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its all about the plot, why is A doing this, what does B have to do with it and how does C appear to be connected to it all? I could write a Trek fic, one set in the LOTR ish world or even one set in today with normal settings and problems. the different worlds just give me more things to play with, more technology to explain it, magic to create it and so on. I dont write full out sex stories, my Naruto story only has 3? chapters that have actual sex in it, and its currently 33 chapters long with a thick plot, detailed OC characters and staying as close to canon but still an AU of the world.

i prefer a good story, its all about what i want to happen, how it should happen etc. I have a Naruto story still in the works, but I also have others that ive been working on in my mind of very different worlds

http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600103481

depends on my mood for the universe that I want to write in, the kind of things that I want to happen to the characters and how it happens.

I need someone to beta my story “When a heart cracks” http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600103481 its a Naruto harem story, more story than anything at the moment, i accept criticism and am open to ideas. PM if interested

ive seen a ………… few, stories where all it was, was characters having sex, very little plot or general story, yet its 5 – 10? chapters long. stories like that personally put me off, I have always been that way with most things. Games, TV, Movies and books have to have a good story to keep me into it, just having some kind of content for no reason tends to be replaced by something else of better quality. more can be better, but it can also hurt the story too, i think im running into that with my story.

I can read other peoples stories and get excited, some times even if the story is “bad” but the image they placed in my mind is all thats needed, sometimes i do get myself too in my own story, but thats never the “goal” until editing is done.

personally i find that its not exactly about my taste, but does the character/s fit it? an example, lets use Batman. would BW/BM (Bruce Wayne / BatMan) be that sadistic dominating person in the bedroom, or would he be something else? of course you could argue what universe of Batman, but lets just go with standard Batman, considering his personality I would probably write him as a tender lover, even though that might not do it for me, its about the story and the character because if you break who the character is in your story out of character, without a reason, i find it detracts from the story. BUT again thats all in how you write it. BM might be the dominating kind if paired with X character, or the submissive kind to another one.

what i would recommend, is pick the name of the character as a test, make sure it fits your world then do this, just to test it out. “James walked into the …… and looked around the dark room, his eyes adjusted and he could see …..” “Thor walked into the …….. and looked around the dark room, his eyes adjusted and he could see …….” “Tiny walked into the …… and looked around the dark room, his eyes adjusted and he could see …….” make it longer than what I did, but used this as a test to your character name, does the name you have in mind as you run the first parts of the story fit, does it have the feel that you want? does “James” sound like the name of your character for what they are going to do, in the world they live in. it might help you find the name that you want.

very true, but a name can help make the character memorable, for better or worse.

i use names of characters/heroes and then re arrange some letters to kind of sound like someone but not exactly. Thor – Thorn – Tholon etc Zeus – Zelus helps ti give a mental image in my mind of who im thinking of as reference.

good points, that should help me out a lot. now i just have to figure out what and how to do it

another thought, the body would also be weak too right? having never actually worked out, they would have the strength of an infant more or less, would they be able to get up out of bed and walk etc? or are they screwed? at the moment im using comatose people as an example for that

humm well the mind would be informed, but the eyes would not be used, i am basing this thought process off the first matrix movie in regards to Neo’s muscles. I would think that the eyes would need some time, a day or 2 with soft light or what have you to tune themselves for actual use. maybe?

yeah that sounds like a better question. now what if the mind of the clone, was fully up to date with the age of the person cloned? your cloned and your age … 25, the clone is aged to 25 and has the same mind from point A but you are point B because its not a constant …… memory update? would the mind fill in the blanks etc or would they eyes still be that of an infant, and would they be clouded the first time they are opened? that vision isnt clear but iffy

so i have some people that were cloned, they were just released from the “vat” how well would their eyes work in terms of “normal” people and them selves just using their eyes for the first time though being fully grown at age 16 – 19 body they are in, but probably only being like 3 days old or something.

that could work for one of the girls, she is actually a cook for his fav food, so her “proposal” could be along that line, or her fathers to him.

the MC has rescued, saved and helped many women (canon) im trying to make it that some of these women want to help him with something personal of his, and being married would help (to multiple women) for political reasons. like offering him …… the sword of a father, swearing to keep it for all time etc etc = accepting marriage proposal……. hey there’s one

i remember one like that in Stargate SG1 it is a possible option, would need a name for that tradition because i think its a greek one

i should also point out, its the guy that is the clueless one

im looking for some odd traditional marriage proposals. something that a person could agree to while not actually understanding what it is they are accepting, like in OOT (legend of zelda) when link gets the water spirit stone. possibly something that could originate somewhere in Asia?

based off of star trek, the place you pick to beam people up or down, has the least interference from elements or tech, you also need the right space too. if you are encountering an alien race, your tech and theirs might not be compatible because of energy signatures, wavelengths or even the kinds of metals used for buildings and or vehicles based on magnetic properties. could also be the level of pollution on the planet, you have a large number of choices on that.

a review mentioned that in my story “ if there has to be ten people of breeding age to be a clan then the uchiha clan is not a clan since there is only 1 or 2 alive. ” this is true, because there are no Uchiha left in my world, no sasuke or itatchi, all are dead, in fact Sasuke was killed in the first chapter, memory wise.

at current, I am thinking that there will be about 10 – 12 girls, 90% of them are canon too in some way or another. the shadow creatures are more of a description than an actual ….. element? its not like they are made of shadow its they use shadows to their advantage in battle if you will.

Im sure you would have to make an extensive overhaul of the story so that your not plagiarising the story, the plot might still be somewhat the same, but 99.9% of the rest would have to be different. just an example, lets say original story had a magic plant in it that's sap made an aphrodisiac, and put it in the drinks of X women. You would have to change that to ......... he bought a magic potion from a gypsy and put it in the drinks of X women. its the same idea, but still different at the same time, you might be able to do it that way, with a LOT of changes.