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No, no! Not like scolding at all - what I was getting at was, well, if it's not your cup of tea it's better to have some coffee rather than choke it down You wanted the best joke, you ended up with number 2!

Please don't get me wrong: I wasn't complaining that this story wasn't my cup of tea, I was more or less informing you of that fact. Sort of like me saying, "I don't usually do this on the first date, but..." Apologies if it came across as me scolding you or anything like that. I read the tags. I don't normally read scat stories, but I was intrigued to see what you would do with the material, having handled necrophilia so adroitly. Explaining the eyes and footjob as exactly the sort of sadistic thing Bellatrix would do just for kicks is an excellent bit of characterization. Having only seen the movies, my impressions of her were that she's very powerful, very dangerous, very insane, and everyone was scared shitless (so to speak) of her! Spicy Indian food... *shudder*. Reminds me of the "South Park" parody of The Human Centipede. Hey, there's an idea -- Bellatrix gathers up some other students and sews them to Harry to make a Hogwarts Human Centipede!! Damn, I forgot Harry died at the end of the Tonks "corpse-fucking spectacular." (I guess I liked that story so much I wanted it to go on somehow...) And, finally, I fully intend to read Part 2 when/if you decide to write it up! Just in case you give a shit... (You see what I did there? Did you see it? Oh, yeah!)

So, as Joe has been writing chapter by chapter, and lot going back after to re-edit(as far as I'm aware), I've noticed a few discrepancies. Not that they're a big deal, but I thought it was interesting. The first one I noticed was Tara's age. Or, at least, I thought I did. Reading early on, for some reason I have the distinct impression that Tara was something like two years older than Jack. I went back to look for evidence on this, but couldn't find any. So my question is, does anyone else have any memory of this? Second is the cabin. From the first mention of it, when Kayla talks about ownership, she says it's leased from her dad,a boss. Later in the story. (Chapter 32, I've almost finished my rereading of it) Kayla mentions that her parents own it, and that they inherited it from their grandparents. I think there are a few others, but I can't remember any. Also, Jack, mentions, when talking about dick size, that he had never measured because, "his ego wasn't that big." Now, at least in my personal experience, this is no where near true. I will say, and put money on, the notion that nearly every guy, at least once in their life, will probably measure their dick. They may not freely admit it, but probably have. I don't know why this sticks out in my mind, but it does. If you measure your dick, that doesn't mean you have a big ego. Now, correct me if im wrong, but It probably means that you have normal curiosities.

I hope you are correct. Another possibility is complications from the recent surgery. I SURE HOPE NOT!!. And certainly not another job/mission. B

The end of the chapter is in sight! I'm aiming to have it done by the weekend and it looks like it will be Sorry this took a while and I really hope it will be worth the wait. It's almost certainly not going to be the longest of the chapters but it has been one of the most difficult in terms of writing (not even counting the problems I was having a couple weeks ago). So hopefully it will all come together in the end Updates to come.

I've done some indie publishing! ... I really don't know what else to say, as there's no format required for this... Trouble is the first in a long series and was my first ebook published, mainly to get comfortable with the format and how ebooks work before going on and putting (the once named) Adaptation out there into the world. The series can be found on Amazon, Barns and Noble, Knook, Smashwords, Apple, Scribd and a few others but the link for Amazon is below along with the description: Aren knew, when she begged to go, that being finished at the palace was dangerous but every lady is finished at court, no matter her rank or the worth of her title. She also knew tricks that would help keep her safe, if only she kept her head down and blended in with the other ladies. Av's duties as master and warrior include determining who amongst those at court would be a threat to the common people. Sometimes having rank means seeing things which commoners might miss, such as a lady who doesn't show up for training one day, a lady that he hadn't realized was there until she went missing. http://www.amazon.com/dp/B00RD9YHS2