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Well now that you put it into that context, I think the character should work fine. It really goes to show how a bare-bones character profile only tells a very small part of the character, and is probably rather unfair to him/her/it by doing that. So you should write the story with the character how you wish, and make adjustments as the story goes along, if needed.

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I think that's a good improvement. It's also entirely possible the character might grow and develop while you're writing the story, which is a good thing. I guess that's why I never put this level of work into a character before I write the story, so I can let the story develop the character, as it were. But I think it's looking good. I hope other people will give you their opinion as well, though, so you don't just have my thoughts.

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Well... to be honest, the character comes across to me, rather strongly, as a Mary Sue. Now don't get me wrong, I'm not one of those rabid anti-Sue haters - I'm very forgiving indeed - but this really does sound strongly Mary Sue. She's not just an artist and writer, but an EXCEPTIONAL artist and writer, combined with "faults" that, to be honest, are pretty common to many teenagers of that age, so I don't see her flaws as being of any significance. I'm a strong believer in real flaws in characters, because they prevent them from seeming two-dimensional and just an extension of ourselves. And they also make the characters come across as more real and can gain the reader's sympathies better. So maybe if you could find ways to flesh her out a little more, I'm sure she'd be great.

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