SirGeneralSir Posted November 24, 2014 Report Share Posted November 24, 2014 im writing a scene and im kind of conflicted with how to proceed. the idea is that, the guy is being told that because he has special energy in his body, only he can "Cure" three women from a sort of sickness by having sex with them, but not just normal sex, he has to flood their bodies with the energy too. it was explained in the story before and im feeling that it could be a little on the redundant side to do so again and just run right into his encounters with the women. but then again, there is the potential of some reactions from the guy as well as from the fathers that know he is the only cure to save their daughters. so is it better to write with some level of mystery of what happened, or explain it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BronxWench Posted November 24, 2014 Report Share Posted November 24, 2014 Too much exposition alienates readers. If you've already explained the nature of his energy, and what is needed to "cure" the women, then I'd advise you to just make a brief mention to remind readers. They will remember what was already explained. moss gypsy 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SirGeneralSir Posted November 24, 2014 Author Report Share Posted November 24, 2014 so something like, guy walks in and the door closes as the secretary suddenly hears after .... 15 min someone yell "what the fuck did you say?" then it goes back into the room and the other conversation starts or so forth. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BronxWench Posted November 24, 2014 Report Share Posted November 24, 2014 Or perhaps, "What the fuck did you say about a cure?" and then the switch. The word "cure" should remind readers of the earlier explanation. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SirGeneralSir Posted November 24, 2014 Author Report Share Posted November 24, 2014 yeah i think that would be more entertaining to read than just a jump to some time later. thanks again BW, its why i love you guys Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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