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Happy NewYear! Hope yours goes better than the poor schlubs who made the float in Pasedena that broke down and prevented the end of the parade…

I don’t have any great preference about single chapter review or multipart reviews. Looking back at my own track record I think one review for each batch of chapters that I read is the normal thing I do, but seriously the one taking the trouble to review things should have the final say about this. Getting good reviews is so rare that no author should complain about such. As for your story I agree with the choice of keeping the story in the current version and use my suggestions for future stories. I look forward for what you will come up with.

Thank you for the review. Looking at what you wrote I think you will like the upcoming chapter when it is done. It could perhaps be interesting for you to know that I actually started this story years back and intended for it to be 4 chapters long, but I ran into trouble with the latter part of story when I things started to feel rushed. Trying to move the characters in position for the final part of the story meant too much of the text was spent on the wrong parts with no good final scene for the chapter. Recently I picked the story up again and realized I could fix the issue by retarget to 5 chapters so I could get room to expand the parts that felt rushed. The good news is that I got about 25 pages more written for the story that I can reuse for chapter 3 and 4, but there is still plenty of work left to be done.