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Hi, all. Chapter 10 notes. I’ve introduced the four expanded canon student ghosts. Moaning Myrtle comes from Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets. Duncan Ashe comes from the smartphone video game Harry Potter: Hogwarts Mystery. Simon Talmadge and Willa Weholt come from the smartphone video game Harry Potter: Magic Awakened. In Hogwarts Mystery, which is the period Yankee’s Nephew is currently taking place in, Duncan Ashe is a major NPC in the storyline. In Magic Awakened, both Talmadge and Weholt are ‘one episode’ NPCs. Since they were all present during Hogwarts Mystery and all seven original JKR Books, I decided to involve all four of them in both the (soon to be glossed over) Mystery arc and the more detailed “original JKR” arc. Simon Talmadge was the first of the student ghosts to die, dying in “1825 or so”, which I pinned down to 1826. The game didn’t give him a house, so I put him in Ravenclaw. In game canon, he was a magic painting student, who liked the portraits more than real people. He was the victim of a Gryffindor fifth year girl’s attempted bullying as a third year. He was rescued by Slytherin fourth year Gwydion Idris. In the game, Talmadge not only accepts Idris’s friendship, but develops a serious romantic crush on Idris, even while the two boys make other friends. In the game, Talmadge dies under circumstances where only he knows the facts. The story of his “accidental” death he relates is almost implausible, and the implication is that Talmadge finally made a romantic advance to Idris, was rebuffed, and deliberately killed himself by some means, perhaps actually doing what he claimed to have been doing when he “accidentally” was killed. In Yankee’s Apprentice, I make a couple of changes. First, I make Idris the Wizarding equivalent of real-life poet Lord Byron. Second, I have Simon’s death as a genuine accident, after he and Idris have sex for the first (and only) time. His death was so immediately after their assignation that Talmadge remains as a ghost first to prevent Idris killing himself in guilt, shame, and grief; and second to help Idris hide Talmadge’s dead and obviously just-finished-having-sex body so Idris doesn’t get arrested and put to death. From then, up to the current time in the story, Talmadge was very unsociable. But, this does change here. Willa Weholt was the second of the student ghosts to die, dying in “pre-1908.” I had her die in the spring of 1908. In the game, she’s playing against Gryffindor for the Quidditch Cup. She dove after the snitch in the driving rain on her personally modified Moontrimmer broom. She was so focused on the Snitch that she didn’t realize she was approaching the ground until she crashed into the ground and died, having barely failed to catch the Snitch. I expanded her backstory in two ways. First, I made the 1907-1908 season just a little bit more dramatic. After all, in order to be playing for the Quidditch Cup as Hufflepuff’s only Seeker, she had to have caught the Snitch against both Ravenclaw and Slytherin. After she crashed and died, I had Gryffindor refuse to claim victory. Instead, they deliberately shot forty-nine goals against themselves before one of the Hufflepuff beaters finally caught the Snitch. Gryffindor and Hufflepuff shared both the Quidditch Cup and House Cup that year because of that game, and I had Hufflepuff start sitting next to Gryffindor instead of Slytherin that night, too. Second, I didn’t have Willa haunt the Hogwarts Quidditch Pitch for a long time. Instead, despite being a ghost, she designed the charms work on the Silver Arrow Racing Broom, and later worked for Comet Trading Company as a broomstick designer until retiring in 1968. By having her not become obscessed with catching the Snitch like in the game, I’ve made her a more interesting and useful character. This also allowed her to grow and mature mentally and emotionally. So, while she died at “almost sixteen,” Willa has decades of actual life experience outside of a boarding school, working in industry and supporting her family. “Moaning” Myrtle Elizabeth Warren is practically unchanged from how JKR portrays her later in canon. Here, we meet Myrtle under less trying circumstances for her. David also tells her that he refuses to use her common nickname because it’s a double-entendre that is very insulting to give to a young lady. She points out, though, that he never said that she couldn’t have earned the rude meaning in life. Here, I also base her appearance on the movie rather than the book. And while Myrtle is dressed unflatteringly, she is actually quite attractive, and she would be more obviously so with better care to her personal appearance. She is also a bit of a perv, both in canon and here. Duncan Ashe was the last of the four to die, having only died in 1980. So far, he is more or less unchanged from canon. He’s suspicious of David’s motives for trying to gain his friendship, and not entirely without reason. But while David absolutely has ulterior motives for making and building a friendship with Duncan, David is also sincere in his desire for the friendship of all four student ghosts, which he’s well on the way to cementing by the end of the chapter. We also almost meet two minor characters, both of whom are Simon Talmadge’s friends. They are Kossa the house elf and Gossamer the portrait based on a knight the painter had never actually met.

Chapter ten, “A Ghost of a Chance,” is now posted and available. Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444&chapter=10

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@InvidiaRed, could you please lighten up just a little bit? And, there’s no need to call to Obzedat, either.

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Hi, all. I just updated Chapter 9. I made minor corrections to prose and punctuation to improve the story flow. I also updated the number of known “student Ghosts” to three, and named Simon Talmadge. [No, it’s actually four with Willa Weholt.] He [they] will also appear later in my story. “Reader demand for ‘moar’” isn’t ‘holding Smut hostage for reviews’ per se. If you request it in this thread, and it’s also obvious that you’ve actually read the story, that would be sufficient; no Archive Review required. It might become “Chapter Nine and Three Quarters” if I write and post it here, since without the smut the chapter is already over 14,000 words. While I like both writing and reading long chapters that don’t drag on, not everyone does. Cheers!

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You stole my palindrome! Puritan cleric! Now sit there and shake your head at the monitor, or I shall taunt you a second time! 43039

Hi, all. Chapter 9 (and a couple of other) notes. First, I’ve deliberately “retconned” the “Fat Friar” and “what is a Ghost” questions away from JKR Canon. In my humble and sadly moniless opinion, JKR’s “Ghost definition” is weak sauce or worse. And, her “Fat Friar” origin story is frankly stupid. While a Catholic Friar would almost certainly heal syphilis suffers (JKR said “pox, not smallpox, and “pox” was an alternative name for syphilis,) or any other disease they could heal, they would not pull a rabbit, or anything else out of a Communion Chalice. It just isn’t done. While I’m sure the Church itself had put “witches” and “warlocks” to death, that was done far more often by secular mobs and Protestants as compared to a group of Friars living in a Monastery. And, while if put to death a magical Catholic Friar or Nun could cast the “JKR Weak Sauce Spell,” they would be far less likely than a magical lay person. By their very vocation, they have little to no fear of death. Their faith tells them where they’re going and what it’s like. And it’s the fear of death, not the fear of suffering while they die that powers the JKR Weak Sauce Spell. So, her version of the Fat Friar (originally a word play on “fat fryer” from the cafeteria kitchen) just doesn’t work. My “fanon” has Ghosts as the actual souls of the haunting departed, Sir Nicholas’s agnostic understanding of his own situation not withstanding. In the case of the Fat Friar, he failed to move On not from fear, but from repentance for not Witnessing the Gospel to his fellow Wizards and Witches, since after graduating Hogwarts and awakening his Faith, he never returned to the Wizarding World until after he died. You’re free to disagree. But remember that this is the same JKR who retconned a major character she created as a white English girl Black after nineteen years of that character existing white in canon just because she liked the very skilled and very likeable Black actress who portrayed the adult version of that character in the premier of her play in London. JKR had already created multiple non-white major characters including Angelina Johnson Weasley, and George and Angelina’s kids Fred and Roxanne. Had JKR wanted a non-white lead character before 2016, she’d have had that character, or reams of “editor’s notes” from both Bloomsbury and Scholastic telling her why she couldn’t. More “weak sauce” from JKR. I enjoy playing in her sand-box and I sincerely hope she continues to grow it and prosper while doing so. I’ll also point out politely where I believe she could have done better. Second, while I’m making no promises, this is probably the last chapter where I use any major amounts of “non-English portrayed directly” instead of saying what language the character(s) are speaking and writing it as English in italics. Up to now, the blocks of non-English made more sense creatively portrayed exactly as if you were a fly on the wall listening in, to demonstrate that the character(s) were actually speaking the non-English language they were speaking. You can “Google Translate” to find the English translation even easier than I “Google Translated” to write it. But, from here on, I should have little to no need for this, so you will (at least mostly) receive the more reader-friendly italic English pretending to be Latin, Czech, French, and so on you’ve become used to elsewhere. Professor Snape is only slightly outside of his lane visiting John and Pet Dvorak. But however contentious his relationship was with Pet Dvorak when they were children, he does know her. On that basis, he could potentially and reasonably be expected to set up a conference about his academic concerns about the stepson of someone he’d known for many years. So it isn’t like “invited himself” to a Parent-Teacher conference without any reason at all. On John’s request, Snape presents a slightly different viewpoint of the exploits of Jacob in the Cursed Vaults, along with supplying information John hasn’t been told yet. Duncan Ashe will be important. So will Myrtle Warren, and the relationship the two teen Ghosts have with each other. David is mature for his age, and honest to a fault. So, he says and means exactly what he said, especially since he’d not only had the time to think about the likelihood of Snape visiting, but did in fact expect Snape to visit. I’ve portrayed Harry and Dudley both as being on the very high end of language skills for their ages. But, some kids do learn to talk faster than others, especially if they are talked to and read to routinely and frequently without babbling b.s. “Baby Talk.” I also explained it in the story, along with what happened next. Yes, you can have a multi-lingual toddler. And if you do, you can also have them have a multi-lingual meltdown if they’re angry, hurting, scared, or are for whatever other reason throwing a temper-tantrum. I had originally planned to have Harry and his family actually visit Louisiana on their own when Harry was older. But, I decided that since I’d already had a Shaman available, that I’d just have him take the trash out, and leave Louisiana Tourism for a different story, other than perhaps a quick “concert visit” for the band that Harry may or may not go on. I also decided that for this story, that Harry won’t lose his Parseltongue, where I (will) have him lose it (eventually) in Third Time’s a Soul Bond. Here, it’s easier to have Harry keep the snake talk, and easier to explain his keeping it, too. Especially since Parseltongue isn’t nearly so scarce among the “good guys” in this story. Dumbledore’s explanation is an answer to the fanfiction question “How could a ‘Good’ Dumbledore not do anything about Harry’s scar? Why didn’t he tell Harry? and so on.” I decided to put some more “light near-smut” in after the concert. Could I have written “moar?” Of course. Can I write “moar?” Perhaps. if “reader demand” here suggests a demand for it, I can certainly write “moar” here, in the form of removing the ellipsis and replacing it with the 3-5 thousand words of creamy kinky almost-teen paramour smut. My other two long stories here certainly don’t leave much to the imagination. In the one other place this story appears, I won’t get more explicit. Based on what I’ve actually written so far, I could reduce the story rating at the other place to make the story more easily visible to more readers. However, I’m not being as quick to update “over there” period, since their reader counters are broken, and they’re taking their sweet-assed time in fixing them. Since they are in absolutely no hurry at all to tell me how many people over there are actually reading this story, I’m only in a slightly higher hurry to update or fix typographical errors over there. I will do it eventually, since I do have some readers over there. I have a better idea, or at least a better guess, of how many readers I have here. Thank you to all of you who have read and recommended my story up to this point. Cheers!

Chapter nine, “Visitors and Visitations,” is now posted and available. Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444&chapter=9

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Hi, all. Quick notes for Chapters 7 and 8. Emily Tyler is a canon character from Harry Potter: Hogwarts Mystery. Yes, while I will not write in great detail about that story line, it will go on in the background. Minerva McGonagall at this point in canon is happily married to Elphinstone Urquart, who doesn’t die until 1985. I introduce the OC Athelstan the House Elf here to show the differences between UK and MaCUSA house elves. He will continue to works as a Professor at Hogwarts for some time. My portrayal of Severus Snape will be closer to movie than book canon. Snape is a very complicated character, and not always nice. Other than starting off with Victorian Flower Language, why would Snape ask the three “Stereotypical Snape Questions?” Was he really asking First Years Seventh Year material? Or, was he just testing the students on everything a First Year would have read had they even opened the book, including the forward to the textbook? While not nice, it isn’t quite unreasonable, either. If you actually try to study JKR’s ‘schedules,’ you’ll soon discover that Professor Snape could only cover all of his classes with a Time Turner. In fact, I’d read another fanfiction years ago where Snape mentored Harry, and Harry took over as Potions Professor. That Harry was gifted Snape’s Time Turner so he could keep up with his teaching. A.D.’s increased interest in Potions was a ‘spur of the moment.’ Binns delinda est was foreshadowed quite well if not heavy-handedly. Chapter 8 notes. If you’re not the youngest sibling to go to school, or an only child, then you leave younger siblings behind when you go. Harry has ‘issues’ if people are gone overnight and he can’t figure out why. He’s also gotten used to crawling into bed with David when both were sleeping. So, Aaron rightly expected to have ‘visitors.’ Not all, but many kids are apprehensive about their ‘first day of school,’ particularly if they’ve been raised exclusively by their family. Paul is no different here, nor is his new friend. “Marty Benson” is a ‘fanon’ character who is typically in Ravenclaw and a few years ahead of Harry. I brought him in here and gave him a backstory. If I decide I don’t need him, he can always go “back” to Canada and that school in Massachusetts. Here is where I introduce “the Cabal,” also known as “R.” I have Peregrine as Jacob and Queenine Kowalski’s second son, and the only one of the family who didn’t move or return to the United States after Rappaport’s Law was repealed in 1965. I’ve also named “Jacob’s Sibling” here. Bill and Charlie Weasley will be involved in the Cursed Vaults and the Circle of Khanna, as they are in the game, along with Fred and George. Here, Percy will also be involved, along with the Stock Brothers and all the Hogwarts-attending Dvoraks and Floyds. Other Dvoraks might also become involved. Since he forgot to wear his ‘plot armor’ in Chapter 2, any tasks Peter Pettegrew performed for R will either be done by others or not at all. ...And two deserving working-class boys receive full scholarships to one of the most prestigious K-12 schools in the UK, including daily transportation to and from the school. With a slightly rough start, Paul and his new friends finally get down to starting Kindergarten.

Chapter eight, “School Keeps Starting,” is now posted and available. Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444&chapter=8

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