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If I was to give Loric a nickname from the Goddess (Ava) I think her calling him sweetheart or sweetie would be more her style. 
 

I’m going for the shotgun approach on suggestions, giving a bunch and seeing which ones stick.  A nickname or two between them can help describe the relationship too.  And as the founder of Home Depot once said, anybody under 80 is a “kid” to him.

Not sure if that would fit her personality or goals, as she needs him and starts off just trying to be flirty and playful, she eventually ends up with strong romantic desires and feelings for him.
She likes to clearly flirt playfully, more directed at the idea of being a very fun-loving goddess though it also hides her isolation and loneliness, that she becomes dependant on the character to be there with her even though she has a lot of power.
 

I was going with “good boy” because in this instance, it is supposed to hind that the young man not only is respectful based on encounters from before but that he hasn't even been with a woman.
so she is teasing him and also complimenting him at him being “a good boy” not sure about shy

Not sure if that would fit her personality or goals, as she needs him and starts off just trying to be flirty and playful, she eventually ends up with strong romantic desires and feelings for him.
She likes to clearly flirt playfully, more directed at the idea of being a very fun-loving goddess though it also hides her isolation and loneliness, that she becomes dependant on the character to be there with her even though she has a lot of power.
 

Given age (& power) disparities… other options might include “kid” “child” or even “beast”/”toy”.

Why not have her call him a little virgin?

The goddess is 100% sexually teasing him, that is her thing without actually prompting him or directly offering anything.
In this world all the other gods, goddesses, and demon lords are all either dead or banished during a war over 1k years ago, but the remains of their armies are still around and without anything to command or control them, they do what they want.
Think of Goblin Slayer meets witcher, the young man becomes the witcher without the potion/ritual thing

I have a line here and I can not figure out what is the best way to articulate it, advice? 
Context, goddess just gave the young man some of her power to make him a Champion and eventual Hero, the calling him a good boy part is what I have an issue with.
"That was me giving you some of my energy, just a little bit of it. Now you and I will be connected for all time, you will grow stronger and faster, and you will be more resilient to poisons and other nasty little things. Heroes and champions are only a few steps from becoming a demi-god. If you were to have children now they too would have the unlocked power that you do. You don't have any children yet do you?" 
Loric just looked away blushing even more.
"Oh my, I really did find a good boy don't I? Do not worry about it, maybe sometime you will find a woman worthy of bearing your children," Ava said while biting one of her fingernails and giving him a devilish smile.

So the plan, still working on it, is that the party ends up in the room, because of the sleep stuff they get captured by …… someone, and must deal with either escaping or being diplomatic etc.
I am leaning more towards escaping and fighting their way out of the place and so on.
But I thank all of you for your thoughts and ideas, gives me more ideas to work with.

So the plan, still working on it, is that the party ends up in the room, because of the sleep stuff they get captured by …… someone, and must deal with either escaping or being diplomatic etc.
I am leaning more towards escaping and fighting their way out of the place and so on.
But I thank all of you for your thoughts and ideas, gives me more ideas to work with.

Alright, too much youtube, it was mentioning poisonous gas. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LnkwxKHVLeU
Phosphine can be had by heating white phosphorus in aqueous solution of potash (potassium carbonate).  While the pure is odorless, the technical grate can have a highly unpleasant order like rotting fish. Arsine can give off a slight garlic scent when it’s presence is above 0.5 ppm … it’ll destroy the kidneys (according to this video).

Yeah, that would do it.  The secret ingredient is an ungodly amount of poppy seeds, greens and more. Whether or nor they wake up is another matter. The hulking barbarian might be knocked out but the elder sage of venerable age and the tiny sorceress that’s probably 90lbs wet on a good day is absolutely dead.

It’s fine to use standard architectural terms, like column or obelisk or façade (rather than pediment). The idea is to use a common enough term that your readers will recognize, so they can see in their mind’s eye what it is you want them to see.

Ok valid point, so then how would you describe a Roman/Greek style temple in a Original world, because what I have I do not think fits it at all.
(After a short trek in the ankle high water, Loric found what looked to be some kind of old temple ruins. A tall cube like building with blue crystals that reached at least two floors high supporting the building that were creating the light.) 

I think my issue in this case, is that I dont know what some of these objects are called and so I am stuck trying to figure out a term to call them while explaining what they are etc.
A communication issue on my part.

Definitely stick to the overall aesthetics. If its modern/urban fantasy sure it works. Scifi/futuristic could also work if only in a vintage nostalgic sense.
If its more a fantastical world that may or may not ever reach the industrial revolution… Not so much.
Greco-roman = Columns… They certainly had a fetish for arches and columns also open areas.
Egyptian= Loved obelisks and almost always tag every significant structure with hieroglyphs.
Aztec/Maya the other pyramid builders with serpent motifs… They symbol spammed their calendar all over the place.
Hindu- Gods and goddesses with multiple limbs dancing. Elegant mathematical principals on full display and highly detailed.
 
 

Hm. That’s a rather awkward visual. I’m also not sure if the building is two stories high, if the crystals are two stories high, if the crystals are supporting the building off the ground, or if it’s the crystals or building creating the light.
Now, Greco-Roman architecture is not all that hard to describe. In general, the buildings would have columns in front, stairs leading up to the doorway, which could be wide and open or with a stout wooden door, depending on the usage, and a peaked roof. I’d drag out all the proper terms for each component, but anyone can Google that. The point is that it’s not hard to describe a structure if you approach it logically:
“After a short trek in the ankle high water, Loric found what looked to be some kind of temple ruins. Blue crystalline columns supported the structure, rising at least three meters out of the water, and their radiance illuminated the pale stone of the temple. The remnants of a broad stair, flanked by tall columns capped with intricate carvings, led up to an intimidatingly dark opening beneath the crumbling pediment.”
Or something to that effect…  
 

Isn’t Glorfindel using the force to serve himself up a pan-dimensional gargle blaster at Quark’s bar, in orbit of Rylos?

I know a lot of fanfics break with their ‘verse to reference things in other ‘verses, but speaking only for myself, I think it’s lazy writing. I mean, it’s just as easy to say that a mask covered only the eyes and nose of a character, leaving their mouth uncovered as it is to say they wore a mask like Batman when Batman isn’t part of their ‘verse at all. 
It’s really the writer’s choice, when you come down to it. When I do write fanfic, I try to stick to my ‘verse and not drag in references that wouldn’t fit. Same thing with dialogue. I try not to use expressions or slang that doesn’t fit my ‘verse. Can you imagine a character from LotR making a reference to something out of Harry Potter? It takes the reader right out of the story. I mean, would Glorfindel order butterbeer? Of course not. He’d rather have miruvor, or a good Dorwinion wine. 

I would only use the Iron Man/Optimus Prime description if you are describing the armored character from the POV of another character who would be familiar with those franchises. In that instance, the description would actually serve double duty, telling you what the armored character looks like while also telling you something about the observer (eg, that they’re from Earth in the 1980s or later, and that they’re into scifi and such).

For me, it very much depends on what I’m writing. If it’s set in a world of my own creation, there wouldn’t be anyone who knew who Ironman or Optimus Prime were, so that sort of description would be meaningless. 
If I were writing something set on future-day Earth, however, then those references would be applicable, and if I was going for a touch of humor, I might even use them. It would really depend on whether or not I was going for a grim mood or something more sardonic, I suppose.

Question, when you are writing something descriptive, how do you decide what terminology to use? 
Ex: “The space commando looked like a fusion of Ironman and Optimus Prime from hell.”
or would you not use such examples and instead try to use your own words to depict the character?
Ex: “The space commando had sleek red and silver armor with a menacing and slightly bulky helmet, his oversized pulse gun increasing the intimidation factor”
( I have no such character in mind this was all made on the spot)
 

I have some adventurers exploring a dungeon and I want them to fall into a typical sleep trap.
but instead of the traditional walk into a room and it fills with gas, I was thinking they are in the room, light the candles/torches and its letting out a gas from there.
is there any real world substances that could work like that, or do I need to make something up?

Yeah I remember stories from Greek mythology that involved something in the torch oil or mixed into the candle wax that when one of the hero's and his party would light them, it slowly let out a gas that knocked them out over time.
Not sure if there was a real substance used or not, if there was it would just save me time but if not eh I can farce something.