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I have now posted chapter 10 named The Time of the Prophecy: The Assassination This chapter feature the Entaro siblings in a desperate gamble to prevent the upcoming war. The outcome is mostly combat but along the way they stumble into some sex. Story codes for the chapter MF, Oral, MC, Preg, Inc, Rape, Violence, MiCD Main heroes featuring in the chapter are Fenlyw, Duwlon, Enbon, Cymari, Talinda, Larion, Helian and Ezame.

My take is that brilliant non-linear stories you here talk about get their fame from being good despite not being linear. A possible comparison is the Westworld tv-show season 1 that had a big reveal when you realized what you had been watching. In season 2 they wanted to repeat the trick and made things just as non-linear and in the end it was barely watchable. I have avoided the later seasons like plague. My point is that for every successful non-linear storytelling there are many more trainwreck attempts. Doing non-linear storytelling that manage to capture the reader is seriously difficult.

I have now posted chapter 9 named The Time of the Prophecy: The Cult of Three Flames This chapter feature Duwlon doing his favorite thing and Helian being occupied with rebuilding the sex cult of Three Flames. When Duwlon stumble into trouble there are of course plenty of sexual distractions. Story codes for the chapter FF, MF, MC, Inc, Rape Main heroes featuring in the chapter are Duwlon and Helian with additional appearances of some other characters that will matter to the intrigues.

I have now posted chapter 8 named The Time of the Prophecy: The Eternal Guardians This chapter feature Talinda and Cymari on an adventure close to the elven broder. Two of sisters go to find out why the family have lost contact with the elves and run into some really dangerous situations...and lots of nonconsensual sex. Story codes for the chapter 3Plus, MF, FF, Inc, Rape Violence Main heroes featuring in the chapter are Talinda, Cymari with additional appearances of Larion, Helian, Enbon and Trioni

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Since the Edit Story Information feature does not seem to have been fixed, it seems I need some assistance. Can you please add the story code Rim to https://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600109197

Chapter 12 has now been posted. Ronja and Maria are discovering that the sexual abuse they are suffering has been taken to the next level. Can starting to share previous secrets help them to carry on? If you review it the likelihood I review some of your story increases a lot...

An example that don’t have the same number of month and day would be that January 13, 1995 would be 1995-01-13 In case you time to spare and is wondering why this formatting makes sense you might want to check https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/ISO_8601

The real-world hymen is not a membrane at all but mucosal folds. Nothing that needs to be penetrated to have sex. Your average three-year-old girl and a woman who has given birth have mucosal folds that look pretty much the same. Puberty introduces hormones that make it easier to handle penetration, but it does not make any membrane disappear. If we speak about even younger girls than three or four years old, the folds are affected by different hormones and look different, but it is still not a membrane. There exists a rare medical condition called Hymen imperforatus, meaning the cells did not die as intended during the development of the body, so there is no opening. It happens between 1/1000 and 1/10000, depending on what ethnically we are talking about. This is a condition that needs to be fixed before the girl has their first bleeding. Some girls also have this condition partially and might need surgery to be able to insert a tampon freely or have penetrating sex. Rumors about these rare conditions have probably contributed to the myth, but a more likely culprit is that, statistically, quite a lot of girls bleed during their first sex. A funny observation is that English Wikipedia lists numbers like ½ girls suffering from bleeding during their first sex, but when we measure the same here in Sweden, only 1/5 of girls bleed during their first sex. I am not expert enough to tell why this difference exists. Still, even a grown woman will bleed after a lack of foreplay and rough penetration, so maybe it is as simple as societies that are too shy to talk about sex and nudity with their kids will increase the risk that the first sex is a bad experience.

I don’t get why you would need lots of experience to be at ease with your sexuality. If you go with the assumption that the first experience of sex must be bad, then you need lots of sex to compensate, but why is it that the first sex must be bad? You can find many stories with the first sex causing hurt for the girl, and she has a hymen to lose before she can enjoy the sex...how about just scrapping that bad plot device since the hymen does not exist in reality? At the end of the day, a strong female raised in a safe environment has a good chance to succeed in life. Sex is not inherently more difficult than anything else. There are, of course, challenges with all the bad porn out there that virtually urge the watcher how to have bad sex but that doesn’t mean sex must connected with angst and bad experiences.

One way to view it that if you can reason with the creature to make a deal about not fucking/raping you then it is not bestiality. The question if the creature is likely to agree to a deal is not so important, but if you in theory could make such a deal. A large part of bestiality is having an animal that want pleasure and won’t be denied since it is acting out of animal instinct. If you can talk to creature then we are speaking of different kinds of horror. With demons it might be sometimes be borderline cases. The demon might act like an animal or threaten they might be close to lose control to inspire fear into the victim. The demon cat that talk would normally not be bestiality, but I can certainly imagine scenes when the bestiality tag i merited because of what the reader will imagine might happen next even if nothing happens.

Replace “good” with “shy”?

Great that you have found the story again. Sexstories had very good reading numbers, but the moderation was abysmal with some bot thing that make bonkers decisions that you could not challenge. I am very glad to be away from there, but I am glad that you found the story while it was posted there. You might be interested to know that story will feature 13 chapters. I am working on 12 and 13 in parallel to be able to go out with a bang.

As a general rule you should include stuff that is important for the story and cut the rest. Deciding what parts that are important to the reader the experience you aim for is the central task of being an author. In this specific example...if the second seduction is the important thing then you should probably start there, but if you feel the second seduction need to start with a internal monologue about the first seduction it sounds like the first seduction is not just some back story but part of the important stuff. At the end of the day you must start somewhere that is well beyond character-was-born. This means your character will have done tons of non important things before the start of the story. Things that impact the future plot is probably important...but it is not given. For instance, a story about a character suffering from a trauma might work better if you keep the trauma hidden from the reader until events of the story make the character recall the event. Telling the reader about all the important events of the character but keeping them hidden from the character is not a way to make the writing easier.

There are a number of us that write original fiction and post it at https://original.adult-fanfiction.org in case some you have non fanfiction stuff you want to post.