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    JayDee reacted to Joe Long in AFF's Tales from the Shoutbox Review Thread 2015   
    That's what I was aiming for. I didn't want anything definitive. I've heard stories about Becky for almost 50 years, many of them different (and most involving alcohol), so I tried to convey that confusion. I had at least one character witness something that they'd swear was supernatural, but that they'd still have a hard time convincing anyone of later "You had to be there..." so that a day, a year, even 20 years later, my characters would be telling the same kind of stories that I grew up hearing.
    My brother-in-law had some to drink, went to the cemetery by the mall and was scared shitless. He won't go back. A writing friend from town read the first draft of this and asked, "Have I told you my story?" Seems her brother and a friend also went to the cemetery by the mall and said they took a flag off of Becky's grave. When they got to the friend's house, his mother said, "Becky called, and said you have something of hers!"
    I was also trying to add humor, and with things like the sign, stuff just pops into my head and I go with it.
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    JayDee reacted to Joe Long in AFF's Tales from the Shoutbox Review Thread 2015   
    Ah, miss meaning you didn't read it (skipped) rather than the story missed.
    This Halloween chapter fits in with the overall story, and will be included as a future chapter when the timeline gets to late October. No sex takes place in the Halloween chapter, but the characters make reference to sex that has happened in earlier chapters (yet to be published)
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    JayDee reacted to Tahn in AFF's Tales from the Shoutbox Review Thread 2015   
    Alrighty, I'm gonna post my review stuffs here.
    Ghosts Aren't Real, says the Vampire to the Werewolf - ChrissyQuinn
    I laughed so hard at this. The Harry Potter and Doctor Who jokes just made this all the better
    Feed the Land - BronxWench
    A sad ending, and I wanna know more about the world and characters, but well done. Is this part of another series by you, or straight up original?
    Becky's Grave - JoeLong
    I was hoping for more interaction with the ghosty. I do, however, get that this is part of another story, so you probably can't do that and it still fit in.
    Girls Who Wear Glasses - Magusfang
    Dang man. Well done. You overachiever you. I like the concept, and how it all plays out. Can't wait to read the chapters that you are making about these characters.
    The Phone - Desiderius_Price
    I did skip reading this one cuz I don't want spoilers. Gonna hafta come back to it later.
    The Glory Hole to Hell - C.L.Mustafic
    The bigotry in this makes me wince, but the fact that it is a crucial part of the story makes it all better. Through it we begin to hate those characters, and feel a sense of justice when they die. Good job. I also find it sad that they only have one night to spend together, and most of it is spent getting victims, covering up the deaths, and reliving their own deaths. So sad.
    Fucking Halloween Party - JayDee
    This was funnier than the summary let on. It does leave me wanting to know more about her though. We get snippets of her past, but I wanna know more. I think I'm gonna hafta look up those other stories.
    From the Ashes - Tahn
    Yeah...moving on...
    Snap - GeorgeGlass
    Holy crap dude! That was freaky, good job!
    Nightmare's Dream - Perverted_Pages
    Wow, gruesome. Also, ouch!
    Death has an Ugly Face - Tahn
    ...I really hope everyone knows who Vincent Price is.
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    JayDee reacted to GeorgeGlass in AFF's Tales from the Shoutbox 2015   
    I just posted my chapter. Probably correctly.
    This is the first sex-free story I've ever posted on AFF (although it's definitely not for children). So Chrissy, thanks for inspiring me to take a stroll outside my comfort zone. And thanks, of course, for organizing this thing.
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    JayDee reacted to DirtyAngel in AFF's Tales from the Shoutbox 2015   
    a day in the life of a dirty angel? just saying
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    JayDee reacted to Daye in JayDee's Review Reply Thread (LOTR)   
    Or she could take them over. "Instead of a Dark Lord you would have a Queen! Not dark but beautiful and terrible as the Morn! "
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    JayDee got a reaction from BronxWench in JayDee's Review Reply Thread (LOTR)   
    Ginny Weasley and the Hospitality of the Orcs takes the hoary old crossover special of a character magically transported to Middle Earth (admittedly, more commonly an OFC with incredible skills and beauty) and fucks it.

    While a reviewer elsewhere was happy to see the Orc use oil for the anal so as to avoid chafing himself, the poor dear, the AFF review is as follows:

    Thanks for the review! Yeah, the Orcs pretty much succeeded entirely via element of surprise. The teachers or even less-surprised students should be able to thrash them pretty soundly, the run-of-the-mill LOTR Orcs aren't all that challenging, no wonder the Urak-Hai look down on them!
    I guess for a follow up I could Bamf Galadriel amongst Death Eaters over in the Potter universe. "...and within seconds, the Death Eaters were all dead," yeah, too short, maybe.
    Thanks again!
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    JayDee got a reaction from BronxWench in AFF's Tales from the Shoutbox 2015   
    JayDee - Summary: A particularly unpleasant magic bomb will kill everybody at a Halloween party, and most of the surrounding block, if Shannon the Succubus can't find the bombmaker and get them to disarm it the only way she knows how. ie, with snuggling. Title (subject to change): Succubi With Clean Faces
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    JayDee reacted to DemonGoddess in holy/celestial warriors   
    TAKE ME WITH YOU!!!!!
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    JayDee reacted to BronxWench in holy/celestial warriors   
    Gah! Not Horse Mpreg!
    ::runs screaming for the brain bleach::
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    JayDee got a reaction from BronxWench in holy/celestial warriors   
    It is "Differently Sane" King Ludvig's famed black stallion Cocotte, in the role of the horse Grane.
    So Magus' father, surely? Or is this Horse mpreg just to make BW whimper?
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    JayDee got a reaction from BronxWench in holy/celestial warriors   
    Would you mess with this woman?
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    JayDee got a reaction from WillowDarkling in holy/celestial warriors   
    Would you mess with this woman?
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    JayDee got a reaction from DemonGoddess in holy/celestial warriors   
    Would you mess with this woman?
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    JayDee reacted to BronxWench in Am I allowed to have an index?   
    You can put them in the main story summary, which avoids the chapter-spoilers. That's perfectly fine. You could even put them all at the top of the first chapter, if they don't fit in the summary field, which is only 240 characters.
    As long as they are somewhere a reader will see them, and know what to expect in the course of the story, we're good. The reasoning is that certain things are triggers, and we don't want readers getting blindsided by running into content they'd not willingly have read.
    And in the forum thread, if you wanted to include them in the index, next to each chapter, that's absolutely fine as well. Since readers would find the index url after reading a chapter, it certainly wouldn't be a spoiler for them.
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    JayDee reacted to ChrissyQuinn in AFF's Tales from the Shoutbox 2015   
    Welcome Goblins and Ghouls!
    I'm offering you all the chance to participate in a scare with some flair! That is of course Tales from the Shout Box, a collection of one shot original fiction with a Halloween theme from our wicked wordsmiths here on Adult-fanfiction.org.

    Guidlines:
    One Shot (Max. 50k words) Halloween element (Ghosts, witches, werewolves, vampires, demons... things that go bump in the night) Original Fiction At the top each story MUST include the tags for your content. At the bottom include a link to your profile. Before you add your story please add a 255 character summary of your content here in your post declaring your interest. ​On the 25th of October, I will post in the archives a story titled "AFF's Tales from the Shoutbox 2015" and add collaborators (I think that's how it works). You may add more than one story as long as it fits the Halloween theme. Also, the story does not have to be sexual in nature.
    If you're interested please reply with your pen name on the archives, a short description of what you might write about and the title if you don't have a title that's fine just put (unknown). (Example: see below). I will keep track here of those author's interested. We might even vote on the best story or something too... who knows.
    Story link: Here

    Participating Authors
    ChrissyQuinn - Summary: Evan and Garrett end up in the haunted sacred circle of the werewolves after Evan claims ghosts aren't real. Title: Ghosts don't Exist, Says the Vampire to the Werewolf Tahn - Summary - Can a ghost find love with the daughter of the one he gave his life to save? Title: From the Ashes. KoKoa_B - Summary/Synopsis: News channels start to report sightings of aliens on the afternoon of Halloween. Is it a hoax or is this the real thing? Title: The Invasion
    BronxWench - Summary: The veil is thin at Samhain, and dark things are stirring at the turn of the year. Will Teagan survive his first Ritual? Title:(Unknown) Joe Long - Summary: Joe, Hannah and a handful of their teenage friends and family from One Thousand Apologies conclude their Halloween party is lame and head to a cemetery in the midst of the dark woods in search of Becky, the infamous local ghost. Title: Becky's Grave CL Mustafic -Summary: Will and Pete loved each other in a time when doing so could get you killed. Flash forward seventy-five years and you can still find people that wouldn't think twice about doing just that to a couple of 'faggots'. What happens every Halloween night at the abandoned and reputedly haunted house at the end of Loon Lane might not change any bigoted opinions but it will make you think twice about what's behind the next glory hole...- Title: The Glory Hole to Hell Perverted_Pages - Summary: Dunno yet, just know it's going to be ghastly. Title: (Unknown) Dirty Angel - Summary: Carrie goes to her first Halloween party and once again, with the help of her two friends Libido and Alcohol, gets herself into a situation that she never saw coming. Title: A Tricky Treat Magusfang - Summary: Gayle works in a small office and as the nerdy girl she is all but invisible to the men around her. But she decides to make some drastic changes and she garners more attention than she planned on at the office Halloween party. Title: Girls Who Wear Glasses Juleslea - Summary: Jessy hasn't been home since school started, despite her mom's constant nagging. Its only an hour away, so she has no excuse, and with the family's Halloween tradition falling on a Saturday, she no longer has a choice. Maybe she's getting too old for the stuff; maybe she's just too stressed from school; and maybe everything at home is not as normal as it seems. Title: Who Says You Can't Go Home George Glass - Summary: A man convicted of murdering his own wife and children is visited by a reporter who hopes to be the first to find out why he did it. [Working] Title: Confession is Bad for the Soul JayDee - Summary: A particularly unpleasant magic bomb will kill everybody at a Halloween party, and most of the surrounding block, if Shannon the Succubus can't find the bombmaker and get them to disarm it the only way she knows how. ie, with snuggling. Title (subject to change): Succubi With Clean Faces Tahn - Summary:You are on one side of the door, but bad things await on both sides, what will you do? Title: Death has an Ugly Face


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    JayDee got a reaction from BronxWench in Crossover query   
    Best avoided. It's just a nasty, mean-spirited little thing which will need the trigger tags. Would have been better if I'd gone for Orcs gathered round painting another, nude, Orc and discussing their dislike of more conceptual art.
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    JayDee reacted to DemonGoddess in Crossover query   
    aha! They're muddy finger painters!
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    JayDee got a reaction from BronxWench in Crossover query   
    Thanks for confirming this, yes, it mostly takes place close to the Misty Mountains, known for their salmon fishing, snowboarding and Orc figure painting studios.
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    JayDee got a reaction from BronxWench in Crossover query   
    Sadly the fine art won't make it into the oneshot; this one features the less cultured Orcs. The sort who give the delicate, sensitive aesthete orcs of brush and canvas a bad name.
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    JayDee reacted to DemonGoddess in Crossover query   
    If most of the story occurs in Middle Earth, then yes, you can put it in the LotR crossover section.
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    JayDee reacted to GeorgeGlass in Need help with a plot device   
    Wow--thanks for all the input!
    I like the idea of the hospital mix-up, especially because it helps to explain where the niece has been for the last several months. And the ferry-crash idea leads nicely into that, because it creates a plausible "presumed dead" scenario for the niece.
    This was a huge help. Thanks again, all.
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    JayDee got a reaction from GeorgeGlass in Need help with a plot device   
    Basic human incompetance works pretty well. There was a story in the news recently of a woman informed of her mother's death, only for the doctors to have confused her with another patient.
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    JayDee reacted to DemonGoddess in Cartoons: Extreme Ghostbusters   
    added
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    JayDee reacted to DemonGoddess in A milestone of sorts...   
    awesome! agree with bronxie, it's def quality WITH th quantity!
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