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Jude’s Tale has another review which says what we’re probably all thinking about the original title. Thank you for your review! I agree with the lameness. Basically I came to dislike the original title (it was too damn obscure for one) and I really wanted to change it. Unfortunately at that point my mind went blank so after a couple days stewing I went back to the ancient format of X’s Tale – as you say it doesn’t really cover what to expect (the summary is a little better for that but still vague really, could do with a punch up), but I really didn’t want to leave it as “untitled story”. If I think of something more evocative or less lame then I’ll change it again and hope not to confuse too many people. I suppose I could argue him dying doesn’t stop the original fate part being appropriate since dear old Atropos would insist dying is everyone’s fate but misplaced or not, definitely lame. It was @InBrightestDay who inspired me to keep going with perspective switches for this story so credit again there! I’m glad it worked out good. There are more hints at Jude’s background, but in parts 4 and 5 he’s even more an extra in his own story. I think it’s down to me doing the flashfic 1000 word count challenge and having thinner character portraits to leave more words for the stuff I did show. Alright, tell. The flashfic format almost comes like computer game resource management trying to get the balance right. Could definitely have done with more about him than what Kizzy gets from his mind in part 1 or his self pity and resurgent prejudice in part 2. I do have his motivations for ending up like that thought out, so will try and find a good place to share ‘em. And if I fail it’ll be a weakness in the story. Whoohoo! As basically a pornographer most of the time it’s always really awesome to hear someone found a sex scene hot. Thanks again for your review, I really appreciate both the positive words and the honest appraisal of the bits that haven’t worked so well for you.

That old woman feels like the kind of filthy reprobate you could spin worlds from. The elf and the pseudo-Orc were interesting too!

Review for Brick and Bone @pippychick Aw you left a review too! That’s so sweet. God, I love ghost stories. Yet somehow whenever I write one it turns out like this. I’m so glad I managed to tether that MC to the reader, at least in your case, because even though he’s doing naughty things, I adore him so, and I want everyone else to adore him too. But I guess that could be said by most writers about most of their characters. Thank you so much, Pippy!

And a review from @InBrightestDay on Last Full Measure. <fold into fetal (not curl, but fold, a feat to say the least> So much attention... SO MUCH ATTENTION! From InBrightestDay on March 16, 2019 Well holy crap! Things just seriously escalated. I know you've said this story was influenced by Aliens, but this chapter has me wondering just how much. At first, I was actually thinking more along the lines of Predator, what with the soldiers goodnaturedly giving each other shit on the helicopter/dropship, but that stopped when we reached the colony. The massacre and the terrified rebel survivor really make me wonder whether this was done by humans at all. Did an attempt at a new rebel tactic go hideously wrong, resulting in something more like Reavers? Hecatoncheires is a terrestrial planet in the habitable zone, so does it have indigenous life, perhaps something really nasty that the soldiers on the base didn't know about? Or, after humanity has spent so much time warring with itself, did something come from outsidehuman space in ships of its own? Things to think about for sure. I did catch one little typo: “Sergeant Major, we’ve reached thearmoured depot,” the voice of Private First Class Sam Dennis stated through her headset. Given that the building is full of tanks and an APC, I'm assuming that was meant to be "armour depot" Also, this seemed a bit odd. “A rebel?” Sam asked. “Not all rebels are hideous monsters of fairy tales, Sam,” Tirsa stated bluntly. In the previous chapter, Sam was the one saying she admired the rebels for their focus and determination, as well as admiring their goal of independence. Maybe she's thinking of them as monsters right now because of what she's just seen, but it still felt a little strange. All in all, though, this was a serious game-changer and I am eagerly looking forward to the next chapter! *** Well holy crap! Things just seriously escalated. I know you've said this story was influenced by Aliens, but this chapter has me wondering just how much. At first, I was actually thinking more along the lines of Predator, what with the soldiers goodnaturedly giving each other shit on the helicopter/dropship, but that stopped when we reached the colony. Lol. There are several inspirations. Lol. Aliens is probably the most notable. But Predator, too, and the game series Mass Effect, Star Trek, Star Wars, Battle of Castle Itter, Battle of Rorke's Drift, the Battle of Vienna... The battle of me rambling onwards... lol. I wanted the good natured banter in there to keep showing the unit cohesion and the fact that they've mostly been together a while. I do hope it came through. The massacre and the terrified rebel survivor really make me wonder whether this was done by humans at all. Did an attempt at a new rebel tactic go hideously wrong, resulting in something more like Reavers? Hecatoncheires is a terrestrial planet in the habitable zone, so does it have indigenous life, perhaps something really nasty that the soldiers on the base didn't know about? Or, after humanity has spent so much time warring with itself, did something come from outsidehuman space in ships of its own? I struggled with what and how much to show when they dropped to keep suspense and tension growing. Based on the questions, I'd say went quite well. But I can't give away too much. Lol. Oops, spelling. Although I might have that as routine... may have to double check. And with Sam... Um... I think I originally had it as someone else, then cut that back to avoid too many characters in that kitchen and gave Sam the line. Oops, again. All in all, though, this was a serious game-changer and I am eagerly looking forward to the next chapter! YAY!!! Great to hear and I'm glad to keep your interest piqued.

Lol. And the British side shines through. I had to read your line about chuffed to bits twice. Lol. Being honest, if you really expanded this out (not saying you have to, it's fantastic as is), I think it would surpass King. So, there's that. I would hope no dogs were hurt... I'd be so betrayed. And yep, the bookends you wrote were excellent and really showed how much he has changed and how much his torment has suffered him. (And thank you, Pippy, for sharing!) Awe, made you blush . You're welcome for it. . If you decide to rewrite, let me know, I'd definitely want to read it. And, honestly, I think the lack of pronouns would work just as well. It was well written. I'm sad you didn't continue it. I really want to read more of these two. And it's an intriguing mythos you have so far. Lol. Hot is good. If it's not what is needed in the scene, it falls flat. You delivered on it all the way through. It's easy when the writing's great, Pippy. But you're welcome all the same.

I may have to wear sunglasses to view these shelves, all the attention they're getting. Another from @pippychickon Blood Prize. From pippychick on March 16, 2019 Part 9 - 11 I don't believe Chantal is dead, even if Kala does. It's just too awful, though I completely understand them leaving her - on her order. Better to lose one than lose all, but damn.... This thing they've picked up had better be worth it. I don't think they should just hand it over. Whatever it is, it's clearly important, and if Chantal is still alive, this thing might help to get her back. I know... but I'm hoping... Well, how can I start with an opening like that? Lol. I can't reveal a lot about following chapters or the characters involved, but I can say that you're going to enjoy them. And definitely. To quote Trek, the needs of the many outweigh the needs of the one. As much as Chantal may not seem like the greatest captain, her crew is first and foremost. This Macguffin is... Wait, almost had me. Lol. Let's just say it's important enough. Hopefully you still enjoy it as the chapters go on. Thank you for the review, Pippy, and look forward to the next.

Screw it, I’m posting! @JayDee I feel like there’s a bigger story at play with the temple thing, but I never did figure out what it was lol. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Especially the crowd stuff. I was worried it wasn’t very hot, but I posted it anyway because I felt like I needed to give that old woman’s story to the world lol. Thank you so much for the review!

My cat has been trying to convince my dog to cuddle him for a good two years now but the dog is too scared. So the cat just spent the last few hours using a big farty dog ass as a pillow. That, my friends, is dedication.