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    Creating drama

    So I am trying to create some drama between a father and son revolving around the death of the mother. All I have ATM is that the boy was really young when she died and that the dad kept HOW she died a secret because he wanted to protect his son from ……… something. The setting is in a fantasy world and I dont know what would fit for this set up. any ideas?
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    Creating drama

    Yeah I think that is what I will do. The dad’s are fighting a “hoard” 5-10 outside, the mom’s bring kids into cellar, one pig walks in on the mom’s as they enter back into the main house and get killed, boy (Seth) mom is eaten on the floor where he can see it all happen. Dad (Thorin) comes in, throws the pig out the door and with no mercy, hacks away at the monster, still in eyesight of his son, this sets fear into his Seth’s mind about his own dad etc etc. in short breaking his mind. spell is used to remove that memory of events, creating the feeling of betrayal. yes?
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    Creating drama

    My thoughts are that the more …… savage the better. I am thinking that the mom’s die a bloody mess etc, frogs make me think of typical frog vore where the person is just swallowed. Maybe Pig men of some kind? I know in Asian anime Orcs are more like Pig men/people but I would have to make them more beast like almost goblin like in mentality but high brute strength.
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    Creating drama

    now I just need a monster that would/could travel in a small pack (werewolves were used for something else) and be something terrifying. giant rats? some kind of boar monster?
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    Creating drama

    Pondering on the possible paths I could take, I am thinking maybe something like the kid/s are in the cellar to be safe, but the mothers are in the main house. monster/s break in and have lunch, maybe there were more of them like a pack of ….. (monster) and the dad’s were fighting the main monsters, this was just one that got away. So the kids can see and hear the moms being killed and eaten, but the boy (Seth) also sees what dad did to the monster for killing his wife, so much so that he became scared of dad too. or something like that.
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    Creating drama

    at the moment, my thoughts are that he was about 5yrs old, kind of half thinking that both moms were there, maybe rushed just him or the 2 girls into a hiding place together before being attacked. maybe a potion was used by the elf father to block the memories of what happened as I currently have it that the son is over hearing the details of what actually happened.
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    Creating drama

    It’s a family of elves that farm, mostly exotic stuff for potions, poisons etc. The human dad Thorin, is friends with the elf dad. It could be a demon, a beast like monster or anything else of the sorts. I am starting to think a demon would be a little typical, but making it a beast that farmers would normally deal with in this world would be more practical like a rat monster, Ogre etc. I just dont have the tragity feeling that would lead to the lie.
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    Creating drama

    So the father and son live on a small farm, dad is ex elite guard/military to the kingdom. across the way is an elf farm, a dad from the same unit and twin sisters that are deeply in love with the boy. both mothers died at the same time, same cause. The world is a mish mash of our worlds mythology in terms of cultures and monsters, but the gods are different etc. My hope, is that the son, who trusts dad 100% will feel betrayed by the lie. but the death was not just a normal got sick, or bandits. I want something that would strike fear into the heart of a child, something that would potentially make them feel unsafe at home at any time, so far my thoughts are going to a demon of some kind. I was also thinking that dad being the ex military type literally destroyed the demon in a way that might make his son see him differently. This would give dad a reason for protecting his son from the idea of the demons till he is older, but also his image with his son.
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    Am I wrong or is my grammar checker an idiot?

    sometimes it just needs an update, but I have also found in some writing programs that they are rather stupid
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    element magic vs element magic

    So there are different types of magic elements, using fire for this one. Fire, Holy fire, Hellfire. I have always known Holy fire to be a blue or white, maybe golden? but there is also a fire that undead tend to use, it can also be a blue or white. Normal fire is …… normal but what about Hellfire? I have been thinking about it and I feel that a deeper red, maybe a blood red would be better to make them feel different? any thought on this one?
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    element magic vs element magic

    I was talking with the wife, she added black to the color list. All these colors have different effects look wise with fire. ATM I am thinking the colors could be. Holy – Gold/White Demonic – Blood red/Black Undead – sickly green/light blue Mortals – normal red orange and purple. thoughts?
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    element magic vs element magic

    actually, I remember a game now that the undead used a green fire, their entire theme was green or purple. too many ideas.
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    non villain bad guy

    SO I am working on an original story, something that I want to actually try to publish. There is a mage school, the “bad guy” is another student who is using magic, potions etc to manipulate female students and staff to not only help him with his goals, But occasionally influence them into performing “favors” for him. using X he makes them sexually aroused, offers to “help” them. What I need to know, is what could be used to sexually arouse the women and what part of the brain/hormones etc that would effect. whos got a PHD
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    non villain bad guy

    So I am thinking then that a type of hypnosis and modified pheromones would be more practical for this jack ass. He doesnt want a love potion where the women never leave him alone and he cant do his work etc, he just needs submissive ……. puppets?
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    non villain bad guy

    lol good point
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    non villain bad guy

    Yeah hes not stupid at all, no silver spoon but 100% told and believes he is better than others, any means is justifiable etc. He would come from middle class but acts like he is some kind of nobility or something. Need him to be deserving of being killed by the MC
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    non villain bad guy

    Question, would anyone have any recommendations for this bad guys personality? My idea is that his goals is to become a mage at a royal court or something, some place easy that he wont have to do a lot of work but make lots of gold. Something that makes him important, respected and over all better than everyone else. hence why he is manipulating the women the way he is, for his goals etc. He needs to be bad enough that he is killable in terms of doing bad things, but not so much on the level of being as I said, a villain.
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    non villain bad guy

    Well he is supposed to be a bad guy, he needs to be a royal jack ass in some levels relative to his position and abilities, but I want him to be more than that, calculating and kind of the sleazy lawyer type that is 100% unethical but not breaking the law. Historically, people in power tend to be royal jack asses, power corrupts after all. Kings and others would tend to use women as a statement of power and toss them aside just as quick as a used condom. I want you to hate this guy, typical white privilege, entitled rich boy, deserves anything and everything he wants and when his guts are spilling on the floor you get a feeling of just deserved and kind of wish you did it your self. I guess I could instead use hypnosis combined with ……. a loyalty spell? ….. eh just doesnt feel jackass enough to me, I will figure it out.
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    non villain bad guy

    ok good, now thats out of the way. still need to figure out how this exactly would work in a logical way, something that a reader would understand. my thoughts are that, what he does (no idea what exactly) could either increase hormone production of a type, that way its not mind control. I wouldnt want to use a pheromones system because any women would be effected, unless its after they have been …. infected? any ideas?
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    non villain bad guy

    as I said, this character is a “not a villain” but more like a …….. that rude jack ass have at work that always finds a way to get a head but does the least amount of work, tricks people into doing his for him, charms the bosses daughter/wife into thinking hes the best employee etc etc etc. He isnt trying to take over the world, he just has his own goals and who gives a fuck if some girls/women get hurt, they should have been better sorceresses/witches etc The MC has to deal with this guy, at some points needs his help but later turns on him and frees the girls from his manipulation. Think someone like in the saw movies, he tells you not to open the door to that room, you did it any ways and something cuts your head off, he warned you, you didnt listen. the girls can leave at any time, they are not prisoners, they just have an addiction to a drug/spell that he used his DNA in so only he could make them feel better, but they need to keep coming back for more. did that make any sense to you?
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    non villain bad guy

    Kind of, he is supposed to be a manipulative jack ass and all, he is just using the women to get what he wants and will toss them aside when he doesnt need them. they cant/wont expose him because he didnt “FORCE” anyone into anything, its that he just used X ways to make them very VERY horny, and only his stuff could/would be able to trigger a release for them. The girls/women could fuck an entire football team but not get the actual …….. fulfilment? from it but would eventually recover after about a month of non contact with him kind of like a drug withdrawal.
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    non villain bad guy

    So this yet to be named ass hole, his ego is more about having multiple ways to do the same things. I dont call him a villain only because he isnt using “love potions” but more of ……… E without the mind altering effects, but only his DNA (sweat, spit, cum etc) will trigger the proper release. Its kind of a power trip thing, because he didnt FORCE anyone into anything, they can say no, but will not have a fun time without his “cure” at least every day. for the story he is just a minor bad guy that is kind of = to Malfoy. Its like that typical head cheerleader that manipulates all the boys, flirts with the teachers etc etc to get what she wants, best way I can describe it and I still dont think it worked out too well.
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    Odd question (female body)

    good question. I ask because I have seen a number of “different” types of vaginas as a husband, parent and art student. some I can see 100% ….. spreading open, but I often wondered about the other ones. will they just open like …. taking a small breath/sigh or is it full on opera singer and you can see her tonsils sort to speak.
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    Odd question (female body)

    If a woman squats to pick up something, like a box or clean the bottom of a shelf ….. what ever, does her vaginal lips open up/expose more of her inner lips? I really dont know how to ask this one.
  25. So using movies etc as an example, women are sometimes used as incubators/surrogate for the offspring of X monster/alien. For some reason I am now thinking about the actual possibility of it. COULD! a female of a mammal species incubate the offspring of a different one? (with in reason) For example, could a Human woman incubate/surrogate lets say kittens/puppies, meaning of course artificial insemination of the correct eggs that are then implanted inside the woman. Or would the body see it as something strange and attack them, would they even connect to the uterus or simply die out. I am 99.9% sure it would not work at all, its more just an odd thought and I would like to see what other people think.