Thundercloud

A number of best novels in history has been written in first POV. Stories like “Jane Eyre”, “The Catcher in the Rye”, “To Kill a Mockingbird” and “The Hound of the Baskervilles” are famous examples. From another point of view I saw a list of the 50 best first POV from the last 20 years. I recognize a number of the authors but none of the books. Highly successful authors, but they are well known for the books when they did not use the first POV. I suspect the first POV books are also good but it is damn hard to get it right.

It is not like it is impossible to write good first POV, but unless you are willing to devote the time it took to write the famous books above, the likelihood is great that your story would work better with another POV. I had exactly this experience with my story Carmen Elisa Needs to Die (https://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600109195) were I used first POV since I wanted the character talking to the audience. It is really funny at points when the narrator is obviously hiding awkward truths from the reader, but in hindsight the value of those scenes is very shallow to the effort it took to make the other scenes work. I have lost count of how many scenes I tried to write but rejected since they were to hard to write in first POV without the scene getting too long and awkward. I am really proud of the story, but it would not be the first I recommend to a new reader.

Thank you for the encouraging review.

If you liked the beginning I have good hope that you will that later part of the story to be good. I have learnt a couple of new things during the years I have been working on the story. It is not finished yet, but the endgame is getting close enough that I have started to map out how the story ends.
I hope you will get the chance to visit Stockholm, it is quite a lovely place. Especially if you stay clear of the more scary places where the lead characters go urban exploring.

 

A number of best novels in history has been written in first POV. Stories like “Jane Eyre”, “The Catcher in the Rye”, “To Kill a Mockingbird” and “The Hound of the Baskervilles” are famous examples. From another point of view I saw a list of the 50 best first POV from the last 20 years. I recognize a number of the authors but none of the books. Highly successful authors, but they are well known for the books when they did not use the first POV. I suspect the first POV books are also good but it is damn hard to get it right.

It is not like it is impossible to write good first POV, but unless you are willing to devote the time it took to write the famous books above, the likelihood is great that your story would work better with another POV. I had exactly this experience with my story Carmen Elisa Needs to Die (https://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600109195) were I used first POV since I wanted the character talking to the audience. It is really funny at points when the narrator is obviously hiding awkward truths from the reader, but in hindsight the value of those scenes is very shallow to the effort it took to make the other scenes work. I have lost count of how many scenes I tried to write but rejected since they were to hard to write in first POV without the scene getting too long and awkward. I am really proud of the story, but it would not be the first I recommend to a new reader.

A number of best novels in history has been written in first POV. Stories like “Jane Eyre”, “The Catcher in the Rye”, “To Kill a Mockingbird” and “The Hound of the Baskervilles” are famous examples. From another point of view I saw a list of the 50 best first POV from the last 20 years. I recognize a number of the authors but none of the books. Highly successful authors, but they are well known for the books when they did not use the first POV. I suspect the first POV books are also good but it is damn hard to get it right.

It is not like it is impossible to write good first POV, but unless you are willing to devote the time it took to write the famous books above, the likelihood is great that your story would work better with another POV. I had exactly this experience with my story Carmen Elisa Needs to Die (https://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600109195) were I used first POV since I wanted the character talking to the audience. It is really funny at points when the narrator is obviously hiding awkward truths from the reader, but in hindsight the value of those scenes is very shallow to the effort it took to make the other scenes work. I have lost count of how many scenes I tried to write but rejected since they were to hard to write in first POV without the scene getting too long and awkward. I am really proud of the story, but it would not be the first I recommend to a new reader.

A number of best novels in history has been written in first POV. Stories like “Jane Eyre”, “The Catcher in the Rye”, “To Kill a Mockingbird” and “The Hound of the Baskervilles” are famous examples. From another point of view I saw a list of the 50 best first POV from the last 20 years. I recognize a number of the authors but none of the books. Highly successful authors, but they are well known for the books when they did not use the first POV. I suspect the first POV books are also good but it is damn hard to get it right.

It is not like it is impossible to write good first POV, but unless you are willing to devote the time it took to write the famous books above, the likelihood is great that your story would work better with another POV. I had exactly this experience with my story Carmen Elisa Needs to Die (https://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600109195) were I used first POV since I wanted the character talking to the audience. It is really funny at points when the narrator is obviously hiding awkward truths from the reader, but in hindsight the value of those scenes is very shallow to the effort it took to make the other scenes work. I have lost count of how many scenes I tried to write but rejected since they were to hard to write in first POV without the scene getting too long and awkward. I am really proud of the story, but it would not be the first I recommend to a new reader.

Chapter 11 has now been posted.

We finally get to the masquerade party that Ronja has been dreading and it gets harder and harder to keep the secrets about the sexual depravity hidden.

If you review it the likelihood I review some of your story increases a lot...

Or that he/she has put up a script that on a schedule scan the site for see if there has been an announcement that the site is fully online again. You cannot get around that if the legitimate users are told something that information is also available for the attacker.
As an aside...maybe the crew should try if SonarQube can help you to track down weak spots in the codebase. I have never used for PHP, but I have seen it find really obscure bugs in other languages.

Personal opinion is that posting multiple endings and ask the reader to decide is betraying the reader. Why should I bother reading the story if the author cannot decide the point of the story?

Personal opinion is that posting multiple endings and ask the reader to decide is betraying the reader. Why should I bother reading the story if the author cannot decide the point of the story?

Pen names restored, took a few hours since there are a ton of members. if they aren’t current feel free to edit them.
The attack didn’t get far, only managing to change pen names, user sensitive data is all encrypted so don’t have to worry about it..

Great you have back up you can use to fix the problem.
As a fellow systemdeveloper...unless some of crew know they made the wrong SQL and are responsible for the problem I suggest this might be a good time to verify that you have a full set of backups that is independent from normal backups and preferably off line. If somebody tried to hack AFF, and caused the problem to happen through an exploit, there might we worse data loss that could happen.

Additionally, no matter if this really was an failed attack I would suggest that using a supported version of PHP is really important. I don’t know what PHP version is used here, but  many sites uses outdated PHP with many security holes. Checking OWASP Cheat sheet for PHP is also a really good idea because there are lots of things in PHP that available by default but not always needed. Getting rid things that are not needed increases the security a lot.

Great you have back up you can use to fix the problem.
As a fellow systemdeveloper...unless some of crew know they made the wrong SQL and are responsible for the problem I suggest this might be a good time to verify that you have a full set of backups that is independent from normal backups and preferably off line. If somebody tried to hack AFF, and caused the problem to happen through an exploit, there might we worse data loss that could happen.

Additionally, no matter if this really was an failed attack I would suggest that using a supported version of PHP is really important. I don’t know what PHP version is used here, but  many sites uses outdated PHP with many security holes. Checking OWASP Cheat sheet for PHP is also a really good idea because there are lots of things in PHP that available by default but not always needed. Getting rid things that are not needed increases the security a lot.

It seems that all author names has been replaced by 123123 in the database so you can’t longer search for author names or tell what author who wrote a particular story.

Sounds like a database update that went horribly wrong...do you have backup you can read back to restore the missing information?

I think a downvote button just opens for abuse. At the end of the day you can’t use the downvote metric for anythings useful since you don’t know why somebody downvoted the story/chapter.  The upvote/like is more useful for the author...but it can be abused by authors/readers who want to promote a story.

How about having a “like” button for the chapters where the result is only visible for the author? If you remove publicly visible aspect of the like/upvote you remove a lot of reasons for people arranging a bot that clicks on the like button.

One thing that make dragon prints a measure a bit tricky is that a large number of chapters in the story raises the effort to read it all. This mean that each time you post a new chapter you can expect a number of people checking the beginning out but not becoming fans so they drop out. The increased perceived effort to read the chapters will mean these random visitors lessens over time. In essence you can a growing number of regulars that read everything, but having a dragon print that is falling as fewer random visitors visit the story. If you keep a steady beat of dragon hints as chapters grow in number I would say it signals you are doing great.

From another perspective, exchanging reviews with other authors is a great way to making it more likely new people will check you story. If I have to choose between reading two stories and one of them has a review I will most only choosing the 0 review one when doing community-service-style-reading. Stories with reviews are generally a better read.

The thing lacking at AFF today is we don’t get dragon prints for the individual chapters. If we had those we could tell how many that read to the end. The tricky thing is that adding such feature afterward would imply that later chapters of all existing chapters has no dragon prints even while they could have been visited by loads of people.

“Dark whispers from the Rainbow”

Ummm...waking up while still within inside would imply he stayed hard for the whole night and they slept without moving. This sounds more like parody material for a cartoon than anything that could happen in reality. If you want to make it look like they had sex I suggest they could be covered in the dried remains of cum or something similar.
As for reaction it totally depends on what you want to happen later. Everything from “We never mention this again! We must have been drunk” to “Bloody rapist!” are possible. It is your characters so only you can tell the contents of their emotional backpack.

You don’t seem to subscribe to less is more...anyway...if you ever get around to collect your string of stories into a full story arc I would not mind try reading it since the setting is cool. Until then I think I will focus on my own writing and exchanging reads with other authors.

The idea for the story came from a line of dialogue in JayDee’s hilarious story You (http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600107772&chapter=1) where a character complain about somebody treating her as an exposition fairy. JayDee’s story is a parody about AFF writing itself and IMHO well worth the time to read. Anyway, it made me start thinking about how fun it would be if having a fairy talking about sex toys instead.
I am glad you found it funny, that was my intention.
It is very much coming from a video game context. Invidia Red does in his review refer to Navi from the Zelda series. If you go looking for cosplay of Navi (and you don’t get stuck with Avatar examples) the likelihood is great the Navi cosplay will feature a text sign with some quote from the game.

Tv tropes have a list of examples of exposition fairies in a number of computer games in case you want to educate yourself. https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ExpositionFairy
Thank for the tip, I will look into the difference in the meaning for "lending" with "borrowing". It is easy to stumble into false friends when you write in a second language.

BTW I am really glad you found just a few language issues. The work load of writing the story without a beta reader and the family suffering from sickness for a large part of the December was pretty much over the top. I am kind of surprised that I actually got it finished.
*smiles*
Maybe I should return to develop the setting more. An actual visit to the fairy court sounds like it could be fun to write.

It was a really good idea since somebody hacking the Nice List is an too obvious plot development.
Twins in a threesome was likely the only way to raise the stakes for the elves scene.

BTW...I think I might have missed a negation in my review. The thing I meant to say is that I am not into Anthro but found myself sad I could not see calendar.

I agree that something shiny might be a good idea. A trophy kind of imply that it is something the owner would not like to part with. Exotic horn believed to come from a unicorn?

I agree that something shiny might be a good idea. A trophy kind of imply that it is something the owner would not like to part with. Exotic horn believed to come from a unicorn?

Sounds like you liked it.

Isn’t a shame that searching for erotic Navi cosplay gives you mostly Avatar hits instead of showing you scenes where Navi get what she deserves...

I would say that you should not worry too much. It is not like there is much difference between any two average popular porn movies out there. Building on the expectations about good porn tropes of the public and getting resonance from the emotional context of the scene is not always easy, but the readers imagination will fill the gaps and make them enjoy the scene if it is your normal quality of writing.

Okay...family has recovered from whatever it was (at least verified to not be Covid). This meant I could finally put some time to write and managed to wrap the my project for the Winter Holiday 2021. I thus present:
The Exposition Fairy
Story codes: M/F, Oral, Toys
Summary: Peter is on a mission from the fairy king, but as solstice approaches, the weather worsens. Is it too much to ask for a night in the civilization to recover? The exposition fairy granted to Peter does strongly disagree. So is Peter in for a night of misery, or can he somehow find a way to make the fairy accept that he needs time to relax and recover?