Snake_King's Story Discussion Thread

[Snake_King]

Not much to tell.  Mainly it’s just ideas for how to go about the next chapter of the Ben 10/ATLA fic, and maybe a few for beyond that.

Would you be okay if it was an ATLA world that was predominantly female, and men being a rarity?

[Rexfan12345]

I'm cool with it, would make it interesting

[Snake_King]

And I can mix in some ideas from my “Avatar: The Last Man” challenge, although without the male Aang, obviously.  Might cause some changes to the first lemon, though.

[Guest D-Strut]

Hello there, I’m a new writer and I need some help, would you be willing to give me advice.

[Hide_My_Sins]

1 minute ago, Guest D-Strut said:

Hello there, I’m a new writer and I need some help, would you be willing to give me advice.

What kind of advice are you looking for?

[Snake_King]

2 minutes ago, Hide_My_Sins said:

What kind of advice are you looking for?

I was about to say the same thing.

[Guest D-Strut]

Wow you’re fast. Well… I’m in a bit of a pickle. See, I’ve taken on a few challenges plus some works on my own. I have like 10 stories in total, but I’m focusing on 3 challenges.

The one I’m having trouble with is the Marvel Comics challenge where Franklin Richards is going through puberty and accidentally bends reality turning the women heorins and villainesses into slutty, overdeveloped sluts after a surreal wet dream.

The issue I have is starting the damn thing. Since everyone knows that his family are superheroes, he doesn’t have a secret identity when he’s going out to be a hero, something many villains teas him for (Until Franklin one shots him with his powers.) But how should it begin? Should he go to school and try to be a regular kid taking notes at school until he’s called for an emergency because everyone knows who he is, or he come back after dealing with a monster in time for lunch? Should he not go to school and just be trained by SHIELD? Should he just go solo and patrol during the day?

[Snake_King]

3 minutes ago, Guest D-Strut said:

Wow you’re fast. Well… I’m in a bit of a pickle. See, I’ve taken on a few challenges plus some works on my own. I have like 10 stories in total, but I’m focusing on 3 challenges.

The one I’m having trouble with is the Marvel Comics challenge where Franklin Richards is going through puberty and accidentally bends reality turning the women heorins and villainesses into slutty, overdeveloped sluts after a surreal wet dream.

The issue I have is starting the damn thing. Since everyone knows that his family are superheroes, he doesn’t have a secret identity when he’s going out to be a hero, something many villains teas him for (Until Franklin one shots him with his powers.) But how should it begin? Should he go to school and try to be a regular kid taking notes at school until he’s called for an emergency because everyone knows who he is, or he come back after dealing with a monster in time for lunch? Should he not go to school and just be trained by SHIELD? Should he just go solo and patrol during the day?

Well, for starters, what are the limits on Franklin’s powers?  If he can bend reality, can he also alter people’s perception?

[Guest D-Strut]

His only real limit is the fact that he’s just under the Living Tribunal in terms of raw power. Thanks to his training from his alternate future self, he can affect several universes at once on an atomic level, change probability to affect multiple galaxies, and even leave the marvel universal if he wishes to go to another one (That’s the sequel).

[Guest D-Strut]

He’s basically a living infinity gauntlet. Of course, since he’s below the OAA and the Living Tribunal, Franklin made a deal to not completely rend and destroy the multiverse or rule it as a god, only to protect it from forces that would see it like dormammu, the beast, Thanos, and many more as well as keep the infinity stones separate unless needed.

[Snake_King]

Well, if he can do all that, couldn’t he alter people’s perception so that no one sees him unless he wants them to?  That way, he could go to school, deal with the monster/emergency, and then be back in time without anyone even noticing.  Hell, he could even have sex and make it so that no one notices or pays any attention unless he wants them to, right?

[Guest D-Strut]

27 minutes ago, Snake_King said:

Well, if he can do all that, couldn’t he alter people’s perception so that no one sees him unless he wants them to?  That way, he could go to school, deal with the monster/emergency, and then be back in time without anyone even noticing.  Hell, he could even have sex and make it so that no one notices or pays any attention unless he wants them to, right?

Well yeah, But he’s only 14 years old human trying to be a hero. Even with omnipotence, he has a limited scope on how to use it. And being raised by heroes (sans Reed) he has a sense of justice and maintaining order and peace where he can.

Of course he’d start getting into it as he fucks more women, but at the start he’d be apprehensive. Remember, things only got this way because of a dream where he’s a sultan with a harem (Or something similar) and he wakes up to an even sexier version of his mom sucking him off as well as all of the female characters he’s known look like they’ve been drawn by Jujunaught and JLullaby. And only he knows the difference.

[Snake_King]

I see.  Well, which of those starts you mentioned do you lean towards the most?

Also, I would mainly suggest these few things:

1. A dilemma where he tries to decide if he wants things to go back to the way they were or not
2. A contemplation of what he could do with this power
3. Someone else is aware of the changes made (it’s a superhero story, someone else is bound to notice)

BTW, would the outfits of the female characters change to become skimpier or just enlarged to accommodate their newly enlarged assets?

[Guest D-Strut]

All of those points are good, I was actually going to have someone who exists in an alternate dimension like mephisto or Dormammu try and use this scenario against Franklin (Likely mephisto because Franklin has “killed” him like twice in canon,). And some outfits will get sluttier, but not by much because they already show enough curves and edges to turn on most men.

What I need is help to get this story off the ground. What’s a good start into marvels multiversal manipulating teen/pre-teen?

[Snake_King]

Just a suggestion and you don’t have to do this, but how about starting it in the normal world before things get erotic?  Franklin’s been homeschooled for a lot of his life (since, you know, super-genius parents and all that) and has only recently started to go to public school, only to find that his upbringing has left him unprepared for life among ordinary people.  One day, he comes home after a class that taught about sex ed and then has that dream before waking up to the sight of his bimbofied mother sucking him off.

Just an idea.

[Guest D-Strut]

That seems interesting, but there’s also some things about Franklin’s life here that you should know.

This is an AU where Franklin has mostly been left alone by his family, who went off to other dimensions while he was being babysat by the mortal witch Agatha Harkness until he was 10. When he did turn 10, Reed made the decision to leave his friends and family to work with the Society of Reeds, but he came back as the villain, the Maker, permanently disbanding the Fantastic Four and Franklin hated him ever since.  He also dislikes Marvel’s Illuminati (sans Iron Man) and several other heroes and villains because they have tried to continually muddle his mind and dampen his powers or use him as a weapon. He still likes other heroes. He’s hung out and been raised by several characters like old man Logan, the Hulk, and even Deadpool.

I made like six or more points on it in the original challenge page, you can look at it if you want.

Of course it would start in the “normal” world before Franklin’s desire for puntang bends reality. I don’t know about him not knowing anything about sex would be believable, he has studied notes by Reed Richards before he left. But he could catch a student looking at pornographic pictures of the avengers and his mothers on their laptop and start feeling weird about it. This results in him coming home, looking at his mother a different way, and going to bed with a wet dream and waking up to his mother blowing him.

I’m just having trouble writing like the literal beginning. What’s a good opening?

[Snake_King]

Well, I don’t know about that thing with Reed, since I’m not too big on taking canon heroes and having them turn evil out of the blue, although both Marvel and DC tend to do that in massively convoluted and stupid ways.

As for the Sex Ed thing, I only suggested it because for normal education it tends to be a requirement, even if you know about that stuff beforehand.  I suppose the porn thing might work just as well.

What do you want the scene to be at the very beginning?

[Guest D-Strut]

Well, I had it in my head that since everyone and their cat knows about his parents being superheroes, he’d just pack it in and forego the whole secret identity, opting to just be called franklin. He’s in the middle of class and the teacher’s talking, but he’s distracted by one student infront of him looking at pornographic images of overlysexualized-drawn heroes that is until another battle between the Avengers and a monster moves to school grounds and Franklin goes to stop it. After a very awkward meeting with them and his uncles (who are also Avengers at this point,) Franklin’s school day is over. He goes home to a another very awkward scene between his mother and Peter Parker. They do some small talk and Franklin decides to seclude himself to his room where he has his wet dream and everything goes downhill from there.

[Snake_King]

Well, one way to start that scene would be to describe how awkward and uncomfortable he’s feeling at seeing someone viewing images of his mother like that.  After that, you can do a little exposition describing his life before getting back to the scene with him trying and failing to keep his eyes off of those images before the Avengers show up.

Something like this, maybe?

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Franklin Richards was not having the easiest time at that moment.  And who could blame him?  Someone was looking at porn images of his mother for crying out loud.

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And then you add to it from there.  Does that help?

[Guest D-Strut]

17 hours ago, Snake_King said:

Well, one way to start that scene would be to describe how awkward and uncomfortable he’s feeling at seeing someone viewing images of his mother like that.  After that, you can do a little exposition describing his life before getting back to the scene with him trying and failing to keep his eyes off of those images before the Avengers show up.

Something like this, maybe?

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Franklin Richards was not having the easiest time at that moment.  And who could blame him?  Someone was looking at porn images of his mother for crying out loud.

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And then you add to it from there.  Does that help?

That actually fits perfectly. I could make a list of things he's gone through from fighting mephisto to watching his dad turn into a megalo maniac. And how this bothers him more than anything.

[Snake_King]

Glad you like it. Anything else that you need help with?

[Hide_My_Sins]

Deadpool! Deadpool should be the one that know Frank messed with the Universe. But he is okay with it, as Lady Death has also become a sex crazed bimbo that worships the ground Deadpool walks on.

[Snake_King]

31 minutes ago, Hide_My_Sins said:

Deadpool! Deadpool should be the one that know Frank messed with the Universe. But he is okay with it, as Lady Death has also become a sex crazed bimbo that worships the ground Deadpool walks on.

That could prove interesting to see.  Although, I wonder how the male heroes and villains would react to Franklin getting so many women.

[Guest D-Strut]

Thank you so much for the suggestions, I appreciate your help. Maybe I’ll make Deadpool an omake, like he goes to confront franklin about the state of the world and death comes along and well… deadpool would be indesposed.

I’m still working on this story, as well as the two side projects. One is a challenge where a young man drops out of highschool to take up his late father’s position as landlord of an apartment complex filled with sexy women. Some are girls from his school (including their mothers), others are generic women like the unsatisfied milf, an unmarried business woman, a college artsy hipster, etc.

The other is the classic Isekai story where a gamer is shot and is reborn as his overleveled character with max stats in a generic, magical fantasy land. All he’s given other than his battlegear and items is a magic tablet holding info on personal stats, world lore, a new magic system that’s like if Ars Magica and Mage: the Ascension had a love child, and techniques on all manor of abilities to learn like skills, talents, and abilities  (It’s basically a magical version of Fallout’s Pip Boy.) As well as a note in his pocket telling him “Have fun boy!” He then proceeds to learn all he can either save or enslave the world as well as build a harem of other races.

The thing is, because the race builder allowed the player to build whatever type of character the player wants, the MC is an “evil” race (Vampire/Orc/Demon/Etc.). So no one will trust him at first, even with his nice streak. (Tell me a dark rpg race you would be interested to see!)

[Guest D-Strut]

Hey you there?