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So I’m over on Literotica reading this Erotic Horror story called “The Girl Next Door.” It’s about succubi, and it’s creepy and sexy and honestly kind of sad, but it’s carried me along for about four chapters seeing what’s going to happen next.
Then at the end of Chapter 4 and continuing into Chapter 5, out of absolutely nowhere, we find out that the succubi have captured an angel, specifically the Angel Lailah, the only female angel. The first scene of Chapter 5 is then concerned with her corruption (in these kinds of stories that’s less “seduced to evil” and more “physically pumped full of evil and forcibly transformed into something villainous”).
There are three explanations I can think of for why this is happening to me.
- After spending too much time reading Thundercloud’s G.S.P. story, I have absorbed Jennifer’s superpower of Terrible Luck.
- The internet has become sentient, knows I have a thing about bad things happening to female angels, and is actively fucking with me.
- JayDee knows Kingmaker711, and ten years ago, they were talking, and JayDee said something like “You won’t believe this email I got about my story where a female angel is raped and tortured,” and Kingmaker was like “Oh yeah?” and JayDee was like “Yeah, some guy wants to write her a happy ending,” and Kingmaker was like “Man that’s bullshit; you gotta stop him,” and JayDee was like “I mean, I already said he could, besides it’s been a while and I haven’t seen anything, so he’s probably not writing it,” and Kingmaker was like “No, dog; I have a plan. In 2013, I’ll write a story about succubi, which will be totally normal for the first 3.95 chapters or so, and then I’ll reveal that their apocalyptic plan involves corrupting a female angel, using her actual role in Jewish folklore so it fits, and they’ll succeed, but only after really dragging it out so this is as upsetting as possible, and then she’ll just be hissing villain for the rest of the final chapter and when the other angels show up they won’t try to fix her, but instead she’ll be sentenced to exile until Judgment Day, and naturally Email Guy will be wondering how she can repent and be redeemed since she was basically mindwiped and didn’t choose to do any of this, and then I’ll have the last time we see her be while she and Michael are locked in combat and he’s trying to strangle her, so Email Guy will realize that I haven’t established whether or not angels have souls in this setting and will have to contemplate Lailah being wiped from existence as punishment for things she didn’t choose to do, and just to make sure Email Guy can’t just write off the story, I’ll give it an ending with a gloriously insane action scene featuring the human protagonist, Michael, Gabriel and Raphael, and I’ll give it the most amazingly happy ending of any of my stories, as in the human race isn’t destroyed and Creation doesn’t unravel,” and JayDee was like “I don’t know if I see your point,” and Kingmaker was like “Email Guy will read this just as he’s attempting to write the Happy Ending part of his Happy Ending story, and he’ll be so depressed over Lailah that he’ll get serious writer’s block. Problem solved!” and JayDee was like “Can you see the future?” and Kingmaker was like “I’m from the future!”
Or maybe it was just an unlucky coincidence.
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I think theory number 2 sounds quite plausible…
About a possible writers block coming up. Try to don’t worry too much about it...it is a bit like having a bad cough where the cough can be triggered by you just had to cough (repeated for a couple of months). At the end of day us nonprofessional writers can do something completely different if it is hard to make progress since we don’t use our writing to get food on the table.
I also think that some stories with happy endings require extra effort. In programming there are often jokes about 90% of code taking 90% of the time and the remaining 10% taking the other 90 % of the time. The same applies to quality writing where connecting the final plot points often take a surprising proportion of the total time. Speaking from experience it might seen like you hit a writers block when you are in middle of it but with hindsight you realize you were just making slow progress with a very important part of the story. -
QuoteI haven’t read the guy’s story so I’m totally biased and basing this on only your writing, but I bet your happy ending will be better than their unknown fate for angel/happy ending!
Definitely not going to say my ending will be better than his or that I’m a better writer. At best, we just write different stuff (I’ve never had motivation to write an erotic corruption story, while that’s literally every story he did). In all honesty, I’m probably a significantly worse writer than he is.
For the record, if you’re into that kind of thing (or if seeing bad things happen to female angels is a turn-on, as it is for many people) I’d highly recommend the story.
https://www.literotica.com/s/the-girl-next-door-33
I just have these weird emotional responses I wish I didn’t have, and honestly don’t fully understand. I don’t know why “bad thing happens to female angel” is an Instant Sad Button for me; I’m sure I was supposed to write Lailah off as a villain who had to be defeated and not think about what happens to her afterward, but I couldn’t avoid worrying about it. I’m not a normal person, that much is for sure.
QuoteThere’s a bit near the end of the last full part you sent me, that’s awesome happy and call all on its own (around about the wink).
Wha...oh, you mean Detective Martinez’s badass moment. Well, thank you.
At the very least, we can get The Woman in the Statue up to Part Eight before the delay hits. Of course, me not finishing it might be better for people who really liked Whore of Heaven as it originally was (I noticed @Mal visited the profile earlier, so my apologies if I ruined something he loved).
QuoteI think theory number 2 sounds quite plausible…
It’s almost funny, to be honest. When I was reading the story and it introduced the captured Lailah, I was like “No...this can’t really be happening...am I being trolled?”
QuoteI also think that some stories with happy endings require extra effort. In programming there are often jokes about 90% of code taking 90% of the time and the remaining 10% taking the other 90 % of the time. The same applies to quality writing where connecting the final plot points often take a surprising proportion of the total time. Speaking from experience it might seen like you hit a writers block when you are in middle of it but with hindsight you realize you were just making slow progress with a very important part of the story.
I hope the ending is satisfying when it finally arrives. I don’t know that it will be, but I’m definitely trying my hardest.
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I may have to check it out, mostly cause I do enjoy erotic horror (even dabble in writing it a bit), and while I love corruption, I’m fairly picky with it.
Still, writer’s block happens, and I do hope you smash through it, cause I’m actually really excited to read a happy ending for the woman for once.
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