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Windrider Shiva

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  1. Queensrÿche - Redemption Really liking their new song XD.
  2. From: SillySilenia Dare I say that Sammi is a little bit obsessed with Ryan? Well, more than a bit, really. Not that Ryan helps it going away so far, mind you. You write the characters very realistically - I can imagine real people acting and reacting like your characters do. They all clearly have personalities and differ from each other in some ways (while still allowing them to connect) rather than then all seemingly being cut out of the same cardboard box. Good job. Unexpected twist at the end of chapter seven, but pulled off very well, with just enough warning that something bad happened so as to not completely break the pace and flow, while on the other hand not giving so much warning that one could guess exactly what would happen beforehand. Great choice of point in the story for adding in drama/angst to keep it from becoming too sweet, fluffy and mushy, and a good/believable method for doing so - it's realistic, something that can and will happen to many people each day. I do feel sorry for Sammi, though. Just as things were looking up... I enjoyed reading the story so far, and will certainly keep an eye on it for future updates. Great job. Thank you, thank you! Sammi is a tad obsessed with Ryan *cough*. I'm happy they don't sound fake - I spend quite some time each chapter just figuring out the dialogue XD. Same thing with flow really; after discussing with my beta, we thought it was the best spot that last scene. I'm not too into fluff myself, except Sammi's a bit more of a romantic than I pictured him to be. And a lot more fanboyish. XD
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