GrayNeko's Review Response and Discussion Thread

[GrayNeko]

Welcome, make yourself at home. Here is where I'll respond to folks who have something to say about my works as well as discuss ideas. Beyond that, any comments, critiques, and questions are all welcome.

Edit:

Making it easier to get back to the stories.

The Secret of Bezel

The Island Misadventures of Ben and Charmcaster

A Charmed Life

When Earth and Sky Meet, Which Truly Yields?

Extradimensional Besties are the Best!

Little Red Riding Gwen

Voltron: Crashing into Love

Edited December 29, 2017 by GrayNeko

[GrayNeko]

The second chapter of Secret of Bezel has been posted.

[GrayNeko]

Churn 2014-08-30 id#3000069610

I'm already liking this story. Keep it up.

Thanks, glad you're enjoying it. It is already finished, I'm just allowing for time between chapters so as to not intimidate any readers with the volume of my work.

Christopher 2014-08-30 id#3000069068

Loving this story thus far. Please do not back down and remove it like some other stories in this vein have been in the past.

No fear my friend, AFF seems like the best place for my work and I have no intention of removing any of my works as long as the folks running the site see no issue with them.

[GrayNeko]

The fourth and final chapter's been posted. Next week I begin posting my extensive Ben/Charmcaster piece.

[GrayNeko]

zatanaslover 2014-09-14 id#3000069649

Liked this a lot! Can't wait for more from you!

Thank you! I'll be starting one of my more popular stories from HF this Saturday, it's Ben and Charmcaster specific.

[GrayNeko]

The Island Misadventures of Ben and Charmcaster is a go!

[DemonGoddess]

Heya GreyNeko,

To reiterate, and allay any of your readers' fears and concerns, as long as you properly tag your stories, disclaim your stories, and follow the ToS and CG, you're fine. We don't censor your story content.

[GrayNeko]

Much appreciated DG, I'll do my best to follow the rules and I appreciate that you guys give folks a heads up when there's an issue.

[GrayNeko]

For The Island Misadventures of Ben and Charmcaster

Harem-Lover-26 2014-09-20 id#3000069668

Intersting story. But maybe teenage Ben would have worked better. Update soon and I hope the action starts.

Alien Force hadn't come out or had just started when I started this piece so I didn't have a good feel for a teenage Ben that wasn't more of my own creation and I wanted to keep the characters as close to the show as possible. Plus, with hindsight, a teenage Ben would have been too competent for the story, not to mention that Alien Force and Ultimate Alien had the worst Charmcaster design. Next chapter will be up next Saturday and there will be action but not what you might imagine.

SailorNemesis 2014-09-21 id#3000069671

Ben needs to put this bitch in her place. Hope he doms her.

Charmcaster will definitely get knocked down a peg or two, just wait til next Saturday.

SWK 2014-09-21 id#3000069672

Uh? You have an account here too? What a surprise... But, why are you publishing it here again? What kind of problems did you have in the other page?

Are you unaware of the underage ban at HF? They were supposed to pull all material containing underage characters from the site and while my work still seems to be there I'm not going to risk causing trouble by continuing to post such material there. I will still use my account on HF to post other works but I'm making a home for my work here as well. What's your name on HF? I don't recognize SWK.

Edited September 22, 2014 by GrayNeko

[Guest SWK]

Hey man. It's shiro_wolfman_K I think I left you a review or two on Hentai Foundry, and no... I wasn't aware of that. Had been a while since I went to that page, to tell you the truth.

[GrayNeko]

Hey Shiro, that is a name I recognize. Yeah, there was a bit of a blow out at HF because someone threatened the admin and may have contacted the site host about child pornography issues so they had to pull everything even remotely underaged and people accordingly lost their collective minds. After the dust settled it became clear to keep the site running a sacrifice had to be made so now those of us with such material had to find elsewhere to put our stuff up.

[GrayNeko]

For The Island Misadventures of Ben and Charmcaster

SailorNemesis 2014-09-27 id#3000069687

Ah, well. I was hoping for more of a 'Swept Away' story. Kinda boring so far.

I had to look up Swept Away, never seen it and there isn't much in the way of a synopsis of it, at least the more current version, but yeah this isn't really a romantic comedy. If anything I approached this piece more like an actual episode of the series but with adult material thrown in so if you're familiar with the original Ben 10 series at all I hope I've done a reasonable job of it. Hope the later chapters pique your interest a little more.

[Guest random reviewer man]

For The Island Misadventures of Ben and Charmcaster

I had to look up Swept Away, never seen it and there isn't much in the way of a synopsis of it, at least the more current version, but yeah this isn't really a romantic comedy. If anything I approached this piece more like an actual episode of the series but with adult material thrown in so if you're familiar with the original Ben 10 series at all I hope I've done a reasonable job of it. Hope the later chapters pique your interest a little more.

yo, man this is a really great story i just with it all uploaded on the site and i am looking forward to the explanation about why ben's aliens keep screwing up.

[GrayNeko]

Hey SWK thanks for the kinds words in your latest review, really appreciate it.

Random Reviewer Man, thanks for the kind words, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story as well.

Edited September 28, 2014 by GrayNeko

[GrayNeko]

Woodrow 2014-10-01 id#3000069701

So far, so good, liking the story up to this point, scenarios nicely described and a rather coherent story flow. Looking forward for the next chapter.

Thanks Woodrow. I've tried to avoid any plotholes and made for a more story oriented adult piece.

[GrayNeko]

nightmaster000 2014-10-01 id#3000069703

Great story read on Hentai Fondry and been reading it's sequel. Their both great stories.

Glad to find another HF member on AFF.

[GrayNeko]

Edward 2014-10-11 id#3000069754

Whoa, that was crazy what happneded with the crazy fruit.

Can't wait to see what happens with their relationship.

Thank you, I'm glad you're looking forward to more.

[GrayNeko]

hot sho 2014-10-11 id#3000069759

Hey love the plot you created can't wait to see what this place dose to the Ben afraid of using the opnitrix and charmcaster in able to use her powers keep up the great work

hot shot 2014-10-12 id#3000069761

Wow the island seems to have a mind of its own Ben had to save her from a copy of himself and have to deal with the reality that they need each other to survive live it just love it keep them coming

hot shot 2014-10-12 id#3000069762

People who talk in there dreams sometime is because they are trouble by something others just move back and forward that being said our body begins to give to our subconscious we may denie stuff but our subconscious is always there reming of us who we are as for charmcaster there is something that will not let her be herself Ben will just have to figure out what is it keep up the great work

Firstly, thanks for all the comments. I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far and you have some decent insight in to what I planned for this piece.

[GrayNeko]

Nim 2014-10-13 id#3000069767

Very nice, hope Charmcaster gives him a nice forceful milking in the middle of the night.

Really the groping was more Charmcaster subconsciously dealing with the stress and frustration, plus, in my interpretation of her, there's more to her background that I haven't revealed yet. There is a scene in the sequel to this piece that might make you happy.

[GrayNeko]

Daneasuar 2014-10-16 id#3000069780

I was disappointed when the actual intimate moment came, it was with a transformation right off the bat. Other than that, it was well written up to that point.

While this was their first time I wouldn't call it their first intimate moment due to the inclusion of mind altering substances, that scene is coming up and I hope you'll be pleased with it. Many thanks for the compliment.

[Guest Edward]

I loved the newest chapter.

The island is getting really creepy...

[GrayNeko]

Thanks, the scene between Ben and Charmcaster in that chapter was one of my favorites to write. I think you'll enjoy the next chapter as well then because it reveals more about the island itself.

Daneasuar 2014-10-19 id#3000069792

Just read chapter 5, I'm VERY pleased with how that one turned out, a lot better than what happened in chapter 4. This one felt really good and is an excellent cornerstone in the longrun.

I'm glad you liked it, this really is the turning point in their relationship. Just a warning that the rest of the story is more story driven and less erotic from here on out.

[GrayNeko]

SailorNemesis 2014-10-20 id#3000069797

Enjoyed chap. 5; very sexy. Since you are going the romantic route I hope it works out for them.

Thanks, glad you kept up with the story despite it not being what you expected.

[Guest Edward]

Oh god the chapter with the spiders was scary as fuck!

Not just because of the spiders but becuase of what happened to Charmcaster. Jesus, man.

[GrayNeko]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it and it had the intended effect.