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  1. InvidiaRed

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    One of the better deaths for sure. Rather than say the Red Death.
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    Haha. The Hallowen reviews were great. So let's see how this goes for the rest of my work.
  3. Almost done with part two of Out With the Old haha

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    The Endless are a touchy Bunch. Thankfully Death is one of the best depictions of it, no grim reaper but a happy goth
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    We got a theoretical fetish. Death Dream or How I Stopped Worrying And Allowed The Restless Dead To Ravage Me In My Dreams.
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    Hypothetically which fetish would that fall under? @JayDee
  7. Campaign: The War For Mortane Prologue

    is finished. Here’s the prologue. Sequel to Immunda and Rationis

    My attempt at forcing myself to write sex scenes and confront my weakness head on.

    Porn with plot.

    1. Desiderius Price

      Desiderius Price

      Plot with porn’s always good.  I tried to write porn without Plot, but Plot whined and forced its way in like a stray puppy.

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    From InBrightestDay on January 10, 2021 Master Override Well that was unexpected! It was pretty damn cool, though! Gestalt has a very AM vibe to it, though admittedly it doesn't hate organic life so much as it does feel that organics are inherently untrustworthy. You could also compare it to Skynet in that regard, though killing everyone in the building with nerve gas felt less like a defensive action and more malicious. It was pure malice, Gestalt didn’t have to nonfunctional anyone especially through neurotoxin. That Dystopic last war’s devastation contributed to Gestalt’s mindset but it made that purely malicious choice all on its own. It saw the leaders of that dying world decide to be selfish and ensure no one was going to win. The mist has me interested. It obviously connects to the fantasy world you write in a lot of the time, and the gods of Mortane are mentioned (note to self: get back to Rationis), so is this their doing? Is it perhaps a weird natural phenomenon, and the complex with Gestalt and Delta Five just sort of fell through a hole in the fabric of reality or something? Ironically, It was Gestalt’s Malice that caused the entire facility to fall out of a doomed timeline it called the fog that swallowed it whole. Harbinger is an interesting character. We don't know a ton about him, but he does mention having been a liar and disgraced, only to have been rescued from it. Maybe he has a story of his own out there. He’s introduced late Ghoulneedle and is in Winterfell as well. Lastly, I love the fact that what fried Gestalt was seeing an angel in its natural form. Admittedly Harbinger is also the herald of a deity, so it could have been something else that was spotted there by the sensors, but still the idea is really cool. Harbinger chose to mercy kill the rabid AI by revealing his true nature. Rationis’s sequel is almost ready.
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    From JayDee on January 10, 2021 The End of the World – not the most cheerful and upbeat of part headings, but it does feel appropriate. At least this Harry seems to be faring better in a zombie infested setting than the version in the last zombie story I reviewed! I’m reading Mortuus Orbis too. I really liked that line “The turbulent skies fought the sun.” it’s super poetic. Then… wow. With just a few lines you really build up the suspense of what Harry’s going to find, and then show the nasty aftermath of a hanging. It’s brief but that’s all that’s needed. Figure Harry did the smart thing getting rid of that body too. Its now undeniable that these Inferi have their own magic. Harry is doing his best revealing the nature of this new enemy. Is it suicide or is there a killer amongst them? Should we be looking suspiciously at Argus? Despair induced Suicide. …I probably shouldn’t have laughed at the mental image of Hermione nearly slipping on her own vomit. In my defense, I’m messed up. Wait, no defense… ah well. (Positive Affirmations Jaydee =p) Looking forward to the next part!
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    From JayDee on January 10, 2021 Sorry for the review delays! Snake dude’s back! Still loving the snake dude! Is this one of the settings where hospitality is really serious business? Sacred Hospitality is the biggest deal A lot of the old gods took it really seriously, so I’m thinking that oath not to abuse guest right is one that’ll be taken seriously.Which is why Logan makes sure to bind Glykon I kinda support him anyway – I mean, 300 pounds of bacon? Yum! This dude is straight up hilarious. Glykon is also being particular with those exact words. he can’t really help what he is. Have you had cherry smoked bacon? its amazing haha. So…Duncan was ‘mother’ to Loki’s kids? While Loki in turn was mother to a horse… there’s a lot of fluid-gender gender fluid getting shot about in the past sounds like. Heck of a fight with the wolf – Biological sex is more of a polite suggestion than hard fact for gods in general.If both partners want children then reality itself will find a way to make it happen.I guess he was outmatched in the ol’ transformation game though! Fenrir can switch forms and even grow larger and stronger in his wolf form but its more of a one trick pony. He’ll never match the sheer versatility or mastery of someone like Duncan whose Megafauna combat forms reflect in magnitudes how primal he truly is in comparison to everyone else. Fenrir did slay Duncan and put him out of commission, All that did was wake an elder incarnation. Itsthe first time Duncan admits to other Incarnations and only because Fenrir calls him out in a rather cruel fashion. Fenrir is well informed he’s inherited Loki’s wit and unfortunately his cruelty. Loki is imprisoned for Baldur’s murder so the only parent left for his aggression is Duncan and we see how that turned out. Kinda curious why the housesitter hightailed it out before they got back -was that arranged? I don’t remember a line that he had to bail. Big Z booty call. …I hope their New Year’s Party went ok! J-man was there to save the day along with Glykon. Duncan will be back by spring time there will be consequences
  12. Muggletum Finivi updated^_^

    I’ll be gone for a few days. I got muscled out of my deli job by the GM under the “restructuring” and other excuses it went from family operated to soulless business right quick. So rather than have the manager look for an excuse to fire me since he fired a bunch of people on Xmas I resigned. A right to work state sucks.


    I’ll be back so <3

    1. JayDee


      Hey, sorry it went like that but I hope you can get another job soon.

      I’ve got a this and that out with the old to catch up on, just been a little busy! (the mortuus orbis review I did was basically already written as I’ve sent feedback to IBD already! :) )

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      I got five years of customer service, I’m golden I’m going to take the rest of the month off and visit gramma and have a belated X-mas since I was forced to double shift Xmas.

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    And leave me bereft of a learning experience? Have you no shame?
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    From GeorgeGlass on January 03, 2021 Master Override, by InvidiaRed Another imaginative piece from InvidiaRed, in which technology meets mythology. A few comments: The Harbinger seems like a cross between Jesus and a herald of Galactus -- an appropriate look for the representative of a vengeful god. Thank you <3 Harbinger’s first appearance was towards the very end of Ghoulneedle. The warden loses his first herald in a rather traumatic way so he’s overprotective of his new one. They’re intimately connected in a way. A herald will always know the will of his lord. And in exchange the lord knows the heralds heart,mind and soul there is no deception possible between them. "Gestalt" is a great name for a being that speaks with millions of voices. Thanks "A fatal case of non-functionality." I like that. Best way I thought of for an AI to describe death. Non-functionality. In general, I like the whole comparison and contrast between the modern and the ancient, like how you describe the late CEO's residence as "on par with the Pharaohs and other kings of old. It was still just a tomb overabundant with silence and the dead." In a way history rhymed, in the beginning there were kings and at the end of this dead timeline. It ended the same way with despots deciding if they weren’t going to win this cataclysmic dystopian war then no one was going to. Also, I don't remember the last time I read a story that made such creative use of typefaces. (For me, just using two different fonts is a step outside the box.) Some fonts I feel just give that extra oomph that makes the scene really pop. Thank you.
  15. Out With The Old, the latest sequel is complete :D

  16. Almost done with the New years addition of Holiday Canon.

    Out With The Old

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    <3 See? I didn’t know that.
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    Mortuus Orbis

    So far its interesting.
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    @JayDee how do I write on how characters smoosh naughty bits together?
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    I could always just ask you JayDee you know how to make sex scenes flow.
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    AFF Holiday Party 2020

    I’ma gonna wait till everyone who wants to post does so before I review.