Desiderius Price

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Oh, that doesn’t seem as bad as I had imagined. Pretty much envisioning what you had before, and writing it in full. (fyi, my *first* potter fanfic reads much closer to that first example, which is why it’s in need of revision, but I’m limiting my active projects.)

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On my potter fanfic, I went to reread that first chapter, and now I’m rewriting the whole bloody story. So, it’s definitely a pandora’s box to revisit! However, it’s a much better story now too, so there’s that. In your case, it’s definitely a challenge. Mesh it with chapter two as possible, don’t be afraid to move things around into other chapters as warranted.

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Even the “Neverending Story” had an ending… Me? I usually have a goal already in mind, an ending, so once I reach it, I reach it. Sometimes I mull over the exact cut-point… like that Halloween story, do I show Lana’s next action as a teaser, or do I save it as an epigraph to Toby’s story?

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I know… call it “Fifty Shades of Earl Gray!” A complete treatise on brewing tea.

Hmmm…. could be a half chapter on the brewing process twice a chapter….Or “they fixed themselves another cup of tea”… down to “she sipped her tea” and presume the MC simply had an auto-refilling cup. Gets me thinking, that with some lithium batteries. As tea leaves can be used more or less indefinitely, need a vape pen like device, with condensation coils to convert the humidity into water, boils that water, seeping it through those tea leaves, and make it ready for sipping. Then your MC never has to brew another cup, simply replace those leaves and batteries every so often!

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Never quite got the knack for tea taste… In a pinch, Earl Gray, black & hot, however, there’s something to be said about Raspberry tea.

Fade-to-black is typically how I do it in my CLEANER version of my potter fanfic. Meant there was one scene where Hermione (&Ron) woke up on the kitchen floor the morning after to her Mother hovering over them skipping all the selacious details. Whereas the explicit version had them

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I shake it up… most of my scenes tend to be quick. Vary the location, the technique, the pairing, & don’t forget props, along with the main thread of the story too. My Harry in my Potter fanfic has a new wrinkle… so he’s gotta be careful to not be too overt with it.