SirGeneralSir Posted December 16, 2014 Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 so im editing a scene in my story where a guy and girl are having a romantic ish moment of sex, the girl has loved the guy from when they were younger and now she is going to have him. i have him starting with kissing her and slowly sliding down her body, planting feathery light kisses all the way down, lightly tending to her breasts for a few moments but eventually ends up eating her out to a small orgasm. he asks her if she is ready for him and is very considerate of what she feels and wants, the sex is slow and personal and not a jack hammer. she does eventually get on top of him and ride him hard so she can have an earth shattering orgasm, then they lay in bed cuddling, her still on top of him. story is more detailed than this, but what more could i do so that the scene is more .... powerful? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
magusfang Posted December 16, 2014 Report Share Posted December 16, 2014 talk about her anticipation for what she has been longing for so long. Also describe how they see each other...you know soft smooth skin...things like that Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JayDee Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 probably best to leave out a Dirty Sanchez / donkey punch combo. And certainly no ass to mouth. CloverReef 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
magusfang Posted December 17, 2014 Report Share Posted December 17, 2014 As long as it's done tastefully....yeah, never mind... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DrunkenScotsman Posted December 18, 2014 Report Share Posted December 18, 2014 You might even focus more on what and how the characters feel during the act, rather than the physical mechanics of things. Depending on your POV, this could be really easy; but it's doable even in 3rd-person-omniscient. InvidiaRed 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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