InBrightestDay

Out of curiosity, what are the other, non-juice prompts?

So last month, after I reread Whore of Heaven for review-writing purposes, I ended up writing a short story (in the neighborhood of 1,000 words) called The Least I Can Do, which is another archangel’s PoV during the story’s events.  It’s in canon with WoH’s original ending and I may post it here after The Woman in the Statue is complete.
Naturally, this pattern repeated itself, and when I got all depressed by The Girl Next Door, I wrote another 1,000-ish word story about post-corruption Lailah called Stronger.  I can’t really post this one, given that it’s a followup to TGND and I haven’t received permission, but it did make me feel a little better to vent my sadness onto the page.
I’ve now written two of these things.  If the internet continues to fuck with me, I may end up with my own subgenre: Sad Angel Oneshots.  The abbreviation for this amuses me somewhat, as it may cause confusion in the future.
“Yeah, bad things happened to another female angel and now I’m writing another SAO fic.”
“Wait, what does all this have to do with Sword Art Online?”

So last month, after I reread Whore of Heaven for review-writing purposes, I ended up writing a short story (in the neighborhood of 1,000 words) called The Least I Can Do, which is another archangel’s PoV during the story’s events.  It’s in canon with WoH’s original ending and I may post it here after The Woman in the Statue is complete.
Naturally, this pattern repeated itself, and when I got all depressed by The Girl Next Door, I wrote another 1,000-ish word story about post-corruption Lailah called Stronger.  I can’t really post this one, given that it’s a followup to TGND and I haven’t received permission, but it did make me feel a little better to vent my sadness onto the page.
I’ve now written two of these things.  If the internet continues to fuck with me, I may end up with my own subgenre: Sad Angel Oneshots.  The abbreviation for this amuses me somewhat, as it may cause confusion in the future.
“Yeah, bad things happened to another female angel and now I’m writing another SAO fic.”
“Wait, what does all this have to do with Sword Art Online?”

Some suggested shock twists for the end of it:
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Kevin sighed, “I like you an’ all as a friend, but after Hobbs captured and seduced me I am ruined for women and we’re having a baby together.”
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“Well,” Kevin said “That’s all that dealt with, what now?”
“Now? Now I go have a word with the Seraph who ordered no angel may release me, and put my sandal so far up her ass she can lick her own shit from my heel.”
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“...you mean, Calista was a succubus all along?”
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“I have repented all my sins and accepted Christ Jesus as my personal Lord and saviour. Will you pray with me?”
“Don’t listen to him! Kick his ass!”
“I’m sorry, Kevin, this is a Jack Chick universe. No matter how evil you are, that’s what you do to go the heaven. But Abdul’s damned.”
“Fuck!”
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“Hi! Just to stick my oar in while you’re almost dead, see this? This is my spork. Now, this is going to hurt you a lot more than it hurts me.”
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“...you mean, Abdul was a furry all along?”
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“Is that a scythe in your pocket or are you just pleased to see me?”
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“What… what happened here?”
“Eparlegna has already been defeated, but how?”
“It was me!”
“CYBORG CHUCK NORRIS?”
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“What the hell is all this incest porn doing in your locker, Private?”
“Sir, family mementos, sir.”
*
...ok, yeah, probably for the best I’m not the one writing this.

Nice to see you drop by, Captain.
Afraid I’m not much good at the unexpected, but I still try to tell a decent story, and hopefully that’s how this one will come out.

Nice to see you drop by, Captain.
Afraid I’m not much good at the unexpected, but I still try to tell a decent story, and hopefully that’s how this one will come out.

Ruined? No. But I do love a good story where innocence and purity are corrupted into deviance and debauchery. Sometimes I like a happy ending, sometimes its nice to see things end in a… not so nice kind of way. I have an equal opportunity  attitude toward endings. My main thing when it comes to endings is that they have a least a little bit of a twist, and hopefully are somewhat unexpected. 

Definitely not going to say my ending will be better than his or that I’m a better writer.  At best, we just write different stuff (I’ve never had motivation to write an erotic corruption story, while that’s literally every story he did).  In all honesty, I’m probably a significantly worse writer than he is.
For the record, if you’re into that kind of thing (or if seeing bad things happen to female angels is a turn-on, as it is for many people) I’d highly recommend the story.
https://www.literotica.com/s/the-girl-next-door-33
I just have these weird emotional responses I wish I didn’t have, and honestly don’t fully understand.  I don’t know why “bad thing happens to female angel” is an Instant Sad Button for me; I’m sure I was supposed to write Lailah off as a villain who had to be defeated and not think about what happens to her afterward, but I couldn’t avoid worrying about it.  I’m not a normal person, that much is for sure.
Wha...oh, you mean Detective Martinez’s badass moment.  Well, thank you.
At the very least, we can get The Woman in the Statue up to Part Eight before the delay hits.  Of course, me not finishing it might be better for people who really liked Whore of Heaven as it originally was (I noticed @Mal visited the profile earlier, so my apologies if I ruined something he loved).
It’s almost funny, to be honest.  When I was reading the story and it introduced the captured Lailah, I was like “No...this can’t really be happening...am I being trolled?”
I hope the ending is satisfying when it finally arrives.  I don’t know that it will be, but I’m definitely trying my hardest.

I totally misunderstood the angel corruption concept originally. My first stab was having someone offer a guardian fifty bucks to look the other way while they smuggled some McDonalds in through the back door of Heaven (Wendys has the franchise up there.)
I tried it again in a Greek myth setting.
“Remember, you didn’t see nuthin’ , Argus.”
But in the end I gave it up as a bad job and wrote some shitty snuff instead.
I figure if InBrightestDay is unable to progress with The Woman in the Statue for a while then AFF will maybe get to see other stuff instead – the erotic spider woman story when it’s written maybe, or the already done consensual incest fic! Positives to be had, and when it is done, it is done.

Definitely not going to say my ending will be better than his or that I’m a better writer.  At best, we just write different stuff (I’ve never had motivation to write an erotic corruption story, while that’s literally every story he did).  In all honesty, I’m probably a significantly worse writer than he is.
For the record, if you’re into that kind of thing (or if seeing bad things happen to female angels is a turn-on, as it is for many people) I’d highly recommend the story.
https://www.literotica.com/s/the-girl-next-door-33
I just have these weird emotional responses I wish I didn’t have, and honestly don’t fully understand.  I don’t know why “bad thing happens to female angel” is an Instant Sad Button for me; I’m sure I was supposed to write Lailah off as a villain who had to be defeated and not think about what happens to her afterward, but I couldn’t avoid worrying about it.  I’m not a normal person, that much is for sure.
Wha...oh, you mean Detective Martinez’s badass moment.  Well, thank you.
At the very least, we can get The Woman in the Statue up to Part Eight before the delay hits.  Of course, me not finishing it might be better for people who really liked Whore of Heaven as it originally was (I noticed @Mal visited the profile earlier, so my apologies if I ruined something he loved).
It’s almost funny, to be honest.  When I was reading the story and it introduced the captured Lailah, I was like “No...this can’t really be happening...am I being trolled?”
I hope the ending is satisfying when it finally arrives.  I don’t know that it will be, but I’m definitely trying my hardest.

Definitely not going to say my ending will be better than his or that I’m a better writer.  At best, we just write different stuff (I’ve never had motivation to write an erotic corruption story, while that’s literally every story he did).  In all honesty, I’m probably a significantly worse writer than he is.
For the record, if you’re into that kind of thing (or if seeing bad things happen to female angels is a turn-on, as it is for many people) I’d highly recommend the story.
https://www.literotica.com/s/the-girl-next-door-33
I just have these weird emotional responses I wish I didn’t have, and honestly don’t fully understand.  I don’t know why “bad thing happens to female angel” is an Instant Sad Button for me; I’m sure I was supposed to write Lailah off as a villain who had to be defeated and not think about what happens to her afterward, but I couldn’t avoid worrying about it.  I’m not a normal person, that much is for sure.
Wha...oh, you mean Detective Martinez’s badass moment.  Well, thank you.
At the very least, we can get The Woman in the Statue up to Part Eight before the delay hits.  Of course, me not finishing it might be better for people who really liked Whore of Heaven as it originally was (I noticed @Mal visited the profile earlier, so my apologies if I ruined something he loved).
It’s almost funny, to be honest.  When I was reading the story and it introduced the captured Lailah, I was like “No...this can’t really be happening...am I being trolled?”
I hope the ending is satisfying when it finally arrives.  I don’t know that it will be, but I’m definitely trying my hardest.

I may have to check it out, mostly cause I do enjoy erotic horror (even dabble in writing it a bit), and while I love corruption, I’m fairly picky with it. 
Still, writer’s block happens, and I do hope you smash through it, cause I’m actually really excited to read a happy ending for the woman for once. 

I think theory number 2 sounds quite plausible…

About a possible writers block coming up. Try to don’t worry too much about it...it is a bit like having a bad cough where the cough can be triggered by you just had to cough (repeated for a couple of months). At the end of day us nonprofessional writers can do something completely different if it is hard to make progress since we don’t use our writing to get food on the table.

I also think that some stories with happy endings require extra effort. In programming there are often jokes about 90% of code taking 90% of the time and the remaining 10% taking the other 90  % of the time. The same applies to quality writing where connecting the final plot points often take a surprising proportion of the total time. Speaking from experience it might seen like you hit a writers block when you are in middle of it but with hindsight you realize you were just making slow progress with a very important part of the story.
 

Really sorry to hear about your writer’s block. I haven’t read the guy’s story so I’m totally biased and basing this on only your writing, but I bet your happy ending will be better than their unknown fate for angel/happy ending! From what you already mentioned in email you got a bunch of great elements to string together that I don’t want to list here and risk spoilers. Not to mention that penultimate scene you’ve already written where kneeling isn’t an option.
But, hey, writer’s block is writer’s block – there’s no pressure and no stress. If you get parts one through eight up and then hit us with part nine in ten years it’ll still be beautiful to see from our end! There’s a bit near the end of the last full part you sent me, that’s awesome happy and call all on its own (around about the wink).
Also, I went to the future back when I was just an imp and honestly it’s not all it’s cracked up to be. Dead earth, poison seas, burning 500 mph winds blowing constantly across a planet devoid of all life except for in Australia where they just cranked up the air conditioning a bit and said at least the bloody poms had stopped whinging.

I don’t know if that’s a problem.  I had the summary/blurb for WitS be from Kevin’s PoV, but the story isn’t all from his perspective.

I don’t know if that’s a problem.  I had the summary/blurb for WitS be from Kevin’s PoV, but the story isn’t all from his perspective.

I think I’m getting closer. Now i’m worrying. Cause like its about Lorain but its not all in his perspective and just I’m over here like

Found that post!
 

You mean story summaries?  If so, then yeah, that’s a tricky thing to do.  It took several tries for me, alternating between the short summary meant to make the reader go “the hell is that?” and the longer one, like you’d see on the back of a book.
And, of course, the whole time you’re wondering if you’re giving the reader too much information about the story, or not enough.

*Looks at Urban Dictionary* Oh...Roman shower, like how in Rome there were those rooms where...yeah, I’ll keep that image to myself.
You know, I almost read this, purely because I saw that no one was reviewing it.  I then realized two things.
A “pity review” is probably kind of insulting. Your summary specifically warned me not to read it, and that doesn’t generally happen... I figured I’d heed the warning and stay out.

*Looks at Urban Dictionary* Oh...Roman shower, like how in Rome there were those rooms where...yeah, I’ll keep that image to myself.
You know, I almost read this, purely because I saw that no one was reviewing it.  I then realized two things.
A “pity review” is probably kind of insulting. Your summary specifically warned me not to read it, and that doesn’t generally happen... I figured I’d heed the warning and stay out.

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