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Review on Blackburn Chapter 2 by @JayDee
Glad you were happy to see more. I don’t have solid intentions of keeping this particular thing rolling, but as I get inspired and come up with ideas, I’ll certainly write more.
That was a fun little bit, fish out of water sort of bit. Never thought of the Pretty Woman correlation, but it is a bit of a trope. The atmosphere… oh I had to get that. I tried to nail it without being overbearing, to really sell that this was Victorian London in an alternate history (not that alternative. Just more female presence I suppose ).
Glad you enjoyed that. I took some inspiration from ASMR stuff for how to write it, and just had to work on translating it to smut. The polite company line was just one of those amusing little bits I had to throw in.

For Trust the Dead

 
@Sinfulwolf A little bit of approval of my profanity is going to make a monster out of me, I hope you realise, because that means fucking everything, lol. I’m so glad you enjoyed this first chapter. It’s a genre I love soooo goddamn much, and I’m actually pretty proud of this atm. Thank you so much for the review <3

@InvidiaRed does have great ones. But you can also go something a little closer to the subject matter.
“Time Out” or playing with that kind of concept. “Time Out Tension”, or “Steamy Time Out”.
“Kiss and Make Up” a kind of sister title to @CloverReef’s “Hug it Out”
There’s always that classic line “While under this roof (instead thing here)”. Could play with that a bit. “Under this roof”
 
If Ii think of anything else I’ll toss it your way. Unless you already found it.
 

@InvidiaRed does have great ones. But you can also go something a little closer to the subject matter.
“Time Out” or playing with that kind of concept. “Time Out Tension”, or “Steamy Time Out”.
“Kiss and Make Up” a kind of sister title to @CloverReef’s “Hug it Out”
There’s always that classic line “While under this roof (instead thing here)”. Could play with that a bit. “Under this roof”
 
If Ii think of anything else I’ll toss it your way. Unless you already found it.
 

@InvidiaRed does have great ones. But you can also go something a little closer to the subject matter.
“Time Out” or playing with that kind of concept. “Time Out Tension”, or “Steamy Time Out”.
“Kiss and Make Up” a kind of sister title to @CloverReef’s “Hug it Out”
There’s always that classic line “While under this roof (instead thing here)”. Could play with that a bit. “Under this roof”
 
If Ii think of anything else I’ll toss it your way. Unless you already found it.
 

@InvidiaRed does have great ones. But you can also go something a little closer to the subject matter.
“Time Out” or playing with that kind of concept. “Time Out Tension”, or “Steamy Time Out”.
“Kiss and Make Up” a kind of sister title to @CloverReef’s “Hug it Out”
There’s always that classic line “While under this roof (instead thing here)”. Could play with that a bit. “Under this roof”
 
If Ii think of anything else I’ll toss it your way. Unless you already found it.
 

@InvidiaRed does have great ones. But you can also go something a little closer to the subject matter.
“Time Out” or playing with that kind of concept. “Time Out Tension”, or “Steamy Time Out”.
“Kiss and Make Up” a kind of sister title to @CloverReef’s “Hug it Out”
There’s always that classic line “While under this roof (instead thing here)”. Could play with that a bit. “Under this roof”
 
If Ii think of anything else I’ll toss it your way. Unless you already found it.
 

Contrasts also work great.
If the world is pessimistic but the character is staunchly optimistic. Or in a world where everyone doubts themselves. That one character just straight up loves themselves. Humanity is so wonderfully diverse.
having characters answer existential stuff can provide that blissful breath of life that makes your character far more real.
A microcosm in an macrocosm.
Do we shape existence as existence shapes us?
Are we alone in the universe because we perceive ourselves to be alone in the universe?
What if death is as limited as life?
The question of I
The ramifications of the meaning of life being different for everyone
What if there is no glory in war?
The massive implications of single individuals decisions helping shape history. 
Why is apathy worse than death?
Etc...

How about things like struggles with addiction (Smoking, drugs, alcohol, gambling), is not good spouse but is a great friend and/or parent. Someone struggling to make ends meet yet is terrible with money that opens them up to exploitation. A crooked cop that believes the system is fucked anyway so they’re just going to look after themselves (or perhaps some loved ones). A soldier that enjoys killing a bit too much, but has learned to channel it to the battlefield.

How about things like struggles with addiction (Smoking, drugs, alcohol, gambling), is not good spouse but is a great friend and/or parent. Someone struggling to make ends meet yet is terrible with money that opens them up to exploitation. A crooked cop that believes the system is fucked anyway so they’re just going to look after themselves (or perhaps some loved ones). A soldier that enjoys killing a bit too much, but has learned to channel it to the battlefield.

How about things like struggles with addiction (Smoking, drugs, alcohol, gambling), is not good spouse but is a great friend and/or parent. Someone struggling to make ends meet yet is terrible with money that opens them up to exploitation. A crooked cop that believes the system is fucked anyway so they’re just going to look after themselves (or perhaps some loved ones). A soldier that enjoys killing a bit too much, but has learned to channel it to the battlefield.

How about things like struggles with addiction (Smoking, drugs, alcohol, gambling), is not good spouse but is a great friend and/or parent. Someone struggling to make ends meet yet is terrible with money that opens them up to exploitation. A crooked cop that believes the system is fucked anyway so they’re just going to look after themselves (or perhaps some loved ones). A soldier that enjoys killing a bit too much, but has learned to channel it to the battlefield.

How about things like struggles with addiction (Smoking, drugs, alcohol, gambling), is not good spouse but is a great friend and/or parent. Someone struggling to make ends meet yet is terrible with money that opens them up to exploitation. A crooked cop that believes the system is fucked anyway so they’re just going to look after themselves (or perhaps some loved ones). A soldier that enjoys killing a bit too much, but has learned to channel it to the battlefield.

Possible to have them as artifacts, but with such isolation and desolation, they may not work very far outside those little areas of gathered people, because upkeeping the cell towers would just be too damn dangerous. Hell, getting signal could be such a relief because you knew you were close to a pocket of civilization. 

Possible to have them as artifacts, but with such isolation and desolation, they may not work very far outside those little areas of gathered people, because upkeeping the cell towers would just be too damn dangerous. Hell, getting signal could be such a relief because you knew you were close to a pocket of civilization. 

“Oh god, We’re gonna die.” Said Pam bleedingly heavily.  The pack of Wendigo had been a nasty surprise. The sun was setting and somewhere in that dark forest those things waited.
“But look on the bright side. We have full bars.” Jon stated morbidly content as he showed her his phone screen though cracked to hell in back the bars were fully visible
“Nobody’s dying tonight ya dipstick.” Came a third voice.
“Thank god your phone still has those third-party apps installed.” They both turned to see a group emerge looking wary but unbowed. The End had come and gone and they remained.
“Jon, You owe me a keg even at the end of the fricking world your bad taste in apps saved us.” 

Possible to have them as artifacts, but with such isolation and desolation, they may not work very far outside those little areas of gathered people, because upkeeping the cell towers would just be too damn dangerous. Hell, getting signal could be such a relief because you knew you were close to a pocket of civilization. 

A review on “Closing Time” by @InBrightestDay
I certainly had fun with it, and developing the backstory in my mind. I had actually thought about having the fight done in the Halloween short before settling on the fantasy stuff that I did. 
I’m glad you found it kind of funny, cause reading it again I find it a bit awkward. I really was struggling with that part to put it out without sounding overly clumsy. At least there’s some humour for it.
Yep, typo. Supposed to be left leg.
Heh. I did enjoy that line. I couldn’t not put it in once I thought of it.
Well since the whole story was centred around this one night stand, I couldn’t help but just have that attraction and sexual tension start as soon as Lili walked in through the door. Then I started thinking about how to not just make it sexy, but kind of relatable for something that really is bordering on the edge of fantasy (Full on fantasy to me cause I know the backstory). So a couple little moments here and there I felt would help that. And since you liked it, I think it worked.
And yes. Yes I meant screaming, lol. 
The bit at the end I meant to hint at a lonely life Lili has been living. And the drooling well… I included that cause too often media shows sleeping women as these perfect little creatures of beauty. I thought a nice little drool bit might really bring it down to reality. 
Glad you enjoyed! And thank you for reading and commenting!

A review on “Closing Time” by @InBrightestDay
I certainly had fun with it, and developing the backstory in my mind. I had actually thought about having the fight done in the Halloween short before settling on the fantasy stuff that I did. 
I’m glad you found it kind of funny, cause reading it again I find it a bit awkward. I really was struggling with that part to put it out without sounding overly clumsy. At least there’s some humour for it.
Yep, typo. Supposed to be left leg.
Heh. I did enjoy that line. I couldn’t not put it in once I thought of it.
Well since the whole story was centred around this one night stand, I couldn’t help but just have that attraction and sexual tension start as soon as Lili walked in through the door. Then I started thinking about how to not just make it sexy, but kind of relatable for something that really is bordering on the edge of fantasy (Full on fantasy to me cause I know the backstory). So a couple little moments here and there I felt would help that. And since you liked it, I think it worked.
And yes. Yes I meant screaming, lol. 
The bit at the end I meant to hint at a lonely life Lili has been living. And the drooling well… I included that cause too often media shows sleeping women as these perfect little creatures of beauty. I thought a nice little drool bit might really bring it down to reality. 
Glad you enjoyed! And thank you for reading and commenting!

I thought Michael was an Archangel and his doesn’t end with ‘-el’
I think at this point we could concede these are names given to beings that we struggle to understand, and the ones they may hold for themselves don’t match up.

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I thought Michael was an Archangel and his doesn’t end with ‘-el’
I think at this point we could concede these are names given to beings that we struggle to understand, and the ones they may hold for themselves don’t match up.

A review on Blood and Lace chapter 8 by @Tcr
Yes, yes it has. And far too long in the coming as well.
My basis is writing at a Hentai website, so I figure I’d bring a little hentai element into the story. I just… grounded it a bit, and it becomes a bit closer to horror on many levels. Plus tentacles. They’re fun to write. But yes, it was a challenge to have elements of the erotic and sexual/sensual, while also delivering on disturbing and horrorific. It’s a challenge I’m often posing to myself with this story, and it’s been fun.
Eh… possibly a big bad. It is certainly one of the Devil’s that’s been referenced a few times throughout. As to what this particular one has in mind… time will tell there. I’m glad you found that creep factor though. Without it, I figure the presence of this Devil would be diluted. As to the sound of his voice… well, that’s up to the reader eh?
As to the questions, and “What just happened?” well… what do you think just happened? I thought I was fairly clear cut on the delivery, but if I wasn’t… that kind of works in my favour this time around.
The possessed, the damned, I’ve been eager to introduce for awhile. There’s a bunch of variations too that act… ever so slightly different from each other, depending on the sin they were imprisoned within. The ones we have here being Lust. But I had a lot of fun bringing them forth, and trying to present a zombie like foe that just… was odd, and fucked up. I actually took a bit from the comic “Crossed” for inspiration. The duality of them though is of my own design, and it did let me play with ethics and such a little bit between these two characters.
A mix of zombie movie and city riot certainly works for the situation. I wanted that kind of chaos amidst it all.
Heh, that line was inspired by the one in Battle Los Angeles that’s very similar. The question mark thing… it’s a bit of a typo, but it’s more a statement in a question for I suppose. I’ll ponder changing it and how that might alter the delivering in my head.
And I wanted to show that… these four are becoming outsiders. They’re different, physically representing the very thing that seemingly invading. I just figured not everyone would be on board with them.
Well, that jealousy may sap soon enough. We’ll see.
Intentional. I find modern people very cynical, and so I wanted to portray that. I was experimenting a bit using You Tube and Headlines to deliver some world building. How did it turn out overall?
I’m glad you’ve been enjoying Mia’s character arc. Part of it stemmed from my switch in plot and tone for the story, resulting in Mia’s end goal changing. Therefore, higher arc for her.
Now… the relative bookstore owner. While writing I was aware of the cliche, but it’s not a big revelation in my mind if she turns out to be the witch. To me, it was on the nose enough for Mia to start following that particular bread trail and see where it leads. So while cliche, I didn’t want to build it up to be this massive revelation. More a small one.
Yes… yes it does. Her rollercoasting really comes from her addictions. The highs and lows from the drugs, sex, and booze. Each low is getting lower, digging that pit deeper. I was tempted to go a bit cringier, but… people don’t often talk like that. I alreadt feel these examples are a touch extreme, but it works for that particular scene setup. The ending implication was a perfect fade to black moment.
I really do need to involve Sam more. Alas it’s not on the cards for the immediate future. But it felt good to ground Kris in that love again.
 
Thank you as always for the review.

It’s possible they may not fire, but it’s more likely they would at least have used the non-lethal weapons under the pre-tense of actually protecting those trying to break in. I’m not sure what an electro gun would do to a vehicle, but it’s possible it’d be able to shut the vehicle down. Or a few well placed bullets to the tires. 
In the end it’s a small thing that I picked up on that sometimes has to get swept under the rug for the purposes of the story going ahead.

Well… we’ll see.