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  1. If I got into a conversation with someone about the books I've read by S. King, that it would probably take over whatever thread I was on. Didn't think that would go over too well. I know posting in the Mystery forum is probably a death knell for this topic, but there really wasn't anywhere that seemed appropriate. This began because I had a profile feed that stated I was off to read some S. King and got a response that JayDee had read The Stand twice and the second was quite different from the first. It's pretty hard to elaborate on a profile comment, so here I am to carry that topic forward. JayDee, I don't recall how many times I've read The Stand but it has been quite awhile since the last and I could probably go for it again. I also watched the movie and, of course, I enjoyed the book more. King is such an excellent writer, a movie never really does it justice because it's not just about the plot, but the way it unfolds and the way it engages. The book I was going to go read, and still haven't started, is 11/22/63. Once I give in, I will be sucked into his world and won't emerge for many weeks (days?) until I am finished. My trepidation is that I'd like to maintain some of my other activities but I know they will suffer, and so, I postpone. I am in no way a major fan or extremely knowledgable of Mr. King's works. I have read at least a half a dozen, maybe more, but loved every one of them. The one's I bought are staying in my library, won't be donating them. I can see myself, finally retired, and rereading all my favourite books from my lifetime. It would be nice to have a little back and forth on this topic, citing specific books, the parts we really liked, whatever. Just a little diversion before I take up the book and wave goodbye.
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    Review Replies for "The War Within" by Raymy

    On 2013-08-05, BookMaggot wrote: The Title was very difficult for me. I hope I can justify it in part 2 of this chapter. I split the chapter into two parts, not only because it was getting too long, but also to get something posted. That's been too long, also, hasn't it? I didn't even have the gumption to put an author comment in but I wanted to put this out so badly that I just didn't care about the extras. I don't usually like cliffies but since I had decided to split the chapter, I hoped this would be an interesting place. Leaves you wondering how Ichigo figures into it. Me too, cuz I haven't written much about him, yet. Your flattery lifts me very high. Thank you. I don't know that I can agree about "brilliant writing" but I can accept that you have strong feelings and I'm so glad I can affect you that way. I'm especially fond of Yoruichi in cat form because of my two black cats. I will have her explain to Kisuke what she was up to, but I'm not sure where I'm putting it. It may not be in part 2 but much later.
  3. Chapter 1. Subterfuge: Mislead the Fools, Conceive the Plan Thank you for your reviews. Your comments give me inspiration and motivation. On 2013-2-02 amazonblues wrote: I'm glad you're excited, so am I. Yes, I am having loads of fun writing this. I can't get my mind off of it. I hope you continue to enjoy. On 2013-2-05 Cuzosu wrote: I couldn't help posting it. I just get squirmy and need to share. Mmmn. The word "dark" makes me want to live up to that. Thanks. Yes, you're a great source of Bleach info, that's why I count on your feedback. You're important to me. On 2013-2-07 FicticiousDelicious wrote: Mmm hmm. Definitely vain. If I can't have him as a perfectionist, then at least he has a very high opinion of himself. Chap 2 goes into more detail of how he views himself. At least that is how they appear. Remember that Shunsui whispered to Jushiro when he arrived. He knew in advance that he would need Jushiro's support. I so love that! It reminds me of the funny typo thread where Naruto's fox became Naruto's fax. I wrote: I wouldn't buy a bleach action figure, but I'd daydream about a little Grimmjow jumping out of my cereal box, giving me the finger, and then *poof* he'd disappear. That's got a kind of "Harry Potter" magic about it. I thought that in this instance, penis was more fitting. (no, not due to its size) Generally, I'm a cock girl. (no not futanari) She found his 'penis' rather painful to swallow, also. Heh, heh. Well, that would be a spoiler, but, I doubt people like him (excessively selfish), have much room for growth. However, I wouldn't discount the possibility. This is fiction. TicLIc, thanks so much for all the effort you put into your reviews. I love reading how you react to the story and many of your responses make me rethink or add new info.
  4. I have a crazy need to review everything I read, irregardless* of wasting my own time. It's a self-imposed rule. I made the decision to support fellow authors no matter what the cost, because I believe in practicing the behaviour you wish others would use on you. Meaning, if I want reviews, I must give them. It's not perfect Karma, but sometimes you need to put out 10 times (maybe 100) more effort to receive a positive response in return. It's the world we live in. Usually, authors complain about not getting reviews, but my complaint is that I can't keep up with the reviews I expect to give. I have a virtual sticky on my desktop with a list of the stories I still need to review. I'm also quite verbose in my comments which makes leaving a review (sometimes for every chapter) a bit challenging. I want to be original, insightful, witty, and sincere. I sometimes offer con crit, but mostly just analyze the content, the affect it had on me, and where my thoughts took me. I imagine its nice for the writer to know what their writing does to a reader, and not just if their writing is coherent or grammatically correct. It's seems silly to agonize over a review, but such is my nature. I agonize over everything I write. Proofreading is a major undertaking, involving the dictionary and multiple rereads. So, you see, my reviews take up a lot of time and effort, and sometimes I lose my impetus to put out. Ergo, the list. Am I the only one with this particular form of OCD? Somebody tell me that I have kindred spirits out there, and I'm not a lonely, weird, old cat lady. *irregardless - see discussion thread "The Direct Address Comma Rule"
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    Review Replies for "The War Within" by Raymy

    On 2013-5-26, kurahieiritrJIO wrote: I'm so happy you think I did a good job with him. As for the internal monologue, I was concerned there was too much of that, but it's good to know that someone enjoyed it enough to want more. I don't know if I've kept the same style for him later, but I'll put some thought into trying to keep that consistent. On 2013-5-27, kurahieiritrJIO wrote: It was a little oneshot, really. But, I'm the kind of person who will try to incorporate what I've written in this chapter with future chapters. There really isn't any plot development here except to set up the next chapter a little bit. Now I've hit a slump because of my own high expectations and haven't written (or posted) in quite awhile. I hope to swing back around and get my next chapter out during my next vacation period. (beginning of July) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
  6. kurahieiritrJIO wrote on 2013-05-26: I know I only mentioned that Bya was in human clothes without specifying what exactly he was wearing. I'm afraid that is something I have difficulty with and has been mentioned before. Scene descriptions is something I tend to skip past when reading stories. I don't know why. I enjoy those details when I watch movies or anime but don't like reading it in a book. So that is why I'm still struggling to remember to include such things when I write. Thanks for reading and reviewing with concrit. I really appreciate when readers take time to think of something special to say. I sometimes enjoy a lack of intimacy in stories but for my own, I tend to want some rationale for behaviour. I'm glad my viewpoint appeals to you enough to comment on it. It is really like Renji to blurt stuff out before thinking. I was surprised to see you thought I portrayed him as a player. I didn't think his history was excessive but somewhat reserved, considering his lifespan. I'll have to reread my story and perhaps revise it to fit more in line with what I was trying to project. But thanks for your impressions. I like when readers make me think about the message I'm conveying. I'm also very appreciative of your time in reviewing me.
  7. I neglected to give replies to most of my reviews while writing this, even though there are a few times I commented in my Author notes. I can only say in my defence, that it was my first story and I didn’t know any better. Now, I’m inclined to reply, hoping it’s not too late. I’ve received a few more reviews since I finished this fic and thought I’d make a cozy space to respond to those new readers. First, I’ll post the original reviews “as I wrote” and add extra comments. satterb wrote on 2012-10-11: This was really good. Nice try for a first time. It's a perfect place to stop if you're not going to finish. Go any further and your readers might be upset if you let the story drop. Using an outline for your story is a big help in planning how you want it to roll. I think you have some talent. Good luck in the future. A/N in chapter 5: Thanks to satterb’s reviews, I made an outline and there are three more chapters. Added today: Thanks for being my first reviewer. You gave good concrit. and flattering praise. satterb wrote on 2012-10-12: Renji is so cute in this story. I look forward to more. I'm glad you found your muse. Thanks for all your hard work. Added today: Your so welcome. Your interest is very motivational.
  8. Sorry to take so long to respond to your query. I finished Alternated Tracks, with the unrevised chapters, and am glad you posted them. So, from my perspective, I'd like to continue reading the 3rd story, even if you haven't revised it yet. Since I'm rereading and reviewing from the beginning and I'm excruciatingly slow at it, by the time I get to the unrevised chapters, you may have revised them. But I'm itching to read more now cuz you tempted me with what I might have to expect and I don't want to wait, knowing you're done, with only revising to do. Ultimately, It's your baby, but if I have any influence, I vote for posting the entire 3rd story.
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    What Song Are You Listening To?

    "Thirst" by City and Colour Ahhhh, I just found this song. Heard it on the radio a couple of times and fell in love with his voice. Went to iTunes and bought the song. I'm listening to it over and over and still not tired of it. I had to buy the album cuz I can listen to this beautiful voice all day. When I think of, fates worse than death All I can think of, is something you said You said we were golden, Bright like the sun And now I am stranded, Knowin' I'm not the one An ocean of anger, flowin' through me Bloodstained and broken, from what I failed to see Just like a snake charmer, you led me astray Living in distress, hopin' help was on the way Chorus: In the midst of a storm, searching for shelter I came upon, one single feather A half-hearted wish, for something better Gracefully cursed I thirst ... Attached to the soil, I'm dyed in the wool There's iron in my blood, yet so vulnerable But after I'm gone, once I finally leave You will be left alone, to the wolves and the thieves Chorus Ahhhh, yes. Lyrics are exceptional but the tonal quality of his voice and it's purity. So beautiful. I'm in bliss.
  10. Thanks so much for updating, I'm anxious to read beyond chapter 33. I have to find out how the two deal with the shootings.
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    The A.C.R.O.N.Y.M. game

    Not to be nitpicky, buuuut ... your acronym spells sinloin Pronounced Error Ridiculously Vilifies Each Reader's Tiresome Evil Demons D R A G Q U E E N
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    The A.C.R.O.N.Y.M. game

    Deadly Internal Suffering Answers Paralyzing Paranoia, Effectively Altering Reality And No-one Cares Especially S I R L O I N
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    Truckers Are Pervs

    LOL. I hope that nickname doesn't become his permanent handle. You'll have to let us know what your handles end up being. Haven't heard from you in a long time. I guess training takes up a lot of it. Hope all is going well, there.
  14. Okay, yeah. I read the first and second books. I see the fourth posted but I won't read it until I read the third. Where is the third? I haven't reviewed yet, because I've been just barrelling through. So, sorry about lack of feedback. I'll get there eventually when I reread from the beginning. It's sort of like the way you describe their intimacy. I can't take my time on the first round, too stimulated. Heh, heh. General impression, though, is that I like it. Otherwise, I wouldn't be reading it steady and daydreaming about the pair.
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    Funny Typos

    Sorry to sidetrack this thread. Buuuuut ... I'm still gonna. Hey, thanks for the clarification. Although, I watched the series before I read this post, so I figured out my error pretty quick. Since I'm so into Bleach (and know you've seen it), I made a parallel between KT and Grimmjow's attitudes. But Takumi just takes the cake! I totally agree with "cute little prude". There was this one subbed line that described him as "clueless" and that's him in a nutshell. I love that about him.
  16. Feeling pretty good today, thought I'd write it down. Maybe it will cheer me up when I read it in the future.

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    Funny Typos

    Oh my Gods! I laughed so hard. I don't know "wot" was intended for the words "tak" or "kts" but I loved the word, "wot". I think I'm going to be seeing that spelling in my head every time I say the word from now on. It makes sense to me if I hear a British accent when I read it.
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    Review replies to "Forged Confessions"

    Oh hilarious! I just had to say something. When I first read this, I read "Unohana wiped Shunsui's ass." I thought, WTF? Did he soil himself or something? Oh yeah, I know better, I read the chapter, but I couldn't stop laughing at the imagery.
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    Review Replies for "The War Within" by Raymy

    Chapter 5. Altered States: Uryū & Chad in a Joint Venture On 2013-04-12 FicticiousDelicious wrote: I think Ishida takes pride in his independence and is stubborn to the point of almost sacrificing his own well-being, but not so much so that he won't eventually give in to his need for connection (from being alone so much), which I think is stronger. (hence his seeking out Ichigo in the name of proving that Quincy's are stronger but really, it was to make a connection) If he didn't seek a confidant (in Urahara) or solace (with Chad), he could very well become depressed, wallowing in his secrecy and pride. I think he chose Urahara to confide in because he represents a father figure that he would like to have instead of the one he's got. Chad has a maturity that is beyond his age but is symbolically represented in his body. He's already come to terms with his childhood struggles and now faces adult ones. While his peers are still working out their teenage angst and parental issues, he's moving toward a crucial breakthrough about his very existence. And yes, Mary Jane has been very helpful in his acceptance of life's curves. He believes in meditation and fully embracing your thoughts and feelings, and so has a personal mission to bring his friends enlightenment. Both Ichigo and Uryu have impaired (somewhat due to immaturity) understanding of themselves and of relationships, so any assistance Chad can bring is a good thing, I think. You're right. Unshackling the chains of duty and routine, even safety to some extent, can free you to desire more, experience more, live fuller. If you're hindering yourself by denying your own choices, you're left "empty". That's my take on it. I don't see either of them being crass or raunchy. Chad speaks sparingly and when he does, it's careful and gentle. Uryu has tight sensibilities which, even with the help of MJ, still keep his speech on an intellectual level. Thanks for helping me with that one phrase when Uryu is surprised by Chad's revelation that he'd wanted to kiss and hold Uryu for some time. My first attempt was not in keeping with what I just described. I hope what he ended up saying was more suitable. He's a bit insistent at this point because he's highly aroused and has figured out what keeps him stimulated. When he's in a battle crisis, he's also commanding and assertive. I think that if he doesn't have inhibitions to counteract his nature, it would be normal for him to state his needs. You know, your speaking this sentence makes me think about trying to incorporate tragic heroes into the story. Mmmmn. Inner fire, baby. Just waiting to be fanned. Man, every time you give such a wonderful review, I remember back to your first review of Driven where you stated, "I'm not the best at reviewing works." Well, in my opinion, your ARE the best at reviewing works. Not only do you bring me joy with your praise and enthusiasm, but you often have excellent con crit that I take to heart. Thank you. *bows head*
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    Funny Typos

    Yeah, the heat of one's rage would be like those hot air dryers in public cans. To say, "he towelled his hands dry with rage", is a metaphor that could well have been intentional. You don't mind if I use it, do you?
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    Review Replies for "The War Within" by Raymy

    Chapter 4. Instinct Reset: Primera & Sexta & Octava, Oh My! AND Chapter 5. Altered States: Uryū & Chad in a Joint Venture On 2013-04-03 BookMaggot wrote: At first I thought, "Man! Does she need spellcheck!" Then, "Oh she must have had her fingers on the wrong keys; I've done that." Finally, "Jeezus, she's had a stroke! I hope this won't affect her writing." Very descriptive way to convey your feelings. I laughed out loud. Tee hee And: *Grins wider than humanly possible* "Wow" is the word that covers this review, though. I'm really, really, really glad you liked it. And thanks for commenting on how the songs affected you. And: Yeah, I thought it was schmaltzy but that was my intent. Poetry and love, don't get a lot of that with me, but I thought this might be a good forum, since I think Chad is so musically artistic and emotionally sensitive. Turns out, Uryu and Chad are suited well. I was watching the anime when they are going to save Orihime in H.M. and felt they just had this connection of understanding between them. Thanks for both your wonderful reviews.
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    Review Replies for "The War Within" by Raymy

    Chapter 5. Altered States: Uryū & Chad in a Joint Venture On 2013-04-02 Anon wrote: Thanks for your quick review, Anon. I had barely posted when I heard my email notification beep and saw you had reviewed! I am planning on two het pairings, maybe more. I'm still thinking about F/F. I don't actually take requests though. Maybe I'll want to do a story someday that reflects your ideas.
  23. Khallsnea wrote on 2013-03-29: Now the image of a damn hot Captain Kuchiki dancing in the dance floor has been permanently imprinted in my head! And Renji just drooling and thinking about joining? And the part where they were talking it’s really fun. I can perfectly imagine Renji’s face all red with embarrassment. I’m dying to know what’s going to happen in the hotel! And you’re just at the first chapter! Are you going to review each one separately? Yeah, Kuchiki dancing was my inspiration for beginning the story. I could just see his fluid moves and demure expression. Understated sexy! Thanks for reading my story. I'm dying to know what you think of the rest. Khallsnea wrote on 2013-03-30: I had planned to write a review for each chapter… but I failed miserably. I started reading the second one, waiting for the ‘party’ to start but you cut the chapter when they were going to the shower! I couldn’t pause and ran to the next one. And when I realized, I had read until chapter 5!! Your descriptions of Renji and Byakuya are so cute that I think I’m going to read the next chapters right away. I especially like the way you change between their respective POV. It’s interesting to see both sides of the story. It looks like they had found a partner for more than a random night. What a compliment that you couldn't stop reading! I know when that happens to me, I'm really enjoying the story. I had to develop some kind of plot or arc so I decided on a long held, but unfulfilled longing for the two as a backstory. It's cliche, but I like it.
  24. whitetiger9953 wrote on 2013-03-07: I ran across a review you posted in someone's story and decided to check you out. Dear lord, you can write. I'm in aw of the way you portrayed Renji and Baya. I loved the way Baya used dancing as a release from his stressful life. I also agree that Ichigo, though sensual in his own right, was not the perfect fit for this wonderful story. The hotel scene was hot, steamy and well written. I almost cried during the fight after as Renji ran away in pain and Baya stood there reaching out to him. (sniffle) I like that Jushiro was so calm and understanding in the way he helped Baya to understand his role in the fight, and Hisagi? What can I say, perversion fits him. That just leaves us with the last chapter. Hot, Hot, Hot!! I really like it when Renji is on bottom. Don't get me wrong, Baya is sexy as hell while spread out for Renji, but Renji has a sensual 'Take Me' vibe that can take over any scene. Mmmmmm..(clears throat) sorry got lost in a daydream. I will be looking through your other writings after this, and going through your favorites list. Thank you very much for posting this story. Added today: Well, I’m grinning from ear to ear. What a flattering review. And yeah, I got lost in many daydreams while writing it. Still have that problem, making the sexy chapters the hardest to write. I hope you’d like to read The War Within. It’s still in its infancy but I hope that it will be exciting once it gets going.
  25. stillkisseswithsaliva wrote on 2013-01-14: loved this story!! my fav bleach pairing! i wouldn't have minded if it were longer but for a shorter multi chapter it went just how i like my Bya/Ren fics to go! so hot but still with a plot, switching, a little angst & a happy ending = perfect! lol you should definitely do more! (you really should try that juu, ren, bya-kun oneshot maybe as a dream of renji's or something lol) & some ikkaku/yumi! Added today: You have given me inspiration to add to my current story. Not strictly a oneshot, although some could argue that my chapters in The War Within are more like one-two shots. I even thought of a scenario to include Ikkaku and Yumi. Group sex, anyone? Benihime1231 wrote on 2013-01-27: Not A BAD STORY... Thanks for this one :-) Added today: And thank you for reading and taking time to leave a review. I do appreciate it.