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That's the second more recent request for The Bachelor Party. What a crazy story, LOL. http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600095762

In the cold of space you find the heat of suns by Mannah Pierce is an absolute must-read.

Isn't that why we use betas?

It's Hestia's Bachelor Party that you're looking for, I think: http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600095762

For your lack of personal experience, you could do the voyeur thing. I go to Youtube and type in 'gay boys kissing' in the search field when I lack inspiration for a lemon or a lime in something I'm working on. I'm sure you could probably type in 'girls kissing girls' and get similar results.

I have been following your story. I thought you were already a published author. You certainly write like one.

I am THE QUEEN of OOC, and I am unrepentant. I write for Naruto, and took the characters of Hiashi Hyuuga and Yoshino Nara and totally revamped their characterizations for my fanfiction. It works well; the 'what if' to which you refer certainly applies in my case. I'm proud of my re-work to the character. I think if you keep the characters IC it severely compromises the number of fanfiction ideas you can use for them. I'm about writing, and that means character development. So I will step out of characterization and relish it.

Tell the truth and shame the devil.

Sorry, no dice. Every writer thinks their work could be better. Don't ask yourself why you write, ask yourself why YOU BOTHER TO PUBLISH YOUR SELF-PROCLAIMED CRAP. You aren't fooling anyone but yourself. If trashing your work is a defense mechanism (and some flaming cheeseball attempt at humor) you feel that I as both writer and reader am supposed to overlook, then the joke is on you. You're not going to earn a review from me. I'm just going to sail past your self-proclaimed crap and read something else. Hell, why not re-read my own stuff? Sure it could be better, but I happen to like my work. Honestly? This is fanfiction, written for free and read for free. If a forum like this one scares you so much that you'd disclaim every piece of your crap by warning the readers that it's a piece of crap then you are clearly not ready for this. Own up to the fact that you're so desperate for validation that you've resorted to this. It's the first step to writing to your strengths and in fact improving your skill, something I do believe you want to achieve even if it really is only the side benefit.

It's called The Perfect Boyfriend and it's written by IvvyMoon: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4257921/1/The_Perfect_Boyfriend

Breath. Breathe. Two different things. The first is a noun. The second is a verb. Trust me. Also... Choking. Chocking. Two different things. The first has to do with the throat. The second is a nautical term. Please stop mocking the damn dictionary. It exists for a critical purpose.

My ideas are based heavily on my interpretation of the characters I want to write about. I think of the things I like most about, say, Shikamaru, or Neji, or Kiba, or Kabuto, or Tenten, and I search my brain for a premise that would facilitate writing something that emphasizes those things. Take Gaara, who is one of my all-time favorite characters, for example. I love his appearance--he's a mega-contrast of red hair, green eyes, dark liner, and pale skin. He's a work of art, literally! I enjoy describing him, so I have written him into a fic where someone's, in this particular case, Naruto's, first sight of him steals his breath away. The premise had to be one that accommodated Gaara as an object of lust and reverence affection. I try to write stories that I want to read. Consequently, I make more of an effort to come up with a good premise and a well-rounded story overall. The results are usually good enough for me to want to share them with others.

Dude, they don't expire. Go for broke.

You know what? I don't care. Consider me a product of the LOGO cable channel; I've seen big, muscle-y brutes together with big, muscle-y brutes and frail, skinny men with frail, skinny men and everything in-between. I'm fine with all of it. I write yaoi for Naruto. Consequently, the characters are portrayed in my fiction as lean but toned and/or muscled. In one of my fics Shikamaru Nara is portrayed as a former swimmer and gymnast, if that gives you an idea. The bottom line is, as long as they're loving each other, they can look however they want.

Before I can give you an answer I have to ask a question of my own. What exactly do you mean when you state "I'm an AFF writer"?

I'm sure all of us have read a fic that blew our minds, only to find that the author has abandoned it, leaving the rest of it to our hyperactive imagination. It's frustrating, isn't it? Writers start fics they don't finish so often that we become anesthetized to it, for the most part. But then, there's one or two unfinished fics that languish in our mind to keep our frustration stoked. Case in point: an absolutely magnificent (IMHO) Naruto fanfic called The Dancer. It's a GaaNaruNejiSasu, if you can believe it! I went back and read it today. I love the fic, love it love it love it! Alas, the author is nowhere to be found, and for some time now. I wonder if she even remembers. I have finished that fic in my head in at least a dozen different scenarios, but it does little to alleviate my frustration. How I wish the author would return to finish the work she started! Anyone else want to share the name of a top-quality fic that never got finished?

Those would be Naruto/Gaara and Neji/Shikamaru. I'm also fond of Shikaku/Hiashi, Kakashi/Yamato, Orochimaru/Kimimaro and Zabuza/Haku.

I note, temptresshermione, that you've published two chapters of one fic, received two 'reviews', and haven't updated your fic since you published it in May. Why did you write it? You claim to want honest-to-goodness feedback on your writing, but it seems to the outsider here (me) that you published it to get reviews and only that, since you haven't bothered to update it.

Seconded, with one exception: if it's so bad I have concluded that I can't find anything good to say about the fic then I do not leave a review, not even one I would consider concrit. More often than not when I have done that my reviews were deleted. If you aren't getting reviews, big deal. Keep in mind that most of the patrons to this site are minors without a clue about what it takes to create good fanfiction, and as a general rule they don't leave reviews. It's less a reflection of the quality of your work than you might imagine. If you're not getting reviews but your hit count is going through the roof, then I think that speaks for itself. Ditto, though, if you're not getting reviews OR hits. In that case I'd consider getting a beta (or another beta) and reworking the fic. I'm not above asking the author of a fic I really enjoyed reading to consider beta-ing something I have written. I've got a 50/50 shot at getting a yes. Consequently, I don't think anyone else should be either.

The following instructions are excerpted directly from a post in this forum. I didn't write them; I do use them as a reference and am reposting them here in response to your question. ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* It's pretty simple; actually, if different than it was long ago. It involves square brackets, as you'll see below, which have been implemented due to their superior flexibility and dynamics (this is called "bb code", and is what is used on the AdultFanFiction.net Forum, too). No worries, though -- for now, the use of the "pointy brackets", a.k.a. "HTML", will still be applicable for Story Editing purposes. Here's a short for-instance guide that we hope will be easy enough to follow. Say an Author on our site (we will call him "Narut0r0xMys0x") wishes to recommend a Story in the Inuyasha section. He'd start out by going to the second typing field found in the Edit Profile section of his account, and entering the name of the Archive between the proper command brackets as such: [archive]Inu[/archive]. Directly after that, Narut0r0xMys0x would find the Story number (this is the number following the equals-sign at the end of the Story's url) and tack it on, with a little more code, after the Archive command. The nearly-complete Recommended Reading Story link's coding would look, so far, like this: [archive]Inu[/archive][story=#######] -- of course, he'd use the actual story number instead of number signs. He would type the Story Title (we'll say it's called "My Favorite Inuyasha Story EVAR!") itself sandwiched between the "story" open-and-close commands, as such: [story=#######]My Favorite Inuyasha Story EVAR![/story] So, so far, for Narut0r0xMys0x's recommendation of his favorite Inuyasha Story, the coding would look just so: [archive]Inu[/archive][story=#######]My Favorite Inuyasha Story EVAR![/story] At this point, your Story Recommendation code is completed! To add a following link to the Author who wrote "My Favorite Inuyasha Story EVAR!" (which is completely optional), Narut0r0xMys0x could follow up the above coding with a link to him (in this case, we will call the Recommended Author "Iwillnotsit"). Like above, Narut0r0xMys0x would need to find the Author's number (which is found at the end of the url above an Author's Profile Page), and sandwich that between the Author command brackets. So this next step would go something like this: [archive]Inu[/archive][author=#######]Iwillnotsit[/author] For kicks, Narut0r0xMys0x could add a fan-boyish (or otherwise zippy) comment at the end of all the above coding. If he chose to do so, the final product of it all could be written like this: [archive]Inu[/archive][story=#######] My Favorite Inuyasha Story EVAR! [/story] by [archive]Inu[/archive][author=#######]Iwillnotsit[/author] -- this story r0xMys0x!!!11ones! And congratulations! You -- and Narut0r0xMys0x -- have now got a complete link to your favorite Story (and its Author)! Got more favorites? (You'd better!) If you want to tell the world about them -- which your fellow AFF'ers would just adore! wouldn't you? -- just lather, rinse, and repeat, using a separate line for each link. ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* This should help.

NO RECOMMENDATIONS -- Some of these people spend hours trolling this web site every day. I know this because they're logged on when I'm logged on. So I click on their user name to view their profile and do you know what I find? Nothing. Not that it matters except, for all the time a person spends logged on to the site he or she doesn't have a recommendation for anyone else? People, there is a section of your profile called 'recommended reading'. Use it! It's a free text field, it can't be any simpler to use! Type in the name of a fic that you particularly liked, something you've come back to read more than once. That isn't so hard, is it? No, recommendations (and reviews) are not required here, but aren't they still common courtesy? And honestly, if you busted your hump to write a decent fic that turned out to be well-received on this web site, wouldn't you want someone to do the same for you?

Read slash written by a guy. I'm telling you, it can't get more authentic than that.

I wrote a fic called Constructive Possession. It is 28 chapters and its title is derived from something that occurs at the end of the fic. I wrote my story in scenes and then had to piece it all together. I didn't have a beginning when I started writing. Creative process is not the same for everyone, as the responses to your question clearly illustrate.

Honestly...songfics get a bad rap. Like any genre of fanfiction, there are excellent examples, average ones, and the ones that make you blanch. Using the lyrics to a song in your fic is not necessarily the proverbial kiss of death. I have used song lyrics in my fanfiction and would do it again. However, I do not compromise the premise in order to do so. Writing a fic where all anyone is reading are someone else's lyrics is an exercise in futility. It would be simpler to listen to the song while imagining I read your story. Look...go for the song, it's your baby. You're not going to develop an instinct for songfics if you don't at least try. Don't let anyone talk you out of what is essentially your evolution as a writer. Even if it is cliche, you are being creative and you should refrain from corralling that process for anyone else's preferences.

SECONDED. Nice job, and nice choice of song (even though it's overused in fanfiction, this is the best use of it I've seen so far).