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I seem to have missed this when catching up with review responses (or I think I have – if not, sorry for the repetition), and I am sorry for late reply, but thank you so much, Laney! I don’t know if you will ever see this response, but... I’m glad they’re in character, and that the sex scenes work well. I had a great deal of fun writing this one. Maybe it was having Sade as a muse for a bit, maybe it was playing with JP’s version of Coulmier. Interestingly, the historical Coulmier was not as pretty as JP, and was a hunchback. Also he was much older, but he was a pioneer in treating mental illness. I’d love to go back in time and listen in on one of their real conversations. Alas, I probably wouldn’t understand anything, since I don’t speak French. Sade had a great sense of humour, which you can see in the letters he sent from prison, particularly to his mother-in-law. He was part of the aristocracy, but he soon jumped ship and produced subversive and revolutionary pamphlets for circulation when required, and in his work, his address to women is light years ahead (in liberty) of where we are, even today. I suppose it’s difficult to say what he really believed; it’s likely he just worked in his own self-interest, but my more forgiving self wants him to be a hero for sexual liberty, and particularly sexual writing. Gah… sorry, I did a lot of research, lol. Thank you!

Thank you! It's a long time ago, but I did love writing that. I adore LadyHawke too.

I had a little daydream that she started having sexual thoughts while training with Luzurial when you mentioned that memory… now I wonder what the actual story is! Just stop right there. There are a handful of authors that I read, and you are one. That number dwindles down still further when I’m actively writing stories myself, but you remain up there. Every now and again I delve into your back catalogue for a treat, because you’re written things that will stay with me forever (as I write this, I am thinking particularly of the Ace story in DW, and the one with the disembowelling crocodile rape monster thing, which I enjoyed even though I don’t know the fandom). Plus I adore your sense of humour.

Thank you so much, InBrightestDay! I am not sure I deserve these reviews, but I’ll try and answer your points, so here goes: I’m afraid the lack of body horror later in the story is entirely down to my own limitations as a writer. I wanted to put it in (I’d been looking forward to that very thing), and I had no compunction about inflicting it on the character, but I found I couldn’t do it without losing the emotional and psychological resonance. I mean, Guy N Smith is one of my heroes, and he can do this with ease. He’s written a number of favourite gory horror scenes, and it kills me that I can’t emulate him. In the end, I had to begin with a little, and heavily hint at more later on, which is kind of personally disappointing to me. George is unlikeable to me because he’s an out and out capitalist, and I’m the complete opposite. Writing his pov – sympathetically – for me, required some pretty hefty suspension of belief. I still feel dirty. *shudders* As to the comparison, I think I did say the elemental is also an emissary. It was probably created just for this, to communicate some kind of dissatisfaction. That likely meant it was able to relate to George on a much smaller, human, and more petty level. I’m glad you liked it. I have to admit, though, I was much happier with how ‘The Price’ turned out. This was difficult, but I think it was also good practice. In time to come, I’m sure I’ll realise I learned a lot from it. Thank you!

It’s wonderful And while I’m here, I just wanted to say that I still miss Blackbird. I wonder if he’s out there somewhere in the ether, waiting for his chronicler to see him win his way through… somehow. Not nagging at all. Just like this little piece here, you are a sensational writer. I am quite sure I haven’t told you that often enough.

Thank you so much, Jaydee I really didn’t expect to get an in-depth review like this, and you’ve made me very happy. As I said in the author’s note, I really didn’t like George at first. I think in some ways this is why it took so long to finish this. I kept wanting to bash him for lots of things (for instance, I’m pretty sure he reads the Daily Fail), and then I had to calm down and think: yeah, but it’s his point of view, so just stop it. I also had the ending almost from the start (the “pretty” bit), and I really liked that, so I had to try to make the journey there and get it to work somehow. I’m glad that it does work a bit, even if I couldn’t write all the gory bits. Maybe I’ll leave that to the Master… Thank you for letting me use your idea! You’re awesome!

It works fully! I definitely felt it. Don’t mind me, I’m a tough cookie, and furthermore I’m British therefore I understate. You should read ‘it touched my heart’ as: ‘I was suddenly transported to that bathroom, and I could feel all the same things she was feeling, and it hurt, and I wanted to put my arms around her and make it all right again.’ Ah… well, I just recently rewatched ‘Fallen’ and I kept imagining a lovely young Denzel Washington, so it was a bit of a surprise for me when he suddenly turned.

Yay – thank you so much @JayDee – this has really made my day I’m glad it came across as authentic. I really don’t have much confidence in my original work, because to me it seems to lack some kind of sparkle. I’m slowly coming around to the thought that the sparkle I’m missing is the conscious echo of canon that’s involved in fanfic, and I should get over it. Reviews like this really help. I’m really happy the punchline works too. It’s going back a bit, but while writing I was putting the clues in, and thinking: am I being too obvious here? Not sure about the rest of the country, but there are well dressings at places like Hope and Eyam, and I don’t think they ever really stopped, just that people lost interest until relatively recently. It does seem to have been co-opted by Christianity, though, which has probably helped keep it alive to be fair. Thanks for telling me about the typo too – I’m off to fix it now!

BronxWench 2016-01-07 id # 3000033279 Oh, dear gods, this was so worth the wait. It's atmospheric, and chilling, and completely fucking brilliant. The menace in the informational film seems completely tame compared to what you've conjured as the future of those children. I absolutely can't wait for part two, to see what's in store. This line: "Rain made puddles on the streets that she didn't realise she was avoiding until a bus splashed her and she screamed because it was exactly like his touch." That's just incredible, and vivid, and I'm in awe of this perfect sentence. And if I wake up in a cold sweat tonight, I'll know why... Thank you so much, Bronx, I'm really glad you like it, and I'm pleased that I managed to get some creepiness across. Lots more to come. The rest of it keeps playing over and over in my mind, and I have most of the dialogue. There's a few things I want to convey. I hope I have the skill to get them right. JayDee 2016-01-08 id # 3000033280 Thank you. Thank you so much. Thank you for writing this first part of the story. Thank you for taking a brief idea and expanding it to brilliance. It's already stunning, it'll end epic. So, the sex, ok, I likes me some porn this is quite well known, but what you've got here is proper erotica, there's so much feeling and art to it. The way it builds up through for her, is the same for the reader, though hopefully readers won't remember it and orgasm in the street. That sort of thing invites tumblr outrage. This line, "The gouges her fingernails had left in his face bled, falling onto her face like cool summer rain, onto her lips. His blood tasted like tepid sea water." this is so powerful, it's almost like I could taste it while reading it. Thank you again. I hope this gets the readers and feedback it deserves. It is a work of art. I'll wait for the 'to be continued' even if I needs must wait years. Thank you, JayDee, for putting the idea out there for me to play with. To be honest, I did have the majority of this written for some time, but I was convinced the fall was too steep to draw the reader in properly, and that bothered me for ages, so I'm really happy that it doesn't seem to be the case. And, I'm overjoyed that you like it, since it was written for you. I did originally have some idea of going wild and matching your style (I'm a fanfic author, after all), but you are completely inimitable. And part two is on the way. Hopefully it'll be a bit quicker since I've lots of things to pack into it, so I've no concerns about short word count this time.

Another review from @InBrightestDay – thank you so much! Wow – I’m not certain I deserve those compliments, but I’ll run off with them! If I can do ‘creepy’ then I’m happy. Yep, you’ve pretty much hit it. As I was writing, I surmised that a mortal soul is necessary for the more tedious hanging around the spirit seems to do, and if that soul wishes to move on, then it will get quite aggressive at taking people when the opportunity arises, though I guess they’re looking for one in (probably) millions, so it’s a very long wait. Whether Kathy appears as her own gender, even I’m not sure, but I did have a feeling that the older, less specific legends of the Lady in the Lake might be connected to this spirit somehow. In the end, I decided not to make a point of it. And you’ve reminded me I have another story to finish for JayDee about angry water. I think I’ll dig that out next and work on it this week. I’ll also get to read some more of yours once the weekend is done and I’m off work again Will Kev and Luzurial get down to it? How guilty will Kevin get? Will Luzurial need to give him a small dose of amnesia to get him through it? Ohhh, imagine that: every time is the first time… Um… no… smut is not all I think about! Thanks again!

Never thought I'd have one of these threads! But perhaps this part of the forum is too quiet, so here we go... For The Teacher: BronxWench wrote: Hi BronxWench, Thank you so much! How do I respond to such praise, except to say that I’m glad you enjoyed reading, and that I’m so happy the relationships all seem to have come across well, because they could so easily be tangled and nonsensical. I’ll be writing that dramatic episode soon enough, since Elrond’s memories are almost up to date with the present. But the story won’t end there. And whatever Elrond thinks, he’s going to need Thranduil again, because Celebrían will sail to the West eventually. I know I haven’t paid much attention to canon except in the broadest sense, but this is what I’ll always love about writing fanfiction for Tolkien. He leaves so many stories noted down but not expressly told. It’s completely irresistible to play with them! Besides, Tolkien canon can drive you insane. He even failed to keep to it himself once or twice (contradictions in his notes). Thanks again.

Thank you, Bronx! It was always going to be hard for Elrond, after the last couple of chapters, and he’s probably right that Thranduil won’t be able to rescue him that way this time. But he also knows he’s got to recover a little, somehow. As for Celeborn, he knows Galion’s view on ‘involvement’ well enough, since Galion explained it very clearly to him, and I don’t think he’s fool enough to continue bothering Galion with it, no matter how much Galadriel might insist. I reckon this is more about getting Galion to speak to Elrond, rather than the other way around. Ha.. he’ll be surrounded by his elders – should be interesting.

And… two whole years later: Chapter 49 Wow… that’s nearly the amount of time that’s passed in the fic.

Author: pippychick Title: The Teacher Summary: A fanciful, smutty take on what Elrond’s story might have been through the ages. Feedback: Yes, please. Fandom: Middle Earth/Lord of the Rings Pairing: Elrond/Oropher, Elrond/Thranduil, Elrond/OFC, Elrond/Celebrían, Elrond/Legolas. Warnings: 3Plus, Anal, Angst, BDSM, Bi, Bond, D/s, F/M/M, FemDom, Het, Humil, N/C, OC, Slash, WIP Solo story or chaptered story: Chaptered. URL: http://lotr.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600080231 It seems as though I have the notion of finally finishing this story. If you read, I hope you enjoy it.

Thank you, swirlingdoubt – I’m glad you enjoyed it! Thank you so much, InBrightestDay! Ah, well, I don’t want to say too much in case I spoil the second chapter for you. But when/if you read, I hope you enjoy it and that it makes sense. And thank you for the compliment! I must admit, I paid close attention to some of my phrasing and word choices in this fic, because it added to the atmosphere, and I was hoping to make suggestions without the reader being fully aware of it. For example, “... once she'd hacked a couple of feet off the bottom of it.” was supposed to give you a specific literal mental image, even if your conscious mind rejects it immediately as incorrect. It was still there… hopefully.

Thank you so much, JayDee! I remember writing this, and I really wanted to add description and atmosphere, but the word cound wouldn’t permit it. It was definitely good practice, though, and I’m glad I came out with something that works.

Thank you so much! They really had great chemistry, and I loved writing them. Perhaps more will appear at some point when Fringe pops back up for a rewatch. Walter is so much fun. Apologies for the lateness of this response, but I am glad you enjoyed reading.

Oh, I really haven’t! Some of my best friends, etc… I’m actually involved with things at my local church, because of community stuff. I’m not saying at all that others shouldn’t believe – I just don’t share it. If I had to believe in something, honestly I’m closer to being some kind of pagan than anything because it appeals to me on some deep level I can’t explain. The great majority of the time though, I am an atheist. I’m not trying to get into an argument here, but Ah. Apologies, but there it is. There can be no justification for some things. I’m not talking of anything that has happened to me. I’m not referring to “ordinary human unhappiness” or even its twin. Throughout the course of our history there are things so absolute and terrible that they only way they can be explained is if there is no God. Sorry, but that is the conclusion I have come to after many years. Also, free will tends to let capitalism off the hook, and I don’t believe we should do that either. Most of us live at the expense of others. If I live without God, then ethically I should strive to encourage the best world possible. Then there are the animals. Humanity has an overinflated sense of itself. Fear, terror, pain and suffering are not exclusive to our species. Nor is comfort. Any knowledge I may think I have doesn’t make me “worth more than many sparrows” – that’s just pure egotism. It makes me responsible, but that’s a different thing entirely, and I fail far too often (I mean, I still eat meat and there can’t be any justification for that, not now). I’m so sorry, I don’t mean to offend anyone with these thoughts. If there is any rule at all, it should probably be: believe in what you love and be happy. I believe in fic. Likewise. @JayDee Sorry to have derailed this thread and gone so far OT. Luzurial’s fate did prompt this discussion, though, so I’m blaming you…

Ahh… that was you! Thank you. I still need to make time for responding to reviews that have come in while I’ve been somewhat distracted. I will, though! @InBrightestDay As I said above, the great thing about all of this is that we can speculate, and explore, and I’m awfully curious to see how you’ve saved her, and what her reactions are like to that. How damaged is she? See just thinking and talking about it whets my appetite to read your story

The best villains are this way. Though it’s not always easy to write them. You did a great job. Of course I fancy seeing it! The greatest thing about fiction and fanfiction is that there’s always a different path to go down, and we can look at them all, and ooh and ahh at different interpretations and fresh angles. Yesss… I’ve been told that before. Unfortunately, when I was made someone forgot to adjust the optimism, or, you know, include it at all. lol… I find writing harsh things like this does take a toll. It’s hard work, and it’s largely thankless. But you can only write the horror properly if you feel it, just like anything else. (smirks) To be fair, she’s probably not right wing enough… Ha, that would be interesting. For what it’s worth, it’s a bit more violent, more pornographic, and is sprinkled with a liberal amount of swearing (courtesy of Clegane). Thanks. Honestly, it feels great to settle back down. Your midwife story was the first thing I went to

Maybe it’s just me, but damn I’d choose that with my eyes wide open, lol. But, you’re right… it’s not for Chummy. It really was fun to see her trying to deal with it all though. She’s so brilliantly in-character! I’m quite sure this fic would get a few little giggles from Miranda too. I just laughed so loudly my dog thinks I’m ill. He’ll be taking me to the vet. Things are better now, thank you (almost lost damn near everything, and have somehow managed to save it all). Reading this story has been like sitting down with your favourite drink after a long, long day, only that day seems to have lasted for months. Exactly what I needed, and again, thank you so much for sharing with us. I really appreciate getting to see your writing and talent - I hope you know that.

Thank you so much! I have some parts of this written in advance, I just got kind of sidetracked, then the muses decided to sod off and leave me for a while. I have all of my stories in mind, but this one in particular I’d like to finish before GoT begins again, so there’s an extra bit of impetus there for me to get on with it soonish.