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As a writer, I embrace concrit. That's not to say that the criticisms don't sometimes sting, but if I'm honest about wanting to grow as a writer, I need to hear what doesn't work. It doesn't help me to only hear praise. I won't know where I need to focus, and I'm one of those odd people who doesn't want my email address out there for the world to offload their musings onto. I've gotten concrit, and I hope to get more. I'll give it where I think it's needed unless an author asks that they not receive it, in which case, I probably won't review at all.

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Excellent!

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Dozo, Elleyis-san

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Hey! Life gets busy and you have a great deal going on, so no worries about not reviewing! As you can tell, it hasn't seemed to have daunted me. ::grins:: I've always hated the way the game left so many NPCs as ciphers, and especially some of the NPCs that can really shape a PC, like Daeghun. Sadly, the writers managed to take the NPCs they tried to flesh out and turn them into caricatures instead, but that's what you get when you sell out. I have to confess that the spirit shaman thing was part of why I started this fic. It was a challenge to myself to take a potential Sue and see if I could write her as a non-Sue. I'm not sure if I've succeeded, but we'll see.... And yes, part of the reason she's not quite as distressed by death is her connection to the spirit world and her knowledge that death is only a step on the path. The rest is both immaturity and the fact that she wasn't raised to be terribly in touch with her emotions. I can't see any child raised by Daeghun, no matter how much time they spent with the Starling family, being able to grasp emotional subtlety. So, yes, she was certainly surprised when she and Bevil had a quick tumble in the ruins, but it was more likely because she'd never considered him as a bed partner. One of the areas that her journey will make her grow is in learning to cope with emotions and attachments, or at least I hope I'm managing that. If I'm not, I trust you'll kick my ass and tell me so. The irksome thing about fan fiction is that you often begin with a character or plotline that makes the MC largely a Sue/Stu to begin with, and getting past that to find the flaws and person beneath is what makes it fun. At least for me, anyway. But, thank you for taking the time to leave a really thoughtful review. The feedback is how I'm going to continue to grow as a writer, and I truly appreciate the time and consideration you've put into this.