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Souls standing by 28489 —Menu 5, ORPHAN CHAPTER http://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no...9&chapter=5

The truth will out 544171505 IN REVIEWS • UN-REVIEW: Magenta, 3000017030, seemingly random question

Souls standing by 28489 Menu 2 — • lasslass=MsoNormal style='mso-pagination:none;mso-layout-grid-align:none; text-autospace:none'> Menu 3 — • to ghe fhe fuck out • sgelygely satisfying • closs bes between

TV / ANGEL / General p. 5 Scarlet rose 600090803 http://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600090803 not sure if this is a misplaced story or a crossover. the AN in Ch 1 says: “I know this is under the Angel sub-cat but when i was uploading it didnt give me the option of books or Harry Potter so heres a little surprise for all you Angel fans.” i’m not sure whether to take that as meaning it’s a surprise because it’s really a HP story and not an Angel story (in which case i have no idea why on earth she posted it here instead of asking for help) or will be a crossover down the line. the main character, scarlet larose, seems to be an OFC and the only other named characters are HP ones, so no clue there.

Shadows still remain 600006098 IN REVIEWS Page 2 • DUP REVIEW: Morgan 3000013270, so delete 3000013271 Page 4 • UN-REVIEW: Sozz 3000016287, asking a question

La belle epoque 600090396 IN REVIEWS • DUPLICATE REVIEW: anessavanella 3000021137, so delete 3000021138

TV / ANGEL / General p. 6 Stray 600090644 —STRETCHED

TV / ANGEL / General p. 7 Roomies 600090041 —Ch 33 is an author note only, delete Splinter 544214928 —Ch 8 is an author note only, delete

Iniquity: first do no harm 600000433 IN REVIEWS • UN-REVIEW: Ladytalon 3000014717, just saying hi, no review

TV / ANGEL / General p. 8 Arezue: desire 544187615 —good god. the author notes (front AND end of each chapter!) are longer than the chapters!!! Menu 11 — is a timeline, not a chapter. not sure if you want to leave it in. contains no story text. Menu 18 — is an author note, not a chapter, delete Menu 22 — SQUISHED Stonewall by carmilla 544206928 —this story is by someone called Carmilla and merely TRANSLATED by rogiari, who posts it here. is it okay for the translator to post it under their own page or do we just assume s/he has permission from the author to do so? there is no mention of the author other than in the title.

That one time 600000070 IN REVIEWS • UN-REVIEW: j 2035305303, author response Soul illusion 544211734 IN REVIEWS • DUPLICATE REVIEW: Faeri 3000018259, so delete 3000019515

The notebook 544204377 UN-STORY. this is literally a “notebook” of this author’s unfinished stories and where each one currently stands. not a story, delete. http://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=544204377

TV / ANGEL / General p. 9 Soul stealers 544192726 Menu 8 — is only an author note (response to reviewers), delete Angel's master 37103 • shuttihe dhe door • standin fro front • thrThouThough Ruminations I 11655 Ch 1 — • Sh She was • removed keyskeys • ale ile is • been crr). r). He • hests,sts • murmuring,ou kou know Ch 2 — • hace.ace. Smooth • slizelize • for pleasur [drops off] • We’s ‘s earlobe • violentllosilosing You go to my head 3720 —SQUISHED • and kissed h [para] C [para] Cordy just

Angelverse 544198626 —this is some sort of announcement trying to get up an awards scheme or something, not a story, delete http://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=544198626

TV / ANGEL / General p.10 Famously challenged 544187623 —UN-CHAPTERS: Chs 2,4 are author notes only (and thank god for the break from the actual chapters, which are excruciating) Scar tissue 33521 Ch 1 — • funcouncomfortable • Save ave the • not not you Ch 2 — • do ies?”es?” • crap.He opHe • it’st sst stupid Forgotton sons 16311 • tinstinstance • as hed hid himself • witw frw from • sensationsil hil he • >Had>Had any of it Destiny 16177 • thingike ike • readily,kingking • ... friendship. br> • She’swlinwling • and and there • his f dro dropping doo bio bite • be together a.” [drops off, should probably be “again”]

There once was this man called wesley 544187890 —ORPHAN CHAPTER, Ch 2 (only), URL is http://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no...0&chapter=2

Famously challenged 544187623 IN REVIEWS • DUPLICATE REVIEW: Precious 203534777, so delete 778,779

TV / ANGEL / General p.11 Demon dreams 29782 Ch 1 — • dafloofloor • ts ars are • demor.” [para] r.” [para] Before she • he ghe guards • blurut “ut “you’re • over pikepike] • tiontion back • Hs tos to • officem tim time • himseor for • Proves hn’t n’t • whi whimper • theakinaking • bis biscuits • “Youd?” [para] d?” • hedy sdy so • inevita”tal”talk” • Scene 2: l’s l’s [those are Ls] • gemegement • detece moe mood • esleesley: • ond and about • Lor”Me “Me Ch 2 — • stag; Tg; To • S [para] Scene 4: • if itour our • aorksorks his Ch 3 — • fslowslowly in]...ar as • somessure tre to • ane one of • or easteast • ocnot not too • riundeunder • imingming • arounrvourvously • angri [para] H [para] Harmony: • shtersters • cesscessing • Illyrllyria: • Sike,ike, • of the g” [para] “ [para] Angel: • Angelh, yh, yeah • tretureturn • mit cit clear • Wesleyhe dhe doesn’t • WeslePerhPerhaps • ovee toe top • dropprecprecum • to to pull • preparinr thr the • compcompliment • swimmind cnd • r shr she leaves Ch 4 — • re-rts rts itself • somep anp and • llamplamps • the the problem • gettingrterrter • touchdisbdisbelief • mg thg the • to be her [para] D [para] Deth: “Came • ally lly move • not not knowing • neve her her • ring ing the • formsich ich Ch 5 — • hair,n’t n’t it? • nowsnows • honestly] “n’t.n’t.” • ues ues with• thig abg about • arecerncerned • enatination • kill vams. [para] s. [para] They go • Iginegine • dicertcertingly • Ycertcertainly • ideridering • Hends nds there • stopby hby her • fromearbearby • glaSpikSpike • havea baa bar • fee of of pride • mifindfind • dot fot for • meaeforefore • to fthe the • actualeus eus or • ke tke tries • tng the edges • sing ing mix • Time ps les • ba bia bit coy • lot cof cocky • theas aas a • really goin dra draw • hlicklicking • spreadr ler legs • touchouch ... thr Thi This • theirstnestness • tok hik his • tdrawdraw • figura pre present • erfuerfully • iose ose • eatherther • movemenywheywhere • Gohe’dhe’d do • She s hes herself • eflutflutter • unshe she • legslegs and • to kW&H W&H • conted ted • muc a p a phone Ch 6 — • havee soe something • Spi”Tha”That’s • gibbh sph • bed forit. it. • hongueongue • her her head • motipullpulls • ignoer fer first • sonayinaying • bor body • roppeappears Dust 544185576 OOPS! FORGOT TO LEAVE THIS ONE IN THE REVIEW BOARD WITH THE REST: • UN-REVIEW: tubbyk 2035261860, author response Déjà vu - the updates 544173943 —author profile states “i’ve had to reregister as the web site is denying me access to my original user profile”. i’m wondering if it was because she was a minor and if this was one of the stories she wrote as a minor. might be worth checking. MENU The beads of jupiter 25779 —okay. i’ve looked at all of the author’s other stories and they are all very similar to this one, with the exception that the on NOT in the buffy fandom (star wars) got GOOD reviews, and mostly the buffy ones, esp. this one, got flamed up the ying-yang. and rightfully so. makes me wonder if this person’s a troll...deliberately wasting everyone’s time and not having any actual interest in the fandom(s) or the stories. hmmm. really. the writing is worse than goolecap’s, and i’ve wondered about him for a long time.

Demon dreams 29782 IN REVIEWS • HellH [name unreadable] 251675: notthe the • UN-REVIEW: Mad 267435, author note • UN-REVIEW: Mad 2035272949, author response The beads of jupiter 25779 IN REVIEWS • FLAME: Disgusted 200795 • The Last Kitten 200974: crazd yod your • FLAME: Not gonna bother 202350 • FLAME: Anon 208026 • FLAME: Anon 208028 —are we seeing a trend here? i almost dread reading the story! • HammiePoo 218509: an, and thus

TV / ANGEL / General p.12 Unforgiven 544181003 Ch 1 — • UN-CHAPTER, author note only How to be human 24694 Ch 1 — • his r. Hr. He turned • e cle cleaned Ch 2 — • e hae had seen • cle clean the • sel del demons • Remembee wee werewolf • witcougcough • wit ant antiseptic • Spiruncrunching • hisce wce when Ch 3 — • Harmony’ood.ood. • to to go to the Ch 4 — • lookedAngeAngel • theirks iks into • copushpushed • coche lhe looked • NOFredFred • was was softening Ch 5 — • “Th [para] “Thanks guys • Oh yOh yeah • hcockcock • str fro from • tr nar navel • next er. er. • expg heg her • ou Fre Fred • mov moved • strokinr clr clit • cout, ut, crawled Ch 6 — • bumps.y wey were • Spi [para] Spike entered • onho aho are • sght,ght, • Pushthesthese Ch 7 — • “y!” y!” Lorne exclaimed • introduur gur group • OUCH!ndernder • oubiesbies • uffyuffy nodded • feelingwardwards • therght ght be • excuserseerself • thechenchen • somethinge one on his • “Xr, wr, were • BSpikSpike • hadsed sed this • wor worried • Befounnyunnydale’s • and fell ap. [para] p. [para] Buffy had followed Ch 8 — • knowey aey all • happe” Xa” Xander • atherther The guardian 30764 Ch 1 — • thtuattuation • dly tly thrilling • hise ite it was • staver ver and • seemormaormal • bursto a o a • easyt... jt... just • saith ath a —if the french text is wordorded, i would never know! • tandtand • thoit dit did • basicalaid:aid: • againseemseemed • saidsaid the • touplouple Angel: bi sex party 544177354 —SQUISHED Another sire, please! 25884 Ch 1 — • [in AN, Disclaimers} nothing.se yse you • ryinrying • hadnt tnt the • exa exactly • elu cig cigarettes • har hard to Ch 3 — • not not see Ch 4 — • [in AN#2} Spike’s S [cuts off] • and sillsilla • lasslass=MsoNormal>”You wanna • restes fos forehead • maim gim gulp

To live and un-die in L.A. Ch 6 — ORPHAN CHAPTER (although all other chapters OK) URL for this chapter: http://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no...2&chapter=6

Chat rooms 544181126 IN REVIEWS • UN-REVIEW: ThE KiDDo 2035198591, author response

TV / ANGEL / General p.13 The naughty series 38335 Ch 1 — • statem “Wh “What • cog hig his • freencufncuff • theidroodroom • toy hoy held • littlb inb inside Pax 544171991 • then.” [para] A.” [para] We should The violence of existing 24995 —reviewer says Ch 7 is “just Ch 6 repeated” Ch 2 — • ankleskles. • dgreygrey • restingone one • Harexplexplained • Slayensidnsidered • ineraleral Ch 4 — • ttlettle hollow • encain rin red • boothardearded • warr They did • longi at at her Future children 31790 Ch 1 — • [in AN] tglangland • hisd ond on • theiartmartment • wasll ull unwritten Ch 3 — • awhilforefore • peoplBuffBuffy • Shcidecided Ch 4 — • tos hes her • tap taped • Spto tto their • roughlilesiles • hcockcock • of the . Fi. Finally • was was glad • d thd the order • Angelgaingainst Ch 5 — • ansd wid without • Howedowed • his his mother Ch 7 — • on thech, ch, • hangingm thm their • brthrothrough • while she she • moremore glance • younman man Ch 8 — • knowknow!” Ch 9 — • [in AN, Disclaimer] JWhedWhedon • grandpar’ he’ help • wiDamiDamian • beookiooking • vampbreabreathless Frost in eternal summer: a hole in the world 38790 • lanybanybody • staavinaving • auseause Solidity 38789 • [in AN, Disclaimer] burneto oto oblivion • all all I can • whispto sto show • I wao beo be • thrld rld to see • lighnd Snd Spike • easedselfself • leano lao lap • acrthe the Spike experiments with fred 38291 • “Ahh Spi Spike • cand tnd try • &nb/p> /p> • “Juwhatwhat • woit bit be • word”You”You • &al> Old ghosts 37449 • her bac back • “s als alright • You sd god go • “I t wat want • buo hao hadn’t • ee aee a friend • abo about • baown own • truttruth is • A s sig sign • Thers srs slid • to sou, ou, Angel • haveideaidea • annou the the • disants nts you • acknowledhe dhe • shors. rs. • lower lihe she strong • satchatched as • inentlently. Please forgive me 37135 • look.e poe pointed • to leftleft and • wholee. We. Wesley • to ect ect Angel's little sister 34520 Ch 1 — SQUISHED • iill ill living Ch 2 — • fromnor nor • despery noy not Ch 3 — • and and let them

Pax 544171991 IN REVIEWS • UN-REVIEW: Jo The Librarian 2035101348, author response • UN-REVIEW: TheCharmer 2035132554, response back to author • UN-REVIEW: Jo The Librarian 2035143584, author response The violence of existing 24995 IN REVIEWS • Nat 200656: Ca wai wait ... Ple Please • Anon 201533: great sto can can’t Future children 31790 IN REVIEWS • DUP REVIEWS: myladymystere, 2035349172 so delete 2035349174 Old ghosts 37449 IN REVIEWS • Sofia 304870: so kind eld elighten • UN-REVIEW: Jo The Librarian 2035101160, author response Angel's little sister 34520 IN REVIEWS • UN-REVIEW: angels girl85 273973, author response Breaking in a new pet 27994 IN REVIEWS • budgetshahrazad 223217: of howel sel sired

/GlitchesANGEL.doc TV / ANGEL / General p.15 Hell is in the details 24443 Ch 1 — • pief trf trash • &nbso:p>o:p> • wopasspass • liuslius Ch 2 — • to to damage Ch 3 — • si va vampire • beaut, pr, pretty • demon’s s was was • doing,tty tty boy • cla clas=MsoNormal>”Here it • heled led Ch 4 — • thoughleetleeting Ch 5 — • puream eam • Anfeltfelt • throwoff off Ch 6 — • dovetawithwith • if of uof us • >&nb> • it off ne one of • bindinnd hnd harness Ch 7 — • lasslass=MsoNormal> • clasclass=MsoNormal> • bloopikepike • n cln class=GramE>”Almost • ovn hin his Ch 8 — • bacn thn the • in hims tms those • Nothto sto see Ch 9 — • never gon>gonna • kingking out • heaved a put sig sigh • nottwittwitchy • pof hof her Ch 11 — • honsionsigned • wavenovenous • reerinering in • runningy, by, but • just nee cra crawl • llE>Ramone (those are lower-case L’s) • shoulders> > —right after “What’s the what with little Miss Buffy Summers?” suddenly the rest of this chapter indents. i don’t see any code visible and onscreen it looks fine, just not in word. not sure why, maybe not worth worrying about. if you see any coded indent instruction there you might want to take it out, up to you. Ch 12 — • an <i>inkling</i> [not sure why this code is showing] • “n’t n’t suppose Ch 13 — • chainand and • belt ador wit with • Nn> Nothing • o:p> • sky.an>And Ch 14 — • slowlyas as not • give itme gme good • clasclass=MsoPlainText>”I was • [last line of chapter] p; Ch 15 — • heBut,But, • pI diI didn’t • p clp class=MsoPlainText> • hrms rms and • ourr frr from • of ove overly • thet dat day • Lost m’fangs ft Ch 16 — • yoo:p>o:p> • sense tyletyle • stray eetseets • weiit’sit’s Ch 17 — • Go sitwn, wn, • would tak take the • theittlettle • as she rante: “Y: “You Ch 18 — • dt het he • the th his his • and and practices • pan> • HHhhHow • VampVampire • heondiondie Ch 19 — • where Fred’s section starts, the rest of the chapter is in bold. only the names of the various POVs should be in bold, the body of text between should not be bold. • /p> • rescue.oursours Ch 20 — • ext>There had to Ch 21 — • Spike’srgy rgy • kilmethmething • convoluas ias it • vampirefracfractory • foem aem all • Spi and and • Spgetsgets • tosectsect • thannd ond on • holding out her wr [cuts off] • balcauscausing • rwarrwards • wiggins.”> > • Hol>Holding • Thefereference • Danteess ess Ch 22 — • ryonryone • demonnstenstead • cla class=MsoNormal> • to him is of no [cuts off] —at this point the word “no” where it cuts off is in italics, should not be. the remaining text in this chapter is in italics. it should not be. also the rest is bold. it should not be. only the paragraphs beginning “That is sufficient” should be in bold. Ch 23 — • first paragraph is in italics, should be bold but not italicized • ped. ed. We • n cn class=SpellE>Pret — in para beginning “The issue before the court”, the tags are showing for italics around the word “not”. remove them, i guess? • wweigweigh • won’low low Ch 24 — • &> • “Oiity> • workr usr us both War over wolfram & hart 19599 —after zipping through this very short, very worthless story i have to wonder if the author is a minor. might be worth a quick check. author URL is http://tv.adult-fanfiction.org/authors.php?no=3771 . possible that they are just mindlessly boring, like the story, and have the attention span of a flea (like the story) and are on some personal mission to get as many sex scenes into as small a space as humanly possible with absolutely no description, just zip zap, in out, on to the next scene. and they are extremely specific about numbers—sizes of everyone’s cock, how many minutes things take, etc.—which is a classic sign of a young writer (they think it adds authenticity). but really, my daugher can write better than this. and she’s not much more than a teenybopper. i would almost say the author is a troll except i don’t think there’s that much thought behind what they’re writing. Menu 1 — • thof pof powerful Menu 2 — • be ed aed and • pdresdress Menu 3 — • gainitaretares Menu 4 — • rour our balls Menu 5 — • hado goo gone Menu 9 — • Evuck uck her Menu 10 — • rep Spi Spike • theckedcked • was treato a o a • doordoor —wow! who knew lindsay had a 12-incher!!! >snicker<