magusfang

hmmm, we really don't know what hppened to them, no real stressers yet... what happens when say a seaborne attack occurs?

stabs him in the eye?

Mwahahahaha...just because

I just think Adam would have flipped when Nicole and his three old tormentors were flirting, remember ho he was after the fight. But it could be a delayed bomb. I kust see him getting all teary and running away.

they just seemed a little flat, not bad but I might have gotten too mushy But I like mushy sometimes, what can I say, I'm an old softy

I thought the same thing, 4, 5, and 6 seemed to be missing something and I'll be damned if I know what I did wrong...sigh. maybe the rest oll be good for me...

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Yeah, don't give us too much time to think, nothing good ever comes from that

yep and lest we forget a seven or is she eight, gotta check that, a seven year ols that can wipe a fly's as with a bullet a thousand yards way Oh, and the twins have new toys...

el you gotta admit Beavus is a non traditional look...cute might be a stretch though

jeez, stab someone in the eye and everyone gets all judgemental

You are very welcome And it wasn't really a criticism so much as an observation, I'm thinking kind of like Joe that it was a red flag but you put it there for a reason...so write faster, its killing me!

you're a sick sick man...I like it

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just a little stab? maybe...huh...huh?

then stabs her in the eye?

Hmmm, stabs her in the eye...too much?

Howitzers...so yesterday...how about and army of exploding insects...or nanites that can kill from the inside...and lest we forget giant spiders...everyone loves giant spiders

Hmmm, I see the various points but still think Adam would have flipped out when he heard her flirting with his old tormentors...sort of smacks of betrayal...retroactively. I even think that Adam would have been fine with knowing she had others but I just don't think he cpuld have handled having shoved under his nose so to speak. And if Nicole has a problem with May, well that would be sort of hypocritical wouldn't you say? Would that be the start of her realizing she does love him?

I can do better

So read chapter 12 and, and please don't take this the wrong way, I really didn't like the party scene. It just seemed so out of character for Adam not to get jealous because he does love Nicole and he is kinda insecure. I kinda expected him to freak and Nicole to feel bad when she realized that he loves her, she loves him, and that she should have known that he would get upset to have the fact she was screwing other guys shoved in his face. So that said, still love the story and your writing style is amazing, anxiously awaiting the next chapter.

Sweet!

that was probably me...lost my wallet?

Remember he just had his brain scrambled a bit he's getting a little complacent too, bout to get a nasty wake up call though