FairySlayer

Pen Name: Fairy Slayer Story link: Moon Over... Just Over Review replies link: in Television > General Type of story: Flashfic Rating: Adult Fandom: Space: 1999 - TV > Misc > General Pairing: n/a Warnings: Challenge, Complete / Oneshot, No Sex

re: "Yule Regret This" I've been trying harder to stick with the iconic shows, especially for cartoons. I've been dying to use "Ben 10 (etc.)" but it's not something most folks here would be familiar with, or at least that's my guess. As for Shaggy, it's about time maybe he just got tired of being chased. Daphne is from an upper crust family, so I'm sure she's at least on the pill to avoid any scandal or whatnot. There's even a chance that she won't go all the way yet, but being in such close contact and having a bond already makes that unlikely. One thing that I should have done differently is letting Shaggy find the bread but look for the knife; when the tree monster follows them into the walk-in he'd see the tinsel glittering and assume it's a knife. Also, if I'd had a few words to spare, Snydington may have said that he expected them to pretend to be tree doctors or beauticians like they always do. I've only heard a little about the Evil Dead tree, but it sounds like a much sexier way to go (for the viewer, not the victim). Second score on Evergreen, eh? Maybe it would be fun to "build up" these challenge stories by including or alluding to previous ones. That's a stretch though. Thanks for reading and for the comments.

re: "It's the Wrought That Counts" The show is too cute not to have a few fanfics. It's also almost too cute to do anything pornographic with. Almost.

These are replies for my yet-again-murderous week 11 (Yule) entry, "Yule Regret This" (reviews) The only Scooby Doo character I'd ever kill — and want so very badly to kill — is Scrappy Doo. As for the errors, I was in a rush to get it done and posted before the muse left me. (All day I've been struggling to pick up the thing I was working on before.) Thanks for the note. The idea of Shaggy shooting a ghost has been rolling around in my mind for years. Seriously, if they're really ghosts then bullets should go right through them, right? From now on they should immediately hand out the shotguns whenever they go to investigate a mystery. The hauntings will mysteriously stop instantly! Yeah, I need a good sandwich too, and I don't think I've been near a fireplace in years. Maybe I'll get a sub and light some candles at home tonight. (Eggnog and rum sound pretty good to me right now too. ) As far as I know, there's no law against killing a tree (that's not on city property), and how was Shaggy supposed to know? (... besides the fact that he's helped solved hundreds of other phony hauntings and monster sightings in the past ... ) The show is so firmly etched in my brain that it's impossible not to have the research all there. I think they'd be an extremely tight bunch no matter what. There's a lot of trust there, though now that Freddy knows that Shaggy has a gun he may listen harder when Shaggy says he doesn't want to split up while searching. Yes, the Rushing Monster (looks like an alligator) was on my ass, so stuff slipped. I'll fix it eventually. And yes, I should have included Fred and especially Scooby in the final scene somehow. Maybe the scared dog would be consoled with a freshly roasted meat of some kind, still on the bone. Scooby-dooby... ruh, rhatever. Of course "the butler did it," and what are butlers if not a little uptight? The wife would have been a good "surprise," but I figured the less overall intrigue the better. At least none of them had a problem letting some weird looking teens wander unattended all over their property and with full access to their most valued possessions. It would have messed up the story otherwise, but that's something any of us would do, right? He probably won an eating contest. His opponent who didn't have enough cash to cover the bet and gave him the Colt instead. (By the way, why would I choose a Colt over a Smith & Wesson or some other brand, hmm? ) As for killing trees, the toughest enemies in Sailor Moon, besides the evil queens, were the tree-based monsters. And isn't there some world-domination cult calling itself the National Arbor Day Foundation or something? EEEVILLLE! The first kill is always the hardest, but one way or another they'll never need to make complicated traps again. "I AM THE DOM GHOST! GET OUT! WOOooOOOooO-Oh EFFIN' A! I give up! Don't shoot! You can have the treasure!" That's a great Captcha. I remember the one I got posting the first time on The Archive was something amazing too, but I'll have to look it up when I get home. Thanks again everyone. By the way, did you know that Velma was on the cover of Skeptic magazine last year?

Pen Name: Fairy Slayer Story link: Yule Regret This Review replies link: in Cartoons > General subforum Type of story: Flashfic Rating: Adult+ Fandom: Cartoon >> Scooby Doo Pairing: (barely) Daphne/Freddie Warnings: Challenge, Complete/One-shot, Death, No Sex, Violence

re: "It's the Wrought That Counts" Thanks. I'm still a bit surprised that this many people liked the story, especially being a children's show (though you wouldn't know that by looking at 4chan's /co/ lately). At this rate I may write only cute stories from now on... or maybe not. By the way, if you happen to see any of the new series, the "My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic" version, then let me know what you think of the differences. (But don't go out of your way just for me.) (... do it for the ponies. )

For ShadowKnight's wonderfully detailed review of "Cakewalk on the Catwalk": First off, I truly appreciate you going so far out of your normal domain to critique the four-way when I begged asked. I know that you were busy enough at the time, and that was before you were made Árbitro supremo de Fanfiction español. Yes, I do aim for a good visual experience with any intricate scene (especially a four-way) and even with stories themselves. It is limiting. Being from a cartoon-focused world that seemed like the ideal, but lately I've been having doubts. (The 'Dick-in-Jane' cartoon lemons get an outrageous number of ratings and comments.) I do try to delve into characters' feelings but perhaps still too much from the outside. Actually, in this story I made a point to stick with one character's viewpoint in each scene, like you mentioned, and there is even a hierarchy of who is the focus in any scene (with a Strawberry on top). In a few cases "I had to" shift to include important details. Maybe that could be called "zooming in," which goes back to the highly-visual aspect. I pick out issues with my previous stories and put extra effort into avoiding them in the current projects, and overcompensation ensues. It's a bit like trying to get a frilly (subjectively) edged bedspread perfectly even on the bed: every time you pull on one part all of the other edges move, so you have to step back and look again to see how well you did. Wordiness and rambling has been a big problem with several past stories (pre-lemon mostly), and I've wasted a lot of time writing epic pornographic tales that had too many side-stories or plain overkill. So I can cop to it being over-rehearsed with how "everything being too clear" in the sex and other scenes. Usually I'd like to include more awkwardness and mistakes in young love, or even with adults, but tight got the better of me this time. I can't claim it was just for this chapter, either, because the earlier encounter between Strawberry and Ginger happened rather easily too. Of course I can find ways to rationalize these flaws away , but it is what it is. I'm not quite obsessed with word count, but I watch page count like a hawk. The big difference is that short paragraphs, whether light dialogue or actions, get the same leading as longer ones. One big alligator on my ass is that my stories and style always seem to be in the same narrative voice. I'd hoped my first first-person story (the Ruby Gloom one) would help knock me out of the habit (and talk about seeing through a single character's experiences!), though I hadn't finished that story before tapping this one out. Actually, after seeing a few episodes of the DiC "Strawberry Shortcake" (at my co-beta's enticement) this story forced itself to be tapped out within a couple of weeks. However, I did enforce my mandatory "freeze" periods so it certainly wasn't rushed... another thing you mentioned. (So still, no excuses for me!) Also, I'm a bit too conservative when it comes to being messy and even "poetic" as you mention. Directing is one of my biggest fantasies (which means juggling lots of details; see "zooming in" above) and my biggest hobby is reviewing artwork (analyzing composition, technique, and especially meaning). Clarity is important in both, but there must be room for consumers' own interpretations too. When creating that last part is tough for me, so you're spot on that loosening up would be better. (Just so you know, I often cringe when I force myself to write lay instead of lie — this may be a long row to hoe for me. ) And you got a good triple with that "cheesecake" simile, you silly person you! So on the whole your review pointed out that I'm still having a lot of trouble with both things that I've already been trying to fix and and overcompensating for past sins. One bright side is that you didn't find any new severe flaws (unless they're buried by the other stuff!). Even better, your encouragement makes me feel freer to color outside the lines and loosen up things a bit. (I almost wrote "gives me license to" but that would be too stiff, right?) Maybe I'll start with a first-person My Little Pony: FiM story from Pinkie Pie's point of view! ( That MLP:FiM horror story I'm pondering could become absolutely hilarious if I could pull it off that way.) Again, I appreciate the tremendous energy you put into this. It's clear to me that you read the chapter carefully and made sure you truly understood it before starting on that great review. So, in tribute to your comments, I won't spend way too much time tweaking and re-writing this reply either. ("Yeah, that's the ticket!" ) P.S. When it comes to the cute versus sexy comment, I like to quote a good friend: "Cute is just the first stage of sexy." That's not always the case, sure, but it sounds good.

I just saw that about an hour ago and had to laugh. Believe it or not, the premiere of MLP:FiM did have a similar power struggle. Anyway, a friend likes to post "gloomdark" snippets on Fortune 4chan, so on Saturday I threw together a page of notes for something truly horrific. (Perhaps not quite on par with your abilities.) Then again, I'll give it a few days before deciding whether the idea is worth pursuing.

These are replies for my week 10 challenge (Gifts) entry, "It's the Wrought That Counts" (story) - (reviews). Thanks for reading an MLP story, first of all, and then for the kind words of appreciation. As a kid I'd have disagreed about the books-as-gifts idea, but even then I remember getting some that I loved. I'll confess, Spike might have been a teensy bit out-of-character, even if it was off-stage. He gets ticked off every so often but they know he'd never actually hurt any of them. The fillies certainly felt guilty enough after Twilight Sparkle bolted, so he probably didn't need to say much. Sure, I tried to imply a few things, but since the viewpoint is only on TS we'll never know exactly what. Ain't I a stinker? From your review it seems like you've seen an episode or two of the show, hmm? — or maybe I'm reading way too much into it. Anyway, I tried to keep close to the show's premise and include "a lesson." Basically it's an "abbreviated Act III" and bound to be a bit mushy. And, yes, I wanted a good ending for all of them, especially on Christmas eve. I'm wishing the same for everyone IRL too. Hay, er, Hey, I greatly appreciate that you were willing to read it. (Maybe you saw my disclaimer? ) I knew picking MLP:FiM for the prompt would be risky, but I did aim for accessibility with this tale. Still, I'm a bit squeee! by the number of reviews. You're right that the titles are tied to the characters' personalities, in line with Twilight Sparkle's efforts when finding the books. (So of course they'd have to like them!) The only joke one though was about "The Bronian Empire" — "Bronies" are adult fans who rave about the show on 4chan — excitable people sort of like Pinkie Pie herself. Spooky Tales of Spontaneous Meteorology was a little different because Rainbow Dash is an impulsive adrenaline junkie, so it had to be something very stimulating: In Equestria the weather is directly controlled by pegasi, so she's freaked out by The Everfree Forest because the weather runs by itself there. (The hungry manticores, sea serpents, etc. are other good reasons to be afraid of it too.) I hope that isn't too much detail. Well, I can hardly resist using a tweest (twist) in my stories, but using two is something I'd usually eschew. The part about them actually liking the books was in keeping with the show itself... plus Pittwitch was spot on that I craved wanted some warm and fuzzy feelings for all of them too. Using the titles was actually a great help for describing their personalities without having to give them more dialogue or action; and I always give light physical descriptions to help readers who aren't familiar with the fandom. (Yes, the visual thing — I just saw your other review.) When I finished the first draft I was worried the long titles and descriptions would put the story well over the limit, but I was close to a hundred under. Phew! I'm very glad you found it easy to read in one shot, and I'm guessing (hoping) without having to use Wikipedia. There were one of two reservations I had about the flow, but I'm certainly not going to point those out now. More importantly, it sounds like you enjoyed it. Deep down I knew you'd read it. After the last couple of prompt stories I've written, plus with the holidays here, I wanted to write something uplifting. And how could anyone write something dark about the adorable ponies?* Thanks for the comments, and I hope you get your own baby dragon for Christmas. Everyone, thanks for taking the time to read and review. * We'll see... For better or worse, we'll see. MWUHAHAHAHAHA! Bibliography (With attempted jokes for those familiar with the series.) The Age of Equestrian Unreason, by Specs Love Fashion! A Horsetorical Perspective, by Luxury Just Spooky Tales of Spontaneous Meteorology, by Withers Chanél Ertiveness: Assertiveness Without Being an Ass, by Cotton Tuyu Best Bashes of the Bronian Empire, by Fortune Lurker Agriculture and Societal Advancement, by City Planter Alexandrite to Zinc Ferrite, by Crystal Sport

The thought struck me at the last moment, but maybe I just think too much like a man (or think too much about what a man feels, besides boobies. ) Most of "my job" on the art side is, as I say, "reading way too much into it." At least I'm always tickled when other people find meanings in my stories that never crossed my mind but made sense. Perhaps our gut feelings slip little ideas into our brains when we're not paying attention.

Pen Name: Fairy Slayer Story link: It's the Wrought That Counts Review replies link: Cartoon > General sub-forum Type of story: Flashfic Rating: General Audiences (but never let kiddies read directly from the site, m'kay?) Fandom: Cartoon >> My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Pairing: N/A Warnings: Challenge, Complete / Oneshot, No Sex

Well, Brainy very well could be planning a coup against the bearded old blue. Whenever I look back at old TV shows like "The Honeymooners" where Ralph was always threatening to punch Alice, or think about Ricky spanking Lucy, it makes more than a little uneasy. I also remember many radio commercials from my childhood where, if the topic was "a man thing" they'd always make the woman look stupid, and that always bugged me. (Compare that to most commercials these days.) One day it occurred to me the Kermit and Miss Piggy relationship wasn't much different from what one may see in Lifetime movies. However, though I'd love to claim some serious and extremely thoughtful approach to writing this drabble, I really just wanted a good reason for a well-known character to do something green-related and permanent. In the end it was just a silly idea after all. Thanks for commenting, and let's hope Gonzo doesn't fall into her trap!

Take an exciting journey back in time to a whole three years ago! Okay, I tried to make it more exciting... This is the prologue for the 2007 WWOEC (a comic & cartoon site) Christmas Jam. To comply with disclaimer and tag rules, only stories which are posted on AFFN will be listed and linked. The epilogue will be posted on or just after Christmas. If anyone wants to write another segment based on the prologue's premise, for any fandom or genre! then please go ahead. Then post your promotion block in this thread. Prologue Title: Nice Neighbors and Naughty Ideas Author: Fairy Slayer Rating: Adult+ Pairings: none in prologue; Superman/Lois Lane in epilogue Summary: Santa Claus' nearest neighbor accidentally gives him the idea for the best Christmas ever. Feedback: It would be the perfect present! (Replies to reviews for these bookends will be posted in in the Cartoons > Crossovers subforum because all of the related stories are of cartoon fandoms.) Fandom: Cartoon - Crossover: Superman (general) + Santa Claus Warnings: AU/AR, M/F, Oral URL: http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600092906 Stories (so far) Title: The Little Matched Girl Author: Evil Fairy Rating: Adult+ Pairings: Dani Fenton/Ember Summary: Cold and lonely, Dani Phantom is desperate for a little Christmas cheer. When Santa points her towards a certain ghostly rock star, both girls end up with a very happy holiday! Feedback: ...is always greatly appreciated. Fandom: Danny Phantom FemSlash Warnings: Challenge, COMPLETE, Finger, F/f, Minor1, Rom, Oral URL: http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600092904 Title: Christmas Miracle in the Cold Author: Sadarax Rating: Adult+ Pairings: Helga/Arnold Summary: Santa Claus' nearest neighbor accidentally gives him the idea for the best Christmas ever. Feedback: It would be the perfect present! Fandom: Hey Arnold! Warnings: Challenge, COMPLETE, HJ, Finger, M/F, Minor2, Oneshot, Rom, SoloF URL: http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600091126 Title: operation c.h.r.i.s.t.m.a.s — carnally hedonistic recluse instigating sexy temptation makes abhorrent situation Author: Fairy Slayer Rating: Adult+ Pairings: every obvious pairing: Nigel/Lizzie Hoagie/Abby/Cree Kuki/Wally The Delightful Children from Down the Lane/... Summary: Santa forces The Delightful Children from Down the Lane to give the kids of Sector V a special and very, very naughty Christmas treat... OR ELSE! Feedback: If you please. Fandom: Codename: Kids Next Door Warnings: Bi, Bondage, Challenge, COMPLETE, CR, M/F, M/F/F, moresome, NonCon, Finger, Oral, Minor2 URL: http://cartoon.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600092905

Good to know, AI. Let's hope that if she's the alien princess it will finally make Kirk think twice... Thanks. Let's just hope she doesn't become despondent and decide to parody Dr. Seuss in suicide: Green Eggs and Green Ham... Thanks. If left for a day it would have been better (as others noted), but I'm glad you managed to get a good laugh out of it. That's always a good thing, even in other stories where it wasn't the intended goal. As for keeping it so short, thank ApolloImperium for the whole challenge series.

These are replies for my week 9 challenge (Evergreen) entry, "If Not, It Never Was" (story) - (reviews). I've already apologized to Shakdowknight for missing the branch because I was too busy being pedantic. It always seemed to me that Miss Piggy's was the antithesis of every man portrayed in Lifetime movies, so it seemed natural that this would eventually happen. Kermit isn't aggressive; sure, he would hurt a fly, just nothing more. At least with green hair she could play an alien on "Pigs in Space" now. By the way, if you would prefer that I write for the intended meaning of the prompts then I'd be happy to, but so far I get the feeling that people don't mind my straying. At least he's not suffering anymore, and just imagine the shrine being put up where he was found on Sesame Street. Looking at it again with fresh eyes I have to agree about the first sentence. It's a sign of the kind of week and weekend that was getting to me, and it made me feel like I had to rush — the ultimate sign of when one shouldn't rush. Making short and sweet seemed better than describing a full murder scene, and I had an idea about the crime scene itself but, again, mentioning how "in a sick twist of fate, the flies now feasted on him" was a bit too gruesome for a holiday tale. (Then again, the red & green of Christmas... oh bother! ) Now if only I can figure out why I wrote two death-fics in row for the challenges... All in all, the challenges seem to be sharpening my sense of brevity and lubing my will to write, a sort of "KB Jelly". (Yesterday I saw a picture and managed to crank out a five-page lemon for it with only two hours work! It's nowhere ready for prime-time, but for me that's amazing speed for a first draft.) Thanks to all who commented. Next week I'll have something a lot more fun, promise!

It's a fickle thing. For weeks I've been doing the challenges but haven't been able to put even a second into my own current project. Then today I saw something a friend had drawn and, *BANG*! in a couple of hours I pounded out a short story based on it and sent it out to him. (It needs cleanup before I post it here, but he was very happy to get that "addendum to my review.) Keep looking around and tap out a story or even just jot a few pages of story notes whenever something strikes your fancy. Sure, it doesn't help your project directly, but using that energy constructively is like lube for your brain.

I didn't expect "A Snow Related Story" (story) - (reviews) to get much attention, but I'm sorry to be so late in responding in any case. The title is just what I happed to write in the subject line of my to-post file and... what the heck. Another happy childhood memory raped and murdered by yours truly. Now I even wonder myself if there is such thing as a snowman fetish. The inspiration came in a flash, and it seems more poetic being short as possible. Writing anything short definitely isn't my forte. (I was hoping for a surprise angle, letting the reader figure out who the victim was, but the need for a disclaimer overrides all else.) Besides, everyone has time for a quick twitfic. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. The imagery seemed like the simplest way to get across why he'd been attacked. If it had been gambling debts then they'd have broken his limbs, but for him they're easily replaceable. I'm very happy to hear about the laughter. By the way, nice pun there too. Is that a good thing or a bad thing? If the former then I'll try harder next time. :evillaugh: Thanks.

Well, to be fair I did completely miss the evergreen branch; I should have concentrated more on the story rather than juggling stuff. Heck, I even did a second reading straight-through and it still escaped me, so my bad. My brain was already going a mile a minute on other stuff all day so I figured I'd apply some of that to giving some detailed feedback. Again, I mostly pointed out things that I've had trouble with myself and have been struggling to fix ever since they were pointed out to me. (Thanks to Evil Fairy, Stephen King and CloverReef, off the top of my head, and many others.)

Pen Name: Fairy Slayer Story link: If Not, It Never Was Type of fic: Drabble Rating: Adult Fandom: TV > The Muppet Show Pairing: N/A Warnings: Anthro (of course), AU/AR, Challenge, Complete/Oneshot, Violence, MC Death, No Sex, and Just Plain Wrong

My favorite is an exchange between my beta and me over this sentence: Her tail occasionally whipped sideways as she watched her 'prey' going at it. [EF61] [FS62] [EF63] [EF61] This was a good little statement…at this point Custard has become so much of a ‘girl’ that it’s nice to slip in a little reminder that she’s also a car. [FS62] My ears are burning up because it was so hard to not laugh my ass off when I saw the typo in your comment. [EF63] “I’m Custard…vroom!” XD I wonder if anyone has ever made the opposite mistake in Knight Rider erotica.

Yesterday Overnight I filled out “Tomoe's FanFiction Writer's Meme” on deviantART. Since it's an art site and I wanted my answers to stand out a bit, my answers are hand-written and include doodles. Sure, I tagged a few folks from here at the bottom, but I never expected anyone to join dA just to fill it out! I figured that if it was interesting then we could make a thread here: Danyealle and Shadowknight suggested it too, so... I'll leave my own answers in graphic form because, hey! it was a lot of work to get my handwriting up to even that level. My suggestion is that we post only our responses; later we can open it up for replies and discussions if folks are interested. Also note that the original questionnaire has a fixed amount of space for each reply, so please be pithy! If you're using the Rich Text Editor (RTE) then simply copy the questionnaire and paste it into the reply box before adding your answers; if like me you're in troglodyte mode then you can hit "reply" and copy the BBcode to nestle your answers inside. I suppose you could just use answer numbers, but I know I'd be jumping back to the top for every single one. :dunce: Tomoe's ♥♥ FanFiction Writer's Meme ♥♥ 1. How about a brief introduction of yourself? 2. Fabulous! And what got you into fanfiction to begin with? 3. I see, so what kind of fanfiction do you like to write? 4. Do you tend to write the same pairings/characters? Or are you a fandom whore? 5. What is your more popular fanfic and why do you think people like it so? 6. Forget other people, what is the fanfic you've written you're most proud of? 7. Do you find writing easy? Hard? What are the most difficult aspects of writing you struggle with? 8. Write a few sentences of so of your favorite pairing or character. 9. Are there any fanfiction trends/clichés you can't stand or are just sick of? 10. Are you guilty of any of the fanfiction trends/clichés you now hate? Or any other ones? 11. What was the first fandom you wrote for? Do you still like/participate in it? 12. Name your OTPs or most frequently written pairings/characters and explain what it is about them you love to write. 13. What would you call your writing "style"? 14. Do you read other people's fanfic? If so, what do you find yourself reading the most? 15. Name one thing you'd LOVE to write, but have been too afraid or shy to do. 16. Do you have trouble taking criticism? Or worse yet, do you have the dreaded bloated ego? 17. When you write, is there anything that helps? Music? Quiet room? Repairing toaster ovens? 18. What inspires you? 19. Lastly, how would you sum up your fanfiction experiences and yourself as a writer? 20. Tag some friends, because they'll have you for it.

The 1980s didn't come to Molvania until the late '90s.