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Hi, all. I suppose I can post some chapter notes in this thread beyond any review answers, starting with Chapter 1. First, the openly portrayed sexuality, especially the bisexuality and incest from Riding the Lincoln Way won’t be happening here. The circumstances that caused those particular relationship quirks won’t happen, so the gay incest won’t happen either. The “possible” relationships of the older Dvorak children will happen, but it will be mostly off-camera and in a much more “family-friendly” manner. “The Treasures” will still form and become highly successful, although with at least some different mentors and “discoverers.” A few other “changes” happened pre-story here, starting with Rick Dvorak/Ricardo Floyd’s asthma being discovered much later, seeing Rick medically discharged from the Army as a CW2 on the tail end of his second combat tour as an Army Helicopter Pilot in Vietnam. So several key pre-story plot points from Lincoln either happened completely differently in Yankee Nephew, or didn’t happen at all. John and Catherine actually did marry, and whatever parenting issues she had in Lincoln she didn’t have here. The various pre-story tragedies here were the only way I could see to believably have John taking care of the children he was taking care of when he met Petunia Evans, as well as explaining how a very talented new car salesmen from near Chicago would be working in the UK. Later chapters will reveal more, including why John and Catherine only had the two boys together in this story, even though the remained together much longer than they did in Lincoln. As much as possible, I’m trying to stick close to the canon personality traits of most of the main characters as I understand them, at least to start off. But, since this (like pretty much all HP Hogwarts Fanfiction) is an alternate universe, and the whole point of having John and Petunia marry is to change things. Dudley John Dvorak will not be a “Magic Dudley Dursley.” Dudley Dursley does exist with a different mother, and will be a minor annoying Muggle character in this story, since Vernon and Petunia Dursley will remain in the same primary school district as John and Petunia Dvorak. Likewise, the meeting of Albus Dumbledore and Minerva McGonagall was different than in canon, and I might have to re-write it further. The first of JKR’s multiple plot holes in canon shows up here, and I’ve at least tried to close it up a bit. I might end up re-writing it further, since the PS working relationship Dumbledore and McGonagall have doesn’t seem to make sense in light of the later books. As far as I can tell in canon, Sirius Black didn’t catch Peter Pettigrew until after Harry was placed with the Dursleys, although he probably didn’t know that Harry was there. As for Dumbledore’s motivations, I believe that while Dumbledore might have believed Sirius innocent of betraying the Potters, that he was certain Sirius killed Pettigrew, and twelve innocent bystanders besides, and that Pettigrew as truly dead. In fact, even in canon, Dumbledore doesn’t ‘warm up’ to Black until after he discovers for certain that Peter Pettigrew murdered the Muggle bystanders to frame Sirius and fake his own death. By that time, Fudge was too personally invested, and well as too thoroughly bribed to give Sirius the trial (and exoneration) he rightly should have had. While this may change here, Sirius won’t become Harry’s custodial guardian. The only reason in canon that Sirius Black was a desirable custodial guardian for Harry was that Vernon and Petunia Dursley were a pair of abusive oxygen thieves. John and Petunia Dvorak are not and will not be like that. With a pair of loving sane parents and several siblings rather than a pair of neurotic abusive relatives and a bullying cousin, Harry wouldn’t dream of moving in with Sirius Black, even if he’s freed. While Harry will grow up knowing about the Wizarding World, he won’t be raised in the Wizarding World. He will be firmly planted in both worlds, at least until he starts Hogwarts. Even then, he will know about both the Muggle and Wizarding world. He will remain Harry Potter even while considering John and Petunia parents rather than aunt and uncle. He will only ever be raised with the idea that Lilly set a booby-trap on him, not just to protect him with her love, but to take Voldemort out. He will see Lilly Potter as a warrior and defender, and hope to live up to her example rather than buy into any of the “Boy Who Lived” hype in the Wizarding world. He will have wizard and witch friends before attending Hogwarts, and they will quickly take up the same mindset. Finally, while Harry won’t wear “Dudley’s cast-offs,” he won’t run around wearing new clothing all the time, either. In canon, the Dursleys dressed Harry in Dudley’s old clothes because they didn’t fit, were already worn out, and to humiliate Harry just as much as it was to avoid spending any money on Harry. Here, Harry won’t wear Dudley Dvorak’s cast-offs because they are just more than a month apart in age, and Dudley’s clothes won’t fit Harry. While Dudley Dvorak won’t be a lard-ass, he will actually be ‘big-boned’ as well as muscular for his age. But, John Dvorak is a tightwad at times, and he raises all of his children to be the same way. So, while Harry won’t be wearing garbage, he will dress more like Ron Weasley than Draco Malfoy, despite the Dvoraks being even wealthier than the canon Dursleys. In fact, I found “another Petunia” for Vernon just so I could show what a total asshole he was, even while Petunia found someone to inspire her to become a much better person than she was in canon. Thanks.

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Hi, all. For what it’s worth, I just copy and paste from MS Word into the AFF editor box. Sometimes, I have to fix a paragraph here or there, but nothing like you’re going through. Good luck.

Hi, all. On the off chance anyone reviews The Yankee’s Nephew and the Philosopher’s Stone, this is the review thread. This story is completely separate from my other HP stories on this site. In fact, with possible violence and mild swearing, this story should be SFW. I “borrowed” some characters from my original fiction story, changed them slightly, and sent them off to merry old England. So, instead of going to work for Grunnings Drills and marrying Vernon Dursley, Petunia Evens goes to work for the US State Department and marries John Dvorak, and is mostly reconciled with her younger sister before Lilly Potter is murdered in Godric’s Hollow. Her firstborn child, and the other four she eventually has, are magical children, rather than only-child Dudley Dursley. Reviews are not common here, but most authors do appreciate well reasoned ones. Should this story receive well-reasoned reviews, I’ll reply to them here. Thanks.

Author: Wilde Guess Title: The Yankee’s Nephew and the Philosopher’s Stone Summary: What if Petunia Evans went to work for the US Embassy instead of Grunnings Drills? I borrowed a few characters from my original story here, changed them slightly, and put them into the HP Universe to replace Vernon Dursley. Harry will grow up in a different environment, with exposure to magic in the Muggle world. Feedback: Feedback and constructive criticism welcome. Fandom: Harry Potter universe, with later JKR works considered where appropriate. Pairing: None for this story, the “main” focus characters are eleven year olds with no “unusual” circumstances to cause precocious romance. Warnings: Some violence and light cursing possible, but SFW. Solo story or chaptered story: Chaptered story. This story will end at the same point as the canon HP&PS. URL: https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444 Review Reply thread: https://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/topic/73345-the-yankees-nephew-and-the-philosophers-stone-review-thread/

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Chapter 48, “Families and Courts,” is uploaded and available.

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Chapter 47, “All That Jazz, and a New Cousin?” is uploaded and available.

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Hi, Deadman and all. Beyond what GeorgeGlass and Desiderius Price wrote, I would add that you should try to go more for “telling the story” instead of “telling about the story.” I.E. show the “action” directly as much as possible without making the story too unwieldy for either your readers or yourself. You could briefly describe the first seduction as the “intro,” and have the protagonist flashback and compare “key” parts of the second seduction to the first, comparing the two. Cheers!

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Hi, InvidiaRed I would be interested in reading Doctor McCoy’s “Medical Officer’s Log,” myself. Damnit, Jim! I’m a Doctor, not a… Oh fuck, I am a doctor! Okay, whip it out, and let’s see what you’ve caught this week… Cheers!

Hi, GeorgeGlass. By itself, no. While the spaceships from the Star Trek universe keep Captain’s and Ship’s Logs, other ships of notable size also keep Ship’s Logs, and the ship’s Captain might also keep a “Captain’s Log” or journal/diary of personal observations he or she doesn’t wish to keep in the main ship’s log. Seeing the erotica/pornographic bent of this site, I would also assume that the “Captain” just might be well-endowed (or tragically not endowed,) and was (at least trying) to get “busy.” Cheers!

That’s such a fun combination. Cheers!

Hello, all. Molly Weasley is reincarnated as Cersi Lannister. She is absolutely faithful to Robert Baratheon. She gives birth to at least three black-haired and blue-eyed children. She decides that the only thing worse than a bad king is a bad father, and Robert is both. So, she has him killed. Thanks in advance.

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