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So the father and son live on a small farm, dad is ex elite guard/military to the kingdom.
across the way is an elf farm, a dad from the same unit and twin sisters that are deeply in love with the boy.
both mothers died at the same time, same cause.
The world is a mish mash of our worlds mythology in terms of cultures and monsters, but the gods are different etc.
My hope, is that the son, who trusts dad 100% will feel betrayed by the lie. but the death was not just a normal got sick, or bandits. I want something that would strike fear into the heart of a child, something that would potentially make them feel unsafe at home at any time, so far my thoughts are going to a demon of some kind. I was also thinking that dad being the ex military type literally destroyed the demon in a way that might make his son see him differently.
This would give dad a reason for protecting his son from the idea of the demons till he is older, but also his image with his son.

sometimes it just needs an update, but I have also found in some writing programs that they are rather stupid

I was talking with the wife, she added black to the color list.
All these colors have different effects look wise with fire.
ATM I am thinking the colors could be.
Holy – Gold/White
Demonic – Blood red/Black
Undead – sickly green/light blue
Mortals – normal red orange and purple.
thoughts?

So there are different types of magic elements, using fire for this one.
Fire, Holy fire, Hellfire.
I have always known Holy fire to be a blue or white, maybe golden? but there is also a fire that undead tend to use, it can also be a blue or white. Normal fire is …… normal but what about Hellfire?
I have been thinking about it and I feel that a deeper red, maybe a blood red would be better to make them feel different?
any thought on this one? 

If a woman squats to pick up something, like a box or clean the bottom of a shelf ….. what ever, does her vaginal lips open up/expose more of her inner lips?
I really dont know how to ask this one.

His wife probably wears a full body condom while she wears a multilayered hazmat suit. If he can preggo the moon. There’s no telling what he’s actually capable of. Sudden pregnancy? Only the lord knows what’ll happen if the vampire gynoids from the future manage to snatch him.
I should start a petition for Mpreg to be fully changed to mean Moon Preg.

lol you guys always crack me up
Thinking on both the sides of real world and real ish movie etc world, this has been a topic that always interested me on a number of levels.
There is a Indie movie (dont know the name) where an alien race had invaded earth and was using women as incubators for different breeds of alien troops etc. 
Though it did not say in what way, if it was just an embryo implanted like a normal pregnancy or if it was a kind of egg that just needed a warm place to sit.
It also got me thinking, if this method could be used to increase populations of X species and bring them back from the brink of extinction or what have you. 

You don’t want to be too specific. It takes the reader out of the story when they have to work to see exactly what the author is seeing. Unless what you;re describing is something so commonplace as to be universal, like a single-story, red brick factory building with a flat roof that occupies a full city block, readers should be able to invest some imagination into the scene. Your idea of Grandma’s cottage and mine might vary, but the general idea of Grandma’s cottage will conjure up an emotional response in readers that too much detail can obscure.

yeah unless someone can come up with a better name, im going with a Hamlet
 

yeah unless someone can come up with a better name, im going with a Hamlet
 

so in a story im working on, i have a small number of small farms kind of together in a LOTR type setting.
would that be called a village or something else?

as always BW you are very helpful to us

I agree, wasnt too sure what to make of this but after the 5th time reading it (Yes I did) because something felt off, it sounds like to me that someone has high opinions about things and feels they are icky and sick, well guess what buttercup, thats the real world.
So you told someone it was ok to do bad things ….. your a dick, even if you told them to do good things, its still their choice to or not to do it.
Fiction is just that, fiction, its not real but can use real world things in any number of ways. Its up to the reader/viewer to understand that it is just a story/show/game, if you can not tell the difference, you need to have your head examined.
Frankenstein, Dracula, Sherlock Holmes, The three billy goats gruff, all just stories
I have a story that is and will involve torture, does not mean I want people to suffer from it or to do it myself, its all about plot and story, if anything in a story makes your skin crawl, and its that kind of a story, good job.
if its something simple and just a life style thing or what have you, thats too bad.
there is nothing wrong with making content that is shocking, dismaying, hurtful, appalling, or outrageous. once a pon a time, it was seen as scandalous if a woman showed her ankles, look at the world now.
if you are emulating something from a movie that is hurtful to people or yourself, physically or mentally, yeah get help, but if its just the narrow minded views of someone else, the world will eat them for lunch.   

@Desiderius Price I’m entirely in support of free speech, but your right to free speech ends at the point at which you impugn my character, which was the point of the OP’s post. The OP decided to tar us all with the same brush, and I am not a weak-willed, spineless malcontent who meddles in other people’s lives and causes harm for amusement simply because I write fiction for adult readers.
Gods help us all if the OP ever decides to write children’s fiction, or inspirational literature. The mental health services will experience a surge in demand.

I agree, wasnt too sure what to make of this but after the 5th time reading it (Yes I did) because something felt off, it sounds like to me that someone has high opinions about things and feels they are icky and sick, well guess what buttercup, thats the real world.
So you told someone it was ok to do bad things ….. your a dick, even if you told them to do good things, its still their choice to or not to do it.
Fiction is just that, fiction, its not real but can use real world things in any number of ways. Its up to the reader/viewer to understand that it is just a story/show/game, if you can not tell the difference, you need to have your head examined.
Frankenstein, Dracula, Sherlock Holmes, The three billy goats gruff, all just stories
I have a story that is and will involve torture, does not mean I want people to suffer from it or to do it myself, its all about plot and story, if anything in a story makes your skin crawl, and its that kind of a story, good job.
if its something simple and just a life style thing or what have you, thats too bad.
there is nothing wrong with making content that is shocking, dismaying, hurtful, appalling, or outrageous. once a pon a time, it was seen as scandalous if a woman showed her ankles, look at the world now.
if you are emulating something from a movie that is hurtful to people or yourself, physically or mentally, yeah get help, but if its just the narrow minded views of someone else, the world will eat them for lunch.   

I agree, wasnt too sure what to make of this but after the 5th time reading it (Yes I did) because something felt off, it sounds like to me that someone has high opinions about things and feels they are icky and sick, well guess what buttercup, thats the real world.
So you told someone it was ok to do bad things ….. your a dick, even if you told them to do good things, its still their choice to or not to do it.
Fiction is just that, fiction, its not real but can use real world things in any number of ways. Its up to the reader/viewer to understand that it is just a story/show/game, if you can not tell the difference, you need to have your head examined.
Frankenstein, Dracula, Sherlock Holmes, The three billy goats gruff, all just stories
I have a story that is and will involve torture, does not mean I want people to suffer from it or to do it myself, its all about plot and story, if anything in a story makes your skin crawl, and its that kind of a story, good job.
if its something simple and just a life style thing or what have you, thats too bad.
there is nothing wrong with making content that is shocking, dismaying, hurtful, appalling, or outrageous. once a pon a time, it was seen as scandalous if a woman showed her ankles, look at the world now.
if you are emulating something from a movie that is hurtful to people or yourself, physically or mentally, yeah get help, but if its just the narrow minded views of someone else, the world will eat them for lunch.   

I agree, wasnt too sure what to make of this but after the 5th time reading it (Yes I did) because something felt off, it sounds like to me that someone has high opinions about things and feels they are icky and sick, well guess what buttercup, thats the real world.
So you told someone it was ok to do bad things ….. your a dick, even if you told them to do good things, its still their choice to or not to do it.
Fiction is just that, fiction, its not real but can use real world things in any number of ways. Its up to the reader/viewer to understand that it is just a story/show/game, if you can not tell the difference, you need to have your head examined.
Frankenstein, Dracula, Sherlock Holmes, The three billy goats gruff, all just stories
I have a story that is and will involve torture, does not mean I want people to suffer from it or to do it myself, its all about plot and story, if anything in a story makes your skin crawl, and its that kind of a story, good job.
if its something simple and just a life style thing or what have you, thats too bad.
there is nothing wrong with making content that is shocking, dismaying, hurtful, appalling, or outrageous. once a pon a time, it was seen as scandalous if a woman showed her ankles, look at the world now.
if you are emulating something from a movie that is hurtful to people or yourself, physically or mentally, yeah get help, but if its just the narrow minded views of someone else, the world will eat them for lunch.   

Yes, I personally had a hard time with writing because I was a descriptive writer, you knew about every crack in the wall, the dripping of blood etc etc etc.
it was easy for me to make 1 chapter into 75 – 100 pages long, now ive set to no more than 20, 15 being the actual goal.

its your story, do what you think feels right for it.

indeed.
so  after mind blowing sex, indicating that while she might enjoy a …..8th? round of it, would purr to decline?
“you fucked my dry, I couldnt take another round with you” she purred. ??? 

its your story, do what you think feels right for it.

to me it just comes down to how the summary feels, how ever long you make it, confidence i dont think matters in that respect, either you have the right summary or you dont.
did it give you enough of a tease to get people interested? 
did it give enough of a description of the general plot?
did it communicate enough of a struggle for the characters?
will there be pizza at some point?
 

the easy way to explain what happens, would be that he is contaminated with something that adds to his disposition towards some people, but because of this stuff, it makes him react more to it.
so he isnt “innocent” in the idea that he felt X ways about things, but the normal him would never have done it, I think would add to the world breaking feelings that happen to him.

indeed, I think that this character would be more on the angry denial side of things, followed by his world coming crashing down.

all you “need” to do is just give a quick blurb of what the story is, like what I did.
you present a quick but not fully detailed snip of whats going on with the character or world, what may be standing in their way and how it really sucks or is something they are enjoying.
also works well with chapter titles