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Sounds like you want to start talking about Chekhov’s Gun... Reading your stuff and trying to avoiding nasty content might not be the best plan. On the other hand, I have read enough by you to know what to expect. Great sex scenes and you sometimes knowing the franchise you are dabbling with… 😉 At the end of the day I also have a reputation to uphold. You might not need reviews to review, but everyone is not as good at doing reviews.

The idea that I should raise the stakes for Maria by making her further enslaved by the dildo came from a reader. This scene when she get the compulsion to masturbate, but cannot act on it since the magic of the dildo has messed a lot with her head seemed like the perfect way to show it for the reader. There are more hypno commands in play than Ronja (or the reader) knows, but there is also a thought that the commands are so effective since Ronja have no real objections to doing the sex. Back in the first chapter she fantasized about Jonathan using hypnosis to exploit her sexually. The reality of that turned out to not be less glamorous than she had imagined, but Ronja is practically the perfect victim for the ghost since she is inclined to like all kind of sex a lot. Yep, seems you are getting it, but are over thinking things. He he, part of humiliation is that somebody must be listening if there are loud sex. Having the girlfriend over and making sure she gets how embarrassing it is with parents listening is bound to make things more peaceful for the parents, at least that is what the mother hopes. It is also worth to mention that it is meant to be general theme that much of the fear about coming out as lesbians is in the girls heads. The people around the girls are all remarkable tolerant compared to what might happen in the real world if girls start to do depraved things. Maybe I should do some short story about such linen ghost costume, that concept has promise. Important for the ghost to stay in character. Just about every place in the story is real. The final chapter will feature some links to real locations of the story for readers that are interested. As for Kristinehovs Malmgård I have never been there for a masquerade, but it is great place for parties. Considering the young men has stumbled over to ads posted by Mikaela it is a continuation from the previous blackmailing. Cannot having her drooling too much over ordinary cocks when she got a obsession with the ivory dildo. Good that you enjoyed it Having the cosplay trigger for once helping the girls was fun. I had to make sure the cosplay trigger also caused some serious troubles. 😉 Ronja put herself on the pill a few chapters back to avoid accidental pregnancies. Sounds promising, I go digging through your stories when I get time.

I totally get the limitations of the flashfic format (one of the reasons I don’t dabble in those myself) so the comment was more meant as encouragement that maybe you should consider revisit the topic. Considering that dog has a male name I think there is a lot of potential for gags. The best joke is of course in the title of the story that you already used. It is good that we live in the english speaking part of the world so Zell loves hot dogs. Having the title of the story as Bretzel or Flavored Bread would not been as fitting. 🙂

I am sure we can manage.

I have not seen that word before, but googling it shows it is a very accurate description. Good that you enjoyed it. There are meant to be more and more situations when Ronja participates kind of willing, but normally with a different outcome than what Ronja would have preferred. I totally agree about the preference for bestiality. She would have gone there eventually no matter what Mark did to satisfy her. Indeed. As for mutual assured destruction I would say that Maria is finally starting to trying to play it smart, but she is not ruthless enough to really win the game. Mikaela have reasons to think that Maria won’t go through with her threats, but the same does not hold with the landlord. He is probably the most decent, but I think Mark is not too bad. He might take advantage of nude hypnotized girls, but besides that he is rather okay. It is also worth to notice that Ronja has been asking to spend time with him after they had sex at the school so he has good reason to believe she have the hots for him. Maybe working with the story has warped my perspective a bit...taking advantage of hypnotized girl is rather nasty when you view it from a real world perspective. 😉 I will looking forward for another thoughtful review from you. Many thanks for the review!

Chapter 13 of 14 has now been posted. Ronja and Maria are utterly controlled by the super natural entity that rules their life, the only comfort if how much they are starting to enjoy the sexual depravity. If you review it the likelihood I review some of your story increases a lot...

I have now posted chapter 10 named The Time of the Prophecy: The Assassination This chapter feature the Entaro siblings in a desperate gamble to prevent the upcoming war. The outcome is mostly combat but along the way they stumble into some sex. Story codes for the chapter MF, Oral, MC, Preg, Inc, Rape, Violence, MiCD Main heroes featuring in the chapter are Fenlyw, Duwlon, Enbon, Cymari, Talinda, Larion, Helian and Ezame.

My take is that brilliant non-linear stories you here talk about get their fame from being good despite not being linear. A possible comparison is the Westworld tv-show season 1 that had a big reveal when you realized what you had been watching. In season 2 they wanted to repeat the trick and made things just as non-linear and in the end it was barely watchable. I have avoided the later seasons like plague. My point is that for every successful non-linear storytelling there are many more trainwreck attempts. Doing non-linear storytelling that manage to capture the reader is seriously difficult.

I have now posted chapter 9 named The Time of the Prophecy: The Cult of Three Flames This chapter feature Duwlon doing his favorite thing and Helian being occupied with rebuilding the sex cult of Three Flames. When Duwlon stumble into trouble there are of course plenty of sexual distractions. Story codes for the chapter FF, MF, MC, Inc, Rape Main heroes featuring in the chapter are Duwlon and Helian with additional appearances of some other characters that will matter to the intrigues.

I have now posted chapter 8 named The Time of the Prophecy: The Eternal Guardians This chapter feature Talinda and Cymari on an adventure close to the elven broder. Two of sisters go to find out why the family have lost contact with the elves and run into some really dangerous situations...and lots of nonconsensual sex. Story codes for the chapter 3Plus, MF, FF, Inc, Rape Violence Main heroes featuring in the chapter are Talinda, Cymari with additional appearances of Larion, Helian, Enbon and Trioni

Great news about the story info editing!

Since the Edit Story Information feature does not seem to have been fixed, it seems I need some assistance. Can you please add the story code Rim to https://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600109197

Chapter 12 has now been posted. Ronja and Maria are discovering that the sexual abuse they are suffering has been taken to the next level. Can starting to share previous secrets help them to carry on? If you review it the likelihood I review some of your story increases a lot...

An example that don’t have the same number of month and day would be that January 13, 1995 would be 1995-01-13 In case you time to spare and is wondering why this formatting makes sense you might want to check https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/ISO_8601

The real-world hymen is not a membrane at all but mucosal folds. Nothing that needs to be penetrated to have sex. Your average three-year-old girl and a woman who has given birth have mucosal folds that look pretty much the same. Puberty introduces hormones that make it easier to handle penetration, but it does not make any membrane disappear. If we speak about even younger girls than three or four years old, the folds are affected by different hormones and look different, but it is still not a membrane. There exists a rare medical condition called Hymen imperforatus, meaning the cells did not die as intended during the development of the body, so there is no opening. It happens between 1/1000 and 1/10000, depending on what ethnically we are talking about. This is a condition that needs to be fixed before the girl has their first bleeding. Some girls also have this condition partially and might need surgery to be able to insert a tampon freely or have penetrating sex. Rumors about these rare conditions have probably contributed to the myth, but a more likely culprit is that, statistically, quite a lot of girls bleed during their first sex. A funny observation is that English Wikipedia lists numbers like ½ girls suffering from bleeding during their first sex, but when we measure the same here in Sweden, only 1/5 of girls bleed during their first sex. I am not expert enough to tell why this difference exists. Still, even a grown woman will bleed after a lack of foreplay and rough penetration, so maybe it is as simple as societies that are too shy to talk about sex and nudity with their kids will increase the risk that the first sex is a bad experience.