Rescue25 Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 I think DA is one of yours. AND she is telling on you . B Flexy68 1 Quote
that-one-guy Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 I think DA is one of yours. AND she is telling on you . B Lol Flexy68 1 Quote
DirtyAngel Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 (edited) shhhhhh, i read the chapter,,,it pretty good, lots of twists and turns its all finished except proofing it, like every other word is misspelled i've never seen so many squiggly lines. don't worry, i'll keep bugging him shhhh, i was never here holy crap, i'm a virgin! when the hell did that happen...oh, i'm so mad too, the nuns in catholic school said you couldn't go back! Edited July 10, 2015 by DirtyAngel Rescue25, Flexy68 and COJimmyV 3 Quote
Rescue25 Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 shhhhhh, i read the chapter,,,it pretty good, lots of twists and turns its all finished except proofing it, like every other word is misspelled i've never seen so many squiggly lines. don't worry, i'll keep bugging him shhhh, i was never here holy crap, i'm a virgin! when the hell did that happen...oh, i'm so mad too, the nuns in catholic school said you couldn't go back! i'll keep bugging him - PLEASE DO !! holy crap, i'm a virgin! when the hell did that happen...oh, i'm so mad too, the nuns in catholic school said you couldn't go back! So much fun to retrace those steps !!! B Flexy68 1 Quote
magusfang Posted July 10, 2015 Author Report Posted July 10, 2015 Oh my god, she found the thread...is nothing sacred any more? get her an account they said...it'll be fun they said...sigh so just need to spell check it and its done...gonna take a quick shower first though...should be up sometime soon Flexy68 1 Quote
magusfang Posted July 10, 2015 Author Report Posted July 10, 2015 ok, Shadows chapter 9 is up, sorry, no sex in this one but its hard to do in the middle of a battle Flexy68 and COJimmyV 2 Quote
crazychickhull Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 Holy crap.. Rescue25 and Flexy68 2 Quote
Flexy68 Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 Holy crap.. Holy crap indeed!!!! The "Master" has NOT lost his touch!!!!! Rescue25 1 Quote
Joe Long Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 Oh my god, she found the thread...is nothing sacred any more? get her an account they said...it'll be fun they said...sigh and who is this they? might have to block them Flexy68 1 Quote
Rescue25 Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 Crazyc cleaned it up. Thank you DA for getting him on track AGAIN ! Mangus you left us wanting more as usual, At least it wasn't as bad a habger as the last chapter. I do see the possibility of a little comic relief when Max attracts the attention of various local and state agencies with the speed of the truck and they all fall in behind him only to get shut down when he goes down his road and the FBI says go away and you saw nothing here. Maybe backed up by a spider ord one of the twins in armor. Alice should regain consciousness and be able to deal with the boat crew then summon help to get her back. Legion has shown himself to be worthy. Evidently "grey hair" was rouge BUT was he being handled? Since Legion got involved everything that was in his head is now available to legion. Should be interesting. Another thought what about the other nonconus teams mentioned earlier. Do they just disappear? Waiting for the next installment. B Flexy68 1 Quote
Rescue25 Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 and who is this they? might have to block them I think he is referring to his "girls/harem" B Flexy68 1 Quote
that-one-guy Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 (edited) I like this version of legion... He does seem a bit overpowered though. At least with the war spiders they could fire missiles at them. Maybe an EMP would work... Edited July 10, 2015 by that-one-guy Flexy68 and Rescue25 2 Quote
DirtyAngel Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 I like this version of legion... He does seem a bit overpowered though. At least with the war spiders they could fire missiles at them. Maybe an EMP would work... Flexy68 1 Quote
Rescue25 Posted July 10, 2015 Report Posted July 10, 2015 I like this version of legion... He does seem a bit overpowered though. At least with the war spiders they could fire missiles at them. Maybe an EMP would work... I am surprised that he let Legion miss Alice in the RHI. But that would have made the rescue scenes harder to do. B Flexy68 1 Quote
magusfang Posted July 10, 2015 Author Report Posted July 10, 2015 I like this version of legion... He does seem a bit overpowered though. At least with the war spiders they could fire missiles at them. Maybe an EMP would work... Well obviously DA let the cat out of the bag...so yes while he seems to be a mechanical Marty Sue now, his flaws will be revealed, and his weaknesses Flexy68 1 Quote
gamascal@gmail.com Posted July 11, 2015 Report Posted July 11, 2015 Damn Magus, you are good! One important piece I missed, I think. How does Legion make the transition from hologram to something that can be touched and how can the nanities get into a person's body if there are no wounds, and Max, Alice or Cat don't inject the individuals? Legion is a more extreme version of Max. The nanities are not invisible because the show up on X-rays but the SG guys holding the hostages AND those outside doesn't seem to see them. They only see Legion. You really went to town in this chapter. So, where is Alice and where is the major taking her? I thought he reported to the guy in the sub. Flexy68 1 Quote
Rescue25 Posted July 11, 2015 Report Posted July 11, 2015 Appears nanites can go in thru pores in the skin OR can be injected. Legion has conjured up an avatar that can change at will. He is formed of nanites in the millions or billions. He is now self aware and is evidencing some human traits. Many things are invisable to the naked eye until there is a mass of them. In addition to having a nice "sex story" this is also sci-fi. Mangus - where did I miss the boat? B Flexy68 1 Quote
Rescue25 Posted July 11, 2015 Report Posted July 11, 2015 Well obviously DA let the cat out of the bag...so yes while he seems to be a mechanical Marty Sue now, his flaws will be revealed, and his weaknesses Killing "bad guys" is NOT a flaw or weakness. B Flexy68 1 Quote
magusfang Posted July 11, 2015 Author Report Posted July 11, 2015 Max and legion designed him a body composed entirely of nanites of legions design so smaller and can be absorbed through the skin The boat, and I forgot to put this in, was put together by the two men the major left behindoh and yes Alice is with the major heading for a small island off the coast and we still don't know how bad the taser damaged her...da da da Flexy68 1 Quote
gamascal@gmail.com Posted July 11, 2015 Report Posted July 11, 2015 Legion flew past the boat with the major, how come he did not see the boat? Flexy68 1 Quote
Guest SYELDARB Posted July 11, 2015 Report Posted July 11, 2015 Magus! gosh darn it, now i need the next chapter.... Great job, I have been waiting for this battle and the aftermath from when they first noticed the war spiders... Quote
magusfang Posted July 11, 2015 Author Report Posted July 11, 2015 Legion flew past the boat with the major, how come he did not see the boat? he was in a rage still, not really thinking straight darthel0101, Rescue25 and Flexy68 3 Quote
DirtyAngel Posted July 11, 2015 Report Posted July 11, 2015 he was in a rage still, not really thinking straight I think he meant on the way back from the sub. Legion just wanted to get back to Mika, to hold her one more time. He no longer cared about anything but seeing the woman he loved just once more Rescue25 and Flexy68 2 Quote
jelad Posted July 11, 2015 Report Posted July 11, 2015 I finally get to say "I told you so". Legion is filled with grief and hatred right now. That could be a problem, in the future, he could go of the deep end. thank Punisher or Electra. he could start killing everybody he thanks deserves it. Great chapter I can't wait for the next one. darthel0101, Rescue25, Flexy68 and 1 other 4 Quote
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