GeorgeGlass Posted January 30, 2022 Report Posted January 30, 2022 (edited) Here, I’ll post responses to any reviews for my story “Smooshed (Or, The Nine Wives of Marco Diaz).” Edited January 30, 2022 by GeorgeGlass FairySlayer 1 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted January 31, 2022 Author Report Posted January 31, 2022 (edited) From GrayNeko on January 30, 2022 Quote Love to see more Star, especially from you George. Thank you! And thanks for giving this story its first review. Quote I think calling the effects of the finale "the Smoosh" is pretty great. It just seemed like the most Star-ish thing to call it. Quote I look forward to seeing who joins Marco's harem and pray Ponyhead isn't one of them. Shhhh, no spoilers. Edited January 31, 2022 by GeorgeGlass GrayNeko and FairySlayer 2 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted January 31, 2022 Author Report Posted January 31, 2022 From ANON - Grey on January 31, 2022 Quote Awesome, always good to see some SVTFOE. Harem King Marco is the one true King lol Great work as always will be watching this story develop with interest. Thanks! Hope you enjoy it. FairySlayer 1 Quote
Guest this was a fun and interes Posted February 2, 2022 Report Posted February 2, 2022 This was awesome and interesting story so far and it shows the real consaquineses shar come to realize after killing the magic I hope Hekapoo back ,and I .hope she will be joining in , I also hope Jackie and her girlfriend is joining the harem to. Quote
king Posted February 2, 2022 Report Posted February 2, 2022 5 minutes ago, Guest this was a fun and interes said: This was awesome and interesting story so far and it shows the real consaquineses shar come to realize after killing the magic I hope Hekapoo back ,and I .hope she will be joining in , I also hope Jackie and her girlfriend is joining the harem to. This is me GeorgeGlass 1 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted February 2, 2022 Author Report Posted February 2, 2022 Quote This was awesome and interesting story so far and it shows the real consaquineses shar come to realize after killing the magic There was so much talk about that among fans after the series finale that I felt like I absolutely had to address it. Quote I hope Hekapoo back ,and I .hope she will be joining in , I also hope Jackie and her girlfriend is joining the harem to. Given that Marco has eight wives left to find, I’d say that the odds of at least some of your wishes coming true are pretty good. FairySlayer 1 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted February 15, 2022 Author Report Posted February 15, 2022 From ANON - Edward on February 13, 2022 Quote Good stuff, man. Insterested to see what girls end up as Marco's partners. Thanks! I hope you’ll like his choices. FairySlayer 1 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted March 22, 2022 Author Report Posted March 22, 2022 From ANON - Ron on March 21, 2022 Quote Please ha e Hekapoo join in the herum next or soon. You’ll just have to read on and see what happens... FairySlayer 1 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted March 26, 2022 Author Report Posted March 26, 2022 @GrayNeko From GrayNeko on March 25, 2022 Quote I'm loving the inclusion of Princess Arms, but I'm a little sad that her striking nose has been rinoplastied. I found it strangely attractive with the rest of her look. Yeah, a couple of people on AO3 didn’t like her makeover, either. (One was particularly disappointed by the electrolysis.) My feeling is that if Arms had just had the pointy nose, or the buck teeth, or the flat chest, or the hairy pits, I might have left it alone. But since she has all four of those issues, and since she clearly didn't like having hairy pits, I thought it would be fun -- and funny -- to have her completely make herself over once she discovers Earth's many beauty-related resources. Quote I'm hoping we'll get a reason why Mime is not to be included, because I would have loved for her to be part of Marco's harem, especially given the implications of her and those scarves she swallowed. In a way, you’ve already found out, but all will be made clear by the end. Quote Looking forward to see who Tom recruits to help his investigation. You’ll find out soon. Quote On a constructive criticism note, I've noticed a few instances where the names of female participants gets mixed up. I know how tricky it can be with so many moving pieces. Aw, crud, I hate when I do that, but thanks for mentioning it. I’ll have to read through those chapters again. Are there any specific instances you can think of? FairySlayer 1 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted May 11, 2022 Author Report Posted May 11, 2022 From ANON - SSB123 on May 10, 2022 Quote quite the chapter this turned out. really shows how much they've grown to love each other. Yes, they certainly have. Quote and if it got to the point where Jackie dicides to sleep topless from now on, they may as well remain naked around each other when they're alone Some of them might, but others may opt for sexy sleepwear. FairySlayer 1 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted May 13, 2022 Author Report Posted May 13, 2022 From GrayNeko on May 11, 2022 Quote I'm wondering if the weapons given to Marco and his ladies might be the key to freeing them from whatever is affecting them as well, because to me it seems like there are two kinds of mind control going on after the Tom's visit to Ponyhead. Or at least, Marco seems to be some sort of catalyst to counter the Possessed, turning them to something else. Will Tom hook up with this teacher? That might be fun and I think Tom deserves something for all the work he's doing. My, so much speculation. You’re just going to have to wait and see. FairySlayer and GrayNeko 2 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted May 30, 2022 Author Report Posted May 30, 2022 From GrayNeko on May 29, 2022 Quote I really love the way you do dirty talk. Thanks! That’s often my favorite part of a sex scene to write. Quote Also enjoyed the characterization of Hekapoo as well as having a full figured lady added to the mix. Thanks! I really wanted to include Hekapoo in this story (not least for full-figured-lady reasons), so I put a lot of thought into how she would survive the death of magic, and how she would be changed by it, FairySlayer 1 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted June 23, 2022 Author Report Posted June 23, 2022 From ANON - SSB123 on June 17, 2022 Quote five if Marco's six wives are now pregnant. honestly thought it would be longer until it happens.now i'm starting to bellive Marco was right to suspect the whole Nine Wives thing was hard to bellive given the last part. There’s definitely more going on than meets the eye. Stay tuned. Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted June 23, 2022 Author Report Posted June 23, 2022 From ANON - DaremoKamen on June 19, 2022 Quote Please don't make Princess Spiderbite part of the harem. I really like her together with Slimeboy, and would hate to see them broken up. If you decide to include sex scenes that don't involve Marco and his Harem, that couple would be fun to see. Spiderbite was suggested early on as a candidate for the harem, but I decided against it specifically because I didn’t want to break up her and Slime. Given that the Monster Haters are alive and well, their Mewman/monster relationship remains important. Quote I'm really enjoying Tom and Rose trying to find out what the reasons are. I’m glad. It’s been interesting for me to write Tom as a good guy, rather than the straight-up villain he was in my previous Star Vs. story, “Star’s Crossed Lovers.” Quote It should go without saying that I really enjoy the sex scenes. But I’m glad you didn’t let it go without saying. Thanks! Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted July 2, 2022 Author Report Posted July 2, 2022 From GrayNeko on July 02, 2022 Quote Reminds me of the book "Invasion" by Robin Cook, which I read because my middle school library had a very strange collection of sci-fi and fantasy that I don't think anyone properly evaluated. I read some Robin Cook in my youth, but not that one, I don’t think. I’m guessing it’s not great? Or was it just not appropriate for middle schoolers? Quote Loved that Janna finally got some anal action and I dig Britney's dance routine, I thought I was almost done with Brittney’s sex scene, and then the idea of the other girls getting up and cheering came to me and I just had to include it. Quote which made me think of Symbionic Titan, which then made me sad, but then the sex made me happy again. It is super-weird that you mention Symbionic Titan – which I’ve never watched – because when Fairy Slayer sent me his beta of the chapter, he included a link to an astoundingly sexy dance scene from that show. Guess I’m going to have to try watching it one of these days. Quote Love that Star is still trying to find her place in the world and is still coping with her hard choice. Thanks. More Starry angst coming soon! FairySlayer 1 Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted August 30, 2022 Author Report Posted August 30, 2022 From ANON - Sonicrainboom on August 29, 2022 Quote I like most of this story. (Boob growth isn't my thing, but the rest is good) Yeah, this story covers so much ground, there’s something not-for-everyone. Quote can I suggest the porcupine monster as one of his brides? He needs a monster girl in his harem Is she a porcupine? I kinda thought she was squirrel. But she’s definitely cute either way. In any case, the remaining brides-to-be have already been chosen. But at least Arms is part monster. Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted August 30, 2022 Author Report Posted August 30, 2022 From GrayNeko on August 30, 2022 Quote I've said it before and I'll say it again, I love your dirty talk! This humilating use of Higgs was awesome I had fun with that. Maybe too much fun. But I thought it would be cool for Marco to have a bride who’s about the last person on Mewth/Earni/Susan who would ever want to marry him, and the wackiness that would ensue if she couldn’t help but want to marry him. Quote and I'm so glad to see Tom getting some much deserved action. I don’t normally do this, but I actually took that idea from a reviewer. I liked the idea of there being a little action outside of the palace, and to show that Tom isn’t just being cucked over and over again by King Marco. Quote Truly, this chapter had it all. Thank you! Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted February 8, 2023 Author Report Posted February 8, 2023 From Nytefyre on February 08, 2023 Quote Whew! Read all of that in one-shot and loved it. I keep waiting for the other shoe to fall. I love the way you're foreshadowing ominous events to come. Thanks! In a story this long and involved, foreshadowing is a must. Quote I wonder who will betray the happy harem first? Will it be someone in the group (our favorite Woolette, Janna, ??) or Tom or ...?? Mwahahahaha... Quote Also, what is going on with the magic? The brief flashes with Hekapoo portend something possibly joyous to come? Joyous, disastrous, who knows? I mean, besides me. Quote Is it Marco's harem and something about their bonds that keep them safe? Can anyone wield the weapons against the threat? Hmmm... Quote I can't wait for more to learn answers to these and I'm sure many new questions. Thanks for writing and sharing! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Quote
GeorgeGlass Posted November 29, 2023 Author Report Posted November 29, 2023 From Nytefyre on November 28, 2023 Quote The development of the story and the way each wife was brought in was well thought out and engrossing. Thank you! I put a lot of thought into this story; in fact, I probably did more outlining for it than for any other story I’ve written. Quote The virus explanation at the end begs for more stories dealing with it. At this point, I don’t really have a plan for further stories set in this world. The final chapter implies that there won’t be another crisis like the Possessed invasion until Marco and the brides’ kids are teenagers. Quote Thanks for writing and sharing. Thanks for reading and reviewing...again! FairySlayer 1 Quote
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