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Chapter six, “Going to Hogwarts in 1982,” is now posted and available. Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444&chapter=6

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Hi, Desiderius Price, and all. Yes, there truly is a point where you have to write a separate story to tell the backstory of a character in the “other” story. Or two different stories actually intersect for a short space. Those are the “sidecar” equivalents to the prequel and the sequel. Before Disney destroyed Star Wars, they had an entire cottage industry writing those stories to the three, and later the six core canon stories. The last three movies were basically stewed pig feces, though there was the occasional gem to float up, but I digress… Cheers!

42751 – Not to be confused with KMG365, Cheers!

For a character thinking back to an earlier moment in time, those would tend to be short. If the character is relating an incident that happened to them before the “main” time of the story itself, or relating an incident through their own perspective that did not happen in the “view” of the main story perspective to one or more of the “main” characters, they can be far longer. When doing this “longer” flashback, you can also “come up for air” in the “present moment” of the story to get reactions from the characters being told or reading the story. And in some cases, you might need to. Cheers!

Perhaps the OP doesn’t realize that they have to click on the “three stacked hash” icon in the top left of the archives home screen and select “archives” from the options revealed then in order to even get to the categories?

Something interesting has percolated up from the past. Hmm… The most important thing in my personal opinion when writing a flashback is this: Never use the actual word “flashback,” unless your protagonist is a psychedelic drug user who is reminiscing or remembering when they were having either more or less “flashbacks” to suffer from. Otherwise, the length or shortness of a flashback isn’t entirely a fixed quantity, at least in my opinion. But, like anything else in creative writing for an audience, it does has its place, and its limits.

Chapter five has been revised as “Music, Romance, Magic, and Transitions.” The story link is the same. Beyond correcting minor errors, two sections have been added, so that Chapter six can start with the 1982 Hogwarts Express run. I’ve also edited chapters 1-4. A secondary character who was previously killed pre-story is now alive, although he won’t really be seen until later, since he’s a fourth year when Harry starts Hogwarts. Thanks in advance for reading.

Hi, Desiderius Price and all. Perhaps the terms “Primary and Secondary Characters” is more fitting here. The “classic Riverdale” cohort are all juniors in High School from what I remember, and I’m far from the only author here with more “curiously age-challenged” characters. “Going down the line” was what I was referring to. Lots of people go “railfanning.” Very few want to read the manifest in the lead locomotive that was pulling the train… ...Off topic, but I can’t resist. Most women prefer sailing and yachting over railfanning, when given only those two choices for a recreational activity. I’m told the reason is that no woman has ever had her reputation destroyed for pulling a boat. Ducking and running...

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Hi, Deadman and all. This isn’t necessarily a problem, per se. If for example you are trying to stress how generous your main character is with their physical affections, you might actually stress the genericness or anonymity of their paramours. “Just sayin’” Cheers!

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Hi, all. Chapter 5 notes. In Riding the Lincoln Way, “The Treasures” will first achieve fame in late September of 1982. Here, they’ve achieved in May, and their second sellout concert is at the Barbican Center, and is also broadcast live on BBC One Television. Next comes the romance. In the “movie version” of this story, “Love Theme from The Untouchables” is now the “love theme” here. Who will be Al Capone to David Dvorak’s Elliot Ness? It won’t be Voldemort, but who? Some things happen the same, but differently. A certain Pink Toad makes an off-camera appearance, but her maledictions are foiled here.

Chapter five, “Music, Romance, and Magic,” is now posted and available. Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444&chapter=5

Hi, all. Chapter 4 notes. Towards the end of Chapter 3, Rita Skeeter got her clock maintained by John’s sister-in-law Hannah. In real life, if the sister-in-law of a protected diplomatic service employee cold-cocks a reporter at a public event such as a press conference, it’s a serious diplomatic incident. It’s a serious diplomatic incident here, too. John also had to register his and his children’s wands with MaCUSA, report their magical school enrollments, and pay both MaCUSA and USA import duties. Finally, in my ‘fanon,’ wands made with cherry wood are dangerous enough beyond the danger any wand poses that MaCUSA actually regulates them strictly, as well as differently than other wands. So, John takes everybody except for the three Weasleys to the MaCUSA side to take care of his other business, and talk to both the MaCUSA and USA Deputy Chiefs of Mission and report the serious diplomatic incident. There are very few things in real life that can defuse a serious diplomatic incident without seeing you and your entire family declared “persona non gratia,” or PNGed and literally stuffed on the very next flight home; or worse yet see the person involved prosecuted by the host country. One of those things is having the very reporter your sister in law assaulted get caught in the act of having evaded Embassy Security and spied upon classified national security conversations. And guess what Rita did? They are at the Embassy long enough that Skeeter’s capture in the middle of the Embassy has already made the front page of the evening Daily Prophet. In the next section, some wizarding eleven-year-olds can quote Kipling in context of their own lives. A “fanon” that I originally borrowed with some credit from a great fanfic author gets borrowed again here, but from a different perspective, and at a time closer to when it happened. Arthur Weasley receives some unsolicited parenting advice, but ends up accepting it. Ron Weasley still isn’t a time traveler here. Aaron ends up getting a wand. Unlike Charlie, he’s taking the “early wand” business seriously. A grave is visited and a prayer is sung. David and Aaron talk to each other more or less like the eleven-year-old and eight-year-old boys they currently are. Cheers!

Chapter four, “Problems, Solutions, and Dilemmas,” is now posted and available. Several corrections to locations were made, but nothing that changed the plot. Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444&chapter=4

Hi, @BronxWench and all. I’ve yet to hear of a story being hidden or worse for apostrophes. Your help on the rating and content tags has already shown up. Many grateful thanks. Cheers!

Hi, @WillowDarkling and all. I posted my Harry Potter story, The Yankee’s Nephew and the Philosopher’s Stone. I now realize that I will need to change both the rating and content tags, since I unknowingly blew the “one chance” when starting the story. If you can change them, I would ask they be changed to the following: Change the rating from SFW to Adult+ Nothing explicitly goes past the current rating yet, that I’m aware of, but that very well may change even if the actions themselves happen off-camera. Remove the ‘NoSex’ tag. This tag has not been broken yet. That could change. Add the Minor1 and Minor2 tags. This lack of tags hasn’t been broken yet. However both members of one protagonist couple are both eleven to twelve, and they are the ones most likely to “go pre-marital” as well as the ones to most likely “go pre-marital” on camera. The older “not moved out” couples could potentially go “pre-marital” as well, especially if the “most likely” couple does, but they would almost certainly be “off-camera” even if the consequences of their acts are openly mentioned in the text. Add both the “MF” and “MM” tags. MF would explain itself. I haven’t “committed hard” to a on-camera MM pairing beyond merely mentioning its existence, but there’s already one adult MM relationship explicitly out there, even if it hasn’t been “explicitly shown.” This relationship is also a “known triangle,” but only that and not a full-on 3Plus. A “junior known triangle” if not a “junior 3Plus” is also possible, but only possible. I honestly haven’t written the details out far enough to have decided whether the story would drive such a relationship here. If you have any “interim” suggestions as an alternative until authors can change ratings and tags, please let me know. Thanks in advance for your time and help.

“Embassies, Houses, Cars, and Tags.” Hi, all. I just had to do some quick “corrections,” and I’l also explain about cars and driving in this story. I will be asking the Archive Moderators to change the rating to “Adult +” and change some content flags after I post this entry. While nothing “flaggy” has been posted yet, the story is heading to the point where it might happen. Although it won’t be covered in anywhere near the detail of Harry Potter’s time at Hogwarts, we will be reading about Bill, Charlie, and Percy Weasley’s pre-1991-1992 Hogwarts careers, as well as the Hogwarts-bound OCs. So some content tags are appropriate, especially since one of the OCs is already dating. And, even in JKR Canon, the content tag “MiCD” is warranted, since Professor Quirell definitely does not leave the “Mirror Room” under his own power. Since that part of the Archive Database is still locked down for security reasons, the authors only get one chance to set the flags themselves; and have to ask the moderators to do it for them afterwards. The flags that appear don’t guarantee any “creamy porny goodness,” especially in a story that is not porn-driven, but incidents that might happen or come close to happening will be covered by the appropriate tags, even if it’s only a few paragraphs in a very large story. So, if you want to read a lot of Dvorak Sex Scenes, you should change channels over to “Originals” and read Riding the Lincoln Way. As an American writing Harry Potter Fanfiction, you would rightly expect me to know that the US Embassy moved from Grosvenor Square to Nine Elms in Wadsworth to some controversy in 2018. I didn’t, sorry. I have fixed this, and also changed the relevant train station from Waterloo to Vauxhall. At least it was on the same train line, even you would take the bus from Vauxhall to Grosvenor Square instead of the tube from Waterloo to Nine Elms. I also managed to find Steve VanderArk’s wonderful map of the Little Whinging development. Looking at it, I changed the house numbers for Arabella Figg’s house and the house Frank Floyd purchases. Even with the original house numbers I’ve chosen, I’ve been going with the movie/fanon location having Figg directly across the street from Number Four Privet Drive, which according to VanderArk would be Number Seven. I had Frank buy Number Two, since it is next door to Number Four. So, the west side of Privet Drive will be Number 2 (Frank Floyd Guest House,) Number Four (Harry Potter, Pet Dvorak, et al,) Number Six (a long-suffering family living between the “Jolly Red Yankee Giant” and “Dog-Shit City,” and Number Eight (Vernon, Petunia, Dudley, and often Marjorie Dursley with her ill-behaved dogs.) The family in Number Six might sell to a Milkman and his family who managed to win the lottery in the early ‘90s, but that is many chapters away if it happens at all. Ashford, Surrey, is a “common fan consensus” for the location of Little Whinging, though not absolute. I decided to go with it, and I’m staying with it. Why? Because Ashford is more or less underneath the flightpath for Heathrow Airport. The sound deadening installed in all new construction homes in this area because of one of the world’s busiest airports is also perfect for The Treasures to work out of the basement of Number Two without bothering the neighbors with the noise from their rehearsal and practice sessions. Finally, the “cars.” The Austin FX-4 was the iteration of the “London Taxi” being built that year. As will soon be mentioned starting with Chapter 4, both the brand-new one John bought for himself and the late-model one he bought to loan “extra-long-term” to Remus Lupin have “diplomatic plates” on them. “Diplomatic” registration plates are issued by many countries, including both the UK and the United States for foreign diplomats driving in their countries. While these plates are not a “get-out-of-jail-free” card, cars with diplomatic plates are given much less “intense” traffic and parking law enforcement when compared to the “ordinary” citizens of the host country. While John is a civil service employee, he is also high enough on the totem pole that he and his American-born children are in the UK under Diplomatic Passports, and John’s cars all have diplomatic plates. Only Harry himself is not directly given diplomatic protection, since he was born in the UK to two native UK Citizens. But, as John and Pet’s adopted son, he has some diplomatic protections. Petunia also has some diplomatic protection being John’s husband, but without renouncing her UK Citizenship, that protection is less than John has. But, back to the cars. John brought his ‘67 Ford over from the US. He had to title and register it in the UK. It has diplomatic plates. He also bought Petunia a new (then) Rolls-Royce Silver Wraith II, since she didn’t like and couldn’t yet legally drive either of John’s two cars It has diplomatic plates. Any other car or motorcycle John owns and drives in the UK will also get diplomatic plates. Frank Floyd benefited from a game of diplomatic one-upsmanship between MaCUSA and the UK, so his Phantom V, a coach-built chauffeur driven limousine, has diplomatic plates, too. He will also be shown later to lawfully have a diplomatic passport, partly but not entirely from the same incident that got him his diplomatic plates. In the UK, if you get your driving license with a manual transmission, you can drive any passenger car. If you get your driving license in a car with an automatic transmission, you can’t legally drive a car with a manual transmission without passing and additional test to get the “automatic only” restriction removed from your driving license. So, John had to get Petunia something with an automatic transmission, since that’s all she was licensed for then. He went with the Silver Wraith II because he could afford to pay cash easily and casually for it, and because it was a big car that would only take two trips instead of three or four if she had to get all the kids somewhere by herself. The Silver Wraith II was also a focal point of one of the many “canon busters” here. According to JKR, Vernon Dursley’s first (off-camera) meeting with James and Lilly Potter started out similarly to what I actually portrayed in Chapter 1. In JKR Canon, Vernon bragged about whatever high-end luxury he and Petunia had just bought. James in turn bragged about his racing broom. But, having a chip on his shoulder, plus not being particularly observant or knowing anything about motorcycles, Vernon believed that the Nimbus 1200 was priced like a Muggle broom, rather than Ducati 900 SS which was its Muggle equivalent. When James stated that he “didn’t work,” when combined with bragging about a broom, Vernon assumed that James was not only (gasp!) a “magical weirdo,” but that he was also on the dole. Here, with just a little help from Sirius Black, things happened differently. First, John did not have a chip on his shoulder. He was actually trying to get Petunia and Lilly to reconcile, so he wasn’t going to start a war with James Potter if he could possibly help it. Second, since he worked at the Embassy for both the United States and MaCUSA, he had access to the Wizard World equivalent of “Who’s Who in the UK.” Third, he likes Muggle motorcycles, and understood that brooms, especially racing brooms were the Wizarding World equivalent. So, John already knew that James was a “trust fund baby,” and not on the dole. Second, his mention of the Silver Wraith II was made more in commiseration with James, saying how far he was already going for his Evans girl. So, after “kvetching” to James that he’d bought his own wife the most expensive “showroom” car in the UK, and she still found fault with it, James bragged about buying himself a magical Ducati. John was not happy with James, but instead of thinking “you silly wastrel,” he was more thinking “you selfish jerk!” So, John made the quip about the “bang-zoom blessings.” John grew up in the 1950s, when Jackie Gleason’s hit television series The Honeymooners was still first-run and “bang, Zoom!” was Ralph Kramden’s trademark phrase of displeasure towards his wife Alice. Sirius, rightly sensing the tension, does his brother Prongs a solid by making his counter-quip, finally braking the ice. “Doctor Jules Montiner” is a real person, and would actually be a real-live analog to Fleamont Potter, on top of being a Chicago native. The Jules Montiner company, most famous for their Stopette antiperspirant, also made Finesse shampoo. Montiner sold his company to Helene Curtis in 1956. Stopette was eventually discontinued, but the Finesse shampoo line is still being made. Montiner’s company also sponsored the then very popular television game show What’s My Line, which John would have also watched as a teenager. Finally, even in Riding the Lincoln Way, John is much better at lawfully selling other people’s stuff than he is his own. So, every house or vehicle John has ever come in contact with is either still his, or held in trust for the kid who’s supposed to Inherit it; and all of it is being kept in perfect condition. Tim owns a pair of totally rebuilt six-flats in Mokena, Saria owns a house in Morris, Pixie owns two houses in Will County, and so on – on top of Orchard Municipal Flight Services belonging to David and Aaron.

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