unique plot, descriptive and well thought out with just the right amount of tension and then they sorta just fell into each others arms. You mentioned that it was your first consensual m/m scene, so that may have played a role into it. What might have helped it a bit would be to follow through with the worry from earlier about Gerald's father discovering them, or play up the tension. Maybe even make Gerald work for it a bit since I got the sense that Harry wasn't as much emotionally involved earlier in the fic. As for the hours later? That worked for me. Detailed sex scenes are always nice, but sometimes leaving just hints and making the reader fill in the blanks works just as well. It allows us to imagine it how we want to! Plus, it's a flashfic. You expect some detail, but not a full play by play. All in all, I liked the story though. As I said, the multiple uses of the prompt was cool

Wow this topic exploded! A lot of interesting posts put up and I agree with a lot of the information brought up. If anyone wants to read other blogs that deal with the same topics, I can post a few that I view on a regular basis. It's rather interesting to watch it all.

Updates from Apollo TOS Review: Disclaimers Welcome to this week's TOS Review: Disclaimer Issue. Why are disclaimers important? Disclaimers are our biggest legal protection. As everyone knows, where fan fiction often gets in trouble is the fact that as authors, we are basing our stories off of copyrighted material. The most common legal argument that fan fictions writers and sites use to justify what they do is the Fair Use part of the copyright code. In this it states that copyrighted material can be used for transformative purposes, which is our loophole. However with that loophole we still need to make sure that we are covered as much as possible. The site has reached out to friends in the legal field to determine what steps are best taken and the response was disclaim, disclaim, disclaim! That being said, they provided with basic aspects that should be in any disclaimer which we have based our disclaimer policy off of. This doesn't just protect the site, this also protects you as a user. How you may ask? Because if an author gets up in arms about fan fiction, this protects you from being sued for profits as you state that you make no money from it. That being said, disclaimers vary depending on the section you write for so here is a basic breakdown of what we look for: Fan Fiction Name the world/title/fandom and say you don't own it. Clearly state no money is made. There are examples of what is needed, exactly, in the FAQ as well as in other areas. Real Person Fiction Name the person or persons and say you don't KNOW them. Not that you don't OWN them. State that it's a work of fiction. Clearly state no money is made. Original Fiction There are a number of requirements for original fiction/non fiction/poetry. This link has it all exactly. 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Where do you live that it's not common? I see it all to often both at home bars as well as when I visit friends in other places. And yes, he uses exploitative psychology, but that's how assholes get women to fall for them... They play off weaknesses, vanity, etc to get attention. And since women love attention....

Funnily enough, there is a reality outside of fiction behind people willing to date/fuck assholes/bitches/etc. Look at frats and sororities. 'Nuff said. There is psychology behind it all. There are a number of blogs that are devoted to it - It's called Game. And it works, over and over and over again. It goes back to the concept of Alpha, Beta and Omega males. I've read alot in regards to it and it never ceases to amaze me what women fall for...They call themselves seduction experts. Ugh! If you wanna read a blog that has such a variety of asshole moves that women fall for check out The Real Assanova. This guy is a king at Asshole Game and gets laid often for it. If even 1/2 of what he says is true, then it saddens me what women have come to.

Not the helping the site expand part?

There isn't any specific prize, except your artwork being shown off on the calendar and other items if it wins as well as the satisfaction that comes from knowing your art is helping the site expand/earn money...

So we can check, please provide the story domain

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There were a few reviews that I wanted to take the time to respond to, so here they are! Haunted Prompt: FairySlayer - I have a friend who can't go anywhere near places where a number of people died because of the voices, I just took it one step further that the ghosts follow in this piece. She hates it and it truly drives her nuts! Witch Prompt: JayDee - You have no idea how hard it was to write just 140 characters! It truly was an exercise in restraint, but you're right, the line totally works in the bedroom! pittwitch - LoL - Aren't most men wanton? Candy Prompt: pittwitch - Thank you! Melrick - LoL, yes... I get it, funny FairySlayer - Thanks for the comments on the timing. I wasn't sure if it went too fast, so I appreciate the validation! The singing was a tiny bit corny, true, but the damn thing was running through my head and I couldn't not put it in!!! Asexual Biped - Perhaps I made it too obscure, I was trying to relay that sex wasn't an option because protection wasn't available... Ah well, I guess the candy aspect works as well!

Is this what broke my other post?

Prompt: Turkey Please remember to follow the rules as outlined here: Rules Happy Writing!

Prompt: Cornucopia Please remember to follow the rules as outlined here: Rules Happy Writing!

Prompt: Tradition Please remember to follow the rules as outlined here: Rules Happy Writing!

Prompt: Harvest Please remember to follow the rules as outlined here: Rules Happy Writing!

Pen Name: Apollo Story link: Prompt: Candy Type of fic: Flashfic Rating: Adult + Fandom: Original Pairing: N/A Warnings: Challenge, Complete/Oneshot, M/F, HJ, Oral

Because of spam bot crawlers, you can't make it visible on the archive side, so it's not you don't worry!

So you'd be up for Slash (m/m, f/f) and het? How do you prefer to be contacted?

Updates from Apollo TOS Review: Minors As you may have noticed last week, I did a review of part of AFF's T.O.S. regarding plagiarism. To ensure that everyone is aware of the major aspects of our Terms of Service, we will be doing a weekly column here in the news. This weeks topic will be minors on the forum/archive. I think we've done a very good job being clear on the fact that you must be 18 years old to access the site through the splash page, age verification page, putting the RTA tag on our pages, as well as the TOS for both the archive and forums. Since we are an adult themed site, this is something that all users need to be aware of and we can always use an extra set of eyes. Having any users under the age of 18 puts the site in a very precarious legal position. I can't tell you how many times over the years we've dealt with angry parents threatening legal action despite our many efforts to keep them out. I've heard all the excuses: "I just wanted to share my fiction," "I didn't know," "I'm not in the US, your rules don't apply," to "It's not fair." The fact of the matter is it does not matter. Unless you are 18, you are not welcome on AdultFanFiction.Net. We know that kids will be kids and ignore the many warnings, but for those that have ignored them and are reading this: We take your presence here seriously. We will find you. If you don't believe me, take a look at the statistics as of September 6th, 2010 found here. If you are a minor reading this, I ask that you turn yourself in to our moderator team. To all of our users that waited until they were 18? Thank you very much. Keep an eye out for any possible minors and please feel free to report it to our moderators so that we can investigate it and take appropriate action. 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We have 28 downloads of the template, however no art has come in yet. Remember, submissions are due by 11-7-10, so put on the finishing touches on your pieces and start sending them in! If you haven't checked it out yet, see this topic for more information. Dribs, Drabs and Doggy Tales! Thank you to everyone who responded to our very third prompt, "Candy" We have 4 responses so far this week! Don't forget that the topic doesn't close until 11:59pm tonight, so there is still time to get in an entry. For everyone that has participated, we will be sending you the badge for this week that you can display where you so choose! I apologize that I was late sending them for week 2, I'll do better this week, I promise! If you've read the entries, please don't forget to review the story and let the Author know you liked it! As a reminder, the next topic is now posted, please visit this forum and starting Sunday 8am you can post your new entries! 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