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8.3: Goodbye

8.2: Survival up and running!

Moving on! 8.1! There is a 7.1, by the way so don’t forget about that chapter!

Just wanted to make a small note that I switched the genre of this story from Scifi to Romance. While the location and the characters make it qualify for Science Fiction, the actual plot does not. I learned this from a recent review that puzzled me as to why they reviewed in a certain way. Moderators and readers: if you feel that it should remain Science Fiction, by all means, let me know.

6.1: Phone Home

Chapter 5.3

Chapter 5.2 up and running!

Chapter 5.1 (ha, I remembered this time)

http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600108508 I won’t lie; I’ve lost track of what chapter this is! What’s important is that I’ve updated and you might have to back track because my lame brain forgot to update this post...

Hi, again. Sorry I took so long to review this again (...RL sucks at times...And maybe me not reviewing is a good thing? lol), but, V-IX work quite well and I’ll try to keep it short . I like the description of Enuh and his introduction; it was well done and he’s not what I expected, though that’s a good thing. The image you painted of the ship, too, is frigging awesome and, at least from my visualization, I’m in agreement with Malik at first ‘sight’. Well done on the aliens within nine, too. And the interactions were interesting and expanded the potential competitors. (I do like your differences in cultures and, indeed, having Lindsay communicate the idea of marriage. It’s a great scene.) I’m not sure what to make of Bradley in Five, since he seems to be flirting with her. I’m not sure if he’s just ignoring Lindsay’s ring or maybe she’s not wearing them? I do like how she knows she’s not leaving with Keith’s rough sigh, too, that got a laugh. Lol. The opening section in six was nice and lends credence to the developing relationships between the group. (Lindsay does like her sarcasm towards Keith, doesn’t she? Not that I’m blaming her in there.) The interaction of Malik and PAS in seven had me chuckling a few times and, though Naav’s only been around a few times, I want to see more; she seems like she’s going to be an interesting character. The introduction of Ehsa was good, too, and followed with the established Qees comments from the previous chapter; Areiv’s was done well, too, little bit of a knight in shining armor (...Baron in gleaming robes?) The ‘conversation’ between Areiv and Bradley was funny, too, and I look forward to seeing more of them; Bradley’s ego and Areiv’s refinement are a wonderful foil to each other with the possibility of repercussions because of it further down the line. Overall: I’m really enjoying this. Your characters are coming great, their interactions work well, and I’m enthused to learn more about each of them as it progresses. I don’t think I need to comment on your descriptions any further than I have. (Hmm, am I becoming too irritating now? Lol.) – TCR, Beyond the Milky Way *blinks at review* You certainly made up for your absence! I definitely know a thing or two about RL interfering with things so no worries there (I believe you’ve updated, yourself and I’ve yet to go back and read… >.>) I wanted to touch on Bradley’s flirting with Lindsay, which is funny when I think about it. I put this story on another site and someone asked the same thing: does he not know she’s married? He does. I never looked at it as him ignoring her wedding bands, though. He’s trying to get her to open up more and not be so shy around him. Could he have done it in a less flirty way? He could… but it’s fun to see Lizzie become rosy! Hahaha; “Baron in gleaming robes”! Call me vain but I like Areiv and Bradley’s “rivalry” as well! I’m glad that you continue to enjoy the story! Anyone who leaves lengthy reviews to anything I write will never irritate me!

3.3: Practice

3.2: The Welcome Feast! Enjoy, please

Another chapter posted! 3.1: Buno or chapter six...