I don't think I've had this many reviews in a long, long, long time... The shelves are definitely getting a good wax for shine... Another from @InBrightestDayon Last Full Measure.
From InBrightestDay on January 27, 2019
Chapter 3
It's nice to get to meet more of the characters, Tirsa in this case. I see what you meant when you said you didn't want her to apear too interested in Celeste, given that we learn here that she has issues forming successful relationships with anybody.
I also wonder how truthful she was being with Ingvild about Mars. She says she has nightmares, but she also mentioned earlier in the chapter that she had never felt more alive than when she was in combat. These two things aren't necessarily contradictory, but it provides an intriguing ambiguity about the character.
Finally, we learn that, assuming I'm understanding the ranking system correctly, Celeste's ex is now going to be her commanding officer. That's...going to suck.
We also learn some kind of unsettling stuff about the Rebels, like how they don't do the whole "prisoner" thing. It makes me wonder about the nature of the conflict and how we got to this state between the two sides.
At any rate, I'm interested in seeing what happens when they finally get to Alpha Centauri!
It's nice to get to meet more of the characters, Tirsa in this case. I see what you meant when you said you didn't want her to apear too interested in Celeste, given that we learn here that she has issues forming successful relationships with anybody.
My stylistic approaches have varied depending on what I'm writing and how I'm going about it. Usually, I'll throw a few together (three or four) and introduce them at an even pace (or try...). Similar to how I've come with the MCs here. Although this one is kind of different in that it is a slower intro.
As for her lack of forming relationships, there is a reason for that in Chapter 4 (which, hopefully, is a good written character development... I have a tendency to push myself, writing characters and situations expanding my own ability and trying to open other people up to them...)
I also wonder how truthful she was being with Ingvild about Mars. She says she has nightmares, but she also mentioned earlier in the chapter that she had never felt more alive than when she was in combat. These two things aren't necessarily contradictory, but it provides an intriguing ambiguity about the character.
I never meant for them to be contradictory, so that's good. And it's good there's a little ambiguity there. As for lying... Well, that I'd like to leave to the reader. Is she lying because she's an alcoholic? Is she being honest and has almost a split reaction to combat?
Finally, we learn that, assuming I'm understanding the ranking system correctly, Celeste's ex is now going to be her commanding officer. That's...going to suck.
In a word... Most certainly.
And you understand correctly. Adara is the platoon's second in command (2IC) as Warrant Officer, subordinate only to Hamilton. Celeste, as Sergeant Major, is third in command (3IC). Perhaps I should have put some of the jargon in an A/N.
We also learn some kind of unsettling stuff about the Rebels, like how they don't do the whole "prisoner" thing. It makes me wonder about the nature of the conflict and how we got to this state between the two sides.
I do hope to include some of the backstory regarding the Rebel and United Earth conflict in some of the coming chapters (well, coming in terms of writing...). I feel that it will help to worldbuild (history build?) with regards to the United Earth and her colonies. So hopefully that turns out just as well as I hope it will.
At any rate, I'm interested in seeing what happens when they finally get to Alpha Centauri!
There are a few more chapters to go before that happens and I hope they don't get too boring and turn you away. And when they do get to Alpha Centauri, I hope it doesn't disappoint with the build up.
Thanks for your review!