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From JayDee on November 01, 2018
I didn't quite know what to make of this one, but I am not the brightest to be fair. The first bit I followed easily, and then it got quite trippy in places although with careful reading I could see the same things from different points of view in some of them.  The synths are pretty hardcore!
Some really good turns of phrase and imagery throughout. I especially liked the Dragon and the Interation POVs.  This bit -  “Scales, wings and broken flesh. Her children fell. With every flash, a moment of indescribable fear. As rent bodies. Limbs separating messily. Timeless moments of murder. Several moments of brutal precision.” Really good!
Thank you
that bit is actually personally my most hated passage.
I aimed for a strobe light effect.
Ur Dragon looking up from the ocean sees with every contact with Synth’s Hypervelocity rod barrage. Her children exploding from the impact. To say she’s traumatized is a bit of an understatement. She’s an apex predator of immense magical and physical might. To see her children each mighty in of themselves. Physically shredded without a chance to counter act. There are things in Oceania that can prey on dragons successfully. Yet, this was not a predator, prey interaction.
This was an act where dragons weren’t even given the pretense of dignity in self-defense. Falling to a bigger predator she could at least respect. Yet, these fleshy puny things could just delete her children. It's not something she can process.
Its irrelevant to her that the watchers were barely involved. They enabled this to happen. She won’t challenge the watchers nor synth after this.  Not after, this display.
She makes it the southern continent on the other side of the world. It doesn’t take her long to piece together enough information to hold the elves culpable. She only understands blood for blood and she fully intends to rectify.

Her innocence.
Sofi is a kinslayer now.  A la cinderella gone bad.

From BronxWench on October 30, 2018
 
Synth
This one was complex, layered, perplexing, and exhilarating. I'm really not sure which POV tugged at me more. I think it was a close call between the grief of Iteration, and the sacrifice of Ur Dragon. That last line... "As the ocean tasted dragon blood." Just wonderful, and while not what I'd call traditional horror, it was just as terrifying and intriguing.
Beautiful! Thank you!
 
I am glad you enjoyed
Interation 33175 in a manner did manage to see her son again. She knew it not but she managed for a momentary glimpse that he lived still.
Ur Dragon was the only being to accurately recognize the threat the watchers represented.  From her perspective, these puny beings were able to communicate with her flawlessly despite her never lowering herself to talk to them. As a parent she had to make the hardest decision. Did she stay in a rapidly degrading situation where she would die like all her children or did she do the most pragmatic thing and leave. As long as she lives. Dragonkind can’t be wiped out. Her precious cargo will hatch dragons again.

From GeorgeGlass on October 27, 2018
 
Synth
A bit repetitive, but I like the combination of fantasy and sci-fi. I also enjoyed the way that Synth (like a benevolent version of Skynet) weaponizes construction vehicles to defend its creators.
Thank you, Synth is indeed similar only its aggression and hostility are directed at everyone who isn’t a watcher. Avoid, That northern continent on the other side of the world and don’t harm the watchers and you will be okay. Step foot on that continent, however… Thankfully, the southern continent is isolated by currents and distance. Nautical/Maritime Circumnavigation won’t reveal that Oceania has another continent. So that leaves mainly the dragons as the only ones who know about it. And they aren’t going to share what happened there. Ignorance and safety is bliss… At least for the next ice age and two thousand years.
 

Céad míle fáilte romhat!

I don’t like how common it is for one side to completely demonize the other while completely elevating their own. I wanted to aim for some kind of balance here. Glad it wasn’t seen coming though. 

Her innocence.
Sofi is a kinslayer now.  A la cinderella gone bad.

An Old God so nearly free decides to not break free of its prison but rather bends the bars just a bit and uses its tentacles for some fun. To the dismay of the monastery and its clergy. With the nunnery nearby sure to be visited next.
The Lord of Hatred possesses one of his cultists and woos an avowed demon hunter determined to kill him and his cult. Mixing business with pleasure has always held certain risks.
Unicorns wage war on vampires
The god of war is tricked by his lover the goddess of love into seducing his most favored warrior
a father discovers his only child is a possessive demon. the cruelty of children mixed with raw demonic power
A princess gets bored so she charms a dragon into abducting her chaste, courtly love knight protector
A virus turns all androids and robots into sex crazed machines while its up to sexbots to save their creators from an orgasmic fate. 
Games no longer are mere games but objects of life or death as even friendly games of chess or checkers results in the death of the losers.
Deimiurges rush to complete a universe on time as the deadline approaches.
Harem wars. A world where one’s harem size determines their power.
A lesbian is cursed with the power to seduce any man is encountered by a gay man cursed with the ability to seduce any woman. Each with the ability the other craves.
With Ragnarok fast approaching Hel goes fuck that and takes her siblings to the mortal world to live happily as mostly human. Mostly functional family.
Freya provokes the ire of Aphrodite and this time no mere golden apple is going to cut it.
Hera, Queen of the gods leaves Olympus for the mortal world where she unexpectantly meets the god of divorce.
Aliens invade earth only to discover that lust is contagious.
bored as hell the god of destruction tries to create something for once.
An elder god decides to save the world despite the small fleshy things on it seemingly determined to destroy it.
There is a secret war behind the scenes as people with their own private dimensions. These lords and Ladies of their own demesnes try to absorb each other holdings because only one can have their own complete world. While others are content to enjoy their own personal fragments of one.
Only werewolves can find their one true love. Since they are the only beings capable of seeing the invisible threads of fates that binds two people together. 
Turns out gods are real, the latest tech makes it abundantly clear… And then the gods take notice.
 

Synth is posted
It was either now or never. Cause I was getting losing confidence.
Same event different perspectives.
 

I’m loving the stories they’re great
Im gonna re edit somemore cause self doubt backstabbed me
 

Ah.
The tape hungers.

I’ve been writing on this blessed website for years. I usually delete stories if I’ve written like a couple chapters and I don’t get many hits.
There’s only a single story that I’ve kept. Grand Inquisition. It's just with life got in the way. Haha.
Its pretty much on near-permanent hiatus. I put alot of effort into it. I mean I got two, three chapters left its just.
Its like I got the finale planned but well...the journey to said finale is just… Not me any more. Or rather not whom I was or am currently.
A bittersweet journey’s end is still bitter.
 

I’ve been writing on this blessed website for years. I usually delete stories if I’ve written like a couple chapters and I don’t get many hits.
There’s only a single story that I’ve kept. Grand Inquisition. It's just with life got in the way. Haha.
Its pretty much on near-permanent hiatus. I put alot of effort into it. I mean I got two, three chapters left its just.
Its like I got the finale planned but well...the journey to said finale is just… Not me any more. Or rather not whom I was or am currently.
A bittersweet journey’s end is still bitter.
 

Excellant,
Its got prideful elves conducting genocide. Dragons being subject bullet hell.
A creation that fights back
fun for the whole family.   Wooo! Now i’ll edit it and slowly drive myself insane in the meantime.

Excellant,
Its got prideful elves conducting genocide. Dragons being subject bullet hell.
A creation that fights back
fun for the whole family.   Wooo! Now i’ll edit it and slowly drive myself insane in the meantime.

I received this in a PM today:
Good afternoon, CL Mustafic. I was intrigued by your story "The Glory Hole to Hell". My name is Oleksandr Demchenko. I am an agent of Sowo d. My job is to look for interesting stories . So I would like to offer you cooperation. We will publish your story (in the long run more than one) into our platform and provide you with an account which will give you access to see the story reviews and also gain credit points which will allow you to claim prizes. We will be releasing our app in both ios and android so you may gain a wider audience and fan base. Please let me know if you are interested. Respectfully yours, Oleksandr Demchenko I looked into it a bit and it seems that once you submit a story to them they get the copy write on it and it's no longer your property. It is most likely a scam so if you get this message, send it to the trash. CL

I mean, grand inquisition isn’t my first but. I’d have to take it down and re-upload.

Synth
Decided that I’m going to write on one of Oceania’s pivotal moments. Birthday’s coming up so I decided why not Lore Bomb? Muhahahaha

Yep

Yep

Got an idea too. Will start writing when I get home from my double shift.

Oooooh.
This sounds fun.
 
Alas, what lies we weave with masks. For which is the true face?

Oooooh.
This sounds fun.
 
Alas, what lies we weave with masks. For which is the true face?

redro ni si snoitalutargnoc erecnis A

Sometimes, like when it comes to linking to writing and art, I regret filling my facebook friends list with uber russian orthodox catholic family and childhood friends, lol. I can think of a couple who would absolutely 100% read a story if I put it up there, and every one of them would be horrified and try to save my soul. Another reason my twitter isn’t under my real name. They can’t find me there!!!! Woooooh! 

So what kind of dragon? Or is that not pertinent?