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  1. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Cartoons)

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    I, uh, I spent it on a My Little Pony :huh:

    I'm actually the worst writer on here. At least since that guy who only wrote stories from the perspective of the characters' underwear quit ("Once again I'm tossed into the corner, a breath of fresh air away from the hairy sack...") so check out some of the other writers if you haven't already :D

  3. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Games)

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    Having come to like the Dragon Age world purely from fanfiction on AFF, and especially BronxWench's weekly prompts, I ended up buying and enjoying the game. Still playing and finding new stuff on the second play through (such as Wynne's reactions if you screw the elf apprentice and boast about it to his fiance. heh.) and decided to take a shot at a story for the game. Hence, after a week of trying to think up some maths story for the prompt cubed I went with food instead and wrote Coq Au Vin

    BronxWench

    I am simply dying here with the mental images this has created in my brain... Zevran and Oghren. Amazing how well you conjured such vivid pictures with your offstage action - well done! And of course, you've hit on the exact reason none of my characters (save for one rather immoral elf) has ever romanced Leliana. Bards have no honor! :D

    I bet she picked up some new dirty habits with the chantry sisters too. Thanks for the review! I figure Zev would dominate the shit out of Oghren. As it were. Experience counts for a lot! I just figured I wouldn't put it past her to use food in seduction, and, bam! a use for cubed :)

    bloodravyn

    lol, loved!

    Sure ya not a bot? Surely nobody can read this much fanfiction! Thanks, though :)

    bitamin717

    You know, as much as I like your recent stories JD (and they are very good, with lots of interesting characters, great one-liners, and funny and thoughtful scenarios), I do kinda miss the old JD – you know, the author of such stories as 'Taking the Sky from Kaylee', 'Kill-O-Gram' (with the Great Dane), and 'Flaying Solo', which to this day I still cannot bring myself to read all the way through. I hope you haven't given up on hardcore snuff fics altogether...

    Anyways, on this one: I really liked the part where Elissa's straining to hear the 'low voices in Oghren's tent'. Very subtly evoked (I think that's the right word) scene there, and great how you manage to sketch the imagery so well with just a few sentences. It was also very interesting how you gave the scene two different interpretations: Elissa's mental image of events, and then the actual reality of events as they occurred inside the tent. That gave the story an extra level of depth and realism for me. Plus, the dialogue was great – very 'naturalistic' as my old creative writing teacher used to say :DDDD

    Firstly, thanks! Someone once told me for writing dialogue to read it out loud and see if it sounds stupid. Sadly, most of mine does, but only because I never take the next step of re-writing to sound less stupid. Musta lucked out here, so naturalistic is good! I figure a lot of young ladies had a different mental image of what two guys looked like together in the sack, at least until 1960s San Francisco the internet came along, so threw that in there!.

    Finally, hardcore snuff - I did a prompt one last week, which was pretty short as a flashfic, but also on the gurochan lit board recently I did another zombie story set in Deathstalker's universe, gonna get around five of those done before posting here on AFF (Gotta love DS's simple logic for throwing it open to other writers - more stories, more characters! :D) and with that one completed I have three. Thing is I got kinda snuffed out. snicker. Where do you go after somewhere like the Kaylee story? (cue smartass with "therapy?"), trying other things like the Black Cat story, and the Elder Scrolls one I've been doing just seemed like a better variety after so much red mist. I'm sure I'll do more though unless I ever stop writing entirely. Fear not!

  5. JayDee's (Originals) review reply, story discussion and additional notes thread

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    Harvest Mouse - My first ever prompt story got another review!

    kylee

    Very good.You managed to convey so much information in such a short piece.

    Wow, you must've been delving deep into the story pages to find that one by now :) (...actually, it is only on page 2 of its section... less Erotica > Slash - Male/Male > than I thought!) Thanks for your review, I see advantages and disadvantages in all the info - coulda cut some of it for more sex!

    And Gamma, the last prompt - I spent most of the time thinking up She-Hulk stuff, then went with Dickgirls. There's a younger version of Joy from the invidious story a few prompts back, and I figure the setting might appear again (with this 'introducing' becoming the first chapter of a series of oneshots)

    BronxWench

    I'm shocked... FANN isn't a public service? Things have certainly changed since I was in college. A great use of the prompt with your trademark humor and delicious characters!

    The members all think of it as a public service, so do the nerds - it's just you can't have good stereotyped college fiction without some ultra conservative force opposing the easy going partiers :D Thanks also for your review, too kind for this one!

  8. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Cartoons)

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    At some point I'm gonna have to do a Cartoon based prompt story that doesn't involve the Simpsons. On the plus side, they're widely culturally known and have done quite a few "future" episodes showing older versions of the cast.

    Marge's Debt came about because it was kinda a bet related prompt and she had a canon gambling addiction. Eh.

    And Your Little Dog Too

    I could *so* see that ending coming! Bart is such the little motherfucker. This was a fun one shot.

    Thanks! Yes, I fear my alleged twists are usually pretty obvious, especially with an inc story code :) Seemed fun to write, too!

  10. Freelance Writing

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    I dunno, in the end it's gonna come down to supply and demand isn't it? If you can find people who're willing to pay what you're willing to work for, it'll seem fair :) If people aren't willing to pay it, or you aren't willing to work for it, you won't be supplying the service anyway!

    Since me writing is just a bit of a hobby I don't take that seriously I've never really considered what amount I'd think it fair to work for.

  12. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Harry Potter)

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    Nymphadora Necrophilia has gained 1135 hits, 3 star ratings, and a review in one day, just on AFF! Harry Potter fans... will... read... anything... :blink:

    starsha

    I think you should continue it! I wouldn't mind reading more, I would really like to know who caught him doing the "deed"

    I thought you wrote this chapter very well, looking forward hopefully to more!!!

    *starsha*

    Thanks! I would like to write more, though I don't know quite when I will get around to it with my current Dragon Age obsession, and other stories I am working on :) I know exactly who caught him, because while I'd considered Tonks necro before (necro scenes appear in a few of my older strories) I was inspired with a particular pairing right here on the forums. By somebody who I seem to recall indicated at the time probably wouldn't appreciate an idea credit on a necro scene. Cough. But if they change their mind I'd happily name 'em and link to their AFF profile for that part. They know who they are :D And, anyway, the living half of the pairing would be behind Tonks staying fresh, and inadvertantly appealing to Filch. So, yes, hopefully more to come :D

    Thanks again.

  14. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Games)

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    So it turns out that you get more reviews for stories if the main character is only eviserating things off panel. Possibly. Another review for Ending the Fan

    Ronin

    This is great stuff so far. I'd love to see the Champion really let herself go and get gangbanged by more well-hung creatures (other orcs maybe, or more minotaurs). At the same time, seeing her take a few more doses of that magical potion and really ream out some men would be really hot too.

    Well thanks kindly for this review! I honestly don't know how long this story would go on for, but a gangbang scene seems like it would be fun to write, perhaps involving Ogres for variety. They're big and semi-sentient, and Darkestshroud's recent story here recently reminded me that at the end of Malaceth's quest there's a group of non-hostile and grateful ogres, so I could use those in a rough gangbang story that would, obviously, be entirely different in nature to Darkestshroud's (featuring as it does a rather sweet/hot dunmer/ogre scene, followed by an amusing end I won't spoil :D Go read it.). Malaceth likes Orcs and Ogres anyhow. More potion-cock might be fun too, dunno if I'd get into it with this story tho'.

  17. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Games)

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    Ending the Fan:

    AlexandraS90

    Chapter 6 really was great. I didn't even care it lacked... certain content, and that's saying something. Love where the story's going, keep up the good work!

    It's going right back to the rough sex, bondage, and unexpectedly orgasming Orc with any luck. Alla this mawkish sentimental tosh belongs in a Legolas/Gollum story.

    Thank you for your review, and I apologise for the betrayal of my pornographer status :(

  18. Freelance Writing

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    I know the writer Deathstalker charges one cent a word, with a rounding up/down process (so not asking for 43.45 or whatever) and seems to do okay business with commissions - their quality is very high too. Another writer I've seen taking commissions charges two cents a word, but I don't know how successful they are. At 15 cents a word, you'd be asking 150 dollars for a 1000 word story, so probably close to 350 for three pages. You'd not find artists wanting to pay that much, ("150 dollars for two hours work? Is he shitting us?") I think, not even if they were raking in quite serious money for each picture.

    Good luck, anyhow :)

  19. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Games)

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    bloodravyn's been reading through the archive :) Thank you for your four reviews! I'd caution you that large chunks of my work are less, uh, well, let's say different than the more recent prompt stuff I've written. More exposed livers, that sort of thing. Look closely at the summarries and codes :)

    The Legend of Spyro's Death

    bloodravyn

    i guess sparx got it easy!

    It's been so long since I either played a Spyro game or wrote that story that I might have to take your word for it :) I remember writing it as a story exchange for somebody with an apparant dragon fetish, or possibly a "dragon voiced by Elijah Wood" fetish. The story I got in exchange... eh, very short.

    Centaur Mother

    bloodravyn

    awesome!!!!

    Nothing like a big ol' dray horse to awe folks!

    Friendship

    bloodravyn

    loved

    But there's no sex! For which I continually apologise to everyone.

    Ending the Fan

    bloodravyn

    i love how she explaiend that, so impassioned was she

    It's a bit different from her usual passions, fightin an fuckin.

    and another review on the same chapter, because apparantly the NoSex warning wasn't effective :P

    Daye

    Good use of the prompt. Even in such a brief word count the chapter was by turns amusing and touching. Nice to see there's some actual heroism beneath the rampant lusts, both blood and otherwise...

    Thank you! Most of the quests give you a chance for heroism at one point or another :) Helping Dar-Ma, for example, which I managed to establish way back in the first part she'd done, I figure it affects the character a little :) If it hadn't been for the events in side story The Morpheus Potion, perhaps the fan would have ended up with a nice Argonian girl instead of all the rough sex...

    Eh, if I get around to ever continuing I will put more sex in the next part. It is supposed to be PWP... I reckon still 80% sex.

  21. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Games)

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    Ending the Fan Review:

    Tyrant_Hand

    All I can really say is this is an awesome story, and I hope you continue. There's just something I love about strong, powerful women being helpless, or more exactly letting themselves be helpless. Powerful women who are secretly submissive and are just waiting for the right hard fucking to convince them to put on a dress and bend over happily. Unrealistic, but fucking erotic...excuse the pun.

    Thanks! Yes, it didn't really start like that since in the first chapter the Fan got rode hard, but it's kind of headed down that channel following Mistress S's suggestions - though Moz still get her own back with the Fyr Water especially. My initial plan for the follow up to the Minotaur might well lead to some uncomfortable moments for the Bosmer. Though the chapter after that is him back in charge with a gratuitously mis-applied spell from the game :D Kinda bouncing back and forward in dominance still, 'til I think of a good place to end it.

    Talking of putting on a dress reminded me of how in game any hard-bitten warrior in the Dark Brotherhood party guest quest looks very ooc in the Deceiver's Finary as opposed to, say, a Breton Mage who you can make look stunningly close to Patrick Stewart :D Now I kinda want to write a chapter with Moz all femme'd up, perhaps at a Chorrol Castle party or something... hmm, maybe that'd be a good way to end the series :)

  22. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Harry Potter)

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    Assumptions has been reviewed again! I was shocked, before recalling HP fans will read anything :P

    pittwitch

    ... THANK YOU~!!!!!

    Loved it!

    "unharmless fun left holes that smoked,"

    "... the matter would blow over ... " made me laugh out loud. Nice pun!

    I loved the ending and the feminine/masculine use of the prompt word.

    Great job, JayDee, great job!

    Thanks! You're far to kind, and I am glad you liked it so much. Sadly the word limit prevented even more groansome puns.

    NutsAboutHarry

    Oh wow I simply loved this fic1 Will you be continuing on with it? I hope so!

    And thanks also to you. I wrote the story as a oneshot, but have a bit of a habit of continuing those so who knows? I have an idea or two how it could continue, generally based around Snape deciding not to share the identity on account of the great head.

  24. favorites

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    Reccomended Reading works pretty good, gives a list of links in your user profile and you can add comments you need to 'em. The instructions are here:

    http://www2.adult-fanfiction.org/forum/index.php/topic/3444-recommended-reading-instructions/

    Once the daily update is finished, take a look at my author profile to see how they look when set up if you did not notice them before. (Just scroll down past the stories and other archive subdomain links) I keep meaning to go back through with actual story details and why I recommend for each one, which I should really have added from the start:

    http://hp.adult-fanfiction.org/authors.php?no=1296777934

  25. JayDee's Review Reply Thread (Harry Potter)

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    Well, well, well... back to Harry Potter for the weekly prompts again. I called it Assumptions because the characters make one of gender, and also some readers might assume it is in the wrong subcat if they don't reach the end. :D. It's meant to be at least mildly amusing, and I had to cut some gags for space reasons (mostly involving Trelawney, and some stuff relating to Rumpelstiltskin and the potion). I think I'd like to do a proper Draco/Myrtle story, just for the necro gags.

    Kerantli Dreamer

    I'm not entirely sure if you meant for people to smirk and giggle through that, but I certainly did. Ever the eager cocksucker Mr Potter is...

    Yeppers, giggles and smirks were hoped for. Possibly even a guffaw. Slash!Harry does seem to enjoy a mouth full of cock.

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