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Hi, @BronxWench and all. Third Time’s a Soul Bond is a “fix-it,” time-travel, etc. Delores Umbridge “Darwins out” in Chapter 1. However, The Yankee’s Nephew and the Philosopher’s Stone, which might get a title change if I run the entire “HP Hogwarts Experience” into the one story, is actually a crossover between my original story Riding the Lincoln Way, plus every JKR and licensee story that takes place between 1975-2021. I’ve already “gotten rid of” ten major Lincoln Way characters, plus Peter Pettegrew, who is a key minor character in Hogwarts Mystery, above and beyond what he won’t be around to do when Harry finally makes it to school. I’m also only up to Chapter 11 on Yankee’s Nephew, and Harry isn’t quite three years old. I did manage to ‘save’ three Lincoln Way characters who in Lincoln Way died off-screen. Third Time has the MiCD tag. I forgot to (have added by you when you fixed it last time) either MiCD or MCD to Yankee’s Nephew. Thanks in advance for your thoughts, and assistance.

Hi, Deadman and all. That is a brilliant question, and I’m sure that you aren’t the only one who needs to know. While I haven’t “killed off” any of the Golden Trio in any of my HP crossovers, I have killed off a villain or few ‘early’ in both of the big ones. And, I might even un-kill a ghost or few before I’m done, too. @BronxWench? Thanks in advance.

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Hi, @Deadman, @Desiderius Price, and all. I would have to agree with Desiderius more, though I also see your point. We’ve been talking more about the explicitness of sex, sexuality, and sexual tension versus whether to have any “s, s, and st” at all. There are some stories where “s, s, and st” just don’t belong. There are others where you can’t possibly avoid at least some of that. But, how explicit do you want or feel the need to get? In “Star Wars Episode Two,” the screen writers don’t show what Annikin Skywalker does to the Tuskan Raiders. Instead, they have a deeply traumatized Annikin relate what he did to them to Padme, in the very scene after they show him cut his way out of the tent where he held his mother while she died. In that case, the violence was made even more real by not being directly shown to the viewer. In the case of your (potential if not already written) stories, you don’t need to remove, and probably should keep the “lead-up” to the sex scenes, and even include the sex participant’s internal thoughts about their circumstances, however explicitly you describe their assignations. This would, if you do it right, increase both the eroticism and drama of each scene, whether you got to near-clinical explicitness about ‘how each of her pubic hairs curled differently when anointed with the dew of their passion,’ or how he was packing ‘double-Peroni-Bologna that anointed her between her belly button and sternum before he planted it vigorously in...’ or simply faded to black while they kissed passionately even while unfastening each other’s belts and jeans. Explicit sex without any explanation or leading tension is not just pornography, it’s typically mediocre pornography at best, even in print. So, Elliot and Karen started randomly and explicitly copulating on the courthouse steps. Okay, why did they start doing that where and when they did? If you try to answer that question, then you’ve bridged the gap between the ‘wank-o-thon’ and an actual story. If you do it well, people will want to read it. Or, if you’re only going for the ‘wank-o-thon’ readers, leave the ‘excess’ prose in the bit bucket of your word processor of choice. Cheers!

Hi, all. I hope that it was just a typo, with 20-30 pages of “non story.” With a “typical” word count of roughly 220 words on a “page,” that would be almost five thousand words of nothing. @Desiderius Price, when I’m talking “clean vs dirty,” I’m also describing the detail. in once scene of Yankee’s Nephew, I have two characters play strip poker, start a relatively tame BDSM spanking, and then quit and talk about what ‘she’ wants to do with ‘him’ instead before fading to black. I also join several couples after the act, wearing “only each other.” This hasn’t been ‘scandalous’ since the 1950s or so in the United States. In a “dirty” story, I leave almost nothing to the reader’s imagination. If I wrote the @GeorgeGlass inspired short story I’m Your Ass, I could easily write it either ‘no-sex,’ or a very explicit M/M M/F Pegging story, especially since Amir has a nightstick. Cheers!

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Hi, all. Chapter 14, “A Spell in Time,” is now posted and available. Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600099686&chapter=14

Hi, Deadman and all. Just my “two-cent’s worth,” it would depend on whether or not the story itself interested me, and was well-written. There are “no-sex” stories here, and unless they’re total trash, they do get readers. Likewise, even if you start the very first paragraph of Chapter 1 with the “adult-rated” stuff, if a story is poorly written, or just not something I’m interested in, then I won’t read it. You are the author, and you probably know where the porn belongs in your story. The reader, in turn, will decide if you’ve got it right. But, if the story is well-written, and the premise of the story itself is interesting to the reader, then they’ll usually agree with you. Unlike some fiction sites, this one only allows adults, so there isn’t as much of a likelihood of “scaring the children.” Posting “clean and dirty” or “dirty and dirtier” versions of a story can be a great idea for all sorts of reasons. But because we only allow adults here, it doesn’t seem to be done as much because of that. Agreed. I have no idea whether someone else’s “page count” story is single-spaced, double-spaced, or something else. And, what size is their page in the first place? What size is their font? Word count (five characters plus one space equals one word) is used commonly enough that you can get some idea of what you’re about to be looking at. Good luck with whatever you decide.

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Hi, all. Chapter 10 notes. I’ve introduced the four expanded canon student ghosts. Moaning Myrtle comes from Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets. Duncan Ashe comes from the smartphone video game Harry Potter: Hogwarts Mystery. Simon Talmadge and Willa Weholt come from the smartphone video game Harry Potter: Magic Awakened. In Hogwarts Mystery, which is the period Yankee’s Nephew is currently taking place in, Duncan Ashe is a major NPC in the storyline. In Magic Awakened, both Talmadge and Weholt are ‘one episode’ NPCs. Since they were all present during Hogwarts Mystery and all seven original JKR Books, I decided to involve all four of them in both the (soon to be glossed over) Mystery arc and the more detailed “original JKR” arc. Simon Talmadge was the first of the student ghosts to die, dying in “1825 or so”, which I pinned down to 1826. The game didn’t give him a house, so I put him in Ravenclaw. In game canon, he was a magic painting student, who liked the portraits more than real people. He was the victim of a Gryffindor fifth year girl’s attempted bullying as a third year. He was rescued by Slytherin fourth year Gwydion Idris. In the game, Talmadge not only accepts Idris’s friendship, but develops a serious romantic crush on Idris, even while the two boys make other friends. In the game, Talmadge dies under circumstances where only he knows the facts. The story of his “accidental” death he relates is almost implausible, and the implication is that Talmadge finally made a romantic advance to Idris, was rebuffed, and deliberately killed himself by some means, perhaps actually doing what he claimed to have been doing when he “accidentally” was killed. In Yankee’s Apprentice, I make a couple of changes. First, I make Idris the Wizarding equivalent of real-life poet Lord Byron. Second, I have Simon’s death as a genuine accident, after he and Idris have sex for the first (and only) time. His death was so immediately after their assignation that Talmadge remains as a ghost first to prevent Idris killing himself in guilt, shame, and grief; and second to help Idris hide Talmadge’s dead and obviously just-finished-having-sex body so Idris doesn’t get arrested and put to death. From then, up to the current time in the story, Talmadge was very unsociable. But, this does change here. Willa Weholt was the second of the student ghosts to die, dying in “pre-1908.” I had her die in the spring of 1908. In the game, she’s playing against Gryffindor for the Quidditch Cup. She dove after the snitch in the driving rain on her personally modified Moontrimmer broom. She was so focused on the Snitch that she didn’t realize she was approaching the ground until she crashed into the ground and died, having barely failed to catch the Snitch. I expanded her backstory in two ways. First, I made the 1907-1908 season just a little bit more dramatic. After all, in order to be playing for the Quidditch Cup as Hufflepuff’s only Seeker, she had to have caught the Snitch against both Ravenclaw and Slytherin. After she crashed and died, I had Gryffindor refuse to claim victory. Instead, they deliberately shot forty-nine goals against themselves before one of the Hufflepuff beaters finally caught the Snitch. Gryffindor and Hufflepuff shared both the Quidditch Cup and House Cup that year because of that game, and I had Hufflepuff start sitting next to Gryffindor instead of Slytherin that night, too. Second, I didn’t have Willa haunt the Hogwarts Quidditch Pitch for a long time. Instead, despite being a ghost, she designed the charms work on the Silver Arrow Racing Broom, and later worked for Comet Trading Company as a broomstick designer until retiring in 1968. By having her not become obscessed with catching the Snitch like in the game, I’ve made her a more interesting and useful character. This also allowed her to grow and mature mentally and emotionally. So, while she died at “almost sixteen,” Willa has decades of actual life experience outside of a boarding school, working in industry and supporting her family. “Moaning” Myrtle Elizabeth Warren is practically unchanged from how JKR portrays her later in canon. Here, we meet Myrtle under less trying circumstances for her. David also tells her that he refuses to use her common nickname because it’s a double-entendre that is very insulting to give to a young lady. She points out, though, that he never said that she couldn’t have earned the rude meaning in life. Here, I also base her appearance on the movie rather than the book. And while Myrtle is dressed unflatteringly, she is actually quite attractive, and she would be more obviously so with better care to her personal appearance. She is also a bit of a perv, both in canon and here. Duncan Ashe was the last of the four to die, having only died in 1980. So far, he is more or less unchanged from canon. He’s suspicious of David’s motives for trying to gain his friendship, and not entirely without reason. But while David absolutely has ulterior motives for making and building a friendship with Duncan, David is also sincere in his desire for the friendship of all four student ghosts, which he’s well on the way to cementing by the end of the chapter. We also almost meet two minor characters, both of whom are Simon Talmadge’s friends. They are Kossa the house elf and Gossamer the portrait based on a knight the painter had never actually met.

Chapter ten, “A Ghost of a Chance,” is now posted and available. Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444&chapter=10

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