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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from Tcr in SinfulWolf's Review Responses   
    The next review from @Tcr on Blood and Lace
    I felt it was important to set that stage. Helps ground the narrative, especially when we’re dealing with demons and the like. So glad it worked out.
    I spaced those out to get a good pause in there. I play these scenes in my head, much like a movie, so I write to get the effects I really want. I purposely wanted to disrupt the flow a bit here.
    The Crime Scene was fun. This is where the more horror like elements of the story really start creeping in after the coroner scene. I wanted this to really set in “Not a typical porn story”. As to the implications and what might be running about… read on and see.
    I tend to be pretty stubborn with stylistic stuff. That be me.
    I do need to bring Sam into the picture more. I have this character that I barely use, because it doesn’t fit. We’ll see what I come up with in the future for her.
    The protesters are a big part of the world. Helps ground it, because most people would not be happy with the state of affairs. But it also lets me set up future plot threads. Glad you liked the conversations, and Felrya’s description. She’s a big player after all.
    I used to be bad for using too many commas. Perhaps I’m overcompensating now. Ah wells.
    The Preacher. He’s fun. I like him muchly. As to what he is, you’ll see.
    Rasha I felt was the most important to get sympathetic. It’s too easy to shrug off people who are addicts, and that is what she most certainly is. So I had to show a struggle, a reason, and always keep pushing her further down that spiral. As for a turn around. We’ll see.
    Derek I like playing up some Cop Drama tropes with. He is military police after all. You are right in that him not being more changed, more advanced in his transformation, is why the spell works so easily on him. The role reversal though was more a side effect of how I’ve been going through the story. Perhaps more at the end would have been good, but again, I didn’t want to cram too many sex scenes in.
    Thank you again for the reviews.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from Tcr in SinfulWolf's Review Responses   
    Final review of my backlog. Once more from @Tcr on Blood and Lace
    I have been trying to imply feeding off the energy of demons or those with demonic taint, is what’s pushing the transformation along. What Alison’s involvement may have had, that’s for the reader to consider. But it wasn’t Alison herself that fucked Derek, it was Sydxun’s presence in the basement. 
    The wife has been pointing out to me that the transformations have been getting a touch stale. So, trying to make them a bit more dramatic. A bit more of a push towards the final stage of it all. Perhaps I should do more from the PoV of someone changing, but it’s mostly a physical thing. We all know how Kris feels about the changes already. This I will state though, once they change, it’s permanent. I didn’t want them shape shifting or anything. As to what that means for Kris and Sam well… we’ll see how into demons Sam is.
    Heh. I had to put little things like that in there. Little bit of Canuck humour for Canuck readers. But also play a little bit with the differences between them and their nationalities. 
    I really thought about Aliens when writing this scene. A little bit of suspense with the action, further pushing the story to Erotic Horror instead of just smut. I like to think I can write some decent action set pieces.
    Mia has become a great tool for story and world building with her involvement with the Succubus Consul. And the Consul herself lets me do some good world building and give little glimpses to what Hell is like in this particular setting. I mean, that’s the other world. That’s the place that’s been done so many times over. I gotta try and make it somewhat interesting to the reader. And how it works as well with the devil’s and sins.
    So, it worked to have Felrya explain some stuff to Mia, and to have Mia broaden her current understandings, as they weren’t entirely correct before.
    The training regimen… that’s pretty much exactly what it is. Though, Felrya does enjoy doing it as well. Lo and behold. Glad you think the scene overall is hot though.
    And those particular lines. I didn’t want my demons to be necessarily ‘evil’  but I can’t have them be goody two shoes either. They do come from Hell after all. But I thought it was a good place to make some points about current governments and leaders. Humans certainly are far from perfect. As to those historical figures… who knows. I may get around to toying with the occupents of Hell a bit more in the future.
    Rasha is certainly meant to be the tragic one. The fallen one, and perhaps more so when we eventually get to backstories and the like. For the time being, we get to see her fall deeper and deeper. Manipulated to thinking she’s doing things of her own free will. But we know everything is for that next fix. That next high. The next hit. Whether she’ll pull back. even I’m not entirely sure anymore. 
    The lord, well… you’ll see.
    I really wanted to start this off with as much normalicy as I could. Every little drop of it before things go a bit wacko. I think I succeeded, and it’s why I went with characters outside the main cast. The main cast is well outside of normal anymore. So I brought it some good ol humans to sell the normalicy. It also really sets up Alison for what she is, and some of her abilities, and the strengths of her master. 
    The spell though was broken because of Kris, and even Kris doesn’t entirely know how she did it.
    The Mary Sue thing is actually something I’m usually not too concerned about. Kris may be the most badass, but she’s not the best at everything. And she’s still learning. If I was better at writing investigations, this would shine through a bit better. But thanks for the review, and very glad yer enjoying.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from Tcr in SinfulWolf's Review Responses   
    Flatterer.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from JayDee in InBrightestDay's (Originals) Review Reply & Discussion Thread   
    Ahhh, fair enough. That makes sense too. Well, I’m glad to see a happier ending coming out of it, even if they journey won’t be easy (I don’t think it should be either, considering).
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from JayDee in JayDee's (Originals) review reply, story discussion and additional notes thread   
    I didn’t mind the torture stuff, I just started viewing it as a horror, and I quite enjoy the story. Considering some of the shit I’ve put in my own writing, can’t get pouty when others do the same stuff. And I have already started ‘The Woman in the Statue’. It’s pretty cool seeing the continuation of your story.
    Certainly happens. I guess in the end, I felt it didn’t go well with the set up of ultimate badass. But, something needed to happen for the story to go. 
    I didn’t have a problem with the outfit per se. I’ve come across a lot of different settings where the angels wear very little. I think it just felt contradictory with the line about avoiding lusts. Whereas had she just been wearing the stuff, it might not have stood out to me so much.
    And no problem. It was a good read.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from InBrightestDay in InBrightestDay's (Originals) Review Reply & Discussion Thread   
    Heh, tropes are there cause they work right? Sometimes dancing along trope lines works, because not using them just doesn’t make sense. And I get the form of therapy, I often write to vent and get all the shit out onto the page. Certainly helps.
    When it comes to the assault team, don’t worry, I full well knew they were the Tactical Unit for the PPD from the introduction in the office. I am, fairly familiar with how organizations like this operate. Which is why I initially raised an eyebrow to the charging in method. But, it makes sense in this case, considering precedent. 
    Guess I’m just tired of having these groups always painted as the villain as a whole. It seems, cheap.
    As to the range thing. Heh, fair nuff. 
    Looking forward to Part 3. I do believe, from what I’ve seen, that I will enjoy what continues to come out.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from InBrightestDay in InBrightestDay's (Originals) Review Reply & Discussion Thread   
    Heh, tropes are there cause they work right? Sometimes dancing along trope lines works, because not using them just doesn’t make sense. And I get the form of therapy, I often write to vent and get all the shit out onto the page. Certainly helps.
    When it comes to the assault team, don’t worry, I full well knew they were the Tactical Unit for the PPD from the introduction in the office. I am, fairly familiar with how organizations like this operate. Which is why I initially raised an eyebrow to the charging in method. But, it makes sense in this case, considering precedent. 
    Guess I’m just tired of having these groups always painted as the villain as a whole. It seems, cheap.
    As to the range thing. Heh, fair nuff. 
    Looking forward to Part 3. I do believe, from what I’ve seen, that I will enjoy what continues to come out.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from JayDee in AFF Holiday Party!   
    Satan!
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from JayDee in AFF Holiday Party!   
    Satan!
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from JayDee in Holiday Party 2018 Review Replies   
    Thank you very much for the review (almost wrote reveal for some reason… brain still awakening it seems)
    But, since this story was so firmly from Varia’s point of view, I thought some of the descriptions and such would be a sleek way to world build a bit too. It being fantasy, I’m on the back foot for making the world feel real and lived in, so I do all I can to get that sensation for the characters and setting. Sometimes it works, as it seemingly did this time. Thank you again.
    Also, I do love my FF sex scenes. As that was the meat of it all, glad it was hot.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from BronxWench in Exhaustion and Writing   
    More that I resurfaced here later than Christmas last year. I have it posted elsewhere as well.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from Desiderius Price in Exhaustion and Writing   
    Well… now I’m posting a story I wrote last year.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from Desiderius Price in Krampus Tale   
    Author: Sinfulwolf
    Title: A B&L Christmas: Krampus Delights of Pain
    Summary: Lea has found herself on the naughty list. But with the portal to Hell opened, there is more than jokes and coal as consequence. A visit from the Krampus will show her the depths of her own lust, and a thrill for the ecstasy of pain.
    Feedback: Always welcome. Constructive criticism and discussion helps to improve.
    Fandom: Original Fantasy
    Pairing: N/A  
    Warnings: Anal BDSM Bond CR Cuck Dom Ds MF OC SandM Spank Tort Toys Violence
    Solo story or chaptered story:  Solo
    URL: http://original.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600109200
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from Desiderius Price in Exhaustion and Writing   
    Well… now I’m posting a story I wrote last year.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from JayDee in Holiday Party 2018 Review Replies   
    Thank you very much for the review (almost wrote reveal for some reason… brain still awakening it seems)
    But, since this story was so firmly from Varia’s point of view, I thought some of the descriptions and such would be a sleek way to world build a bit too. It being fantasy, I’m on the back foot for making the world feel real and lived in, so I do all I can to get that sensation for the characters and setting. Sometimes it works, as it seemingly did this time. Thank you again.
    Also, I do love my FF sex scenes. As that was the meat of it all, glad it was hot.
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    Sinfulwolf reacted to Desiderius Price in Holiday Party 2018 Review Replies   
    A quick skim was all that was needed to get it, so not too bad.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from Desiderius Price in Holiday Party 2018 Review Replies   
    Hmmm, that’s definitely something to keep in mind. I certainlly wanted there to be connections to the Halloween story, but I did mostly want this one to stand on its own. May have been a bit heavy handed with the connecting threads. As to the fade to black, heh, sorry about that. I think my thought process was I wanted to cut the scene while it was still good and sexy, and before I started to just get a bit repetitive.
    Thank you for the review!
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from BronxWench in Exhaustion and Writing   
    I find I get a little bit more done around now because I get time off from work. Sure there’s all the holiday prep that’s gotta happen, but without the work portion it’s fairly low key.
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    Sinfulwolf reacted to Desiderius Price in Holiday Party 2018 Review Replies   
    I’m crossing my fingers, hoping that nobody uses my stories as a blueprint for a religious society.
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    Sinfulwolf reacted to CloverReef in Holiday Party 2018 Review Replies   
    @Sinfulwolf
    I’m glad you had fun with it. Despite that hard turn left that, this story was meant to be exactly that: just kinda stupid and fun, but with atmosphere. To be fair, I understand why someone wouldn’t like Extany. He’s an asshole. A special variety of asshole I adore and find fun to write. Though I try to make them redeemable, ‘redeemable’ is so subjective. Thank you for the review!
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from BronxWench in Holiday Party 2018 Review Replies   
    @Desiderius Price That’s fair. I wasn’t overly lost through it, which is a good thing, and impressive seeing as how connected all your stories really are. Surely more impactful for those that have read everything, but I could still easily follow the story only missing the more subtle cues.
    @CloverReef Well, I’m a little sick in the head, so even that hard left turn was fun. 
    I’m glad you love it. I want to work more in this world at some point. Whether that means a fully fledged story, or keep showing Lydia’s journey through side characters. I also have the soft spot for witchy characters, and I don’t write them enough (I say that about a few things...). But thank you about the comments on the writing style. I could always use a few ego pumps.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from JayDee in AFF Holiday Party!   
    Had a typo on my letter to Santa…
    Be careful with that N placement, else you’ll get something entirely different.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from swirlingdoubt in AFF Holiday Party!   
    Tentacles are often fun. I’ve not written them in awhile… at least nothing posted as of yet. Still, trying to straddle both might be interesting task.
    I’m not entirely sure what WAFF is… so do that so I know?
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from JayDee in AFF Holiday Party!   
    Had a typo on my letter to Santa…
    Be careful with that N placement, else you’ll get something entirely different.
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    Sinfulwolf got a reaction from JayDee in AFF Holiday Party!   
    Had a typo on my letter to Santa…
    Be careful with that N placement, else you’ll get something entirely different.