So @Tcr has left me two reviews! I’ve got em here:
First is for A Private Triumph, the Amazonian recreation of Rome.
I felt showing would work really well here, vs. the typical telling. So I wanted to really show her in action, how she’s earned her accolades. Besides, I thought bringing it into the action right away would hook the reader. Now. I think I may have overdone it a bit, as others have wanted to know more about that character. But, this may be a mileage may vary moment. It’s still something I’ll have to ponder.
And yes, I really tried to show some accurate Roman tactics at the century level.
It is certainly a tricky balance. Especially in an AU world. To build and create a wider setting, without info dumping and boring the character. I thought about a few lines to mention the actual Romans, but I stopped myself. If I ever return to this with a proper story, I’ll mention what happened to the Romans.
I think I might be getting a kink now for parties holding political machinations behind the curtains. But glad you got Rhoda’s discomfort.
And glad the sex was hot!
And the second review was for Blackburn Chapter 2
A few touches here and there to build some context, to build on the character. Cause as I always say “Context makes things hotter”.
I’m, really not entirely sure what you mean here. I don’t think your own italics went in, and I’m not sure what commas you’re referring to.
Heh, no, I imagine most don’t. But that’s the thrill of erotica no? Bring the fantasy to life.
And thank ye. I think it might be my first main use of toys, but I can’t imagine I’ve -never- used em before. Glad you enjoyed.