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😄 *Joker voice* I’m an agent of chaos… Actually I swear, most days in Florida are surprisingly normal. It’s just every once in a while...

I liked it in particular because it made it feel like a carnivorous plant or something similar, where once a prey animal is drawn in by the “lure”, it still takes a while for the trap to fully close, like the slow-moving tentacles of a sundew. The sudden drop would have worked too (more of a Venus flytrap vibe there), but I kind of like it better this way. This is a fair question, and it deserves the full answer I couldn’t condense enough for the review. So, this was a solid B, I would say. It was pretty good, but I think it could have been hotter. I wanted to lean especially into the positive, however, because I’ve read enough blowjobs in erotic fiction to know that most people write them in ways I don’t like at all. The standard erotic fic blowjob tends to go a certain way. 1. The motion is kind of frantic, like the woman is trying to win a prize for time (that would have been amusingly appropriate here, but the point stands). I tend to find sexual content more arousing when it starts out more relaxed and then kind of accelerates toward the climax. 2. There’s a sound effect that gets made, and it’s nearly always the exact same sound effect too: “Glurk! Glurk! Glurk!” Suffice it to say I am not aroused by the sound of a choking frog. 3. There’s always an emphasis on the amount of drool/spit coming off the blowjob, and it usually reaches the point where I honestly find it gross rather than hot. I know I’ve read seriously arousing blowjobs in erotic fics before, but they’re shockingly few and far between in my experience. I agree that there is room for you to improve, but I gave a positive mention there because I’ve seen way worse.

Here's the latest: –Chapter 5 of “Precocious" went off to beta a couple of days ago. It's the longest chapter of that story yet, at 7,500 words, so I'm not sure when it will be back. –Since then, I've been working on chapter 2 of "Time’s Error.” I have made good progress and expect to post the chapter later this week. –Once that's done, I will shift my focus—to the extent that I have focus—to the final chapter of “RB-X-17." In other news, I’m about halfway through reading InBrightestDay’s Winter Holiday story “Meaningful Gifts.” Really nice so far. JayDee’s new story is now in my queue, as well.

Of all the HOTD stories i read until now, i never found one where Shido gets all the girls. So lets say that Takashi and Kouta are killed early in the game (either at school or after that) and Shido using a drug he found in his father safe (liquid or spray your choise) was able to slowly make all the girls lust for him. If Takashi and Kouta are killed before they leave the school then the girls will have no choise but to stay with shido since not all of them can fight and Shido can start from there. I want Shido to have all the hot women for him and the males of his group even the ones who are married, he can allways kill the husbands.

This challenge is inspired from a story i read on a fanfiction and a doujinshi. While the war was going on Harry gets a girlfriend from another house and they decide to keep it a secret so Voldemort doesn't target her. After the war is over, they told the news to her family but her father who only wants to use her to elevate his house doesn't accept that and tells her that he will choose a husband for her who has more political power. Harry tries to find a way to help her but cant, her father chose a fat older man from outside England, not realising that he is also a major pervert with many kinks. After they marry he starts using drugs and other methods to turn her into his ideal woman. If you guys have any questions send me a msg.

Game of Thrones and Naruto crossover have many stories, but not even one with Kushina so my challenge is this: During the conversation that Minato and Kushina had while restraining the kyuubi about sealing the fox into Naruto, Kushina refused to seal the fox into her son and said that she will take the fox inside her and then use a jutsu of her clan that she read in one of her family’s scrolls to go to another dimension so the fox cannot harm Konoha again, The jutsu worked and threw Kushina in the Game of Thrones universe where Walder Frey found her. The stress of the extraction and then the resealing of the Kyuubi, the death of her husband and the realization that she will never see her son, weakened her both physically and mentally and made her unable to use chakra for sometime, so when Walder found her he became captivated by her beauty and sexy body and he decided that he had to have her. When they arrived in the Frey household the doctors told him that she was only exhausted so Walder decided to take advantage of her exhaustion and weaken her by using drugs to slowly break her mind and rebuild it to his image. In the following days Kushina tried to withstand the drugs but with her mental exhaustion her mind broke and she swore herself to Walder.

Game of Thrones and Harry Potter crossover have many stories, but not even one with Lily so my challenge is this: When Voldemort attacked Harry’s home he killed James but when he tried to kill Lily, a ritual she used so Harry could be protected, protected both Harry and her but because she was close to the point where the killing curse struck with the different magic in the air the ritual opened a hole between dimensions and sent her to the Game of Thrones universe where Roose Bolton found her (the Bolton’s are the same bastards as in the series except they are not torturing whoever and whenever they want only their enemies). The stress of the night, the death of her husband and the realization that she will never see her son, weakened her both physically and mentally and made her unable to use magic for sometime, so when Roose found her and became captivated by her beauty he decided that he wanted her. When they arrived in the Bolton household and the doctors told him that she was only exhausted Roose decided to take advantage of her exhaustion and make her his by using sexual torture and drugs. In the following days Lily tried to withstand the torture but with her mental exhaustion, the drugs and the multiple orgasms her mind broke and she swore herself to Roose.

Could be worse – drop the magic hat down an old latrine and suddenly you’ve got the Golgothan demon from Dogma after you!

The Man on the Clapham Omnivorebus Review @BronxWench on January 12, 2026 Thank you! And thank you for the review. I appreciated it. I don’t think this is entirely the sort of thing to find a wide audience tbh , but it was fun to get back to write something. It’s a tough one isn’t it? Like, if you really think the horrible monster isn’t real then you must be on a normal bus, having an absolute psychotic break meltdown while hallucinating horrible things. Which is a hugely unpleasant experience. Or so I’ve been told. Some of those pints of cider though? Worth the horror! Then again, if the horror is actually real, at least you aren’t crazy, although it probably doesn’t feel any better. Heh, honestly, I chuckled a bit writing it. I wrote one line for this Buffy fanfic I’m back working on the other day that had me absolutely hurting for laughing, but it’s probably a combination of only me actually finding it funny but also being too silly to leave in so I might have to cut it and leave it for a sillier fanfic down the line. I gotta do a follow up where he’s being rescued from a succubus by a vampire who needs more energy, “Hey, if you want to keep that semen in your balls, let me drink your blood!” ...part 2 conclusion out within a week! Thank you again for the review, I absolutely appreciated it.

The Man on the Clapham Omnivorebus – Part 1 up! Part 2 is basically finished but just going through final grammar/spelling etc checks. I wrote the whole thing out last month, and just did the final draft on part 1 yesterday, with part 2 outstanding. It’s set in the same setting as some of my other stories, but no need to have read them to understand either the sex elements or the supernatural elements. I mean, Dylan hasn’t, and he’s the main character. Review by @InBrightestDay on January 11, 2026 Thank you for the review! No alerts! I’m not very alert myself though so can’t hold forum software to a higher standard. Not bothered about your avatar covering mine – might actually work in my favor given your better reputation! I didn’t let the fear stop me – I just think maybe I should have done! Thank you, though, I’m glad you like it. It was kinda a silly wordplay idea I stretched into a story! The concept of a monster bus is kind of inherently silly, but I figured what the hell, try and be a bit serio-nope. No, there’s a references to a monster being defeated with a dildo [That could be any blonde haired, occasionally-black-eyed, pervert pulling the ‘you shall not pass!’], and a werewolf getting a groper to shit himelf. Oh well! Man, I wrote that line last month. Then the other day I saw a clip of something and I was like “Wait, is this AI? There’s a fucking dinosaur stomping a car in the background.” and then it turns out that the dinosaur – a model – was, in fact, in the background and the clip was genuine. It’s crazy, the days of the camera never lying are long, long gone. I’m just glad it’s the Omnivorebus and not one of those crappy backward Hell names. Suberovinmo? Actually, not terrible. Heh, SCP – Lets send a few Class-D’s to catch the bus. We’ll find it eventually! I’m glad it came out creepy! It’s supposed to be over-the-top in unverse creepy to really make the captive upset and scared and suffer more before they die. Otherwise it’d be quicker to just drop ‘em through the floor into a pool of digestive acid. In universe, it was was not the creation of a then-entirely-balanced mind. In the real world, eh, same probably. The male refractory period be a harsh master. It’s only potential, so it’s not like a pro-life idea at least. Dylan’s been kind of confused, or terrified, or off balance, but finally he hits something he knows the answer too – the fuel tank’s gonna take some time to refill… I don’t think I ever did anything with hair play before, and of course usually it’s pretty much just a teasing/feather touch thing, but that demon’s got a lot of hair, it’s heavy, there’s skin rubbing too, and mentally a fear of death getting his body into reproduce save the genes mode, and all that led to a million to one chance and he’s boiling over like an unwatched pan. I assume some of my characters would react differently, for example: Shannon: “OOOH! That was fun! Come all over me again!” Dylan: “To save my life?” Shannon: *Anakin meme* Dylan: “To save my life, right?” Did you really like the blowjob? I genuinely found myself thinking I hadn’t got any of it all that good after all this time. I’ve written a couple more since, working on another story, and feel like I’m improving while still not *quite* there. I dunno, I guess my writing muscles are atrophied. That’s one of those pubs that has got to have been independently made 1000s of times in the last 41 years, since the first Terminator, I assume, but at that point you’re trying to find a different way to use it. Hey, thank you again, in fairness I don’t even remember a lot of my best, or worst so it’s kinda a vibe feeling that it isn’t as good! I really appreciate you taking the time to leave a review! Part 2 should be up within a week. Pretty much done, but need to final proof it and maybe make a couple small changes.

@InBrightestDay re: “What Am I to You?” It’s nice to cover all the bases. Don’t worry, I’m sure I’ll be back to smut next year. Thank you! Wait, you’re Florida Man? I see you in the news all the time. This is all pretty autobiographical. I remember snow in all of these ways. Thanks for the review!

@JayDee re: “What Am I to You?” From JayDee on January 08, 2026 Yup, based on my own fond memories. And suddenly Christmas becomes Halloween. Right. I was trying to capture how our perception of snow changes over our lifetime. Thanks for the review!

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Apologies if this is annoying, as you almost certainly guessed this from reading the topic, but just in case, you weren’t aware, @GeorgeGlass, I have posted a review of your holiday story. Again, not trying to be annoying; it’s strictly a just-in-case thing. 😅

Summary: Caught by the bus, wounded, horrified, Dylan needed an angel. No mortal alone could escape the insatiable public transport vehicle once snared. He got something else... Feedback: Appreciated but not expected. Fandom: Original / Supernatural. Pairing: OC / OC Warnings: Hum MF Oral Violence Solo story or chaptered story: Chaptered. Part 1 up. URL: Here

I just… I mean, when everyone who sees it says the same thing about a commercial you just have to wonder how it ever made it past those focus testing audiences they ran in Alabam-oh right. Having to share beds was very common in poorer families for years, especially before central heating and that. It was just something people did. It only changes as their relationship does, which is neat! Partial nudity beating out full nudity once again! Those seven veils dancers knew their thing, no wonder you could lose your head over one. IBD over here trying to attract the attention of the valkyries a much less violent way Heh, been a while since I loaded anything but I can still very clearly remember how some issues seem to be utterly invisible until posted.

Well, I responded to Invidia’s review first because of how brief it was, but by far the most detailed review of Meaningful Gifts comes from @JayDee! So perhaps there is no such thing as bad publicity. 😄 Also, many people with incest kinks were awakened that day… Honestly, I hadn’t really considered that until you pointed it out, but it is rather appropriate. I am honestly proud of how the finished product turned out, so, much like Lexi and Drew’s relationship development, this story might have happened exactly when it was meant to. 😊 That was a tricky, but I felt really important part of the story. Meaningful Gifts is a kind of incest story I rarely see. Usually in these stories the sibling relationship starts off completely normal, and then something happens that causes it to shift. I can see why this premise is used, as it works with the basic storytelling structure of the status quo and its disruption by the inciting incident of the plot. However, this was a different approach, about a brother and sister who have been inching toward an incestuous relationship for the majority of their lives, a journey of a thousand tiny steps instead of one or two huge leaps. Thus, it became very much the story of a life together, so the flashbacks were snapshots of this long, gradual evolution of their relationship toward something romantic. I was particularly fond of what you mentioned regarding the bed, because it wasn’t precisely sexual, but instead about this sense of deep emotional intimacy, and how much the siblings have come to enjoy and draw comfort from each other’s physical touch without even really thinking about it, how that started as a way to comfort each other in childhood and now became this deeply cozy form of intimacy. The messed up childhood was part of that, explaining why Lexi and Drew have always been intensely close. Their parents were never outright abusive, but at the same time they were a source of anxiety and stress, which meant the siblings had each other’s backs for most of their lives, leading to an abnormally close bond which just continued to grow, even after they got way from their parents. Thank you! 😊 That was a very late addition, actually, emerging when I was trying to structure the dialogue exchange there in the epilogue, but I think it’s very appropriate. Even if that final step into the sexual dimension of their relationship happened very organically, I like this idea that when they realized it was happening, both siblings needed to consider it and make sure it was what they really wanted before they went further. Me too! There are a few little callbacks like that, but that was the most prominent, and is probably my favorite. In the vein of the general vibe I was going for, it felt both kind of sweet and hot. Ok, so amusingly, the choker had been around for a while, but the chemise was something that only materialized in my head in December. When designing the actual gift-giving scene, I’d known for a long time, like at least a year, about Drew’s “for my soulmate” card, and then later settled on him giving his sister some kind of necklace, something that you could give a sibling, but that feels more romantic given the context of the card. I hadn’t thought a ton about Lexi’s half of the scene, until December when I suddenly panicked because it hit me: Oh shit, what did she get for him? It had to be something more explicitly for a romantic partner, since Lexi was more confident about this in general, and was also going to be the one to guide her little brother through sex, but I wasn’t sure. I finally thought “What if it’s something she wears for him?” and lo and behold, there were holiday sales going that allowed some manner of slip or sexy nightgown to be bought within the financial constraints I’d established for the siblings. I used a photo of a real item I saw available online as reference for Lexi’s chemise. I do have to go back to the choker for a moment, though, because that is one that is very up my alley. I’m not sure why, but when thinking for writing erotic fiction, there is something extremely hot to me about a woman wearing nothing but a necklace, and the contrast of the black lace band against her fair skin was really striking and hot. Glad it worked for more people than just me! 😄 Aaand she won’t be the last tall, well-endowed woman I write! Much appreciated on the point of sensuality, though. I wanted this to be...well, as you said: That is my favorite kind of sex scene, and it’s also fairly rare in terms of what I’ve found in my reading: spicy and sweet. It was very appropriate here, given the emotional context it takes place in. It’s also a reason I’m thankful that this took a little longer to write than it would have otherwise, because I feel like I only got it right during my second attempt at the scene. It is interesting to think about this in the context of another story I must get to some day. There are important differences, but this almost served like a training run for The Spider House. Yua is also a tall, full-chested woman who is deeply sensual a lot of the time, Cody comes from an unpleasant home and their first time together is likely to have some similarities to this. Hopefully I haven’t set a bar so high that TSH can’t measure up! Honestly, I am! I did have to go back and edit a few things even after posting it, but they were mostly minor tweaks here and there. By and large, I’m pretty proud of this one. 😊

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Ah, congratulations! I’d imagine it’s a satisfying thing to finally bring that story series to a close. Interesting. So this isn’t a continuation of Duncan and Company’s story, but is linked to Interregnum instead. The start of a new Holiday Canon?