Guest Randome Posted April 12, 2015 Report Posted April 12, 2015 Mmm...those were some fantastic snippets. Gotta say, I liked the Naruko ones the most. I hope we get to see some completed versions in the archives soon.
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 12, 2015 Report Posted April 12, 2015 Mmm...those were some fantastic snippets. Gotta say, I liked the Naruko ones the most. I hope we get to see some completed versions in the archives soon. I personally happen to like the Kushina one the most myself, but whatever floats your boat (i still like the Naruko ones it is just I prefer the Kushina ones with her MILF status). P.S. Hey guys I was trying to create a member account but no matter what I try it keeps saying put in a valid birthday and I keep trying different ways of typing in my birthday which I know is valid seeing as how I am twenty. Basically do you guys have any suggestion please?
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 12, 2015 Report Posted April 12, 2015 Never mind I figured it out. Whoop! As for my liking of Kushina more it is probably because it feels more netorarish if there is a MILF being conquered and NTR is one of my favorite kinks in fiction.
Guest Guest Posted April 12, 2015 Report Posted April 12, 2015 @JordoZ Is Naruto still Kushina's son in all those stories you posted, and if so how old is he in each of them?
JordoZ Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 He's in all of them except the ones with Naruko. And I left his age up in the air.
Guest Guest Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 I hope he is around 15/16 years old, older than the kids she is fucking. That makes it a 100 times hotter to me, that shes fucking kids younger than her son.
Guest Skila Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 I have created a template if anyone wants to use it for a Kushina x Noble story, it doesn't have any sex in it though and was created purely to set the scene and build up anticipation. It was a sunny day in Konoha, not a cloud in the sky. Kushina Uzumaki walked towards the main gates of Konoha; today she had been given a misson to escort a young noble by the name of Yuuto, the grandson of the Fire Daimyo. Her husband, the fourth Hokage, Minato Namikaze had briefed her several days ago on the specifics, the brief outline went as follows; “You are to escort the Fire Daimyo’s grandson to Kirigakure, to ensure his safety and attend to all his needs; a shinobi from Kirigakure shall also be accompanying you.” The 38-year old jonin woman who didn’t look any older than 20 despite having a 16-year old son was wearing her standard jonin outfit; a Konoha headband, her long red hair tied up in a high ponytail with strands framing the sides of her face, a flak jacket over a black short-sleeved T-shirt and form-fitting pants that showed off her shapely legs and round butt. Kushina knew that this mission would take the best part of a week to complete, since Kiri was far away and the only way there was by boat. The Daimyo’s grandson had personally hand picked Kushina for this misson, he had apparently seen her in Konoha before and wanted her to by his bodyguard. Kushina had her suspicions as to why she had been personally chosen by the Daimyo’s grandson; normally clients didn’t get to choose the shinobi they hired. That was usually the sole decision of the Hokage but since this was a mission related to the Daimyo, it was a special case. The reward for this mission was huge, it was 3,000,000 ryo and for a mission that was really only at A-rank level despite officially being S-rank it was unheard of, even the hardest S-rank missions were very rarely given a reward this high. Kushina wondered if Minato had had the same suspicions that she did, surely he must have realized why she had been handpicked by a pubescent teenage boy? Especially when the mission debriefing specifically stated that she needed to “attend to all his needs.” It didn’t take a genius to work out that being a bodyguard was only part of what was probably going to take place on this mission, for the best part of a week. The thought made Kushina shudder. She was somewhat shocked that her husband had given her this mission in the first place, it might have offered an enormous amount of money, but it was hardly as though the village was going through hard times. But she figured that due to it being a Daimyo-related mission, he couldn’t turn it down. Still, she had a pang of dissapointment that he could seemingly give his own wife this mission so easily and act like it was just any regular mission. The Uzumaki-Namikaze household had been completely normal since the debriefing, neither she nor Minato talked much about the mission since, she had wondered if it was just an unspoken rule between them about what was probably going to happen on the mission. She concluded that this was probably just an understanding between shinobi, as one of the shinobi rules states “A Shinobi Must Endure”. Their son, Naruto Uzumaki was about to be promoted to jonin, she was so proud of him but was dissapointed that she was going to miss his promotion, but she promised once she got back to Konoha she would give Naruto his present for becoming a jonin. She was brought out of her thoughts as she saw several people standing at the entrance of Konoha as she reached the gates…
Guest Guest Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 @JordoZ Were the outfits that you described in your other stories inspired by something else like the Rias Gremory outfit or did you just make them up?
Guest Guest Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 @JordoZ I'm really glad that there also doesn't seem to be any implied incest between Kushina and Naruto aswell. In fact it would be even better if she hadn't even considered the possibility and if she had thought about it, she would hate the idea. She loves her son dearly but only as a normal mother would and is in no way attracted to Naruto. They have a normal mother/son relationship. It would also be good if Kushina is still a good and loving wife and mother to her family, despite being an unfaithful busty slut who loves getting banged by guys the same age and younger than her son. She could even say or think stuff like, "I can't believe I'm going to let a kid who's younger than my son fuck my pussy."
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 I hope he is around 15/16 years old, older than the kids she is fucking. That makes it a 100 times hotter to me, that shes fucking kids younger than her son. Agreed, it would be so much better if that was the case.
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 @JordoZ Were the outfits that you described in your other stories inspired by something else like the Rias Gremory outfit or did you just make them up? This would be nice to know though not necessary it would assuage our curiosity and give us a better picture for our imaginations. @JordoZ I'm really glad that there also doesn't seem to be any implied incest between Kushina and Naruto aswell. In fact it would be even better if she hadn't even considered the possibility and if she had thought about it, she would hate the idea. She loves her son dearly but only as a normal mother would and is in no way attracted to Naruto. They have a normal mother/son relationship. It would also be good if Kushina is still a good and loving wife and mother to her family, despite being an unfaithful busty slut who loves getting banged by guys the same age and younger than her son. She could even say or think stuff like, "I can't believe I'm going to let a kid who's younger than my son fuck my pussy." I disagree. I believe it would be better if Kushina's new master became the center of her life with her being completely devoted and worshipful of him to the point that if he tells her to abandon her husband and son she will because he is her new god.
Guest Guest Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 This would be nice to know though not necessary it would assuage our curiosity and give us a better picture for our imaginations. I disagree. I believe it would be better if Kushina's new master became the center of her life with her being completely devoted and worshipful of him to the point that if he tells her to abandon her husband and son she will because he is her new god. There are loads of NTR stories like that and they all basically follow the exact same pattern, after reading so many of them I just find them boring at this point, same way I find Narukushi stories boring now because theres so many of them. And the idea that Kushina just becomes some mindless slut isn't something that appeals to me either, I want her to be fully in control of whatever she wants to do. To me if she willingly fucks guys purely because shes a slut and she doesn't get mind broken, thats even hotter to me. Go and read Sanbun Kyoden if you like NTR lol. Also @JordoZ In the Kushina stories that you posted do the kids that fuck her know she has a 15/16 year old son?
Guest Guest Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 Also @JordoZ The way you describe Kushina in those stories makes me think she has a body like this.
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 There are loads of NTR stories like that and they all basically follow the exact same pattern, after reading so many of them I just find them boring at this point, same way I find Narukushi stories boring now because theres so many of them. And the idea that Kushina just becomes some mindless slut isn't something that appeals to me either, I want her to be fully in control of whatever she wants to do. To me if she willingly fucks guys purely because shes a slut and she doesn't get mind broken, thats even hotter to me. Go and read Sanbun Kyoden if you like NTR lol. Also @JordoZ In the Kushina stories that you posted do the kids that fuck her know she has a 15/16 year old son? The thing is though I have not read enough of them that it dulls these types of stories or at least not with these characters (which just so happens to be my favorite series for fanfictions and crossovers even though the manga and anime itself annoys me). I will agree that what you are suggesting Kushina should do is still hot but with the style the story that inspired JordoZ to create this challenge "http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600105416 " it is more along the lines of what I am suggesting. Now I do find your idea to be practical in most situations since if male character managed to take Kushina away from the Hokage he (the male character) would flat-out be killed. In order to alleviate that she could be like I said and be completely devoted and worshipful of her new lover but to cover it up she could pretend to be the same woman she always was to her husband, son , and assorted acquaintances.
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 Also @JordoZ The way you describe Kushina in those stories makes me think she has a body like this. I think you pretty much have this thread's various storyline view of her body-type pretty much down, Guest,. Also, yes I think most of us know canonly Kushina does not possess such a body-type but hey this is fanfiction it is open to interpretation.
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 I think you pretty much have this thread's various storyline view of her body-type pretty much down, Guest,. Also, yes I think most of us know canonly Kushina does not possess such a body-type but hey this is fanfiction it is open to interpretation. Actually, she would probably be more athletic due to being an highly skilled Uzumaki kunoichi. This would show around the abdominals, arms, and legs (though they most likely would not look all that muscled due to chakra and all
JordoZ Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 I actually used Hana Inuzuka's outfit as a base, except Kushina is way more voluptuous.
JordoZ Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 I see alot of people wanting Sasuke-esq versions of this kind of thing. I don't really see the appeal. In canon, he's more of a whiny emo. Not to mention, he has a too slight build for me to see him in this role. Bishounen do not make well for this kinda role IMO. I have created a template if anyone wants to use it for a Kushina x Noble story, it doesn't have any sex in it though and was created purely to set the scene and build up anticipation. It was a sunny day in Konoha, not a cloud in the sky. Kushina Uzumaki walked towards the main gates of Konoha; today she had been given a misson to escort a young noble by the name of Yuuto, the grandson of the Fire Daimyo. Her husband, the fourth Hokage, Minato Namikaze had briefed her several days ago on the specifics, the brief outline went as follows; “You are to escort the Fire Daimyo’s grandson to Kirigakure, to ensure his safety and attend to all his needs; a shinobi from Kirigakure shall also be accompanying you.” The 38-year old jonin woman who didn’t look any older than 20 despite having a 16-year old son was wearing her standard jonin outfit; a Konoha headband, her long red hair tied up in a high ponytail with strands framing the sides of her face, a flak jacket over a black short-sleeved T-shirt and form-fitting pants that showed off her shapely legs and round butt. Kushina knew that this mission would take the best part of a week to complete, since Kiri was far away and the only way there was by boat. The Daimyo’s grandson had personally hand picked Kushina for this misson, he had apparently seen her in Konoha before and wanted her to by his bodyguard. Kushina had her suspicions as to why she had been personally chosen by the Daimyo’s grandson; normally clients didn’t get to choose the shinobi they hired. That was usually the sole decision of the Hokage but since this was a mission related to the Daimyo, it was a special case. The reward for this mission was huge, it was 3,000,000 ryo and for a mission that was really only at A-rank level despite officially being S-rank it was unheard of, even the hardest S-rank missions were very rarely given a reward this high. Kushina wondered if Minato had had the same suspicions that she did, surely he must have realized why she had been handpicked by a pubescent teenage boy? Especially when the mission debriefing specifically stated that she needed to “attend to all his needs.” It didn’t take a genius to work out that being a bodyguard was only part of what was probably going to take place on this mission, for the best part of a week. The thought made Kushina shudder. She was somewhat shocked that her husband had given her this mission in the first place, it might have offered an enormous amount of money, but it was hardly as though the village was going through hard times. But she figured that due to it being a Daimyo-related mission, he couldn’t turn it down. Still, she had a pang of dissapointment that he could seemingly give his own wife this mission so easily and act like it was just any regular mission. The Uzumaki-Namikaze household had been completely normal since the debriefing, neither she nor Minato talked much about the mission since, she had wondered if it was just an unspoken rule between them about what was probably going to happen on the mission. She concluded that this was probably just an understanding between shinobi, as one of the shinobi rules states “A Shinobi Must Endure”. Their son, Naruto Uzumaki was about to be promoted to jonin, she was so proud of him but was dissapointed that she was going to miss his promotion, but she promised once she got back to Konoha she would give Naruto his present for becoming a jonin. She was brought out of her thoughts as she saw several people standing at the entrance of Konoha as she reached the gates… I'd love to see more of this.
Guest Skila Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 This is the second part I wrote of the story, I've written no more than this. To be honest I'm no good at sex scenes at all, so this whole thing has just been build up. I also wish I had written Kushina with a more flirty personality since it seems to fit in with her prankster personality, as she comes across as a bit timid here. As Kushina reached the gates, she saw six people standing there, seemingly waiting for her; four of them looked to be the Daimyo’s grandson’s assistants, another she recognised as a shinobi of Kiri, due to his headband and the last person was the Daimyo’s grandson himself, the client Yuuto Koga. Yuuto immediately spoke before Kushina had the chance to, “Ah Kushina-san” he started, “Thank you for being my escort to Kirigakure, it’s an honour.” As he reached down to grab Kushina’s hand and kiss it. Kushina was completely taken aback by his words and his actions; she blushed a slight pink colour. “O-Oh no thank you Yuuto-sama for choosing me as your bodyguard.” She said as she smiled at him, it was unlike Kushina to stutter but this act did leave her pretty unprepared. ‘Who is this kid?’ she thought, ‘He acts like he knows me. Although he must have seen me somewhere before since he specifically chose me as his bodyguard.’ she figured. “Please call me Yuuto.” he said as he smiled at her “Ah, ok then, Yuuto.” she replied, smiling back. Kushina observed his apperance, he had messing spikey black hair that drooped down over his forehead, warm brown eyes and ever so-slightly tanned skin. She certainly wasn’t what he was expecting, she thought he would look far more noble and snobby but he really just looked like a regular commoner, albeit quite a good-looking one, Kushina surprised herself at that last thought, but quickly dismissed it. “Shall we go?” Yuuto said whilst still holding her hand, something Kushina had only just realised. “Ah, yes, right away sir.” Kushina said, her pink blush deepening ever so slightly at him still holding her hand. “Please, just Yuuto.” he said “I would like it if you would sit in my litter with me on our journey.” Kushina was surprised at this, she expected this mission would be more than just a bodyguard mission but this was as though she wouldn’t be doing any bodyguarding at all. “As you wish” She said with a small friendly smile. At this point she was positive she knew what Yuuto wanted from her and she knew she had to obey her client’s wishes, she had speculated that this would happen but now that it appeared that it was actually happening, Kushina’s heart started beating faster. But she was still rather takenaback with how bold yet how nice he seemed. As the two got into the litter and rode off, Yuuto struck up a conversation with the red head. “So Kushina-san, I’m glad that I’ve finally met you properly, I’ve heard a lot about you.” He said. “Oh really, what have you heard?” she replied. “Well, I’ve heard that Kushina Uzumaki is one of the most beautiful women in all of Konoha, so I thought I’d hire you as my bodyguard and see for myself.” He said. Kushina blushed more than she did before, quite a lot more. “R-Really?” she started “Who’s been telling you that?” “Oh I can’t say Kushina-san; they told me in confidence so I couldn’t tell you that. But I will say you are rather popular with teenagers around my age.” Kushina was blushing even harder now. “D-Do young guys your age really look at me like that?” “They do, you are really popular Kushina-san”. Kushina was shocked, she had no idea she was looked at look that in the village, I mean she had noticed the odd guy giving her a stare but she didn’t think that she was that popular, especially with kids no older than her son. “Anyway, I’m pretty hungry, want to eat?” he said with a smile as he got out some very expensive looking lunch boxes. Just like that, Yuuto changed the conversation. Kushina was surprised that he changed the conversation so abruptly, he handed her one of the lunch boxes and immediately started to dig in. She looked at him curiously; she couldn’t help but giggle a bit “What’s so funny, are you not hungry?” he said. “I’m sorry Yuuto-sama, its nothing. I’ll dig in.” Kushina replied. “Hey.” He said, “Yes?” “It’s Yuuto”. Hours past as Kushina and Yuuto talked about all sorts of things, the two seemed to get on like a house on fire. She couldn’t help but think he was quite a charming kid, had anyone else started a conversation with her like the one he did when they first got in the litter she would have thought of them as a complete creep, but the way Yuuto said things made him come across more innocent and playful. She wasn’t really sure what to make of him; she certainly didn’t expect him to be like this before she met him. She had first thought that he wanted her to be his bodyguard so he could sleep with her, but she was really unsure about it now. It was night time and they had arrived at an Inn, quite an expensive Inn by the looks of it. The rooms had been pre-booked, by the looks of it Yuuto’s four assistant and the other bodyguard would be staying in a five bed room, and Yuuto would be in the most expensive room in the Inn, Kushina could only assume what that meant. “Kushina-san lets go to the hotsprings” Yuuto said enthusiastically, running ahead of Kushina not even waiting for an answer. Kushina smiled, he was so carefree, not like any of the other nobles she’d ever met. She’d gotten much more comfortable around him after a full day of talking together, in fact she’d gotten so comfortable that she only just realised that she was about to go into a unisex hotspring with a kid no older than her son. ‘Oh well’ she thought, ‘What could possibly happen?’ By the time Kushina had reached the hot spring Yuuto was already in the water, soaking himself. Kushina was wearing a towel, and had her very long hair tied up in a very elaborate fashion, that Yuuto couldn’t help but admire. “Are the others coming soon?” she said, referring to Yuuto’s attendents and the other bodyguard. “Nope” He replied, “Just us.” He said with a smile.As Kushina was about to enter the hot spring Yuuto said “Hey, Kushina-san are you sure you want to get in with that towel on?” She blushed a little bit. “Well, it is unisex.” She stated. “That doesn’t bother me.” He stated, “Well, if you wouldn’t mind, I’d rather keep it on” she said smiling. “Ahh well” he stated as he slowly raised himself up so his abdomen was just above water level “That’s a shame”. As Kushina saw this, her eyes widened with shock, God this kid was ripped, his tanned skin glistened as the water it had previously been submerged in trickled down his abs. Kushina was in a trance for five straight seconds before Yuuto replied “Like the view Kushina-san?” Kushina face almost became as red as her hair; she didn’t know how to respond. “Eh-hhh, I’m sorry!” She said. “You don’t have to apologize.” Yuuto replied. “But if you are truly sorry then I want you to do something for me.” He replied “Y-yes?” She said, unsure. “Take that damn towel off.” Kushina was afraid of that, she didn’t want to flat out say no to him, since that would seem rather rude considering she was told in her briefing to attend to his needs, and he was paying her a huge amount of money for what so far, was no work. ‘This wont be so bad, it’s just taking my towel off.’ She thought. As she was about to lower herself in the pool Yuuto said “Uh-uh.” Kushina looked at him confused. “I want you to take the towel off before getting in.” By this point her face really was as red as her hair. She took a few seconds to compose herself and said “F-fine.” She slowly loosened her towel and placed one arm across her breasts and a hand at her crotch as she let the towel drop to the floor. “Hey Kushina-san, you’ve seen my torso so let me see yours, its only fair.” He smiled, blushing a fair bit and excited by this show, Kushina couldn’t tell if it was the heat of the hot spring making him red faced or her. “Remove your arm from your breasts.” Yuuto stated. Kushina was even more flustered now, ‘Kushina decided she was fed up with being embarrased about this whole situation. “F-Fine!” she almost shouted as she hesitantly removed her arm from her chest. ‘Woah!’ Yuuto thought to himself, her breasts were so perky and round, they were deceptively big aswell and her nipples looked perfect too. “A-alright” Yuuto said, flustered himself by this point “Now remove the other hand”. Kushina was even redder now but she fought back “H-Hey I only saw your upper half, so now we’re even!” “Oh” Yuuto replied, “Does that mean you want to see my bottom half aswell?” “That’s not what I-“. Suddenly Yuuto rises out of the hot spring standing up, completely nude, stopping Kushina mid-sentence. Kushina was shocked at what she saw ‘HE’S HUGE!” she thought to herself, now her face even redder than her hair if that was possible. “What do you think Kushina-san, pretty impressive huh?” Kushina didn’t reply, she just stared, still in a trance. He was at least an inch bigger than Minato, probably two and it was girther than Minato’s aswell. He walked up to her as she tried to mumble out some incoherant words. “Kushina-san” Yuuto said from about two feet away from her. She gained some sense of composure as she looked at him in the eyes. “Do you know why I wanted you as my bodyguard?” “I-I can hazard a guess.” She admitted. “It’s because I want you.” He said as he quickly got closer to her, wrapped his arms around her and pulled her into a kiss all in one big motion. Kushina hesitated, with her arms raised slightly until she eventually succumed and wrapped her arms around Yuuto's body, pulling further into the kiss...
JordoZ Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 Hmm, moves a bit too quickly here. Like you said, Kushina doesn't really come across as Kushina here. Not to mention you have more than one person talking per paragraph, that's a big no no in a fic. Plus, he isn't really endowed to the point where he could break her. Good try though.
Guest Skila Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 Yeah, I'm not a very good fiction writer to be honest, I had a crack at it, but I find myself getting writers block. Clearly your much better than me, I hope your able to finish those other stories. Also I want to know the answer to some of those questions Guest asked also, do the kids Kushina's fucking in your stories know she is a mother of a 15/16 year old son? Obviously they know shes married but I wonder if they know shes a mom aswell. I find it somehow makes it hotter to know little details like that in stories.
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 13, 2015 Report Posted April 13, 2015 Yeah, I'm not a very good fiction writer to be honest, I had a crack at it, but I find myself getting writers block. Clearly your much better than me, I hope your able to finish those other stories. Also I want to know the answer to some of those questions Guest asked also, do the kids Kushina's fucking in your stories know she is a mother of a 15/16 year old son? Obviously they know shes married but I wonder if they know shes a mom aswell. I find it somehow makes it hotter to know little details like that in stories. I agree it would make it much hotter for Jokuro and the others to know that she is a mother and not just a mother but a mom who kid is older than they are.
Guest sneaky666 Posted April 16, 2015 Report Posted April 16, 2015 And finish: http://naruto.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600105753
Guest TheWarlockofChaos Posted April 16, 2015 Report Posted April 16, 2015 Thanks Sneaky666, I have read the chapter which you put out and I loved it. It has some issues but those are with the usage of pronouns (you have a tendency to switch the gender ones sometimes) and sometimes a little of the sentence structure. Even with those problems it was still great and you are only likely to get better at English as time goes by.
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