COJimmyV
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Two cliffhangers in one chapter?!! Only Magus could pull that one off. Oh, the possibilities going forward although I have a feeling not everyone survives. Lots of angst and questions coming in future chapters. Can't wait to see what's next. Just please don't make this a midseason cliffhanger where we have to wait a month to find out what happens!
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It's sort of a cliffhanger, or maybe like a storm that drives you nuts as you watch it slowly approach but never seems to get to you...hehe
TRUTH.....but I do love me some back story, not to mention finding out Amy likes it a little rough. THAT made me smile. Also like the interaction with Stella, Carol and Samantha. Her little excursion into the VW with Evan's parents could be VERY interesting.
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Jack says no and Tara is so upset she runs back to jack's house in tears. Kayla turns to jack and tells him that it's okay because it was his choice and she didn't want to pressure him in to sleeping with Tara but at the same time she was hoping he would because if he did she would feel less guilty about Jack finding out that her ex from before Craig is trying to come back around and she still has feelings for him...... -rasura
While I'd be surprised if this happened, it's not half bad. Typical teenage misunderstanding due to lack of communication. Kinda nice to read something believable after all our silly rantings about North Koreans and such but silly is just WAY more fun.
I'll just blame all this on Joe for not cranking out new chapters each week.
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LOVE all the left field theories. I'll just keep my guess simple.....and dark. Jack tells Tara no and Tara feels so shunned and depressed that she tries to kill herself but Jack saves her just in the nick of time. He himself goes into depression and swears off women and ends up hooking up with Joe, who was already into Brad so Jack was a no-brainer. Kayla comforts Belle and they hook up and the story becomes one big gay-fest for a couple chapters until Tara brings them all back to their senses....and each other. Hey, it could happen! OK, it couldn't but this wait just tends to make the mind "wander" a bit.
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Hey, uhh, the whole debate between whether or not Jack should say "Yes" is kinda over. Sure, Joe would love to see some more feedback, and it IS kinda interesting to see what other people think, but he's already written half of the next chapter, so I guess it's a little too late.
So, until he posts Chapter 21, does this mean we get to predict what happens? Just trying to stir the pot a little.
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Or Rick lied and did have a family but he had to keep her safe knowing his job risks.
Regarding the flashback,he can also use italic font
If they tried to kill Rick, it stands to reason they would go after any family he had. I suppose he could have kept them a secret from the "Company" but that would have been almost impossible. I'm thinking he was telling the truth and Leia didn't come along until later or....perhaps....Leia is really Cyndi. Nah...
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Another thing puzzling me....if David was worried about his family's safety, why would he take Cyndi with him to get those "important" papers from the university. For such a smart guy, could he really have been THAT clueless?
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I saw inconsistencies in the back story as well so I just assumed Leia was either a step-daughter or adopted at a young age in order to help Rick's cover. At first, this whole Rick-David storyline seemed forced but made more sense the more I read and I'm hoping you dig a little deeper into it.
I still wish you'd insert separation lines between the paragraphs that contain flashbacks so I know where the heck I am. I'm constantly thinking, "Wait, what?....oh".
Count me among those who are glad to see Amy back in the picture with Max. Much too long away! Once again though, all this chapter did was leave me wanting more. It seemed to end much too quickly.
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He does have a new Dell he can use although I would imagine it will take a bit longer to get used to. Ah well, back to waiting.....
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As long as Jack says to Kayla something along the lines of "You have to promise me you're OK with this". I still don't think he'd do it without a clear conscience. Or at least as clear as it can be in Jack world.
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Realistically speaking within the context of the story, it doesn't make much sense to have Tara moving into town, or at least close by, and have Jack say no. That pretty much throws her on the backburner. There are so many more possibilities for the storyline if Jack says yes and that is the route I would take if I were writing it, but I'm not.
It kinda boils down to Kayla. It's a normal teenage guy cop out but he needs to put this back on her and what she wants and have it explained in black and white before he commits. If he says yes, he has to have a clear conscience so Kayla can't hold it against him.
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Playing Conspiracy Theorist here, the title is She Is The One but maybe we're just assuming the "She" is Kayla. Maybe it's Tara or maybe there is more than ONE "She". Maybe it's neither.
Now, back to your regularly scheduled theories, desires and wants.
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I have no problem at all with whatever way you decide to go but MY hopeless romantic side says Jack just kisses Tara passionately and tells her he's really torn because he does love her, DEFINITELY more than a cousin, but his heart belongs to Kayla and just wouldn't feel right with a threesome. The little devil on my shoulder says GO FOR IT and trusts that you'd write it beautifully and really give this story someplace to go as Kayla and Tara take a long, hard look at their bisexual feelings while Jack deals with jealousy and after-effects of the suicide.
While writing one of each would be interesting, you already have enough on your plate and I think it would bog you down. I trust you'll do a great job no matter what you decide.
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Now THERE'S a nice conundrum cliffhanger. I can't wait to see what happens! Will Mr. Honorable succumb to being a teenage guy and live out every guy's fantasy? I know I would but Jack is WAY more honorable than I ever was.
I absolutely love how you handled the PTS of Walburn's suicide. Jack will need help getting through that so I hope you have him getting some type of professional help and maybe even include Belle. Once again, VERY well done, my friend!
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HAHA! I have a ex-Air Force buddy who always mentions popsicle sticks and duct tape. Boner of Champions!
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Latest Northstar was excellent as well. LOVE the back and forth banter as well as the family interaction and lovespeak. You have me wishing there were two of you, one to knock out chapters of each story every few days.
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not so much a full merger, more of a little dabble into where Rick might have met up with Nick, and helped out a bit, then went their separate ways again. I get confused enough with all of them separate, i could only imagine how crazy it'd be if they became one huge group.
Like Big Man said, just a little crossover with a character or two, kinda like they do on TV. It IS "sweeps" month after all.
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Wasn't Mr. White the target in going home? Hmmmm. This seems like a good spot to bring in a certain Mr. North.
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Excited to know you're gonna make it nice and long (that's what she said) and really hoping there's NOT gonna be a cliffhanger.
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If Mike WASN'T confessing, wouldn't he have led the culprit in at gunpoint? If his parents are bad guys then I think they convinced Mike that they were being held captive. Mike seems like too much of a dumb jock to be any type of mastermind and he certainly wouldn't confess if he were. I think he's being duped.
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Back to Chapter 32: Another nod to Monty Burns! And though it was a tad cheesy, I LOVED Carol yelling STEELLLLLLLAAAAAAA a la Marlon Brando in Streetcar Named Desire. So glad you included that since I was already thinking it.
As for Chapter 33, that was AWESOME! With all the death teasers, I was afraid Tali had bought it. Thinking Mike's not smart enough to be a spy so I'm thinking he's doing it to save his parents, who've been kidnapped, or he was trying to protect Rick and Leia because they were targets if he didn't cooperate. I suppose Mike could have been brainwashed but that's already been done.
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Going forward, I think Chapter 31 will be referred to as "The Happy Chapter". Definitely one of my favorites. Just gives you that warm, fuzzy feeling. And thanks for changing it to add Hans. That made it even better!
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It actually did fit the conversation because Jack was talking about Tara being his cousin and Kayla was going to mention Alan and Amanda as an argument against Jack saying no to Tara.
I actually loved the darkness and angst in this chapter. It was absolutely necessary to move the story forward while keeping it real. Glad to see Jack getting help but I don't trust the ending and I don't trust Kayla. There's more to this Jeff character than meets the eye. Kayla can't just say she doesn't know why she didn't block him or delete his texts and have that be acceptable. Perhaps he's a relative or something else happened between them that she's not spilling.
Again, I guess it's the teenage girl thing but her whining to Jack about how he "hurt" her came across like B.S. Her telling the truth would have avoided all of it so she's not bearing nearly enough responsibility so he has every right to be pissed. Then again, I'm not that forgiving so I'd have a harder time letting it go.