Aysha c.c. Posted May 26, 2015 Author Report Posted May 26, 2015 (edited) "ViktornovaMk2 This is a good story. It could be a great story with a little bit of editing. First thing I want to comment, no-one has mentioned Fowler dropping his sat-phone in the protogon. Stop and think about the two major issues with that. Military Satellite Uplink w/ the encryption keys and passwords, and Internet access. Second comment, I REALLY hope that the protoform is a girl and NOT Sari. Third, As far as the Cons learning about procreation, PredaKing and Airachnid. And don't turn Spider-bot into a proto-factory, no-one deserves that, not even her. As far as Jack's mortality goes, dying Jack meets the Forge of Solus Prime. Deus ex Machina indeed" First: Yes you're absolutely right! The story could use some editing, however seeing as most chapters are twenty thousand words or more, and chapter 5 will be as well; I'm not going to be the one to do it! Do you want to volunteer? Second: It looks like you spotted one of my plot bunnies >:3 shhh don't tell anyone! Third: I've said it before but I don't mind saying it again. Whether the character is male or female, Arcee's and Jack's child will not be like Sari. Fourth: As far as cons finding out about procreation; I haven't decided whether or not I'm going to go there. As for that last one, I think I'll just leave you hanging on that. (insert evil laughter) Edited May 26, 2015 by Aysha c.c. Quote
Guest Belfry Posted June 6, 2015 Report Posted June 6, 2015 Something to consider. Ratchet to modify compression so she could transform from cycle to not human size, for her to experience Jack's probe human size! Quote
Guest Grahamslink Posted July 1, 2015 Report Posted July 1, 2015 Will we ever actually see another chapter to this series? I really love how you've portrayed the Cybertronians first exposure to sex and it honestly feels 100 percent more realistic then some fics on here. Quote
Guest Guest Posted July 12, 2015 Report Posted July 12, 2015 Can you give us an idea of how far it is to being complete? Quote
Aysha c.c. Posted July 13, 2015 Author Report Posted July 13, 2015 I've managed about fifteen thousand words and I've got at least another 5000 to go... I think? Like I said I'm working on my cell phone, it really isn't easy. I'm Dyslexic so I have to use the voice recognition software, but it's pretty unreliable. I don't want to post something sloppy and unreadable. I promise I am working on it and I will get it up; No pun intended. Quote
Guest Guest Posted November 5, 2015 Report Posted November 5, 2015 So how's it coming along, hopefully you got yourself a new computer to work with now to finish the chapter. Quote
Aysha c.c. Posted February 1, 2016 Author Report Posted February 1, 2016 (edited) Good news I have a new computer! I am now plugging away at an almost daily basis. I hope to have the next chapter up not too long from now. Be warned ahead of time, it is mostly sex! Edited February 1, 2016 by Aysha c.c. Quote
Aysha c.c. Posted February 1, 2016 Author Report Posted February 1, 2016 Augmenting my earlier post, I thought I would let everyone know that I did make a lot of corrections to the chapters I already have posted. So there are a lot fewer mistakes still some that need to be corrected but I'll get around to those later. Quote
Guest DoomCookie Posted April 6, 2016 Report Posted April 6, 2016 So...Is there any progress?It'd be really nice to see what happens next after such a long time. Quote
Aysha c.c. Posted April 9, 2016 Author Report Posted April 9, 2016 Yes there is progress, not too much longer now! Thank you for your patience everyone! Quote
Guest .Grahamslink Posted April 15, 2016 Report Posted April 15, 2016 Any chance of a more exact time? I know this takes a while to do, but I'm simply curious Quote
Aysha c.c. Posted April 15, 2016 Author Report Posted April 15, 2016 I'm sorry I'm afraid I can't be more specific, I'm in the process of working, going to school, and getting ready to move to another state at the same time. So I'm only able to work on the story sporadically right now. Quote
Guest Grahamslink Posted April 28, 2016 Report Posted April 28, 2016 Just curious, will Jack be getting with any other characters besides Arcee, June, and presumably Miko (going by the latest ending)? Any plans for more Cybertronians or humans to join the fun? Characters like Airrachnid, Strongarm, or any of the G1 Fembots? Quote
Aysha c.c. Posted May 1, 2016 Author Report Posted May 1, 2016 To be honest I don't know yet, I'm trying to figure out how to work them in. But that would be a long ways down the line. At the very least I would like to add a couple more fembots to the story, but I won't say who just to keep you guessing. Quote
Guest nuklear Posted August 13, 2016 Report Posted August 13, 2016 sorry for bothering you but was just wondering how the story is going? Quote
shanjoo Posted September 26, 2016 Report Posted September 26, 2016 Hey Aysha, I've been looking forward this story for a long time. I’ve enjoyed reading it many times and the anticipation of the upcoming chapter is driving me up the wall. do you think it will be finished in the next few weeks or months? Quote
Guest nuklear Posted May 14, 2017 Report Posted May 14, 2017 Hi sorry for bothering you just wondering if you were still working on this story... Quote
Guest story update Posted May 26, 2017 Report Posted May 26, 2017 Hey Aisha. When will you be posting the next chapter? It's been four years since the last update. Your not gonna let this story just die are you? Quote
Guest Vn1 Posted April 9, 2018 Report Posted April 9, 2018 Have you thought about working each chapter short, so that way you can make time to post more chapters that way and don’t have work extra hard to finish one long chapter? Quote
Guest nu_klear Posted July 1, 2018 Report Posted July 1, 2018 Hi, just wanted to know if this fic is still being worked on? Quote
Aysha c.c. Posted July 11, 2018 Author Report Posted July 11, 2018 Unfortunately not at the moment, my computer won't content to the Internet for some reason! Â I haven't given up on getting back to it, but i have no idea when that will happen. Â Quote
Strange_idea Posted July 13, 2018 Report Posted July 13, 2018 I just wanted to say tha k you for this atory, the connection and warmth between jack and arcee is fantastic, and i really appreciate it. Take as much time as you need. Aysha c.c. 1 Quote
shanjoo Posted July 19, 2018 Report Posted July 19, 2018 Really looking forward to the next chapter. Have you completed more then one that are waiting upload? Quote
Aysha c.c. Posted July 29, 2018 Author Report Posted July 29, 2018 The next chapter is really long,and is almost complete(25 to 30,000 words). Â Once it's finished ill have to proofread it, refine the details and figure out how to get it posted. Quote
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