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Hi, all. Chapter 3 notes. First, I hope I’ve done a good enough job telling the story instead of telling about the story. The first scene at the Burrow shows the changes and non-changes from the Lincoln Way characters. While the relationships between the Dvorak/Floyd brothers are less contentious here, they are still not all “skittles and beer.” John is actually civil to Abner Junior and William, and only part of that is the recently demanded by Petunia reconciliation in exchange for her reconciling with Lilly. Frank is also not nearly as big of a dick to his son Andy as he is in Lincoln Way, although his inability to help his dyslexic son is still present, and still sees Andy moving in with John Dvorak. Frank’s relationship with his (dead here) brother is slightly better, because Rick actually flew Army helicopters in combat here, instead of being washed out for asthma during flight school. One of the other “random switch-flips” here was Junior and William’s relationships with John and their mother. While in Lincoln Way Junior and William believed Abner Senior could do no wrong, here the two biological sons of Abner Doubleday Dvorak took a more nuanced view of life. They protected John instead of bullying or trying to seduce him, even while they still knew that John and Richard didn’t share their biological father with them. Also, unlike in Lincoln Way, they also knew who helped Abner the First embark on his “journey of self discovery through a sausage casing.” While neither Junior nor William could resist a ten inch dick, they weren’t nearly as affectionate to the man who hosted it, even if they both agreed that “Dad had it coming. He should have fucked us who wanted it instead of trying for ‘little John.’” They were also not resentful towards their mother at all. When Sally Dvorak died, she had four loving sons gathered around her to see her off, even if the older two and the younger two didn’t get along well. While John continued to own the house, it became more a of a family “Museum and Refuge” than a rental property. David succeeds in keeping his very close friendship with Tim Cash, because he works at it. You saw more of that here. He’s also mostly formed an equally close friendship with Bill Weasley. You’ve also seen more of that here. Charley and Aaron will be members of this ‘orbit,’ because of the affection each has for their closest younger brothers. In JKR canon Bill is closest with Charley out of all of his siblings, though he’s the “cool and admired” older brother to all of them. Likewise, Aaron is David’s “third birthday present,” and while Rick and Stacy Dvorak were much better parents than Sam and Stacy Kopchek, David did fix more than his share of bottles and diaper changes for Aaron, even if his parents were actually watching from the wings here. In the “tell about the story” paragraphs leading to the press conference and wand purchases, I gave a quick snapshot into the workings of the Dvorak and Weasley families. John is friends with Sirius Black as well as Remus Lupin, and Sirius wants to be a part of Harry’s life, even while freely admitting that blood wards stronger than the Hogwarts wards are the best place for Harry to grow up, with two loving parents and a house full of loving siblings. Pet is taking a leaf out of Lilly’s book on the remaining Marauders. You’ve already seen the last of her discomfort with Remus’s “furry little problem,” but she knows to keep the “Mutt” on a tight leash. The boys will see their toy brooms, in Devon, and off-camera. Pet may be starting to like magic, but she really enjoys her walls free of broom-handle sized holes, thank you very much. Frank in both stories is all about family and responsibility, even if he isn’t any good with his youngest son. Here, he buys a house by John’s, for his and Junior’s use when needed. Junior and Hannah will not die in this story prior to the 1990s, even though William Dvorak is toast. Sometimes, even in real life, things are decided in seconds. In Lincoln Way, Junior makes it to a railroad crossing with their daughter in the car with them, and they pay with their lives. Here, Junior and Hannah arrive after the drunk student rams a freight train, if they’re on that road then at all. While Frank didn’t stage the ‘impromptu’ press conference, he absolutely knew that it was likely, and he planned ahead; including a press release to hand out. He also managed to build up enough ‘clout’ with MaCUSA to have them issue diplomatic license plates for his car, which is almost never done in real life, or here. Rita Skeeter also discovered, much to her own cost, that the Taylor girls are almost as nasty to deal with as the Evans girls if you piss them off. Even in JKR canon, Vernon Dursley never pushed Petunia further than she intended to go herself anyway. For the wand selection, I ended up having to do more wandlore research than I had done up to now for Third Time’s a Soul Bond, and that ‘Ron Weasley’ actually makes wands. The first thing I tried was one of the online “wand selection personality tests.” I took the test for Danny Dvorak, giving the closest answers to what Danny himself would give if he was a real person. The “options” didn’t match up with Danny would have chosen, so I had to pick the “closest” to the right answer for him. And, the “quiz” gave Danny The Elder Wand. I wasn’t going to have a fourteen year old guitar-playing Harley-Davidson fanatic bushwack Albus Dumbledore, so he got what he got here. While this is a Harry Potter story, and Harry Potter will do the heavy lifting once he’s older than a toddler, the Lincoln Way characters will have some involvement in the story beyond “background scenery.” This story is also focusing more on David Dvorak when compared to his fellow Lincoln Way characters. David will still be part of The Treasures, The Treasures will still be very popular and profitable, and he’ll still be an accomplished helicopter pilot; but he will do other things. And while the Lincoln Way characters won’t be “Deus ex Machina” characters, they won’t be wimps, either. You will see those cherry wands again. The rest of the Dvoraks got wands that matched their personalities. Likewise; Sirius, Bill, and Charley got wands most suited to their attitudes. Ronnie will eventually get a wand in much better condition. And, Ron won’t deal with his ash wand being weakened by being an “heirloom” wand. It will work quite well for him, actually. We will see several more chapters, including at least one run “on camera” of the Hogwarts Express before Harry goes to Hogwarts to learn magic. Cheers!

Chapter three, “More Arrivals for Little Whinging,” is now posted and available. Beyond a minor typo, nothing has been edited in prior chapters. Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444&chapter=3

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Hi, all. I posted a revision to Chapter 1 at the same time I posted Chapter 2. In Chapter 1, I explicitly wrote out several points that were only implied in the previous version. Chapter 2 notes. First, I explain why this version of John and Catherine Dvorak only had two children. In Riding the Lincoln Way, the explanation is rather obvious, but here, it needed to be explained in a ‘plot-consistent’ way, since Catherine Taylor Dvorak ‘stuck around’ well after Michael’s birth. Next, I show that Remus Lupin was the the ‘truest’ and ‘most consistent’ of the Marauders. In Lincoln Way, John Dvorak has become an expert in rapidly and correctly judging others as to their motives and aspirations towards him and those under his protection. Here, he is housing Lupin, and this pays off right away, and continues to pay off. David Dvorak is also shown to have a similar tendency, which he also has in Lincoln Way, even if it’s less obvious. We also get to see that Harry and Dudley are insane broom fliers, even if their closest friend is not. Next, John describes his ancestors in this universe, and their relationship with the Wizarding world. This is mostly ‘background’ to help explain what happens later on. The ‘hedge academies’ are fanon, not canon, but I’ve used them here The ‘fanon’ idea of ‘lesser magic schools’ makes more sense than JKR’s idea of only one school for an entire region of the world. The ‘big schools’ do get most of the student magic wielders, though. Did you really expect a person with “common sense” to see Peter Pettegrew in his Animagus form to not recognize him? Especially if that person also knows what kind of ‘chunks’ of a person will or won’t survive a serious explosion? John is the more ‘lawful’ of the youngest Dvorak brothers. Rick would have just conjured a baseball bat and ended things right then and there. John was able to tell that Arthur, and all the Weasleys had only been taken advantage of, though Rick would also have seen this. ‘Ol’ Petey’ does manage to get a trial, for what good it does him. John considers Sirius a friend, so he visits him along with Remus in hospital, after Sirius is allowed to go to the hospital. This is more common for boys than for girls, but they also have this happen. You meet the particular person, and all of a sudden, you are closer than siblings, and you freely share secrets that you wouldn’t even dream of sharing with just anyone. This will probably happen with Harry and Ron, it happens here with David and Bill Weasley. Cheers!

Chapter two, “Catching Their Breath,” is now posted. I also made an important revision to Chapter 1, although that revision mostly clarifies stuff that would have been implied in the previous version Thanks in advance for reading. https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444&chapter=2

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Isn’t that the number of the Beast of 42nd Street or something? (42667) Cheers!

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Perhaps I’ll make a more poetic observation next time. Cheers!

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Hi, all. I suppose I can post some chapter notes in this thread beyond any review answers, starting with Chapter 1. First, the openly portrayed sexuality, especially the bisexuality and incest from Riding the Lincoln Way won’t be happening here. The circumstances that caused those particular relationship quirks won’t happen, so the gay incest won’t happen either. The “possible” relationships of the older Dvorak children will happen, but it will be mostly off-camera and in a much more “family-friendly” manner. “The Treasures” will still form and become highly successful, although with at least some different mentors and “discoverers.” A few other “changes” happened pre-story here, starting with Rick Dvorak/Ricardo Floyd’s asthma being discovered much later, seeing Rick medically discharged from the Army as a CW2 on the tail end of his second combat tour as an Army Helicopter Pilot in Vietnam. So several key pre-story plot points from Lincoln either happened completely differently in Yankee Nephew, or didn’t happen at all. John and Catherine actually did marry, and whatever parenting issues she had in Lincoln she didn’t have here. The various pre-story tragedies here were the only way I could see to believably have John taking care of the children he was taking care of when he met Petunia Evans, as well as explaining how a very talented new car salesmen from near Chicago would be working in the UK. Later chapters will reveal more, including why John and Catherine only had the two boys together in this story, even though the remained together much longer than they did in Lincoln. As much as possible, I’m trying to stick close to the canon personality traits of most of the main characters as I understand them, at least to start off. But, since this (like pretty much all HP Hogwarts Fanfiction) is an alternate universe, and the whole point of having John and Petunia marry is to change things. Dudley John Dvorak will not be a “Magic Dudley Dursley.” Dudley Dursley does exist with a different mother, and will be a minor annoying Muggle character in this story, since Vernon and Petunia Dursley will remain in the same primary school district as John and Petunia Dvorak. Likewise, the meeting of Albus Dumbledore and Minerva McGonagall was different than in canon, and I might have to re-write it further. The first of JKR’s multiple plot holes in canon shows up here, and I’ve at least tried to close it up a bit. I might end up re-writing it further, since the PS working relationship Dumbledore and McGonagall have doesn’t seem to make sense in light of the later books. As far as I can tell in canon, Sirius Black didn’t catch Peter Pettigrew until after Harry was placed with the Dursleys, although he probably didn’t know that Harry was there. As for Dumbledore’s motivations, I believe that while Dumbledore might have believed Sirius innocent of betraying the Potters, that he was certain Sirius killed Pettigrew, and twelve innocent bystanders besides, and that Pettigrew as truly dead. In fact, even in canon, Dumbledore doesn’t ‘warm up’ to Black until after he discovers for certain that Peter Pettigrew murdered the Muggle bystanders to frame Sirius and fake his own death. By that time, Fudge was too personally invested, and well as too thoroughly bribed to give Sirius the trial (and exoneration) he rightly should have had. While this may change here, Sirius won’t become Harry’s custodial guardian. The only reason in canon that Sirius Black was a desirable custodial guardian for Harry was that Vernon and Petunia Dursley were a pair of abusive oxygen thieves. John and Petunia Dvorak are not and will not be like that. With a pair of loving sane parents and several siblings rather than a pair of neurotic abusive relatives and a bullying cousin, Harry wouldn’t dream of moving in with Sirius Black, even if he’s freed. While Harry will grow up knowing about the Wizarding World, he won’t be raised in the Wizarding World. He will be firmly planted in both worlds, at least until he starts Hogwarts. Even then, he will know about both the Muggle and Wizarding world. He will remain Harry Potter even while considering John and Petunia parents rather than aunt and uncle. He will only ever be raised with the idea that Lilly set a booby-trap on him, not just to protect him with her love, but to take Voldemort out. He will see Lilly Potter as a warrior and defender, and hope to live up to her example rather than buy into any of the “Boy Who Lived” hype in the Wizarding world. He will have wizard and witch friends before attending Hogwarts, and they will quickly take up the same mindset. Finally, while Harry won’t wear “Dudley’s cast-offs,” he won’t run around wearing new clothing all the time, either. In canon, the Dursleys dressed Harry in Dudley’s old clothes because they didn’t fit, were already worn out, and to humiliate Harry just as much as it was to avoid spending any money on Harry. Here, Harry won’t wear Dudley Dvorak’s cast-offs because they are just more than a month apart in age, and Dudley’s clothes won’t fit Harry. While Dudley Dvorak won’t be a lard-ass, he will actually be ‘big-boned’ as well as muscular for his age. But, John Dvorak is a tightwad at times, and he raises all of his children to be the same way. So, while Harry won’t be wearing garbage, he will dress more like Ron Weasley than Draco Malfoy, despite the Dvoraks being even wealthier than the canon Dursleys. In fact, I found “another Petunia” for Vernon just so I could show what a total asshole he was, even while Petunia found someone to inspire her to become a much better person than she was in canon. Thanks.

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Hi, all. For what it’s worth, I just copy and paste from MS Word into the AFF editor box. Sometimes, I have to fix a paragraph here or there, but nothing like you’re going through. Good luck.

Hi, all. On the off chance anyone reviews The Yankee’s Nephew and the Philosopher’s Stone, this is the review thread. This story is completely separate from my other HP stories on this site. In fact, with possible violence and mild swearing, this story should be SFW. I “borrowed” some characters from my original fiction story, changed them slightly, and sent them off to merry old England. So, instead of going to work for Grunnings Drills and marrying Vernon Dursley, Petunia Evens goes to work for the US State Department and marries John Dvorak, and is mostly reconciled with her younger sister before Lilly Potter is murdered in Godric’s Hollow. Her firstborn child, and the other four she eventually has, are magical children, rather than only-child Dudley Dursley. Reviews are not common here, but most authors do appreciate well reasoned ones. Should this story receive well-reasoned reviews, I’ll reply to them here. Thanks.

Author: Wilde Guess Title: The Yankee’s Nephew and the Philosopher’s Stone Summary: What if Petunia Evans went to work for the US Embassy instead of Grunnings Drills? I borrowed a few characters from my original story here, changed them slightly, and put them into the HP Universe to replace Vernon Dursley. Harry will grow up in a different environment, with exposure to magic in the Muggle world. Feedback: Feedback and constructive criticism welcome. Fandom: Harry Potter universe, with later JKR works considered where appropriate. Pairing: None for this story, the “main” focus characters are eleven year olds with no “unusual” circumstances to cause precocious romance. Warnings: Some violence and light cursing possible, but SFW. Solo story or chaptered story: Chaptered story. This story will end at the same point as the canon HP&PS. URL: https://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600100444 Review Reply thread: https://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/topic/73345-the-yankees-nephew-and-the-philosophers-stone-review-thread/

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